+Ab.stract Posted August 21, 2010 Report Share Posted August 21, 2010 [i]The dark clouds rolled around in the sky. The immense winds whistled the leaves. The fog on the floor started to dissipate, but then became it's once strong self again. After a few minutes, the mist was so strong that it was near impossible to see through. At that moment, 3 figures emerged, each glowing a different colour. One blue, one green and one red. Each had a strange green glowing symbol on their forehead. Following them was 3 dragons, one red, one turqoise and the other black. They came towards me, and that is all I remember.[/i] [center]***[/center] [i]The generator has long since failed. The city is shrouded in a cloak of darkness. Everyone has gone crazy, and we can't find an escape to the city. It's like the authorities don't want anything to get in...or out.[/i] Hello, and welcome to my first fan-fic, "Yu-Gi-Oh: The Orichalcos Legend". Hopefully you enjoy it. It is basically about the Orichalcos, aswell as the 3 Legendary Knights and Dragons. [spoiler=Plot]In a world where Duel Monsters rule, there has been a terrible catastrophe. A generator, which generates power for a town in North-East Australia, has failed. The city known as Brisbane, one of the most bustling cities in the whole continent, is now not showing any shed of light. And the government have blocked off any hope of escape that the citizens have. What are they trying to keep out...or in? Each character that is chosen by the Orichalcos and the Legendary Knights have recieved a tatoo. 1 Orichalcos Chosen One. 3 Legendary Knight Chosen Ones.[/spoiler] [spoiler=Main Characters] [center][u]Protagonists[/u][/center] [b]Name[/b]: Josie Elouise [b]Age[/b]: 18 [img]http://public5.tektek.org/img/av/1008/d20/2044/ced3520.png[/img] [b]Biography[/b]: Ever since Josie was a young girl, she had a green tatoo on hier face and right arm. She does not know how it got there, but it doesn't come off. It is slightly indented, and she is not aware of what it means. She was rarely looked after, so he moved in with her boy friend, Aleksander Nazario, who is a professional duelist. She is not the best duelist, and her deck consists of fairly weak cards, but when she uses the cards together, they are quite powerful. [b]Chosen One?[/b]: Yes. (Legendary Knight) [b]Deck[/b]: [url=http://www.mediafire.com/?77gk3j7hi4jc0r9]Mind Control[/url], Wrath of Hermos. [b]Name[/b]: Aleksander Nazario [b]Age[/b]: 21 [img]http://public5.tektek.org/img/av/1008/d20/2053/6a21553.png[/img] [b]Biography[/b]: Aleksander is a professional tournament duelist. Josie and he met when he was 18. This was when he had only just joined the pro circuit. He is almost the world champion, and has thousands of fans. [b]Chosen One?[/b]: Yes. (Legendary Knight) [b]Name[/b]: Theodosia Maximillion [b]Age[/b]: 17 [img]http://public5.tektek.org/img/av/1008/d20/2105/e444335.png[/img] [b]Biography[/b]: She is one of the richest people in the world, and has nearly every single card in the world. She is the daughter of Pegasus Maximillion, and is quite a good duelist. [b]Chosen One?[/b]: No. [center][u]Neutral[/u][/center] [b]Name[/b]: Danilo Pericles [b]Age[/b]: 34 [img]http://public5.tektek.org/img/av/1008/d20/2115/c11e664.png[/img] [b]Biography[/b]: He has travelled the world and collected all types of antique and magical cards. Although they might not be the strongest of cards, they are very valuable to him, and if he ever lost them, he would be torn apart. [b]Chosen One?[/b]: No. [b]Name[/b]: Cecil Donat [b]Age[/b]: 23 [img]http://public5.tektek.org/img/av/1008/d20/2126/d6dd965.png[/img] [b]Biography[/b]: He ran away from home when he was young, and decided to live with the wild animals. He has taken up some facial features of these animals. He uses brute force when duelling, and he never holds back. [b]Chosen One?[/b]: Yes. (Legendary Knight) [center][u]Antagonists[/u][/center] [b]Name[/b]: Kronos Hyperion [b]Age[/b]: 21 [img]http://public5.tektek.org/img/av/1008/d20/2143/d426616.png[/img] [b]Biography[/b]: He decided to fight against his best friend, Aleksander, when he was 17. He then found a briefcase laying at his doorstep which held in it five million dollars. [b]Chosen One?[/b]: No. [b]Name[/b]: Starsheen Cloverdust [b]Age[/b]: 26 [img]http://public5.tektek.org/img/av/1008/d20/2217/382d550.png[/img] [b]Biography[/b]: She was taken at a young age by a strange man. He changed her personality and appearance. Some things he did to her will never be forgotten. [b]Chosen One?[/b]: Yes. (Orichalcos)[/spoiler] [spoiler=Character Apps][b]Name[/b]: [b]Age[/b]: [b]Appearance[/b]: (TekTek Avi) [b]Biography[/b]: [/spoiler] [b][center]Chapters[/center][/b] None right now. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Headmaster Monokuma Posted August 21, 2010 Report Share Posted August 21, 2010 [quote] Biography: [b]She[/b] is one of the richest people in the world, and has nearly every single card in the world. [b]She[/b] is the [b]son[/b] of Pegasus Maximillion, and she is quite a good duelist.[/quote] PARADOX. But yeah, You aren't supposed to open a thread just for character apps. You should at least have a chapter or substantial prologue written. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
+Ab.stract Posted August 21, 2010 Author Report Share Posted August 21, 2010 1) Yeah. I fixed that. Thanks. Lucky you didn't find the other one. 2) I know, but I just wanted to give time for everyone to read about the characters and stuff first, so they know the characters and plot before the fan-fic starts. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~Hado~ Posted August 21, 2010 Report Share Posted August 21, 2010 Nice, but the holy rule of all yugioh series is that the main protagonist MUST HAVE "YU" IN HIS/HER NAME! Also the plot reminds me too mch of City of Amber. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
+Ab.stract Posted August 21, 2010 Author Report Share Posted August 21, 2010 It's City of Ember. I didn't mean to do that, but now that you mention it, it does sound like that. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
valliant12 Posted August 23, 2010 Report Share Posted August 23, 2010 Oh, no fair. I live in Brisbane and now you say it's blacked out when the Government has me trapped. No holiday to Fraser!. Currently we don't have any Government because of the Gillard vs Abbott war. Sounds interesting though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
John A. Zoidberg Posted August 31, 2010 Report Share Posted August 31, 2010 Hmmm... so you're using my deck for this, huh? Can't wait to read some, sounds interesting. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
John A. Zoidberg Posted September 4, 2010 Report Share Posted September 4, 2010 When do you think you'll start? I wanna see if you put my deck to good use Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
+Ab.stract Posted September 6, 2010 Author Report Share Posted September 6, 2010 OOC: That's why I chose Brisbane. I live less then 30 minutes away. Prologue is finally here. Sorry for the HUGE wait. [spoiler=Chapter 1]"Excellent. Your warrior destroyed my face-down!" screamed Josie. "Huh?!" "That's right. [url=http://img822.imageshack.us/img822/9189/227682g.jpg]'Mind Control Templar'[/url]! You've activated his effect." "No!" "Sorry Cecil. That [url=http://yugioh.wikia.com/wiki/Legendary_Knight_Timaeus]'Legendary Knight Timaeus'[/url] is mine!" "Ugh. I set a card and end my turn." "Draw! First, I activate Timaeus' effect! I activate '[url=http://img251.imageshack.us/img251/9727/227682n.jpg]Mind Control Mastery[/url]' from my deck! Then I remove from play my '[url=http://img801.imageshack.us/img801/9727/227682n.jpg]Mind Control Knight[/url]' and my '[url=http://img821.imageshack.us/img821/1138/227682d.jpg]Mind Control Swordsman[/url]', and summon '[url=http://img821.imageshack.us/img821/606/227682h.jpg]Mind Control Master[/url]' in Attack Mode!' "No way!" "Yes way. Now, my Master attacks directly, leaving you on 400 Life Points! Your Timaeus attacks for game!" Cecil Donat: 0 LifePoints Josie Elouise: 2700 LifePoints "Wow, where did you get those cards? I've never seen them before!" exclaimed a voice behind the duelists. "That's because Pegasus gave me them." replied Josie. "My daddy gave you those?! Why didn't he show me?!" demanded the new girl. "You're the daughter of Maximillion J Crawford Pegasus?" asked Josie. "Yep. My name's Theodosia. What's yours"? "It's Josie. Nice to meet you." "Wow, cool tatoo!" "I dunno how I got it!"[/spoiler] Soz it's bad! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
John A. Zoidberg Posted September 9, 2010 Report Share Posted September 9, 2010 [quote name='+Ab.stract' timestamp='1283770626' post='4605663'] OOC: That's why I chose Brisbane. I live less then 30 minutes away. Prologue is finally here. Sorry for the HUGE wait. [spoiler=Chapter 1]"Excellent. Your warrior destroyed my face-down!" screamed Josie. "Huh?!" "That's right. [url=http://img822.imageshack.us/img822/9189/227682g.jpg]'Mind Control Templar'[/url]! You've activated his effect." "No!" "Sorry Cecil. That [url=http://yugioh.wikia.com/wiki/Legendary_Knight_Timaeus]'Legendary Knight Timaeus'[/url] is mine!" "Ugh. I set a card and end my turn." "Draw! First, I activate Timaeus' effect! I activate '[url=http://img251.imageshack.us/img251/9727/227682n.jpg]Mind Control Mastery[/url]' from my deck! Then I remove from play my '[url=http://img801.imageshack.us/img801/9727/227682n.jpg]Mind Control Knight[/url]' and my '[url=http://img821.imageshack.us/img821/1138/227682d.jpg]Mind Control Swordsman[/url]', and summon '[url=http://img821.imageshack.us/img821/606/227682h.jpg]Mind Control Master[/url]' in Attack Mode!' "No way!" "Yes way. Now, my Master attacks directly, leaving you on 400 Life Points! Your Timaeus attacks for game!" Cecil Donat: 0 LifePoints Josie Elouise: 2700 LifePoints "Wow, where did you get those cards? I've never seen them before!" exclaimed a voice behind the duelists. "That's because Pegasus gave me them." replied Josie. "My daddy gave you those?! Why didn't he show me?!" demanded the new girl. "You're the daughter of Maximillion J Crawford Pegasus?" asked Josie. "Yep. My name's Theodosia. What's yours"? "It's Josie. Nice to meet you." "Wow, cool tatoo!" "I dunno how I got it!"[/spoiler] Soz it's bad! [/quote] It's good, but the one thing is, Mind Control Templar's effect means that when he's destroyed, you Special summon HIM to your field, not the monster that destroyed him. Other than that, I like it. I'll have to read more. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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