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Chapter 1

 

Back in the forest, rarely touched by man, was a very small village. the village had three people. Ardsy, Cantis, and Gerodus. Ardsy is the villages elder. Wise and Sensitive. Cantis is the villages caretaker. Looking out for everyone in the village. Then there is Gerodus. He is the villages warrior. Strong and brave, yielding to know one. On the 19th of September, A fairly strange night indeed, Gerodus was out hunting a heard of deer. He stumbled upon a small object, glowing bright. He feared to touch it, so he fashioned a small basket from some near by leaves. he carried it back to the village for the elder to take a look. She was baffled by the sight of it. They kept the object in a container Cantis made from a hollowed out stump. The object grew over time. Getting larger, they moved it to a box. Then, on the 5th of March, the glowing object split open, then a small, little creature came out into the world. They decided to keep it, seeing it would do no harm. They decided to name it after Ardsy's dead wife, Deronna. Derrona was a strange creature, looking like a deer, but very small and humble. Derroga became a welcomed member in the village, he had a very special talent, he could take the shape of anything around him. When he became big enough, he went hunting with Gerodus. He used his skill to attract animals. Then Gerodus would take the kill, and they would feast. But Derrona seemed to be taking a strange turn...

 

 

Epic cliff hanger.

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This belongs in FanFic, and is just a bunch of gary stu, apart from the fact it is nothing near an epic cliffhanger.

If you're really older than me, this is...just...you know, lolycm.

 

Back in the forest, rarely touched by man, was a very small village. the village had three people. Ardsy, Cantis, and Gerodus.

Yea cuz mosttvilages have onlee 3 peepl, and these guys are really detailed, and they came out in this really entertaining way, if you have more people say so

Ardsy is the villages elder. Wise and Sensitive.

oreally, coolstorybro. Tell me more about him. Or is it her? I can't even tell at this point.

Cantis is the villages caretaker. Looking out for everyone in the village.

Two people.

Then there is Gerodus. He is the villages warrior. Strong and brave, yielding to know one.

Of course. A single man as guard would be settling. Owait, is she female?

On the 19th of September, A fairly strange night indeed, Gerodus was out hunting a heard of deer. He

Male.

stumbled upon a small object, glowing bright. He feared to touch it, so he fashioned a small basket from some near by leaves. he carried it back to the village for the elder to take a look. She was baffled by the sight of it.

Female.

They kept the object in a container Cantis made from a hollowed out stump. The object grew over time. Getting larger, they moved it to a box. Then, on the 5th of March, the glowing object split open, then a small, little creature came out into the world.

Growings eggs-unheard of.

They decided to keep it, seeing it would do no harm. They decided to name it after Ardsy's dead wife, Deronna.

OMG!! LESBIEN ALERT!! LESBIEN ALERT!!

Derrona was a strange creature, looking like a deer, but very small and humble. Derroga became a welcomed member in the village, he had a very special talent, he could take the shape of anything around him.

You forgot to say that a baby deer was with him in the egg, by your logic.

When he became big enough, he went hunting with Gerodus. He used his skill to attract animals. Then Gerodus would take the kill, and they would feast. But Derrona seemed to be taking a strange turn...

You say this is a cliffhanger. Tsk tsk. Not at all. Not at all.

 

YCM isn't just Fan Fics and Literature, it's ok if writing isn't your best thing. You're welcome in the other sections, don't worry.

I'm not going to say anything more.

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