.Legend Posted July 26, 2010 Report Share Posted July 26, 2010 [spoiler=Intro] It's June 23 in the year 2010. A parasite that was mutated by radioactivity from a government power plant bit a scientist who took of his rubber gloves and was working by the barrels that held the radioactive material that were scheduled to be dumped in a cave in the Alps. The parasite held an unknown disease at the time and the disease was altered due to the radioactivity. The scientist didn’t get any immediate symptoms but by a week he had been completely changed both physically and mentally. His skin got green and he became more irritable and violent. By a month he began to eat a lot of meat even though, his wife claimed he was a vegetarian. Then when the media became convinced he would boost their ratings and came for him. When he broke a camera the police arrived by request of his neighbors and they tried to take him to jail. His wife returned from work and before the police can get to him she held him. "He's harmless he would neve-" She cut herself off by the sound of her own scream. She pushed him away and looked at her neck. It was bleeding. He had bitten her. She looked at him as he licked his lips and smiled insanely. "Why... how could you? I loved you!" In reply he walked slowly towards her looking violent. "Freeze you freak!" A cop shouted. He looked at her and began to walk towards him the cop fired a bullet from his pistol that hit his right shoulder. To everyone’s shock his right arm blew off. The scientist Screamed and lunged at him. He began to bite the man’s neck but before he could fully kill him a cop shot the scientist in the leg. Needless to say it blew off. The cop was about to put away his pistol when the scientists wife bit him! "But how?" asked the cop. The two cops, now infected ran at the news crew. Two weeks later... All plot holes will be explained:1. Speed of infection process: Scientist was injected with a anti radioactivaty serum by work.2. Main characters are not yet introduced.3. Wife's lack of urgency: She thought he had a cold, witch makes him iratable4. The government and media didnt know since he had taken a vacation conveneantly after the incedent.5. The hulk fans are still sulking over the lack of a Hulk movie sequel. (Please point out others and comment! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Twig Posted July 26, 2010 Report Share Posted July 26, 2010 What? The wife didn't take the scientist to the doctor when his skin turned green or when he had a sudden change of personality? The government had no interest on this and decided to leave it alone? It took a month for an unknown disease that turned a man green and violent to be noticed by the media? Worst of all, where's the hulk fans? On the other note, this story has the most creative title ever. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.Legend Posted July 26, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 26, 2010 Lol thx XD And ime sewing the plot holes now... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Twig Posted July 26, 2010 Report Share Posted July 26, 2010 All plot holes will be explained:1. Speed of infection process: Scientist was injected with a anti radioactivaty serum by work.2. Main characters are not yet introduced.3. Wife's lack of urgency: She thought he had a cold' date=' witch makes him iratable4. The government and media didnt know since he had taken a vacation conveneantly after the incedent.5. The hulk fans are still sulking over the lack of a Hulk movie sequel. [/quote'] I was half-joking when I mentioned the Hulk fans. Anyways, you should explain in the story instead of explaining outside of it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Final Messenger Posted July 26, 2010 Report Share Posted July 26, 2010 Looks like it's gonna be a Cheeseburger(and/or Zombie) Apocalypse. This is starting to Sound like the Prolouge of my Zombie RP Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.Legend Posted July 26, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 26, 2010 All plot holes will be explained:1. Speed of infection process: Scientist was injected with a anti radioactivaty serum by work.2. Main characters are not yet introduced.3. Wife's lack of urgency: She thought he had a cold' date=' witch makes him iratable4. The government and media didnt know since he had taken a vacation conveneantly after the incedent.5. The hulk fans are still sulking over the lack of a Hulk movie sequel. [/quote'] I was half-joking when I mentioned the Hulk fans. Anyways, you should explain in the story instead of explaining outside of it. I know, its just for teh lolz.that was what led up to the apocolyps, chapter 1 will introduce the main characters, will tell what happened to the world and show there point of views on the apocolyps. and Night it will be but like in left... well ill let you figure that out ;). Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Twig Posted July 26, 2010 Report Share Posted July 26, 2010 Just make sure the plot isn't cliched or generic. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.Legend Posted July 26, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 26, 2010 I know, i have a lot of idea I dont wana spoil.And pesonaly I hate repetative and or un-unique plot lines. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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