Shadow Assassin 2010 Posted July 22, 2010 Report Share Posted July 22, 2010 [spoiler=main Character's] [spoiler=Rex]Name: RexAge: 19Deck: Dragon deckSignature Card: red eyes darkness metal dragonAppearance: wears a newly made red and black dueling robeRank: ApprenticeBio: After leaving prison he was soon sent of to the kaiba Academy, my the newly founded rave city leader Kaiba. [spoiler=dark killer cell][spoiler=dark killer]Name: dark killerAge: ??deck: bleach-http://picasaweb.google.com/102852810197498808163/MyBleachDeck?feat=directlinkSignature Card: Kenpachi Zaraki, eye patch sealAppearence: dark like shadow robes, and as a black duel diskRank: MasterBio: it is unknown of our he got the bleach deck due to the power he became power mad creating a team of evil duelist hoping to ride the world of duelist to create is only dark world. [spoiler=villains][spoiler=warlord]Name: warlordAge: 20Deck: fortune Lady'sSignature Card:Fortune Lady Darky,Fortune FutureAppearance: Fortune Lady RobeBio: turned to evil after his mother die, with the fortune lady's he a might force. [spoiler=mouth]Name: mouthAge: 21Deck:Machine DeckSignature Card:cyber dragon, cyber twin dragonAppearance:prison jumpsuit Rank: proBio: jailed for life, but he the boss of the prison knocking down other inmates for cards. [spoiler=episode 1- the Kaiba Academy part 1]"it was dark, and dam inside the Kaiba prison were inmates fight the guards for freedom, though since one inmate lose we had to sit outside in the thunder, my name is Rex and are am a rookie duelist who build a dragon deck hoping to get free and head to the Kaiba Academy to learn the meaning of dual." "that morning i walked out of my cell, the inmates were looking at me as if their wanted to dual for my cards. I looked around and as we got outside in the yard I was set up on my a gang, their leader came up and said " lets dual as i want them cards.: we set up open our dual disks preparing to face off." " Alright kid lets dual"" Fine game on"R:7000M:7000 "i play the spell Polymerization and fuse my all three of my cyber dragons to summon Cyber End Dragon in attack mode,ATK:4000is that all you got, ha this will be easy? "we will see. i place a card face down and end my turn." the inmates were shouting as the inmates warden look down form above, " Fine, i show you the power of my deck, I summon The White Stone Of Legend in attack mode, but then I remove from play to summon Red Eyes Darkness Metal Dragon ATK: 2800" then end my turn " Don;t you know the effect of your own monsters, this is to easy Cyber End Dragon attack with cyber blast.""what, no way!."R:5600M:7000" so what now kid you ready to finish this, your move""fine, I summon another The White Stone Of Legend and remove form play to summon Red Eyes Darkness Metal Dragon " again, i didn't even have to summon a monster but what you going to do against my 4000 ATK point monster" fine, I place a card face down and end my turn"then a old friend came back from the medic wing." Come on remember what i taught you, beat him" No good i end youstay tuneright, this is a short epiosde but the next epiosde will be a shwodown, and if you want your charcter to be in then he how it shoudl work. nameAge: deck:Signature Card:Appearence: Rank:Bio:good or evil: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DARKPLANT RISING Posted July 23, 2010 Report Share Posted July 23, 2010 ...In short, please work on the grammar. And I believe the plot is way too simple, and unoriginal. Maybe add some spice of originality. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Weather Report - Stand Posted July 23, 2010 Report Share Posted July 23, 2010 I'll read it when you add description, grammar, capitalization, and learn how to spell 'DUEL'. Why can't kids these days spell 'duel'? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kaisu Posted July 23, 2010 Report Share Posted July 23, 2010 I'll read it when you add description' date=' grammar, capitalization, and learn how to spell 'DUEL'. Why can't kids these days spell 'duel'?[/quote'] Damn you, Yugioh 5D's! Now every thinks that because there are two kinds of duels, 'duel' should be spelt 'Dual'. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DARKPLANT RISING Posted July 23, 2010 Report Share Posted July 23, 2010 I'll read it when you add description' date=' grammar, capitalization, and learn how to spell 'DUEL'. Why can't kids these days spell 'duel'?[/quote'] You kids these days. Back in my day, we didn't have these pieces of cardboard. We had to entertain ourselves by shoveling coal and hunting down communists. We didn't have all of those skater punks who would become shoplifters. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kaisu Posted July 23, 2010 Report Share Posted July 23, 2010 I'll read it when you add description' date=' grammar, capitalization, and learn how to spell 'DUEL'. Why can't kids these days spell 'duel'?[/quote'] Damn you, Yugioh 5D's! Now every thinks that because there are two kinds of duels, 'duel' should be spelt 'Dual'. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thecross Posted July 24, 2010 Report Share Posted July 24, 2010 Really bad grammer, I barely get whats going on, and dual would mean duo, or two, not in the "verse" sense. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Recommended Posts
Archived
This topic is now archived and is closed to further replies.