♥ӞŁǚ℮Ӟ℮ᴙʀɣ−ɴɨɨ−ƈħåɴ♥ Posted July 20, 2010 Report Share Posted July 20, 2010 This is something I though up, please note, I'm no way nearly as good as Crab Helmet, It may be poorly detailed at some points, and each chapter's VERY short.And I have been in Japan most of my life, so the names and the grammar will suck. 20th July,2010I will post the chapters soon, currently the short presents only there.[spoiler=Summary]Characters GuildsAvalon(Healing)F SwordsExcalibur(Swords)M HealingErai(Bows)M MagicElish(Magic)F BowsM=Male,F=Female.PlacesThe Land Of EupheniaKatanotake(HomeTown)Dark Forests(Japanese=暗い森林)Western Lands[悪い風の陸]The ChaliceCharacters_____________________________________________________________Avalon(Human)[Nickname:Ava] Aged:15 ClericHas Long Pink Hair,very shy. Wears white robes as per the healing guilds uniform. Carries a Healing Spellbook along with a Long staff with two wings and a Ruby in the centre._____________________________________________________________Excalibur(Human)[Nickname:Excl] Aged:16 SwordsmanHas spiky blue hair, a very fierce attitude. Wears blue armour as per the Swords Guild with a sword sheathed at his hip.Yellow Eyes._____________________________________________________________Erai(Human)[Nickname:Rai] Aged:16 ArcherA HappyGo-Luck Demeanour. Wears green leather armour as per the Archer Guild and has a bow at his back. Has short green hair with Azure Eyes._____________________________________________________________Elish(Elf)[Nickname:Eli] Aged:15 MageHas long-snow-white hair. Wears purple robes and has crimson eyes. She's as shy as Avalon. Carries a magic staff made of magic wood and Sapphire._____________________________________________________________ [spoiler=Prolouge] It was a beautiful day, in Katanotake,When This Dark Day took place, "Hey! Ava! Come on! Erai's waiting for us!" Shouted Excalibur "Coming Excl!" Said Avalon [/i]Avalon and Excalibur meet Erai in the Forest near the village.[/i] "Yo! Erai! .....wait....Where's Eli? Asked Excalibur "Hi Rai....." said Avalon "Hey, Oh yeah, Elish couldn't come, She had some 'Elven Ceremony' or something" Said Erai "Figures" Said Excalibur "So, wanna have a contest?" Asked Erai "Yeah! Sure!" Said Excalibur They Set up different rounds, and finally: Round 1:Archery "Okay, so you have to hit an apple on the tree from a hundred meters away!" Said Erai "Bloody Archer....." Mumbled Excalibur ""Me first!" Shouted Excalibur Excalibur took his aim, and fired! TWANG! SMACK! Right in the stem of the apple! "Ha! Thank you, Thanks you," Said Excalibur Avalon was next, she clumsily picked up the bow, armed an arrow and fired!It landed 8 feet in front of her. "Aww......." Said Avalon "It's not too bad, anyways, your turn hotshot." Said Excalibur Erai took his aim, and BAm!Bullseye,smashed the apple to bits. "Bam." Said Erai "Oh yeah? Next Round!" Said Excalibur Round 2:Swordsmanship "Now, Let's see who can cut these boulders!' Said Excalibur "Swordsmanship eh?" Said Erai Erai took his sword, and in one smooth motion, cut the boulder in half. "There we go!" Said Erai Avalon's turn, the sword was heavy for her, but she picked it up, lost control and fell on the boulder "Ava? You okay?" Asked Excalibur "Err....yeah....." Said Avalon "Now, My turn." said Excalibur Excl easily picked up the heavy sword, and with what seemed like a thousand swings in the blink of an eye, cut the boulder into pieces "I win." Said Excalibur Suddenly, they heard screams for help and shouts and then a loud blast.It came from the village.They rushed as fast as they could back to see what happened to their home.No Houses.No People.Nothing.A pile of ashes, in place, of the Eutopia, they called 'Home'.Excalibur fell to his knees. "What.....happened?" He asked in disbelief Just then, they saw a hand rise out of the destruction. "Somebody's alive! Get them!" Shouted Erai "Help.......me....." Said the man in a feeble voice "Ava! Your a Cleric! Heal him!" Said Excalibur "Uh...Yeah! I'll see what I can do!" Said Avalon Avalon took out her book, and after muttering a long complex incantation, closed iy. "He's been wounded too badly, he should be alive for a few minutese more though......" Said Avalon "Who did this?" Asked Erai coldly. "E....El...Elish." Were the man's final words They Stared in Horror Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥ӞŁǚ℮Ӟ℮ᴙʀɣ−ɴɨɨ−ƈħåɴ♥ Posted July 21, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 21, 2010 Bump!Guys, it's short Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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♥ӞŁǚ℮Ӟ℮ᴙʀɣ−ɴɨɨ−ƈħåɴ♥ Posted July 22, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 22, 2010 BUMPALICIOUS GOODNESS! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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Twig Posted July 26, 2010 Report Share Posted July 26, 2010 Okay, I didn't pay attention to the grammar and the names, but it's still bad. It's fast-paced, has super powerful characters, has next to no description, and it doesn't make any sense. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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