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yu gi oh x cyber city crisis episode:1 aces rival trouble test episode

 

 

in development read if you like give ideas too on duels and other things.

 

 

 

 

day:friday

time:12:00

year:?

darkness arises in domino city as duel monsters destroy the beutiful town and civilization comes to find new grounds.

roy hurry it up already were gonna be late for duel training.well.a voice said.then you try carring all this equipment.Ace stops roy runs into his back.ace turns around and says well i would [laughter] but my hands are hurting.humph [you never help me out] YEAH WE MADE IT!!! YOUR LAe-I KNO I KNO BUT YOU TRY NOT WATCHING A DEUL WITH THE CYBER CITYS BEST DEULIST VERSUS dominos best Jett trails from his worries that was on today.any way i called you here today because. well i think we should have deul test. wow realy ace says in excitement roy walks up the hill and drops his bags.yes realy Jett says. sigh...here i come says roy in a depressed voice. here is your custom duel disk ace and jet both lay there decks in the holder bring it on ace says in a serious voice.il bring it on alrightill bring it to the end!!!!! says jett DUEL!!!!yells both deulist]

 

jett:4000

ace:4000

jetts turn 1

il go first says jett.i draw im going to play my darkwarrior destin in attack position a image of a man appeared covered in black holding a sword appeared in front of jett atk:1300 def:1000 lv.4 im going to activate my spell card darks barrial i have to send one card to the graveyard in my hand out of play for 4 turns chooses a card from his hand sends to the graveyard i play 2 face downs and end my turn.

 

aces turn 1

cool i draw.im playing my spell card ancents heart i gain 1000 lps. for all cards on the field

 

jet:4000

ace:8000

 

now i play my virus dragon in defense atk:0 def:0 lv.2 a dragon with only bones appered in front of ace now im playing virus double sumoning this lets me summon one other virus monster so come out virus warrior lv 7 astro atk:2100 def:2000 now attack his dark warrior destin with comet crusher punch.i activate my trap says jett.vast rush your monster is destroyed or is he?adds ace i activate my monsters effect he nullifies yourtrap but my monster attack is canceled. now im ativating my virus dragons effect i can tribute summon one monster from my hand so come out cosmo hero black sun a image of a lady with long red hair on fire with a ginormous crown with planets around it appered in front of ace lv.6 atk:2000ef:1800 now im synchro summon for cosmos cyber galickose atk;3000 def:2800 play 1 face down and call it a turn.

 

jett turn 2

ok then i draw {thinks he can win so easily.} could it be.just what i needed im activating early awakening of the forbiden so come out dark emporer sparda lv.10atk:3000 def:3000 but it doesent stop there im activating accelerator to speed up my removed from play monsters turns to summon to 1 and now im normal summoning my dark gadget 1x atk:500 def:300 il throw down and end it.

 

ace turn 2

im pulling {yes the ancient virus star}im activating my trap giga summoning to play gigaton knight ferigal lv.6 atk:2300 def;2200 and lv.7 giga warrior omega atk2800 def:2200 now im activating a trap polymerazation of the ancients so now we ican both fusion summon any time[fool fell right into my plan jett said in his mind}so im now going to fusion summon my gigaton knight ferigal with my giga warrior omega. to summon my DARK STAR WARRIOR im playing a face down and end my turn.

 

jett turn 3

ok i draw your going to lose now im summoning my red rider warrior and now im tri buting my three level 4 monsters to summon my dark gaia dragon to the field lv.10 atk.3000def.3000 now im activating direct shot so attack dark emperor sparda

 

 

jett:4000

ace:4000

 

now im summoning my monster i had wait a long time out come forth my monster gaia the fore bidden atk.3000def:3000now im activating your ability to fusion summon my dark ruler of the underworld atk:5000def:5000 now attack my almighty beast.not so fast ace said. i activate my trap card the ancient virus star

if your attack is negated and now both monster gains 3000 atk. witch means they both hit a solid 6000atk.now you must end your turn because my cosmos cyber galickose says for attacking you end your turn.

 

ace turn 4

cosmos cyber neon soilder attack HIS MONSTER BLACK HOLE BLAST

 

JETT:3000

ACE:4000

 

NOW DARK STAR WARRIOR CLEAN HIS LIFE POINTS USE VIRUS BOMB

 

JETT;0

ACE;4000

 

GAME!!! ACE IS THE WINNER

YOU DID GOOD ace jett says gathering from the ground.ACE. THANKS replys ace with a smile.

 

 

 

TO BE CONTINUED...

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charecter profiles

ace yukimono age 16

favorite things deuling

cards types/series

cosmos warrior

virus warriors

matrix warriors

favorite card

dragons:ancient dragon omega

warriors:matrix warrior omega

spell caster:none

 

Roy KaziMa age 13

card types

spell casters

fiends

evo magician

light magician

forebidden magical hailer

 

jett kikane age 16

card types/series

dark warriors

demon lords

griyan ancent

 

some card pictures available

i do not own any of the images i use in my cards

so dont be in my thread sayin that i stole these.

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Dude, To be Honest, This was one of the worse written fan-fics I have ever read. There is no plot line at all. The duel was random at best. There are also Grammatical errors abound. The characters seem to have popped out of no where.

 

I would say that this Fan-Fic needs a lot of work.

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F this, I'm giving my opinion first! Sir/Madam, I am here to tell you everything that you've done wrong from the perspective of a first-time reader.

yu gi oh x cyber city crisis episode:1 aces rival trouble test episode

 

Okay... capitalize your titles. That's basic knowledge of writing. Secondly' date=' your chapter title is stupid. "episode:1 aces rival trouble test episode" You're implying that there is no episode number, and that '1' is part of the title. 'aces' isn't a name, or else it would be 'Ace's', or even 'Aces' if that was his stupid name. And 'Rival Trouble Test Episode' is stupid enough on its own. Episode is part of the title? Lame. 'Rival Trouble Test'?! Repetitive letters in titles are so... 1980's. The HIP, COOL KIDS don't like them thangs no mo'. Be catchy or DIIIIIIIIE. Or think of a better title.[/color']

 

in development read if you like give ideas too on duels and other things.

 

Um.

 

 

day:friday

time:12:00

year:?

 

Erm. Don't you have a 'SHIFT' button on your keyboard? Without capital letters, you look like you're too lazy to put any effort into your story, making it look even worse than it is.

 

darkness arises in domino city as duel monsters destroy the beutiful town and civilization comes to find new grounds.

 

Actually, this one made me chuckle. Why are Duel Monsters going crazy, blowin' up their 'beutiful' town? Why are they there? Why is beautiful massacred so horrifyingly?! Do you know what 'Spell Check' is?

 

 

roy hurry it up already were gonna be late for duel training.well.a voice said.then you try carring all this equipment.Ace stops roy runs into his back.ace turns around and says well i would [laughter] but my hands are hurting.humph [you never help me out] YEAH WE MADE IT!!! YOUR LAe-I KNO I KNO BUT YOU TRY NOT WATCHING A DEUL WITH THE CYBER CITYS BEST DEULIST VERSUS dominos best Jett trails from his worries that was on today.any way i called you here today because. well i think we should have deul test. wow realy ace says in excitement roy walks up the hill and drops his bags.yes realy Jett says. sigh...here i come says roy in a depressed voice. here is your custom duel disk ace and jet both lay there decks in the holder bring it on ace says in a serious voice.il bring it on alrightill bring it to the end!!!!! says jett DUEL!!!!yells both deulist]

 

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I... I'm going to... try to... understand it...? Okay, so 'roy' needs to hurry up before Duel Training begins, so that they can fight the evil Duel Monsters with their non-evil Duel Monsters. 'well' said 'a voice'. The voice complained about caring over their equipment so much, and then transformed into Ace, whose rival will have/cause some test troubles in an episode. Then Ace stops, making roy bump into his back. ace (?) turns and says that he'd... try caring the equipment himself if his hands didn't hurt... so I'm confused, because the voice seemed to be talking to itself earlier. But nobody cared because the most hilarious dialogue I've ever seen occurred:

 

WE MADE IT!! WE'RE LA- BUT WE DON'T CARE!! WE MADE IT YEAH!! I kno we late but WE MADE IT!1 YOU SHOULD TRY NOT WATCHING A DEUL (I'm disgusted) WITH THE CYBER CITY BEST DEULIST VERSUS DOMINO'S BEST--I'm not excited anymore. Anyways Jett is sad.

 

So it turned out that Jett called them out with the caring equipment so that they COULD care, making them slightly happier. "I called you here because," he said. "Well I think we should have a deul test for some reason today because CYBER CITY'S BEST is coming someday."

"Wow we should really have a test?!" roy exclaims.

"WOW" Ace says. Suddenly... roy drops the caring equipment!!

"Oh no" roy gasps, trying to care.

"Come on a deul, roy," Jett orders.

"Ok" roy sighs, really sad due to lack of caring.

"Here are your custom duel disks both lay your decks in the duel disks bring it on ace"

"But you were dueling roy"

"Shut up Ace"

"Okay," ace agrees, and roy and Jett begin to deul.

 

I think my soul just died a little inside. You need to read a rew novels and learn what 'Story Structure' is.

 

jett:4000

ace:4000

jetts turn 1

il go first says jett.i draw im going to play my darkwarrior destin in attack position a image of a man appeared covered in black holding a sword appeared in front of jett atk:1300 def:1000 lv.4 im going to activate my spell card darks barrial i have to send one card to the graveyard in my hand out of play for 4 turns chooses a card from his hand sends to the graveyard i play 2 face downs and end my turn.

 

'i play mah darkwarrior destin in attack mode an image of a man in black holding a sword appeared' said jett 1300 atak 1000 def

"u have 1300 Attack Points Jett?!" roy gasped.

"yep I use my dark berryal i sden one card from the graveyard from my hand out of play for 4 turns choose a card and send it to the graveyard and i play 2 facedowns."

roy was completely and utterly unable to speak from sheer and utter horrifying confusion.

 

But suddenly, even though they told roy that he'd duel Jett several times earlier (sigh...here i come says roy in a depressed voice.), Ace pushes him down the hill all over the caring machine, out of the way. And so, he had completed his Rival's Test Troubles Episode. The end.

 

aces turn 1

cool i draw.im playing my spell card ancents heart i gain 1000 lps. for all cards on the field

 

"Cool i draw," Ace announced, drawing a card. "Imma playing my spell card an-cents heart I gain 1000 lbs. for all cards on the field"

"You said POUNDS, when it says LIFE POINTS" Jett laughed.

"Hahaha"

'Hahaha!"

"Hahaha"

"HAhaha that card's still cheap. I hate you."

"Oh." Ace was sad for his cheap, illegal card.

 

jet:4000

ace:HAX

 

now i play my virus dragon in defense atk:0 def:0 lv.2 a dragon with only bones appered in front of ace now im playing virus double sumoning this lets me summon one other virus monster so come out virus warrior lv 7 astro atk:2100 def:2000 now attack his dark warrior destin with comet crusher punch.i activate my trap says jett.vast rush your monster is destroyed or is he?adds ace i activate my monsters effect he nullifies yourtrap but my monster attack is canceled. now im ativating my virus dragons effect i can tribute summon one monster from my hand so come out cosmo hero black sun a image of a lady with long red hair on fire with a ginormous crown with planets around it appered in front of ace lv.6 atk:2000ef:1800 now im synchro summon for cosmos cyber galickose atk;3000 def:2800 play 1 face down and call it a turn.

 

"Now I play virus dragon in deaf mode" Ace said, playing a dragon with a stuffy nose.

"sniF' it sniffed.

"Nowi use virus Double sumoning witch lets me sumon one othe virus monster without folowing any rules so I summon a level 7 monster in your face" Suddenly, an Astro monster appeared! It was that dog from the Jetsons, only he had an equally stuffy nose. "now Atack darkwarrio r destin" ace Ordered. Astro jumped on Jett and licked him.

"Ahh jane stop this crazy thing" he screamed!

"Oh yes that's right you have 1300 attakc points ha you syck," ace laughed.

"I dont think so for i use my trap card vast rush your monster is destroyed or IS he...?" Jett said condescendingly.

Adds Ace, "I use my virus dragon's utterly broken ability to tribute one card in myhand so come ou cosmic hero black sun a lady with red flamey hair and planets aroudn a big crown" As soon as ace had described his monster, she appeared on the field! "Now becuse I steal your turn because Im mean I synchro summon cyber galicktose"

"that doesn't make sense' Jett cried.

"oh well I'll just summon this while im At it" ace decided, instead summoning The Winged Dragon of Ra instead.

 

jett turn 2

ok then i draw {thinks he can win so easily.} could it be.just what i needed im activating early awakening of the forbiden so come out dark emporer sparda lv.10atk:3000 def:3000 but it doesent stop there im activating accelerator to speed up my removed from play monsters turns to summon to 1 and now im normal summoning my dark gadget 1x atk:500 def:300 il throw down and end it.

 

"OK because we forgot it was my turn I'll take my turn and i think you can win easily BUT TOO BAD!! I summon emporer sparda byy using early awakening of the forbidden one" Jett said, summoning some poor guy in a cap, sitting on a trash can. "and it don't stop now because I use accelerator to speed up my removed cards turns to summon it noe so i can summon dark gadget who is useless ha ha ha i throw down and end it" A black robot, similar to the Red, Yellow and Green Gadgets, appeared suddenly I think.

"Whaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaat?!" roy asked, confused again.

"I summoned a poor bum and a black useless robot k?"

"Oh K"

 

ace turn 2

im pulling {yes the ancient virus star}im activating my trap giga summoning to play gigaton knight ferigal lv.6 atk:2300 def;2200 and lv.7 giga warrior omega atk2800 def:2200 now im activating a trap polymerazation of the ancients so now we ican both fusion summon any time[fool fell right into my plan jett said in his mind}so im now going to fusion summon my gigaton knight ferigal with my giga warrior omega. to summon my DARK STAR WARRIOR im playing a face down and end my turn.

 

"im pulling' ace said, pulling on the tail of a cat. As he drew his next card whilst getting scratched in the face, he drew something apparently important. "yes i activate my trap giga summoning to play gigaton knight ferigal'

"You made that name up'

"no i didn't'

"yes u did"

"okay yu got me," ace accepted, summoning a Feraligatr pokemon robot knight. "i now activate the new trap polymerazation of the ancients so now we i mean me can both fusion summon whenever we i mean i want i mean feel like it so i fuse"

"But I want to fuse" Jett informed

'So i fuse Ra and Ferealigatr to summon DARK STAR WARRIOR!! bb51790b6a6b859b.jpg[/img] and imma play a face-down because i can never attack ever."

 

jett turn 3

ok i draw your going to lose now im summoning my red rider warrior and now im tri buting my three level 4 monsters to summon my dark gaia dragon to the field lv.10 atk.3000def.3000 now im activating direct shot so attack dark emperor sparda

 

'now i draw your lose because now im summon my RED RIDER WARRIOR and now im tri-buting my 3 level 4 monsters we all ignored forever to summon DARK GAIA DRAGON to teh fialed imghes that but with dragon and activating my direct shot whatever it is so my bum can attack you directly so ha i can be unfair too' Jett chuckled, proving how evil he really was.

"waah" ace cried.

 

jett:4000

ace:4000

 

now im summoning my monster i had wait a long time out come forth my monster xialam emporer the fore bidden atk.3000def:3000now im activating your ability to fusion summon my dark ruler of the underworld atk:5000def:5000 now attack my almighty beast.not so fast ace said. i activate my trap card the ancient virus star

if your attack is negated and now both monster gains 3000 atk. witch means they both hit a solid 6000atk.now you must end your turn because my cosmos cyber galickosesays for attacking you end your turn.

"now im sumoning my monster i never used ecause we all need deus ex machina once in a while and come on out xialam emporer toe fore bidden" And so, Jett summoned such a poor, disturbing bum, that he was bidden before, but not anymore. He had one tooth. "now i use my ability to fusion summon my almighty beast somehow through some way that makes NO sense, ha ha ha'

'NOTSOFAST" ace said quickly. "i activate the trap which also was deus ex machina so its ancient virus star its a star that's old and a virus ahahaha now your attack is negated and my monsters gain 3000 attack so they have 6000 atk each and my... um... gal-ik-osey-sayz... negates the turn so ha i cheat whatcha gonna doooo?!'

ace turn 4

cosmos cyber galickose attack HIS MONSTER BLACK HOLE BLAST

 

JETT:3000

ACE:4000

 

NOW DARK STAR STAR WARRIOR CLEAN HIS LIFE POINTS USE VIRUS BOMB

 

JETT;0

ACE;4000

 

GAME!!! ACE IS THE WINNER

YOU DID GOOD jett says gathering from the groundACE. THANKS replys ace with a smile.

 

"YOU DID GOOD" Jett said, gathering from the gound, some ACE!! "I DIDN'T TEACH YOU TO CHEAT U BASTERD!!" Jett began punching ace in the face repeatedly

"aaaah im so sorry!!!' ace shrieked, dying quickly due to having his eyes gouged out out!!

"ONO LOOK OUT" roy screamed, but nobody could hear, because he had no uppercase name. He didn't earn it yet. But because of that, a giant fat Mokey Mokey crashed into the hillside, killing everybody present.

"mOKEY MONkey' it said.

 

TO BE CONTINUED...

I NEED IMAGES FOR THE DECK DETAILS FOR CARDS PM ME

 

Actually, this is the first truly horrible story I've seen in a long time! Kudos! I hope you actually TRY next time around, because this is either the worst thing I've read all year, or this is the best Stylistic Suck next to this. Good luck with this story, you're gonna need it without any raw effort, care or talent. BYE BYE!! WEATHER REPORT: OUT.

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and like i said READ IT THROUGH I KNO THAT I MESSED P BIG TIME BECAUSE OF MY LITTLE BRO LIKES FIN UP EVERY THING SINSE HE KNOWS MY PASS WORD OK SO NEXT TIME SUMMON COMES IN MY THREAD SAYING THAT I F UP LOOK IN THE MIRRIOR U ARE THE ONE THAT I LOOKED AT AND MADE ME MESSED FOR PEOPLE LIKE YOU I DIDNT ASK FOR AND DONT EVER IN YOUR LIFE AGAIN DARE TO MAKE FUUN OF MY BROTHERS F@#KING UP MY STORIES I WRITE

 

 

PEACE OUT

I LOOKED AT YOU AND F UP-ED

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and like i said READ IT THROUGH I KNO THAT I MESSED P BIG TIME BECAUSE OF MY LITTLE BRO LIKES FIN UP EVERY THING SINSE HE KNOWS MY PASS WORD OK SO NEXT TIME SUMMON COMES IN MY THREAD SAYING THAT I F UP LOOK IN THE MIRRIOR U ARE THE ONE THAT I LOOKED AT AND MADE ME MESSED FOR PEOPLE LIKE YOU I DIDNT ASK FOR AND DONT EVER IN YOUR LIFE AGAIN DARE TO MAKE FUUN OF MY BROTHERS F@#KING UP MY STORIES I WRITE

 

 

PEACE OUT

I LOOKED AT YOU AND F UP-ED

 

This...this is just getting scary.

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SEE LOOK LOOK YOU MAYED ME MESS UP A FU@K AGAIN

YEAH THANKS

SEE LOOK NOW IM PIZZED OFF

I SAID IN DEVELOPMENT OK NEED ME TO SAY THAT IN SIGN LANGUAGE I IE PUTING HADDUBA DUBAA DO IN WTF DEVOLEPMENT I DONT UNDER STAND

 

I KNO U DONT:D

TO:WEATHER REPORT - STAND FROM JACE

ARE U SPECIAL ED.

pleas step right up give ur diagnostic

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