Nassira the Planet of the dammed. [original story] chapter 1 added

[Compass]

Oh, I get it. Sorry about that. You could try copying it into word And spell checking it.

[Joey Miles]

i would if word worked on my computer and its cool sometimes its hard to tell but dont worry im getting better

[Compass]

Yeah, because most of the advanced fanfic writers don't give a darn about the plot, they care about spelling.

[DARKPLANT RISING]

Yeah' date=' because most of the advanced fanfic writers don't give a darn about the plot, they care about spelling.

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The plot is more important. Thing is, the plot is good, so I have nothing more to say, and the only problem I see are:

1. Grammer and spelling

2. Confusing parts

[Joey Miles]

lol i'll work on that

[TheAlpha]

I really like it. It seems original and it was written in a way that kept me interested. Keep writing.

[Joey Miles]

lol plan on it

[Joey Miles]

bump

[Joey Miles]

Bumped

[Joey Miles]

bump

[Lady_Killer]

Come on Joey. Quit Keeping us in supence and write the second chapter.

[Joey Miles]

i am i was bumping it to the top so that when i posted it people could read it