TableCloth358 Posted June 15, 2010 Report Share Posted June 15, 2010 Image Credit; HP Doom Toon Lava GolemFIRE******** 8Fiend / ToonThis card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by Tributing 2 monsters your opponent controls while "toon World" is on the field, and then Special Summon this card under threre control. This cards controler takes 1000 points of damage during each of there Standby Phase. If "Toon World" is not on the field, destroy this card and inflict 2000 points of damage to each player.ATK/3000 DEF/2500 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SirtyStan Posted June 15, 2010 Report Share Posted June 15, 2010 This card loses, for many reasons. It's okay, but: It should say "their" not "there.All toon monsters have this effect, which completely kills Toon Lava Golem: "You must pay 500 Life Points for this card to attack. If there are no Toon monsters on your opponents side of the field, then this card can attack your opponent's life points directly. If there is, then this card must attack the Toon monster." It kills all Toons =0! 5.2/10 for effort. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TableCloth358 Posted June 15, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 15, 2010 You need to do your Reserch buddy. As of now i shall prove you wrong. Toon Gemini ElfThis card cannot attack during the turn that it is Normal Summoned, Flip Summoned, or Special Summoned. When "Toon World" on the field is destroyed, this card is also destroyed. If "Toon World" is on your side of the field and your opponent does not control a Toon Monster, this card can attack your opponent's Life Points directly. When this card inflicts Battle Damage to your opponent's Life Points, your opponent discards 1 card randomly from his/her hand. *serches for this sentance* "You must pay 500 Life Points for this card to attack. If there are no Toon monsters on your opponents side of the field, then this card can attack your opponent's life points directly. If there is, then this card must attack the Toon monster." *Error did not find* Toon Goblin Attack ForceThis card cannot attack during the turn that it is Normal Summoned, Flip Summoned, or Special Summoned. When "Toon World" on the field is destroyed, this card is also destroyed. If "Toon World" is on your side of the field and your opponent does not control a Toon Monster, this card can attack your opponent's Life Points directly. If this card attacks, it is changed to Defense Position at the end of the Battle Phase, and you cannot change this Battle Position until the end of your next turn. *error did not find* Toon Cannon SoldierThis card cannot attack during the turn that it is Normal Summoned, Flip Summoned, or Special Summoned. When "Toon World" on the field is destroyed, destroy this card. If "Toon World" is on your side of the field and your opponent does not control a Toon Monster, this card can attack your opponent's Life Points directly. Tribute 1 monster on your side of the field to inflict 500 points of damage to your opponent's Life Points *error did not find* If your going to make a Comment on something you need to do a Little Research... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TableCloth358 Posted June 16, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 16, 2010 Bump it up Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SirtyStan Posted June 16, 2010 Report Share Posted June 16, 2010 Look on the older Toons, like Toon Summoned Skull, Toon Red Archery Girl and Toon Blue-Eyes White Dragon... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Inferno I20 Posted June 16, 2010 Report Share Posted June 16, 2010 you dont really need to pay life points to attack, that only applies to the older toons that or really high level toons. you can make it where you (well opponent) has to pay 1000 life points to attack so you can limit him even more. also you spelled "there" wrong.oh and if "Toon World" is not on the field, say that "destroy this card" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TableCloth358 Posted June 16, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 16, 2010 you dont really need to pay life points to attack' date=' that only applies to the older toons that or really high level toons. you can make it where you (well opponent) has to pay 1000 life points to attack so you can limit him even more. also you spelled "there" wrong.oh and if "Toon World" is not on the field, say that "destroy this card"[/quote'] Thank you that is good Advice. sirtrystan 5 you could learn a think or 2 about this isn't Yugioh it's all Fiction, so things don't need to be what they are. There can be different versions of clasics, thats kinda what i did here. I will be sure to fix those errors and repost soon. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Inferno I20 Posted June 16, 2010 Report Share Posted June 16, 2010 your welcome XD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TableCloth358 Posted June 22, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 22, 2010 BBBbbbbbbbuuuuuuuuuuummmmmmmmmmpppppppzzzzzzzzz Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FriendlyHost Posted June 22, 2010 Report Share Posted June 22, 2010 bad attempt at making another toon.. bad ocg as well, 4/10 good try buddy! but keep trying Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TableCloth358 Posted June 22, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 22, 2010 bad attempt at making another toon.. bad ocg as well' date=' 4/10 good try buddy! but keep trying[/quote'] Umm...I don't have "Bad" OCG my OCG is up to date kid i don't know what your "ON" but your the first comment that states i have "Bad OCG" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~Duo~ Posted June 22, 2010 Report Share Posted June 22, 2010 Er... it's a good try, yet there are OCG and (even!) spelling errors. A comment on the pic: it doesn't look like Lava Golem, just 'cuz it's a dragon. 6/10 Why am I being generous on the vote? I never vote lower than 5 unless the card is so ridiculously stupid and broken. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TableCloth358 Posted June 22, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 22, 2010 Well then i guess this card Fails like you guys say well it was an atemt i don't usaly make cards so yeah okay Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SirtyStan Posted June 22, 2010 Report Share Posted June 22, 2010 Okay there. Friendly, I think you have to now go change your "Official Friendly guy of YCM". Jking. You're my friend. Anyways, TableCloth, I now see your point of view. Thanks for letting me know. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TableCloth358 Posted June 22, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 22, 2010 Eh well my card has failed i think it's fine but i dunno everyone else thinks it sucks so yeah lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sephiroth_The_Legend Posted June 22, 2010 Report Share Posted June 22, 2010 This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by Tributing 2 monsters your opponent controls while "Toon World" is on the field is Special Summoned to your opponent's side of the field. This card's controller takes 1000 points of damage during each of thier Standby Phases. If "Toon World" is not on the field, this is destroyed and both player's take 2000 points of damage. During the turn your Special Summon this monster. You cannot Normal Summon or Set. the last clause is needed as its original lava golem text. this is ok, some basic OCG and spelling errors but its ok.More useful than alot of the toons around these days, thats for sure. 7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SirtyStan Posted June 22, 2010 Report Share Posted June 22, 2010 For an ameteur card maker... Yeah, it's pretty good. I revised it, and gave you a 8.4/10. Oh, and, even though Sphiroth is a moderator, he did get the effect wrong. I know I'm boasting, but I am a master at OCG. Oh, and the "If there is a Toon monster on your opponent's side of the field, then this card must attak the Toon monster." part limits your opponent even MORE. So yeah, here is the proper OCG, in quotations: "This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by Tributing 2 monsters your opponent controls while "Toon World" is on the field. When this card is Special Summoned, switch control of this card to your opponent's side of the field. This card's controller takes 1000 points of damage during each of thier Standby Phases. If "Toon World" is not on the field, destroy this card and deal 2000 points of damage to both players. The controller of this card cannot Normal Summon or Set." Their it is. I just don't get the "During the turn your Special Summon this monster. You cannot Normal Summon or Set." part, so I edited it. Anyways, good job on the card. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FriendlyHost Posted June 22, 2010 Report Share Posted June 22, 2010 This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by Tributing 2 monsters your opponent controls while "toon World" is on the field, and then Special Summon this card under threre control. This cards controler takes 1000 points of damage during each of there Standby Phase. If "Toon World" is not on the field, destroy this card and inflict 2000 points of damage to each player. here are some grammar/ocg mistakes:... "toon World", "controler", "threre". bro, dont get mad when we say ur card could be better! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
davidenko Posted June 22, 2010 Report Share Posted June 22, 2010 7/10Well 2000 each turn means only 4 turns.Hell thats not interesting duel. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sephiroth_The_Legend Posted June 22, 2010 Report Share Posted June 22, 2010 For an ameteur card maker... Yeah' date=' it's pretty good. I revised it, and gave you a 8.4/10. Oh, and, even though Sphiroth is a moderator, he did get the effect wrong. I know I'm boasting, but I am a master at OCG. Oh, and the "If there is a Toon monster on your opponent's side of the field, then this card must attak the Toon monster." part limits your opponent even MORE. So yeah, here is the proper OCG, in quotations: "This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by Tributing 2 monsters your opponent controls while "Toon World" is on the field. When this card is Special Summoned, switch control of this card to your opponent's side of the field. This card's controller takes 1000 points of damage during each of thier Standby Phases. If "Toon World" is not on the field, destroy this card and deal 2000 points of damage to both players. The controller of this card cannot Normal Summon or Set." Their it is. I just don't get the "During the turn your Special Summon this monster. You cannot Normal Summon or Set." part, so I edited it. Anyways, good job on the card.[/quote'] No. It would be nice to be a moderator, but im not.Look at the way Lava Golem is worded.that is how i worded it. there's nothing wrong with the ocg. also, deal should be inflict if your wording it like that.as the for the Normal Summon or Set bit.it means, if i summon Lava Golem, i cannot Normal Summon another monster.check the text of Lava Golem (which seems to best way to base this effect on) and you'll see. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TableCloth358 Posted June 22, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 22, 2010 Wow i actualy got alot of deciant comments ;) thanks Legend i'll use your OCG i like it the best lol i will update ASAP Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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