Shadow Zero Posted June 23, 2010 Report Share Posted June 23, 2010 I'm considering joining tamers, although I still have to think it over. I was less then happy when it took so long to finish gettin my app accepted that someone else had already taken what I wanted and was told that I couldn't have it due to rarity and that, so yeah. Anyway, Nexev, for some reason, the pm refuses to be sent to you when I'm trying to send the rp idea, so I'm just going to have to post it here. sorry. [spoiler=plot]It has been hundreds of thousands of years since the war of darkness, and even longer then that since the Aether crisis and the defeat of Dark Samus. Now, the army of darkness is marshaling its forces once more. This time, they aim to crush the universe that defied them before, and make it their base of operations from which all of creation would fall under their dominion.The current sentinel of Aether has sent out the call. As time passes, more join the ranks of the Army of Light called Musha no sona Nikkou.The Emperor of the Ing, and self proclaimed leader of the Army of Darkness called Akuma no sona Garandou is summoning those who walk in dark paths to join in the fight.all others are forced to serve the army of darkness against their will, and already the Akuma have struck a critical first blow in invading Light Aether and re-establishing the portals from the Aether crisis, as well as causing dark versions of worlds destroyed during and before the previous war of darkness to appear and become enemy strongholds. [spoiler=intro (quite long)]Long ago, when the stars were still young and darkness ran rampant over the face of galactic civilizations, there was a great and terrible war which threatened to tear the entire universe apart and throw all of creation into darkness. During this cataclysmic era, where greed, ambition, hatred, and pride ruled over all with a cruel and unrelenting hand, a brave band of warriors joined there strengths and drove back the great darkness. Knowing that they could not defeat the darkness alone, they sought help from highly advanced alien civilizations to return light to their worlds. as time grew on, more sided with the warriors and fought against the darkness. In a final battle, taking place on the last fortress of the planet Aether, all hope seemed lost. Then, from the depths of despair, their rose those brave few who were able to obtain powers rivaling even the very darkness itself. Using these powers, they and their forces were able to drive back the darkness, and return peace to all that lived.???: .............."It has been millions of years since the great war against the darkness. All is well in the universe. but yet...why do i feel so uneasy?"Central Computer: "WARNING! WARNING! MULTIPLE ENEMIES ENCROACHING UPON THE SANCTUARY FORTRESS! ALL OTHER AREAS ON PLANET AETHER ARE NOW UNDER ENEMY COMMAND!"???: "What?! How could this happen? How could they have occupied so much of the planet already without being seen?!"Central Computer: "ENEMIES HAVE RECREATED THE PORTALS LEADING TO THE UNIVERSES 'DARKER HALF'. SCANS SHOW EXPONENTIAL GROWTH IN ENEMY NUMBERS FROM THE LAST WAR, AND 20 TIMES THE NUMBER OF PORTALS FROM THE 'AETHER CRISIS'. ENEMIES HAVE ALSO CREATED DARKER VERSIONS OF ALL PLANETS DESTROYED DURING THE 'WAR OF DARKNESS' AND HAVE MADE THEM INTO ENEMY STRONGHOLDS."???: "I see. So there is no choice then.......activate the interdimensional portal. Find the ones who can end this."Central Computer: "WARNING. INTERDIMENSIONAL TECHNOLOGY HAS BEEN RECREATED BY THE ENEMY. ACTIVATION OF INTERDIMENSIONAL PORTAL HAS A HIGH PROBABILITY OF ALLOWING ENEMIES TO CALL UPON FURTHER REINFORCEMENTS. ACTIVATION OF INTERDIMENSIONAL TECHNOLOGY HIGHLY DISADVISED."???: "We have no choice, It's the only way! And also, deploy Luminoth Xenotech. We must keep the enemy from reaching the Great Temple."Central Computer: ".............COMMAND CONFIRMED. ACTIVATING INTERDIMENSIONAL PORTALS IN THE GREAT TEMPLE AND DEPLOYING LUMINOTH XENOTECH IN THE GREAT TEMPLE AND KEY AREAS OF AETHER."???:....Heh. If nothing else, at least the technology in the Great Temple and other areas of Aether will strike a critical first blow at the enemy . . . but they won't be defeated so easily. I just pray that the warriors that are brought here can finally end the fighting once and for all...." The war for the universe has begun anew. This time, the stakes are higher then ever before. This time, the war will decide the fate of all creation. No-one is safe. No-where is safe. There are now only 3 choices left to all those who live, who exist. Will they fight against the darkness, will the join it . . . or will they foolishly try to protect themselves and become slaves to the darkness and fodder for the enemy armies? You are a warrior, summoned by Lumina, the 156,912th sentinel of the planet Aether to fight against the darkness once more. Or, you are one who hears the call of darkness and joins in their war against all that live. Are you brought to the darkness...or will take a stand with the light? the choice...is yours.... that's about all I have written up so far. I'm still thinking of things to do plot-wise, but could use a little help. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-Genesis- Posted June 23, 2010 Report Share Posted June 23, 2010 Shadow? Wow, I must have been gone longer than I thought. Hey Shadow I didn't think they'd ever let you back into RP820, so since I've been absent for a while: Welcome back. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shadow Zero Posted June 23, 2010 Report Share Posted June 23, 2010 Thanks Genesis, it's good to be back. I sense that not everyone is entirely happy about my return though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Andx Posted June 23, 2010 Report Share Posted June 23, 2010 @Genesis: Funny story actually. Far too long for me to want to get into at the moment but if you really want to hear the story I suppose I could. @Shadow: If they're not happy and you don't do anything to anger anyone then whoever is unhappy with your return will just have to deal with it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nexev Posted June 23, 2010 Report Share Posted June 23, 2010 Not gonna lie Shadey, that is a cliche plot. Army of Darkness? Only hope for future? Return of an ancient evil from long ago? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shadow Zero Posted June 23, 2010 Report Share Posted June 23, 2010 Meh, it is kind of cliche, but it's only meant to start out that way. Besides, the only thing I can think of that is that cliche is the Yugioh sereis, and I didn't even think of that. You have any ideas to make it better Andx? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Andx Posted June 23, 2010 Report Share Posted June 23, 2010 How to make it better? That's quite the task. As Nexev has pointed out it does contain quite a few clichés. I might not mind those so much if the plot wasn't so full of jargon. I think the two spoilers you have, "plot" and "intro" need to be combined in some way because the intro explains the terms that make no sense with the plot spoiler on its own. Now how to make the story itself actually better? I'd say through an incredibly random idea in there, to ensure it's somewhat original, and work around it. The main problem here is you're pretty set on ideas here and changing them around would change the whole thing itself around. If you just had general cliché ideas and hadn't full on made the plot it would probably be easier to change. Anyway, experiment with different ideas and see how you feel. (Can you tell I don't feel like coming up with ideas at the moment? lol) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shadow Zero Posted June 23, 2010 Report Share Posted June 23, 2010 Yeah, I supposed that's true. Okay then, how about we have the army of darkness having dark counterparts to the 'legendary weapons' thing and make it so that the original weapons no longer are of any help and there has to be another way found to defeat the enemy? Anyway, anyone else have any ideas, or comments on my suggestion for the plot change idea? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-Genesis- Posted June 23, 2010 Report Share Posted June 23, 2010 Well seeing as you never did anything to me I have no reason to dislike you. I have no ideas since I don't know the topic. Although I would like to hear the story Andx. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Andx Posted June 23, 2010 Report Share Posted June 23, 2010 Although I would like to hear the story Andx. Well, since you insist. It started with a card 1 on 1 card contest between Black and War Torn (or Striker as he was known before). War Torn put as the prizes that if Black won, he would start being humble again. The winner would be the first to receive ten votes. Black won 11 to 0. So Black and others told Striker he had to make a whole thread about his being humble again. Well that thread became nothing but bickering quickly but let's not bring that up again, it's too soon. Anyway, seeing that thread I believe reminded Shadow that he had meant to do something like it for awhile so he did not too long after. Upon seeing the thread Black forgave Shadow and I even apologized for disliking him for so long. Not too long after that Black and Shadow had a one on one RP challenge. Essentially the second fight they never had in the Club wars. The deal was that if Shadow won fair and square, Black would let him reapply for the club, he'd still need to be approved. Now I'm not too sure what happened from there because as far as I can tell, that RP fight hadn't come to a conclusion but Black had already okayed Shadow to reapply. Well the sample was good and Black, Tempest and I all approved so now Shadow's back in the club. On probation at the moment however, meaning if he pisses anyone off he's out, but still, he's back. That's the general idea anyway. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shadow Zero Posted June 23, 2010 Report Share Posted June 23, 2010 And that's basically the whole thing right there. Don't ask why I was banned though, it's a sore subject for many here. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Andx Posted June 23, 2010 Report Share Posted June 23, 2010 And that's basically the whole thing right there. Don't ask why I was banned though' date=' it's a sore subject for many here.[/quote'] I think Genesis is aware. Not sure actually. Do you know Genesis? But yeah, no need to talk about it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shadow Zero Posted June 23, 2010 Report Share Posted June 23, 2010 Anyway, any ideas for reworking my rp? I already gave an idea on it, but am not sure how that would work out. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-Genesis- Posted June 23, 2010 Report Share Posted June 23, 2010 I know it had to do with gming, but that's all I know since I wasn't involved. So what's this idea we're discussing? Also what do you guys think of my Avatar and Signiature. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nexev Posted June 23, 2010 Report Share Posted June 23, 2010 What if the army of darkness is actually a failsafe created by an ancient group of super smart aliens in order to protect the world from any major threats. Infighting and petty squabbles got so bad however that it made a glitch, because we are fighting eachother WE are the threat. And thus the army of darkness is made to destroy us in order to protect us from ourselves. Then you can throw in Atlantis cliches, like evil last survivor of ancient race and such. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Andx Posted June 23, 2010 Report Share Posted June 23, 2010 That is another option Nexev brings up. Pump it so full of clichés that people are forced to like it just because it has all of the well known plot devices in one place. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shadow Zero Posted June 23, 2010 Report Share Posted June 23, 2010 What if the army of darkness is actually a failsafe created by an ancient group of super smart aliens in order to protect the world from any major threats. Infighting and petty squabbles got so bad however that it made a glitch' date=' because we are fighting eachother WE are the threat. And thus the army of darkness is made to destroy us in order to protect us from ourselves. Then you can throw in Atlantis cliches, like evil last survivor of ancient race and such.[/quote']That sounds interesting. Also Andx, I can come up with something like there being someone who caused the glitch in the first place and needs to be defeated and that. And then even though it would be thought that the army of darkness is defeated, they actually survive, and the person who caused the glitch (I think I'll call him the Dark General or something, but something less of a ripoff off SoP when I can think of it) furthers the glitch so that While the two separate armies are fighting eachother, they are also hunting down those trying to stop the glitch. That could be interesting.That way there are not so many cliches. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jake the Sage Posted June 23, 2010 Report Share Posted June 23, 2010 Evil last race of an ancient culture? Sounds a bit too cliche ^^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shadow Zero Posted June 23, 2010 Report Share Posted June 23, 2010 Well, this is supposed to be a good million or two years after the events of Metroid Prime 2: Echoes, so the Cliche would actually fit. If you have any ideas to help make it better, I am open to suggestions. Heck, we could all just get together, modify the rp to something we all like, and have it be a club rp for us and for other experienced rpers that may wish to join.Or am I over thinking things?Speaking of, when was the last rp for this club? By the way Jake, if SoP is no longer accepting, then you should edit your sig accordingly. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tempest Dahlia Posted June 23, 2010 Report Share Posted June 23, 2010 Whoever's not happy better deal with it because they had their chance to speak up. Also, damn guys. l know you can do better than that. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jake the Sage Posted June 23, 2010 Report Share Posted June 23, 2010 Dunno about that Shadow, also its a Metroid Prime RP? Then I amout . . . I don't know anything about the series. Also Shadow want to get a new avi? I have found a couple cool pics you can use, so if you wanna see'em get on IM and I'll show'em to you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shadow Zero Posted June 23, 2010 Report Share Posted June 23, 2010 An unseen darkness spreading across the universes that infects people and forces them to fight? It sounds better then the cliche army, anyway. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jake the Sage Posted June 23, 2010 Report Share Posted June 23, 2010 That is true Shadow Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shadow Zero Posted June 23, 2010 Report Share Posted June 23, 2010 Okay then, so I'll go with that, and the Dark General guy can be either the one behind it all, or the guy controlling the darkness for the guy behind it all. Now as to how the rp would start, I'm thinking that how it should start off is everyone is off doing their own thing and fighting against people who are turning against them when some sort of portal opens up and sucks them in. Although that is cliche, so I was thinking some sort of guide appears or something. What do you guys think? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tempest Dahlia Posted June 23, 2010 Report Share Posted June 23, 2010 Seen it before. Oh yeah, The Great Depression. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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