ThatPhantomGuy Posted April 5, 2011 Report Share Posted April 5, 2011 Username: (Mandatory, of course.) Kindred, hahaha... Your Characters: (List the characters that you use, or used, in RPs. This is not mandatory.) None, really. A GOOD RP Sample: (The sample must be at least 6 lines long. This is mandatory. MUST be on the spot)I looked at the picture, my mind progressively getting hazier and hazier. Who knew the poison could do so much damage in so little time? I asked myself these kind of questions for the last hour, which could very well be the very last I will ever have. I sighed. Nothing could save me now, I was a lost cause. I put the picture back onto the bookshelf it was lying on before, and then drudged on back to my bed. The poison had worked its way into my brain. I could feel it snaking its ways through veins and arteries, tainting my body. It was showing. My skin was taking on a purpleish tint, my hair starting to fall out. My teeth were rotting, but it didn't matter. My tongue could no longer taste anything. I sat back down on the bed, grieving for myself. I realized that, because of yesterdays incident, I had nothing. No family, no friends, no children. The poison had taken everything, and I could do nothing about it. I sighed one last time, then closed my eyes, embracing death. Yay! Another piece to critique all by myself~ Just an FYI Kindred, many of us prefer the use of third person in your samples, first person is okay, albeit, messy. NOOOO!! But he's got a point... But third person was never said to be mandatory on the application~ |3 Well I'll still do it anyway... *Reads* 'Tis a very good read and interesting. Although it is in first person, it was great. It has a nice flow, plus I want to know what happened. XD I say accepted~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jake the Sage Posted April 5, 2011 Report Share Posted April 5, 2011 Not going to argue with a ruling by Phantom-sama . . . so welcome Kindred Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lunar Origins Posted April 5, 2011 Report Share Posted April 5, 2011 Oh, Third Person? Alright. Even though I am "accepted", do I need to submit a Third Person writing? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Headmaster Monokuma Posted April 5, 2011 Report Share Posted April 5, 2011 Oh, Third Person? Alright. Even though I am "accepted", do I need to submit a Third Person writing? Not at all. We're fine with first person, it's just a little odd to see it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jake the Sage Posted April 5, 2011 Report Share Posted April 5, 2011 Most people don't do it, I fluctuate of course to keep myself "in practice" If you want to Kindred then go ahead, we'll always be more than happy to see another piece of work from anyone Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lunar Origins Posted April 5, 2011 Report Share Posted April 5, 2011 I write a whole lot of short stories, all in first person. It comes more naturally to me. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ThatPhantomGuy Posted April 6, 2011 Report Share Posted April 6, 2011 Not going to argue with a ruling by Phantom-sama . . . so welcome Kindred Jake-dono, do you disagree~? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Headmaster Monokuma Posted April 6, 2011 Report Share Posted April 6, 2011 Jake-dono, do you disagree~? You strike me as the sort of person who would like to have others disagree.~ I like that in a person. Also, to anyone who plays Minecraft in here, I'm thinking of starting a Minecraft RP... Well, more like remaking. I'll be deciding tomorrow for sure, so yeah. Pretty sure there's at least one of you who play it in here, I just can't recall who. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Warden Posted April 6, 2011 Report Share Posted April 6, 2011 *Groans* Why, why do you all have to use those lame japanese honorifics? WHY?! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted April 6, 2011 Report Share Posted April 6, 2011 You know, I just remembered we had 2 other applicants some pages ago that everyone completely ignored...Ah well, it is what it is.Welcome Kindred, maybe we'll RP together in the future.Then again, now that I think about it, I've barely done any RPs...Maybe I should go look for promising ones or wait for SoP II. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lunar Origins Posted April 6, 2011 Report Share Posted April 6, 2011 I look forward to RP'ing with any of you in the near future. And it perplexes me as to why japanese honorifics are being used, too. ??? Well, in any case, off to finish my story for AP english :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
D.A._Sakuyamon Posted April 6, 2011 Report Share Posted April 6, 2011 Username: ♥ D.A._ϯɨå Håʀʀɨbel ♥ Your Characters: Selinis (multy dif. chars of this), Selina, Michael, Mary, others I can't remember A GOOD RP Sample: [spoiler=Other Site RP sample]Day 1 Somewhere in the deserts of Hueco Mundo a hollow was forming. It seemed as if it was forming on the ground with it’s back facing up. The light that was radiating was surly to attract other hollows who would surely find this newborn hollow a good meal. Finally the hollow had fully formed and the light faded away. It pushed itself up into a standing position and opened its eyes. The hollow appeared cat like in nature or at least the bottom half of it did. From its waist, all the way down to its feet, was snow white fur. This fur had a few big black spots that had gold circles around them. It seemed to be wearing sandals on its paws and on top of each sandal was a brass bell. The hollow had a pink fluffy tail that didn’t seem to want to go down. Now above its waist it was clear that the hollows skin was a rosy violet color with golden strips. On a much closer inspection the hollows skin seemed to split as if the skin was really scales. Now the hollows mask was the oddest thing about it. The fact was is it looked kind of like a knights helm. The bottom half of the mask was blue and black. Attached to the back of this part of the mask was a small cape. The top half of the mask was gold. The part of the mask had a small golden chain dangling from it. Deep in the middle of the mask you could see golden yellow eyes. Whether these eyes where the hollows or the persons didn’t really matter. From the back of her mask all the way to the back of its head is green hair. Sentence count: 21 Selinis opened her eyes and looking around she noticed that she was indeed in a desert. She looked up and noticed the moon, its light reflected off her mask giving it a metallic blue and golden glow. She had no idea of where she was, nor for the matter who she was. The only thing she knew was that she had a hunger. She however wasn’t sure what that hunger was but it was growing more and more. Having one final look at where she was, she began to walk. As she walked she felt that this place was soothing. She walked for what seemed like hours and in this place you just couldn’t tell. Behind her in the distance a hollow had seen the light and began to travel to the source. Sentence count: 9 Selinis stopped to rest up, her hunger was growing worse. Then she felt it, a pressure that was closing in on her position. This pressure whatever it was effecting her hunger in a big way. It was like, her hunger was telling her to go to the pressure. So she got up and she began to move towards the pressures source. About 120 yards in the direction she was moving was the hollow that was after her. As her eyes focused on the hollow, her mind became blank. The only thought in her mind now was to consume the hollow. She got onto all fours and ran at her max speed. From the opposite side the hollow snarled and then in one leap pounced on her. Selinis at the last second moved out of the way and just barely dodged. She curved around to face the hollow and slammed her right paw with as much force as she could muster into the sand and pushed off, curling her left fist she attempted to plow it into the hollows mask. The hollow had just recovered from the failed pounce, wasn't able to dodge the punch. A cracking sound could be heard as the punch landed and so the hollows mask began to crack but it didn’t break. Even though the hollow got hit, it took this opening and pounced at Selinis again. Selinis wasn’t able to dodge the pounce due to her own momentum and fell to the ground with the hollow on top of her. The hollow smashed its fists onto her chest, knocking the wind out of her. The hunger in her refused to be beaten so easily and so taking the hits she pulled her legs in and pressed them onto the hollows chest. The hollow ignored this, thinking as if the fight was over. Then went for the kill and slammed its right claw trying to hit her mask. Selinis put what effort she could into her legs and pushed the hollows chest. Just as the hollows claw hit her mask, the hollow has forced upward into the air from Selinis’s paws. The hollows claw luckily only made a scratch on her mask and she rolled over. The hollow fell to the ground where she was just second ago. Selinis knew that if she didn’t take this opening now she would surely lose and die because her body was at its limit. So she gave one last push off with her legs and formed a kick at the hollows mask. The hollow had recovered from its fall and looked up only to get hit by Selinis’s massive paw. The hollows mask cracked greatly and was just about to break but Selinis wasn’t finished. Curling her leg inward she aimed a punch at the hollows mask and hit it. With this the hollows mask broke and the hollow screamed. Panting as the hollow screamed, Selinis rolled onto the hollows back from her momentum. She was tired but she knew that this was the end. So jumped and turned in mid air, aiming one last hit to the hollows head. The hollow beaten could only scream and did nothing to stop the attack. The hollow let out one last scream as Selinis hit landed and died. Selinis’s collapsed onto the hollows body and took in very deep breaths. Though the fight had only lasted a few minutes, it had left her very tired. After several minutes she felt good enough to stand and looked down at the dead hollow. Her hunger was calling out to her like a voice, telling her to consume the hollow. So with one last glance at the hollow she began to consume it and when she was done, her hunger subsided enough for her to relax. She would camp for now as she was still tired from the fight. She wasn’t very sure why she was able to fight like that and it puzzled her. If one thing she had learned though, she would have to fight again and again or she herself would be consumed. With that she laid down and closed her eyes, almost instantly falling asleep. Sentence Count: 42 Sentence Count Total: 72 Dummy Hollow Stats: Reiatsu: 5000Strength: 7Speed: 7Stamina: 7Reiryoku: 7 [spoiler=site]http://bleachsoulevo...e-first-2-days/ [spoiler=rp from here]Ooc:Well Jacks pissed...Dante unintentionally poked the hibernating bear IC: Jack was woken not by the 2 girls that were near the van but by some very annoying music that seemed to be coming from the beach. whispering to himself "Who the f*** is making that insult to music". Getting up he stretched and and looked across the beach to see a huge crowd. More importantly he noticed some guy with a guitar. His face molding to its typical coldness, he crouched and jumped with his right foot. He created his Barrier bodies right leg to full length to increase his momentum. For a few seconds he continued to rise until gravity took over and he began his decent aiming for a few feet from the guy with the guitar. Creating his max size barrier bodies left leg to cushion his fall causing sand to kick up and hit most of the people that were near the landing. Jack rose down right in front of the guy with the guitar. "Hey you with the guitar stop or i'll make you stop." Mary looked at the girl she looked similar to Alice but not by much. Wiping some tears away she answered, "No I'm not fine my sister was just kidnapped." Then she heard some music coming from the beach and for some reason in response to this some guy who was next to her sisters van seemed to fly to the music's direction. She looked back at the girl she was still crying but not by much, the music seemed to have calmed her down a bit "I-I'm Mary by the way." [spoiler=link]http://forum.yugiohc...k/page__st__820 never got approved or denied.............. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ThatPhantomGuy Posted April 6, 2011 Report Share Posted April 6, 2011 never got approved or denied.............. Yay~ Although I'm terribly sorry someone didn't respond to you yet. Your RP sample has to be made up on the spot... But your other samples are super excellent... ^^' Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
D.A._Sakuyamon Posted April 6, 2011 Report Share Posted April 6, 2011 Well if necessary I'll post one I did to day or do you mean I literally have to come up with a random rp sample? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jake the Sage Posted April 6, 2011 Report Share Posted April 6, 2011 Was the one you gave us on the spot? If not then we need something off the top of your head. And Kindred I only use japanese honorifics on the people I hold most respect for, like Phantom-sama and a couple others. It is a way for me to show a difference in reverance than any other.Not called by name/full name -> Normal stranger respectNickname/Shortened name -> FriendJapanese Honorific -> Major Rexpect [depending on the honorific it varies as well] BTW Fusion, SoP II will be starting to get created as soon as Andrew/Genisis freaking PMs/e-mails me the revised epilogue. I mean you guys think it's fustrating having to wait? I am litterally in the middle of writting the final post but can't because I need what HE has and yet can't seem to send me nor has the time to B [Yet once I got it and finish writting we WILL begin producing "Struggle of Powers II" Jake-dono' date=' do you disagree~? [/quote] I claim the 5th B3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Warden Posted April 6, 2011 Report Share Posted April 6, 2011 But using them is stupid if you're not Japanese. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ThatPhantomGuy Posted April 6, 2011 Report Share Posted April 6, 2011 Well if necessary I'll post one I did to day or do you mean I literally have to come up with a random rp sample? Um. You have to come up with a random RP sample... My apologies. XD But using them is stupid if you're not Japanese. I disagree. It's the same as if a Japanese person uses Mister or Miss, you can't tell them it's stupid just because their native language isn't English. I think it as (using honorifics) showing respect for the Japs which is why I use it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sploda Posted April 6, 2011 Report Share Posted April 6, 2011 This argument is stupid. @FusionWell if you don't RP much, you should probably start off with an easy, relaxed/all out combat 1 on 1 RP with someone who can help you correct mistakes and such. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jake the Sage Posted April 6, 2011 Report Share Posted April 6, 2011 True but I think Fusion will do good as a roleplayer ... after all writting is much harder than actually roleplaying Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sploda Posted April 6, 2011 Report Share Posted April 6, 2011 True but I think Fusion will do good as a roleplayer ... after all writting is much harder than actually roleplayingThat's debatable. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jake the Sage Posted April 6, 2011 Report Share Posted April 6, 2011 Well in my own opinion it is.but then again with roleplaying you actually have to interact with people to a certain degree so every single one of your plans will not work, while in a book you have complete control Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Proto Posted April 6, 2011 Report Share Posted April 6, 2011 Since Fen FOOOOORRCEEEEDD me to post it. I am making a online D&D Campaign, Fen, Nex and possibly Shadow are interested, heck Nex came up with most of the stuff we'll be doing. Being this is a roleplaying club I have to ask. Are any of you interested? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nexev Posted April 6, 2011 Report Share Posted April 6, 2011 Sup. So me and my bronies who are not Ice cause Ice is addicted to ponies like fuckin crack, are making a dnd roleplay thing. It is totally awesome and stuff. And so um... nyah/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jake the Sage Posted April 6, 2011 Report Share Posted April 6, 2011 I quite honestly don't like D&D so, no thanks Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sploda Posted April 6, 2011 Report Share Posted April 6, 2011 I'm totally all for a D&D thing, just so long as it won't require me to travel long distance or always be on at the same time as everyone else is. basically as long as I can make posts about it and not sit here for 5-7 hours into the night on Mondays -Thursdays. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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