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I don't think it should take that long Dane . . .

If he's trying to fill out an app for Black's side and has few ideas to work with, I can see it taking awhile or at. And I know how painful it can be to make samples. Mine always suck.

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Eh, I'm not joining.

 

I just don't have any ideas for anything.

 

Sorry Black, once you see this.

Let me try to spark something.

 

Help the enemy? Bizarre tatic.

 

 

Fonz, your up.

 

Unbenownest to all of New Forum there was a new being.

 

A being born out of nothingness itself.

 

Upon it's creation the nothingness realized something, the creatures surronding it had forms, they didn't change, or changed slower than his eye could see.

 

This saddened the being for unlike them, he couldn't stay the same, it's form would morph constantly for it has not founds it's true place or it's true shape.

 

Then the being found some like him, while they could stay the same they also were able to change.

 

They were Cirque and the being admired them.

 

Then the seed of jealousy began to grow, for the being couldn't show himself for he had naught to show, and yet they could become heros if they wished.

 

 

Then out of this envy and self pity sparked an idea, maybe he can learn from them. And thus the being crafted a suit and mask to cover his horrific morphing body, and gave himself a name.

 

He was above men but couldn't reach the angels, he was a saint of sorts.

 

And so Saint was him.

 

 

....Yeah, it's eh.

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No, Mars is Blue.

 

Owait, Mars is red vs blue! rofl

 

whichever the hell alternate of Ice you are, stuff it. I agree with Scar, I could care less.

 

Nex, it just wasn't a good concept, at all. Well, it was, but it wasn't very well written. Perhaps next time you should write it instead of leaving it to the one in purple?

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[spoiler=Can I join?]Username: SleepingKirby

 

Your Characters: (In order of most recently used) Kiruha Irami, Haruki Mirai, Zodia Sayuki, Kochiyo Sayuki, Avelino Lozano Fierro, Sachiko Narahashi, Jean-Luc Pile... I think that's it.

 

A GOOD RP Sample:

Kiruha wandered around the halls of the museum, stopping to stare at every single thing. She wasn't interested in art; she simply liked the colors.

Oh, this one's pretty! she thought to herself.

"This one's a classic," said a voice, from not too far away. A boy of no more than seventeen approached her and bowed.

"I'm Haruki. And you are?" he asked in a gentleman like fashion.

"I'm Kiruha," she responded, blushing. He offered a handshake, to which she accepted, and the two immediately became friends.

 

 

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[spoiler=Can I join?]

Username: SleepingKirby

Your Characters: (In order of most recently used) Kiruha Irami, Haruki Mirai, Zodia Sayuki, Kochiyo Sayuki, Avelino Lozano Fierro, Sachiko Narahashi, Jean-Luc Pile... I think that's it.

A GOOD RP Sample: Kiruha wandered around the halls of the museum, stopping to stare at every single thing. She wasn't interested in art; she simply liked the colors. Oh, this one's pretty! she thought to herself. "This one's a classic," said a voice, from not too far away. A boy of no more than seventeen approached her and bowed. "I'm Haruki. And you are?" he asked in a gentleman like fashion. "I'm Kiruha," she responded, blushing. He offered a handshake, to which she accepted, and the two immediately became friends.

 

Yeah, the multi quote formatting shows your post without the unneeded line skipping.

 

Now then on to the sample. Without beating around the bush it's not good. Like Black said, it needs a lot more description. And no one becomes friends that quickly.

 

Fine, someone else will judge.

I'll judge if you'd like.

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