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Do I have to have more stars to join or am I ok?

 

Username: Aura Blazer

Your Characters:

Thorn (same name used for two different characters)

Grace

Alex Kane (same name used for two different characters)

 

[spoiler=[b]A GOOD RP Sample[/b]:]

Ghost quickly changed course as a huge dragon arced over him, inches away from his face. A demon turned, looking straight through Ghost, who hid in the shadows. He then disapeared and took shape in the demons shadow, lunging out and striking the creature on the neck with his claw. Moving quickly, he advanced forward and glanced at the demon turning to dust. He must get the attention of the king and he must get it fast.

 

He raced towards the gates but was stoppped by three huge, hog faced demons. They had red skin, held a black spear each and one wore a series of chains around his torso. "Move or perish," ghost warned flexing his claws. They charged, raising their spears but Ghost rolled underneath them firing shots from his faithful handguns. The two demons were dead before they realised what had happened. The only one that remained was the one covered in chains. He swung them out smashing the ground where Ghost was, who was now on the demons back. He touched his head and his cloak began to glow red, the demon fell to his knees screaming, and Ghost made his way towards the gates. His mind corruption had worked and destroyed the demons soul.

 

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Do I have to have more stars to join or am I ok?

 

Username: Aura Blazer

Your Characters:

Thorn (same name used for two different characters)

Grace

Alex Kane (same name used for two different characters)

 

[spoiler=[b]A GOOD RP Sample[/b]:]

Ghost quickly changed course as a huge dragon arced over him' date=' inches away from his face. A demon turned, looking straight through Ghost, who hid in the shadows. He then disapeared and took shape in the demons shadow, lunging out and striking the creature on the neck with his claw. Moving quickly, he advanced forward and glanced at the demon turning to dust. He must get the attention of the king and he must get it fast.

 

He raced towards the gates but was stoppped by three huge, hog faced demons. They had red skin, held a black spear each and one wore a series of chains around his torso. "Move or perish," ghost warned flexing his claws. They charged, raising their spears but Ghost rolled underneath them firing shots from his faithful handguns. The two demons were dead before they realised what had happened. The only one that remained was the one covered in chains. He swung them out smashing the ground where Ghost was, who was now on the demons back. He touched his head and his cloak began to glow red, the demon fell to his knees screaming, and Ghost made his way towards the gates. His mind corruption had worked and destroyed the demons soul.

 

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Stars are of no consequence, only your RPing/writing skills matter. So don't worry about that. If you're a good RPer, we'll gladly accept you here.

 

Now then, on to your sample. First off, is it from an RP or did you make it up on the spot here like you were supposed to?

 

Now then, onto my comments on the sample itself. First off I'm quite happy with the way you write. While like anyone, including myself, it could use more detail, it doesn't sound immature or fail in any way. It has good grammar and spelling from what I see.

 

There is one problem with your sample. And that is simply, I'm not entirely sure what's going on. I see that Ghost is under attack and he's trying to get somewhere, but there's nothing to say why any of this is going on. Regardless I still like your app.

 

Accepted. Though you need the approval of one other leader before you're officially in. So hang tight for a bit and we'll see what the verdict is.

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My sample is from a real RP and yeah it might be a bit complicated' date=' it involves my character becoming peoples shadows so it might be hard to understand.

 

if you want me to change it then I will gladly do so.

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It's from an RP you've been in? Well then it will have to change. The sample has to be completely original meaning you make it up on the spot just for this application. So you've got free range on what you can do.

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You know, I don't remember the last time I was on RPU. I should go back and check.

 

Sounds good to me Andx. The only change I would likely make is giving my character a humanoid form though.

 

So if I gave you this link: http://www.rpuniverse.mybbest.com/forum-32.html

you would consider reading that ooc thread' date=' joining that forum, and then participating in the RP? Oh wait, I forgot, you have to be logged in to see that forum. So the order should really be: join that forum, read the ooc thread, and join that RP.

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I wanna join! But I don't remember my username or my password on RPU.

 

@Shadow: Shadow I'm sorry, but I have to agree... The fact that you don't know what a Predator is is just plain sad.

 

@Jake: A few days ago Aliens Vs Predator 3: Requiem was on SciFi. It was great.

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Hey Andx' date=' I am back ^^

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Jake! I saw you posted in Tamers and I was wondering when you might be showing up around here. Of course that also required me showing up too as I see I missed a few of your earlier return posts. Good to see you.

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Yeah I was at my uncles house and for the love of god neither of use could get my labtop to connect to his wifi.

 

I woulda been on, but I just couldn't (TTuTT)

 

And yeah I posted in Tamers ^^ In fact, if a certain member doesn't mind it, I know how to aid Evelyn's situation at the present moment

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Yeah I was at my uncles house and for the love of god neither of use could get my labtop to connect to his wifi.

 

I woulda been on' date=' but I just couldn't (TTuTT)

 

And yeah I posted in Tamers ^^ In fact, if a certain member doesn't mind it, I know how to aid Evelyn's situation at the present moment

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Well that certain member certainly wouldn't mind having their character get out of a tight situation. And I'm sure that this certain member will follow your prompting in your last post to go about receiving this help. (Now to go find this certain member, the lucky guy.)

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Yeah I was at my uncles house and for the love of god neither of use could get my labtop to connect to his wifi.

 

I woulda been on' date=' but I just couldn't (TTuTT)

 

And yeah I posted in Tamers ^^ In fact, if a certain member doesn't mind it, I know how to aid Evelyn's situation at the present moment

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Well that certain member certainly wouldn't mind having their character get out of a tight situation. And I'm sure that this certain member will follow your prompting in your last post to go about receiving this help. (Now to go find this certain member, the lucky guy.)

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Yeah I was at my uncles house and for the love of god neither of use could get my labtop to connect to his wifi.

 

I woulda been on' date=' but I just couldn't (TTuTT)

 

And yeah I posted in Tamers ^^ In fact, if a certain member doesn't mind it, I know how to aid Evelyn's situation at the present moment

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Well that certain member certainly wouldn't mind having their character get out of a tight situation. And I'm sure that this certain member will follow your prompting in your last post to go about receiving this help. (Now to go find this certain member, the lucky guy.)

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