Proto Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 Username: Aqua GirlYour Characters: Jeanne' date=' Aqua, NameriA GOOD RP Sample: Fear meh! Wendy stared down The Cornel and his sidekick Biscuit. Wendy was severely beaten up, she had cuts all over. The Cornel smiled evilly, “Looks like your down to your last limb little girl!” The Cornel taunted, he neared her unsheathing his Cain blade.“Hee Hee I’ve just been just drawing your attention and time, for him!” She yelled pointing her titanium ladle to the sky.There’s a flash in the sky, something travels at high speed, and crashes in to the ground. As the dust clears it reveals a man with a red afro, Two Twin Blades with the Mc Donald’s Symbol, and clown paint.“Are you OK Wendy? Sorry the Hamburglar was tougher than usual!” He says placing a blade on his shoulder.Wendy blushes, “You Idiot I was almost killed!” She says cutely.“Tch! Well retreat for now. Come Biscuit! “The Cornel says.“Sorry Wendy…” Biscuit says in a sad tone.[/quote'] Well I suppose my review's next. As Jake said you emphasize on the capitals much too much, its a pet peeve of mine but I have a friend who likes to do that and still writes fairly well so I could pass you on that. The misspelling of the word "Colonel", "Cane" and "Me" (though I'm supposing that was intentional) is kinda bad too. You could have used a bit more of your descriptive power on this one, Ronald's entrance was okay but honestly the others kinda fall flat. Overall, I'm sorry Aqua Girl but as a temp I have to reject you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Proto Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 Username: Aqua GirlYour Characters: Jeanne' date=' Aqua, NameriA GOOD RP Sample: Fear meh! Wendy stared down The Cornel and his sidekick Biscuit. Wendy was severely beaten up, she had cuts all over. The Cornel smiled evilly, “Looks like your down to your last limb little girl!” The Cornel taunted, he neared her unsheathing his Cain blade.“Hee Hee I’ve just been just drawing your attention and time, for him!” She yelled pointing her titanium ladle to the sky.There’s a flash in the sky, something travels at high speed, and crashes in to the ground. As the dust clears it reveals a man with a red afro, Two Twin Blades with the Mc Donald’s Symbol, and clown paint.“Are you OK Wendy? Sorry the Hamburglar was tougher than usual!” He says placing a blade on his shoulder.Wendy blushes, “You Idiot I was almost killed!” She says cutely.“Tch! Well retreat for now. Come Biscuit! “The Cornel says.“Sorry Wendy…” Biscuit says in a sad tone.[/quote'] Well I suppose my review's next. As Jake said you emphasize on the capitals much too much, its a pet peeve of mine but I have a friend who likes to do that and still writes fairly well so I could pass you on that. The misspelling of the word "Colonel", "Cane" and "Me" (though I'm supposing that was intentional) is kinda bad too. You could have used a bit more of your descriptive power on this one, Ronald's entrance was okay but honestly the others kinda fall flat. Overall, I'm sorry Aqua Girl but as a temp I have to reject you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Proto Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 Username: Aqua GirlYour Characters: Jeanne' date=' Aqua, NameriA GOOD RP Sample: Fear meh! Wendy stared down The Cornel and his sidekick Biscuit. Wendy was severely beaten up, she had cuts all over. The Cornel smiled evilly, “Looks like your down to your last limb little girl!” The Cornel taunted, he neared her unsheathing his Cain blade.“Hee Hee I’ve just been just drawing your attention and time, for him!” She yelled pointing her titanium ladle to the sky.There’s a flash in the sky, something travels at high speed, and crashes in to the ground. As the dust clears it reveals a man with a red afro, Two Twin Blades with the Mc Donald’s Symbol, and clown paint.“Are you OK Wendy? Sorry the Hamburglar was tougher than usual!” He says placing a blade on his shoulder.Wendy blushes, “You Idiot I was almost killed!” She says cutely.“Tch! Well retreat for now. Come Biscuit! “The Cornel says.“Sorry Wendy…” Biscuit says in a sad tone.[/quote'] Well I suppose my review's next. As Jake said you emphasize on the capitals much too much, its a pet peeve of mine but I have a friend who likes to do that and still writes fairly well so I could pass you on that. The misspelling of the word "Colonel", "Cane" and "Me" (though I'm supposing that was intentional) is kinda bad too. You could have used a bit more of your descriptive power on this one, Ronald's entrance was okay but honestly the others kinda fall flat. Overall, I'm sorry Aqua Girl but as a temp I have to reject you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Crystal Remnants Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 Now then: *Clears Throat* SUBJECT CHANGE Seriously... we need one... And I've got the Perfect one (click the link) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Crystal Remnants Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 Now then: *Clears Throat* SUBJECT CHANGE Seriously... we need one... And I've got the Perfect one (click the link) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Crystal Remnants Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 Now then: *Clears Throat* SUBJECT CHANGE Seriously... we need one... And I've got the Perfect one (click the link) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Warden Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 *Puts duct tape over Remnant's mouth* Not everyone wants to listen to you about HS. Now since there is a lot of negative energy here, why don't we b***h about terrible RPs we've been in over our RPing days. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Warden Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 *Puts duct tape over Remnant's mouth* Not everyone wants to listen to you about HS. Now since there is a lot of negative energy here, why don't we b***h about terrible RPs we've been in over our RPing days. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Warden Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 *Puts duct tape over Remnant's mouth* Not everyone wants to listen to you about HS. Now since there is a lot of negative energy here, why don't we b***h about terrible RPs we've been in over our RPing days. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tempest Dahlia Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 Cephus, also l don't think you're fully wrong, l do believe a bad rper deserves to help. But l feel no sympathy for aqua simply because she honestly did not put a morsel of effort into that app. It was just pure bad and thrown together in two seconds, and it irritates me to see she didn't take it seriously. This is not a 'o hai canz l joyn' app club; you have to TRY, like it SHOULD be, to get in. Even i'm not like that, and i'm super lazy. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tempest Dahlia Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 Cephus, also l don't think you're fully wrong, l do believe a bad rper deserves to help. But l feel no sympathy for aqua simply because she honestly did not put a morsel of effort into that app. It was just pure bad and thrown together in two seconds, and it irritates me to see she didn't take it seriously. This is not a 'o hai canz l joyn' app club; you have to TRY, like it SHOULD be, to get in. Even i'm not like that, and i'm super lazy. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tempest Dahlia Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 Cephus, also l don't think you're fully wrong, l do believe a bad rper deserves to help. But l feel no sympathy for aqua simply because she honestly did not put a morsel of effort into that app. It was just pure bad and thrown together in two seconds, and it irritates me to see she didn't take it seriously. This is not a 'o hai canz l joyn' app club; you have to TRY, like it SHOULD be, to get in. Even i'm not like that, and i'm super lazy. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Crystal Remnants Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 *Puts duct tape over Remnant's mouth* Not everyone wants to listen to you about HS. Now since there is a lot of negative energy here' date=' why don't we b***h about terrible RPs we've been in over our RPing days.[/quote'] *Rips off tape* OUCH! Anyways, I guess you're right. I haven't participated in any RPs because YCM has turned to crap really. We need a site that isn't infested with crappy stuff. I'd suggest RPU but people wouldn't want to make the transition. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Crystal Remnants Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 *Puts duct tape over Remnant's mouth* Not everyone wants to listen to you about HS. Now since there is a lot of negative energy here' date=' why don't we b***h about terrible RPs we've been in over our RPing days.[/quote'] *Rips off tape* OUCH! Anyways, I guess you're right. I haven't participated in any RPs because YCM has turned to crap really. We need a site that isn't infested with crappy stuff. I'd suggest RPU but people wouldn't want to make the transition. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Crystal Remnants Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 *Puts duct tape over Remnant's mouth* Not everyone wants to listen to you about HS. Now since there is a lot of negative energy here' date=' why don't we b***h about terrible RPs we've been in over our RPing days.[/quote'] *Rips off tape* OUCH! Anyways, I guess you're right. I haven't participated in any RPs because YCM has turned to crap really. We need a site that isn't infested with crappy stuff. I'd suggest RPU but people wouldn't want to make the transition. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tempest Dahlia Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 *Puts duct tape over Remnant's mouth* Not everyone wants to listen to you about HS. Now since there is a lot of negative energy here' date=' why don't we b***h about terrible RPs we've been in over our RPing days.[/quote'] l remember the crappy bleach rp that somewhat inspired this club. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tempest Dahlia Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 *Puts duct tape over Remnant's mouth* Not everyone wants to listen to you about HS. Now since there is a lot of negative energy here' date=' why don't we b***h about terrible RPs we've been in over our RPing days.[/quote'] l remember the crappy bleach rp that somewhat inspired this club. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tempest Dahlia Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 *Puts duct tape over Remnant's mouth* Not everyone wants to listen to you about HS. Now since there is a lot of negative energy here' date=' why don't we b***h about terrible RPs we've been in over our RPing days.[/quote'] l remember the crappy bleach rp that somewhat inspired this club. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Warden Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 What do you mean 'somewhat' inspired? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Warden Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 What do you mean 'somewhat' inspired? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Warden Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 What do you mean 'somewhat' inspired? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Altαir Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 Me, help her? With what? God, there's this camp I go to... I'm way too nice. I always make friends with the guy that gets picked on, he can only look to me for a conversation, I get seperated from other friends, soon I have to make a decision that I never wanted to make, and hoped I could avoid it for a while... Camp barely started and it's replaying itself all over again... This is the price of niceness. Now I have been elected to improve Aqua's writing, due to my niceness. Yay, helping people is fun, and no, this is not sarcasm. But, someday, I shall see judgement. Someday, I shall see balance. Someday, niceness will return. And I'll be happy I had stored it up in the hearts of others all those years ago... Now, then... Oh, I met Black in a crappy RP. Ahhh, good times. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Altαir Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 Me, help her? With what? God, there's this camp I go to... I'm way too nice. I always make friends with the guy that gets picked on, he can only look to me for a conversation, I get seperated from other friends, soon I have to make a decision that I never wanted to make, and hoped I could avoid it for a while... Camp barely started and it's replaying itself all over again... This is the price of niceness. Now I have been elected to improve Aqua's writing, due to my niceness. Yay, helping people is fun, and no, this is not sarcasm. But, someday, I shall see judgement. Someday, I shall see balance. Someday, niceness will return. And I'll be happy I had stored it up in the hearts of others all those years ago... Now, then... Oh, I met Black in a crappy RP. Ahhh, good times. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Altαir Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 Me, help her? With what? God, there's this camp I go to... I'm way too nice. I always make friends with the guy that gets picked on, he can only look to me for a conversation, I get seperated from other friends, soon I have to make a decision that I never wanted to make, and hoped I could avoid it for a while... Camp barely started and it's replaying itself all over again... This is the price of niceness. Now I have been elected to improve Aqua's writing, due to my niceness. Yay, helping people is fun, and no, this is not sarcasm. But, someday, I shall see judgement. Someday, I shall see balance. Someday, niceness will return. And I'll be happy I had stored it up in the hearts of others all those years ago... Now, then... Oh, I met Black in a crappy RP. Ahhh, good times. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Warden Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 *Pats Cephus on the back* I gave up on niceness, except my obnoxious empathy still remains. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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