Jord200 Posted June 17, 2010 Report Share Posted June 17, 2010 awsome ending! :D it makes me upset that this didn't get very many comments. but great fan fic and ending Bakupenguin. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bakupenguin Posted June 17, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 17, 2010 thx! thanks you sooo much!! yay!!!! :D :D :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bakupenguin Posted June 19, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 19, 2010 Bumpity Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ShootingTheMoon Posted June 20, 2010 Report Share Posted June 20, 2010 Besides the grammar, this was worth reading :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bakupenguin Posted June 20, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 20, 2010 thanks! I know grammar isn't that good but thanks for reading! yay! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pichu Posted June 21, 2010 Report Share Posted June 21, 2010 Time for the 4th Pichu Review! Chapter 1 Wait, wait, wait, wait! No name to the chapter!?!?! "Headmaster! Headmaster you must here this! It's...It's Tsukune!" Said Shizuka as she rushed into the Headmaster's office. "He's transformed and no one can stop him!"  Who's transformed?  I bet I could stop him! Everyone meet my brother, Raichu. "Again?"  What do you mean again? I'm so confused! Said the Headmaster, "Alright, I'll go stop him." The headmaster walks calmly out of the room at toward the cafeteria where the awakened Tsukune was holding a werewolf by the neck.  I'm thinking this is like the Twilight Saga. I hate Twilight 100%! Beside him was Mizore laying on the ground unconscious bleeding badly. Suddenly, the headmaster jumped forward and placed a crucifix symbol on Tsukune's head, forcing him to return to his natural form. The werewolf ran off, while Tsukune fell down unconscious. Werewolves, vampires, and the headmaster who is like a wizard in one place. This also seems like a mash-up between Wizards of Waverly Place and Twilight. In the nurse's office, the badly bruised Tsukune was just waking up."Uhhhh, where am I?"  In a nurse's office, duh! Said Tsukune while rubbing his head. "Owww..." "Your in the nurse's office, Tsukune" Said the nurse,"And by the looks of it, your going to be here quite awhile." "What happened to Mizore?" "He asked, looking around. "She's right over there," Said the nurse pointing to a stall. "She's badly hurt, but recovering quickly." "That's a relief." Said Tsukune. "Yes, but your VAMPIRE! Please tell us! ... never mind. But what is my true form?" Replied the shaken Tsukune. "You will have to find out for yourself."  He's a vampire! He has to be! Said the Headmaster, "But for now, I'll leave you to recover and get some rest." with that, the Headmaster left the room. "Tsukune! You have some visitors!" Said the nurse. "Uhhh...ok. Bring them in i guess." He said. "TSSSSUUUKUUUUNNEEEE!!!!" Yelled Kurumu as Yukari, Moka and she entered the room. "ARE YOU ALRIGHT??!!"  Tsukune has some fangirls! She yelled as giving him the usual Kurumu-Hug. "CAANNNTTT......Breathe!" Gasped Tsukune as he was struggling for breath. Luckily, Yukari gave Kurumu the frying pan treatment FRYING PAN TREATMENT!?!?!? Sounds painful. But it might be good if there was some pancakes on that frying pan! as it smacked her on the head. "Cut it out you guys! Tsukune and Mizore are trying to recover! said Moka. Hey Tsukune, is Mizore alright?" "-You bet I am!"  Mizore had too much sugar as the next sentence states: Shouted the hyper Mizore as she jumped off her bed. "Thank you so much Tsukune for saving me." She said in a much quieter voice.  This is like getting high. You're all crazy at first then you crash and rest. "It was nothing." said Tsukune. "We're so sorry we weren't there when it happened." Moka said is a saddened voice, "this guy wanted us to show us where the lockers were at precisely the same time as the incident. I wonder if it was all planned...?"  *Dramatic Music* We may never know! "But who would want to hurt my Tsukune?!" Said Kurumu.  I would. At an abandoned warehouse,"When are we gonna finish them off, boss?" Said the werewolf to a shadowy figure "Later," Said the mysterious stranger. "Let's see his true form first." I'm seeing the next generation of Twilight here.------------------------------------Thanks to my guest star,Raichu! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Îκλειψη Posted June 21, 2010 Report Share Posted June 21, 2010 TL;DR JK. Having no former knowledge of Rosario + Vampire, it's hard for me to critique this.-Pichu-, please stop posting your reviews. Since most comments are irrelevant, and the fan-fic is already posted, you're actually spamming. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bakupenguin Posted June 23, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 23, 2010 thx guys. even raichu for at least its a comment XO Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bakupenguin Posted June 24, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 24, 2010 BUMp Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bakupenguin Posted June 26, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 26, 2010 bump Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PARANOiA_brother_Sparky Posted June 27, 2010 Report Share Posted June 27, 2010 Not bad. I won't preach grammar (that has been done enough.) And on a personal note I a more a fan of Shirayuki (I guess you are too lol), so the more Tsukune stays away, the happier I am. Keep up the good work. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PARANOiA_brother_Sparky Posted June 27, 2010 Report Share Posted June 27, 2010 Not bad. I won't preach grammar (that has been done enough.) And on a personal note I a more a fan of Shirayuki (I guess you are too lol), so the more Tsukune stays away, the happier I am. Keep up the good work. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bakupenguin Posted June 27, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 27, 2010 thanks! but that was the conclusion. XO no!!! yeah, Mizore doesn't act all pervy like kurumu, and purple hair/Stalker FTW! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bakupenguin Posted July 6, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 6, 2010 BUMP Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bakupenguin Posted July 7, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 7, 2010 BMUP! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Orza Posted July 7, 2010 Report Share Posted July 7, 2010 No formatting: -2Spelling/Grammar: -1Description: -2Rosario + Vampire: -5 Final Score: 0/10Your logic is hugely flawed. This book latched me on, even though the description and vocabulary is not fantastic it interested me. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bakupenguin Posted July 7, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 7, 2010 soo, its bad...? D: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Orza Posted July 7, 2010 Report Share Posted July 7, 2010 soo' date=' its bad...? D:[/quote']No, it simply needs work. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bakupenguin Posted July 7, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 7, 2010 thx! :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bakupenguin Posted July 17, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 17, 2010 BUMP~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bakupenguin Posted July 21, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 21, 2010 BUMP Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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