Fan fic that needs a title

[blackhawk29]

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[spoiler= Preview of whats to come]Some were along the lines a dimension portal opened and fused two realms together. One you know by Yugioh and one by Halo. Two people have met and plan to duel and finish each other of.

The two draw there five cards into there hand, wearing “Duel Disks” a holographic systems making cards real, and very dangerous.

“I’ll go first” the Mastercheif bellowed. He drew his first card, “I now summon “Covenant Beast-The Suicide grunt (ATK 900 DEF 500) but he won’t stay on the field for long, I sacrifice him and now you take five hundred damage (Me 3500 Lp Mastercheif 4000 Lp and I get to summon Covenant Beast-Grunt Squad(ATK 1300 DEF 1500) . And now I will play two cards face down., I end”

Bretton drew his first card, nervously, "I summon, Evil Thorn, but just like you said it wont be here for long, i sacrifice him to use his ability, now you take 300 points of damage, and i can play two new ones in attack mode. But now i use double summon and now by sacrificing my evil thorn i summon Rose tentacles,(ATK 2200 DEF 1200) and i play one card face down your move. (Bretton 3500 Masterchief 3700)

Mastercheif drew "i use Cost down i discard one card and now my level 7 brute cheiften is level 5. I now summon, by sacrificing my grunt squad i will summon Covenant Beast-Brute Cheiften,(ATK 2000 DEF 1200) and i activate my facedown card Brute Hammer, Giving my Brute 500(Brute ATK 2000 + 500 = 2500) more ATK now Brute attack Rose Tentecles." before my eyes this brute struck my awesome rose tentecles and in the blink of an eye it was destroyed (Bretton 3200 Mastercheif 3700) "Your turn" he bellowed. I drew my card again "I activate "Seed of Deception from my hand, now i get to speacial summon one plant-type monster with 2 stars or less from my hand, now heres copy plant (ATK 0 DEF 0) and i will use its ability to copy the level of one monster on the feild, your Brute cheiften (Copy plant Lv 0 -> 7 )now i synchro sumon with my Evil thorn to create Black Rose dragon and now i use its ability to destroy all cards on the field, including itself." a mighty gust destroyed everything in ten secounds.

But since i didn't summon this turn i play Nettles in attack mode and attack you directly (Bretton 3200 Master chief 2500) Next i play one card face down and end my turn

To be continued

 

 

 

 

 

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[Weather Report - Stand]

Wow, this is horrible. First off, spell your title ripped off from the movie right.

 

Second, your story fails to make any sense. Halo + Yugioh for no reason + ??? = Profit? NO.

 

Third off, your grammar needs adjustments.

 

Fourth off, this is too freaking short to be called a chapter.

 

FIFTH, you should NEVER use author avatars unless they're well-disguised, so that we never know it.

 

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[CrabHelmet]

Writing something deliberately awful just to get on Foe Fiction isn't cool.

[blackhawk29]

Wow' date=' this is horrible. First off, spell your title ripped off from the movie right.

 

Second, your story fails to make any sense. Halo + Yugioh for no reason + ??? = Profit? NO.

 

Third off, your grammar needs adjustments.

 

Fourth off, this is too freaking short to be called a chapter.

 

FIFTH, you should NEVER use author avatars unless they're well-disguised, so that we never know it.

 

Questions?

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there is a reason for halo = yugioh it technically is yugioh + everything but im not at that point in it to have other universes join and yes i took the title from the movie, i couldnt think of anything

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Writing something deliberately awful just to get on Foe Fiction isn't cool.

 

whats a foe fiction

[CarlinFan]

Writing something deliberately awful just to get on Foe Fiction isn't cool.

 

whats a foe fiction

 

This made me lol.

 

Yeah' date=' no offense, but this sucks. Bad spelling/grammar, no plot, massive inconsistencies (such as [i']where the hell did Master Chief get a Yu-Gi-Oh deck?[/i])... The spelling and grammar can be fixed by typing in a word processor (think Microsoft Word), but as to the other things, I can't help you.