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Ann 10 : New Protector of Earth [Chapter 7 added! All 10 aliens revealed!]

Jolta

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We now start my third review.

 

Chapter 3 - Sssschool

 

There is three more S's then there should be.... *DUN-DUN-DUUUAAAAA!*

 

Every superhero needs to go to school. Including Ann Tennyson, now declared awesome. Like all of you, she has to go to school every weekday. Pretty obvious, anyways, lets get to the story.

 

But I just started Summer Vacation. Wow! Ann is in summer school!

 

Don't make fun! I don't test well.....

 

Her outfit in the previous 3 chapters, was a rather sleazy outfit. In school, you don’t wear sleazy outfits, because those are awesome. Instead, you wear less revealing clothes.

 

In Pokemon school, all girls wear revealing clothes! Then again we are Pokemon and we don't wear clothes. Right big bro?

 

Going to school with no clothes, BRING ON THE LADIES!

 

You pervert Pikachu!

 

She wears a yellow, long sleeve shirt with red stripes. Or was it a red one with yellow stripes? But whatever, no diff, don’t care about colour. As long as NO ONE sees her Omnitrix.

 

What's wrong with people seeing a watch that doesn't tell time!?!?

 

Hello! I turn into aliens!

 

And your point?

 

She’s still wearing her red skirt though.

 

*Pikachu tries to look under Ann's skirt.*

 

YOU PERV!

 

“Oh effing gawd, school.

 

Swearing! This is where it gets good!

 

I’ll use my Aliens on those bullies…” Ann thought as she nervously went to school. “Who should I use? Crystal Skull? Killing Time? Polaron?” she thought. She had to eventually go to school.

 

She was going to be late, so Ann slammed down her watch and transformed into Killing Time. The superfast alien sped to school. When she was an inch away from school, she changed back to Ann.

 

Because when you get an Omnitrix, you magically unlock Master Control.

 

“Oh look, smexilicious, its Angelina Tennyson!” a voice from behind boomed. It was William and Sam, the school bullies.

 

They're bullies and calling her sexy....

 

“Give us your lunch money, redhead,” William said. “Yeah, or we’ll beat you to the pulp!” Sam continued. “Don’t interrupt,” William wailed at Sam.

 

My mom always said not to hit girls unless they hit you first. HIT SOMEONE ALREADY ANN! I WANT SOME ACTION!

 

“I’ll be right back,” Ann said. She went to the nearby girl’s bathroom. The duo stalked her. Lolicons.

 

William and Sam scream Pikachu.

 

What?

 

We're calling you a perv like my school bullies!

 

Ann went into a cubicle. The duo were trying to peep, but failed. Ann noticed their presence. “Gee Tee Eff Oh, pervs!” the redhead- I mean, pinkhead, or whatever, screamed. “This’ll teach them to trifle with me,” Ann thought. She slammed down her watch. Transformation began.

 

Time to change into a drawn alien.

 

Jolta drew that, not me!

 

Yep! I drew all of Ann's aliens!

 

No answer...

 

Her bewbs grew flatter. OWAIT- she was already flat-chested.

 

Thank you for sharing.. I guess.

 

Her arms were transformed into wide bird-like wings, covered with scales. Her whole body was covered with scales. Her teeth became jaws and her body became Serpentine. “LEVIATHAN!”

 

Transformation description! I like that!

 

[spoiler=Leviathan, able to manipulate Envy.]

leviathano.png

 

 

A snake with wings! Does it fart butterflies?

 

A mammoth, motherfuxing sea serpent emerged from the cubicle Ann was in. “RUUUN!” William yelled like a little girl. So did Sam.

 

Harecord Comdey

 

“Ssssso, you dare trifle with Leviathan, boyssss?”

 

I would! You big old snake thingy!

 

Shut up you freak!

 

Leviathan questioned. He shot electric bolts at the boys through his mouth. Or ssshould I sssay, ssshot electric boltssss. “I am the ssssmexiest person you’ve taken on.

 

Got that right!

 

Facccce my wrath!” boy, Leviathan sounds very annoying, I like that.

 

“What are you going to do with ussss, snakeface?” teased Sam. “Sssso, you wanna fight? Very well, ssssuckers! Tornado Ssssmackdown!” Leviathan spun around and around and around and around. He spun so quickly, he himself became a humongous sepent tornado. It carried Sam and William.

 

Good-Bye little boys who scream like girls!

 

I hate those boys!

 

“Oh my, ssso you are having fun like me? Ssssit down and we will have ssssome more…” Leviathan cleared his throat, “Owait, you can’t. Sssss.”

 

And we bring an end to a chapter where a sssssnake talksssss like thisssss! I think this FanFic is worth reading. I can't wait to read more adventurs of Ann 10!

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Thanks to my guesses:

Big Bro Pikachu, Ann Tennyson, and ► Jolta ◄

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This story doesn't interest me in any way, whatsoever, mostly due to the lack of effort mostly summed up in this one question:

 

Why are all of your aliens so uncreative and red? I mean, well, they're all... red. They seem really dumb and situational, some of them. A purple fat horse with red-and-yellow mane. That can walk on water. But it has extra limbs! ...So? Pretty much all of the other dudes and dudettes in the show had all sorts of cool lil' things they could do (I don't think food manipulation counts as cool) and were really original-looking. Yours look really half-assed, like something I drew in 3rd grade.

 

The only good thing about the original series (because it hadn't gotten a grip on writing good scripts yet for another 2-4 seasons) was pretty much for a while the ALIENS. Why else would we see this irritating kid make all sorts of lame jokes every few seconds? Because he could turn into MF-ing Fourarms, that's why! Nobody really cares about Firewall, I'm sorry. Your ideas really aren't well thought-out (IMO), which pretty much fails at garnering attention. Hell, the only reason I clicked here was because I was curious at who you'd made up! I feel sad now.

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