The Stars. Can you beat them?

[Lady_Killer]

I decided to put a twist on the constallations. I call them the Star Beasts and the Ancient Ancestors. I only have one for now, working on the rest.

 

Star Beast - Draco

Level 12| Fire

Dragon/Effect

-This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by Tributing 3 cards on your side of the field. This card cannot be destroyed by battle. when this card is targeted by a Spell or Trap card, Discard 1 card from your hand to the graveyard to negate that card and destroy it. When this card is Summoned, Destroy all cards on the field(excluding this card.) During your End Phase, Remove from Play 2 cards in your graveyard. If you cannot, Destroy this card and Remove it from play.

4000/4000

 

Please tell me how i can fix

[T3RA PROWL3R]

Everything in Bold is what I fixed.

 

Star Beast - Draco

Level 10| Fire

Dragon/Effect

-This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except by Tributing 3 cards on your side of the Field. This card cannot be destroyed by battle. when this card is targeted by a Spell or Trap Card, you can discard 1 card from your hand to negate that card's effect and destroy it. When this card is summoned, you can destroy all other cards on the field. During your End Phase, remove from play 2 cards in your Graveyard. If you cannot, destroy this card and remove it from play.

4000/4000

 

I don't think a Level 12 should have 4000 ATK and DEF. They usually have 5000.

[Aero~]

Good fix, t3rra.

8/10 with fixes.

[T3RA PROWL3R]

Oh yeah, there already is a "Star Beast" card. It goes along with "Star Bird Rallis".

[Zowayix]

A few minor fixes:

Bold text and strikesthroughs are what I fixed after the first fix.

 

Star Beast - Draco

Level 10 | Fire

Dragon/Effect

-This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except by Tributing 3 monsters you control. This card cannot be destroyed by battle. When this card is targeted by the effect of a Spell or Trap Card, you can discard 1 card from your hand to negate that card's effect and destroy it. When this card is Summoned, you can destroy all other cards on the field. During your End Phase, remove from play 2 cards in your Graveyard. If you cannot, destroy this card and remove it from play.

4000/4000