Bleach~A New World[PG-16, Advanced, Accepting,Not Started]

[Ultimate Assassin Ninjew]

[align=center]Bleach~A New World

 

This is for Bleach~The Unified World~Club Members only.

 

[spoiler=[color=purple]Plot:[/color]]The world of Las Noches and Soul Society has changed ever since the time of Aizen and Ichigo. None of the original shinigami and hollow exist anymore. In fact it is a whole new world. Though one thing is still the same, the hollow are fighting the shinigami. New captains have rose up as well as Espada. However a third entity has made its way, which rivals both. They are called The Eternals. No one knows of them yet however, but everyone will be in shock when they do show up.

 

Will the shinigami prevail or will the hollows come out victorious? What of The Eternals? It is up to you to determine which way the war goes.

 

 

 

[spoiler=[b]Rules:[/b]]All YCM rules apply.

No Godmod.

No OOC posts only.

Grammar and Punctuation are key.

4+ Lines per post.

One character per person unless I say otherwise.

My word is law.

Be active - post at least once to twice a week. I cannot be on constantly so I do not expect you to be, but posting is required.

Limit Spam, if something is needed please PM me.

You cannot kill another player's character unless I say you can and by user's disgretion.

Remember your character's use a set amount of reiatsu, so you don't have unlimited amounts. Watch how much you use.

If you break any rules, you will first be warned, neged then banned.

 

 

 

[spoiler=[color=blue]Shinigami App:[/color]]Character-

 

Name:

Gender:

Age:

Appearance:

Personality:

History:

Division #:

Powers and Abilities(Optional):

 

Zanpakuto-

 

Name:

Release call:

Shikai Appearance:

Shikai Ability:

Bankai Appearance(Captain Only):

Bankai Ability(Captain Only):

 

 

 

 

[spoiler=[color=red]Hollow App:[/color]]Character-

 

Name:

Age:

Gender:

Appearance:

Personality:

History:

Espada #:

Powers and Abilities(Optional):

 

Resurrection(Espada 1-10 Only)-

 

Name:

Release call:

Primera Resurrection Appearance:

Primera Resurrection Ability:

Segunda Resurrection Appearance(Espada 1-4 Only):

Segunda Resurrection Ability(Espada 1-4 Only):

 

 

 

 

Note: If all Espada spots are taken, then everyone will become Arrancar and lower if needed.

 

[spoiler=My App:]Character-

 

Name: Sven Trago

Age: 222

Gender: Male

[spoiler=Appearance:]

 

[spoiler=Personality:]A normally calm man who can be easily angered. When angered he becomes very dangerous and will do almost anything to kill. If calmed past the anger point however, he becomes even more dangerous then before. He will lure opponents in for attacks then strike without warning. He gives no mercy in all fights and ensures that his opponent be killed.

 

He likes the look of pain on an opponents face when he injures them as well as when they are angry. He absloutely loves the sight of blood and almost craves to see it. When not fighting he likes to be alone because if he is around people, he gets a wanting to kill. He enjoys a simple meal consisiting of a medium to large hollow every once in a while.

 

He absoutely hates other people and can't stand to be around them. He even more hates authority, but keeps himself under control. He hates to lose in a fight because losing means weakness and he knows he is not weak. He dislikes pesky little hollows who think they can do whatever they want. He doesn't like living in a giant castle because he feels it is a waste of space.

 

His major flaw would be underestimating his opponent because he feels he is superior. Though he doesn't show it, he does take them for granted. He minor flaw would be his blood lust. He sometimes forgets his strategy of lure and injure when blood is seen and goes on the attack. Though he has these flaws, he keeps himself in check and rarely shows the flaws.

 

[spoiler=History:]Sven was born into a somewhat large family of 4 children. He however was a twin to his brother Cameron. Because the family was so large, they lived in a large house. Besides Cameron there were 2 other brothers and 2 sisters. Sven never spent much time at home though because he was always playing with the kids from his school.

 

He went to a middle class school because his parents wanted to save money even though they didn't need to. He made many friends and was happy. Sometimes he would get in trouble in class because he was having too much fun with his friends. Sven's parents did not think that it was a good thing for him, but didn't take him out of the school. he was happy they didn't because he wanted to stay with his friends.

 

However, the kids he was playing with weren't rich like his family was. Sven didn't care about being rich though, he only cared about being happy. His parents did not like this and soon began treating him like a poor child. Cameron however always stuck up for him and even snuck him extras. His other brothers and sisters chose not to care for Sven.

 

One night Sven was out playing with his friends and a storm rolled in. On his way home he had to cross a large street. While he was crossing, a drunk driver looked away to grab his beer and his truck swerved off the intended path. The truck smashed into Sven's body, killing him instantly. The truck and driver however, continued along and disappeared into the night.

 

When his parents found out he had been killed they seemed to not care. his brothers and sisters didn't care either except for Cameron. Cameron was heartbroken about losing his little brother and sometimes wouldn't do anything because he was so sad. Sven watched day after day over his family and Cameron, as a spirit. After his funeral, he noticed Cameron no longer crying about him. In fact he had become like his other brothers and sisters, a rich snob who only cared for money.

 

This angered Sven so much that he turned into a Minus. He took the form of a dragon, like his families crest had in it. Except his mask was that of the sun. He began haunting his family, causing mass destruction to the home. He began eating other spirits to try to cure his cravings for them. It wasn't long before he began changing into a Gillian.

 

Sven spent a good 50 years as a Gillian, eating other Gillian and gaining strength. This in retrospect was actually a good length of time then other Adjuchas took, but there were also some that took even longer. When he became an Adjuchas, he returned to a near same form as his Minus, but smaller. He roamed the White Desert for 150 years, eating other Adjuchas who were weak and not very willing to continue on.

 

Through the 150 years, he gained and lost many companions. He would eat each one of them after they died. This just made Sven more happy becaus ehe hated to be around people now. Sven began to grow in power and some size. Then one day after eating one of his last companions. His body changed again.

 

A boy emerged from the large body of the Adjuchas. This would be Sven's normal form now as he had become an Arrancar. He wore a zanpakuto on his right side, it had a red sheath and a dragon hand guard. He soon entered Los Noches and stayed alone within the castle. At times he would exit to go eat large hollows because he still craved them.

 

He continued to spend the next 13 years inside Los Noches, training himself and learning cero. He trained using his zanpakuto as a secondary choice to his hand to hand style. He felt it was better to use his hands rather then a weapon to do his bidding. He also developed his defensive style of fighting to be able to catch his opponent off guard better instead of doing a full on attack to overpower them.

 

Sven would go days without eating and drinking, though hollows don't necessarily need to. After his intensive and harsh training he would sleep for a few hours, eat and drink before doing another set. He developed good discipline and good battle sight. He also developed a quicker speed and strength then a normal arrancar would in solitude.

 

Espada #: 2

 

Resurrection(Espada 1-10 Only)-

 

Name: Dragón

Release call: "Fly in the skys Dragón"

[spoiler=Primera Resurrection Appearance:] Sven becomes coated in a white, scale like armor that can withstand simple sword strikes. His mask forms over his face and looks like that of a dragon's skull. A long spiked white tail grows off his tail bone. His hands and feet become claws, as spikes appear along his spine. Large white wings form off his back and can sustain him in flight, but can retract to all him to move on the ground. The wingspan has a length of 15ft.

 

[spoiler=Primera Resurrection Abilities: ]1) Elemental Protection - protects from simple large scale and nonprecise strikes from elemental attacks. Also protects from weather of any kind[except if lightning were to strike it since that is a precise strike].

 

2) Basic Elemental Manipulation - can use basic uses of fire and even wind. Such as breathing fire and blasting wind from the large wings.

 

3) Elemental Absorbtion - can absorb small amounts of elemental attacks. Such as taking in wind from a wind attack and changing it into energy. the same can be done to other elements, but only a small amount from any element.

 

4) Elemental Merge - can merge with the elements such as if he goes into the water he is not affected by the thought of drowning or if he merges with the ground he won't be suffocated to death. This does not work with elemental attacks.

 

[spoiler=Segunda Resurrection Appearance(Espada 1-4 Only):] Sven's scale like armor increases in density. His mask grows 2 horns that can emmit a cero when Reiatsu is gathered between them. The claws and spikes become longer and as sharp as a sword. The tail gains more spikes and can emit a cero from its tip.

 

[spoiler=Segunda Resurrection Ability(Espada 1-4 Only): ]1) Elemental Creation - can create some elements out of the air. Some of these include diamond from crystallizing water vapor i the air, fire from a spark possibly cause by clashing swords or even earth from floating dust.

 

2) Elemental Change - can change one element into another one. Such as water to fire or to earth or to sand or vice versa for any element that he feels would be better to use. This does not work on elemental atatcks, unless he is the one using the attack.

 

3) Elemental Cero - produces a cero unlike any others. It consists of the elements and is fired in the same fashion as the others. It is not affected by the elements when it is fired though, so weather and elemental atatcks do not affect it. Sven hides it with his Reiatsu though, so it is invisble until the moment before it strikes.

 

 

 

 

[spoiler=[color=orange]Accepted:[/color]]

Soul Society

Dranzer - Ren Kirimaru (3rd Squad Captain)

Anbu_Leader -Kiri (5th Squad Captain)

magnet soldier - Sukai Tero (9th Squad Captain)

 

Hueco Mundo

Remnants - Relnaem Byrall (Espada 1/Primera)

Ninjew - Sven Trago (Espada 2/Segunda)

Borealis111 - Kagirinai (Gillian)

The Dragon Duelist - Elta Ataro (Runaway Espada/ Privaron Espada)

 

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Club Link: Bleach~The Unified World~Club

[namelessk]

Reserve me a spot for 5th Division Captain. I will post the app when I get back on May 6th. I leave for Europe today so I won't have anytime to make it now.

[Ultimate Assassin Ninjew]

You have to be part of the club to be in this rp.

[namelessk]

Okay, well then I'll join your club when I get back. Sorry about that.

[Ultimate Assassin Ninjew]

Its not a problem.

[Hollow Ichigo!]

Name: Jackel

Age: 2000

Gender: Male

Appearance:[spoiler=]

Jackel has light-blue spiky hair and eyes, and also has green lines below them, similar to the eye markings on the Panthera genus of cats, as well as the red marks on Ikkaku Madarame's eyes. Jackel's attire consists of a white hakama and a black sash; his white jacket is ragged with an upturned collar. The inner lining is black, the sleeves are rolled up, and Jackel wears it open, leaving a muscular chest revealed. The remains of his Hollow mask consist of the right jawbone, and his Hollow hole has moved to his abdomen. His tattoo number (6) is located at his back, near the right side of his Hollow hole. Since his first fight Jackel sports a large scar on his torso, which several characters make remarks to.

 

 

Personality:Jackel appears to be a laid-back and irreverent individual at first glance, but this scruffy exterior hides a brutal, impulsive, excessively-violent personality and a lethally-short temper. Jackel is blunt, sarcastic, and quite sadistic, revealing a psychotic grin whenever he becomes excited.

History: Before Jackel became an Arrancar, he was a panther-like Adjuchas-class Menos. At one point he came across the Adjuchas-class Menos group of Shawlong Kūfang, Edrad Liones, Yylfordt Granz, Nakeem Greendina, and Di Roy Linker. Di Roy decided to eat him but before Di Roy could act, Jackel attacked him and ate a chunk of Di Roy's head. The group was impressed at his strength and they introduced themselves. Their leader Shawlong asked that Grimmjow joined them but even more than that they bowed down to Grimmjow.

Espada #: 6

Resurrection: Pantera

Powers: Desgarrón, and gran ray cero are strongest

 

Name:Pantera

Release call: Grind

Primera Resurrection Appearance:[spoiler=]

Jackel's appearance changes drastically to something more feline and predatory. His teeth become jagged and sharp, his hands turn into black claws and his feet become black clawed paws, similar to that of a cat, along with a slender whip-like tail. His hair becomes very long and flowing, and the markings around his eyes enlarge and extend to the tips of his ears, which become cat-like. He loses his distinctive jaw mask, which is replaced by a sort of a headgear on his forehead. His clothing changes to become a form-fitting white segmented armor, similar to his original Adjuchas-Hollow form.

 

Primera Resurrection Ability: Desgarrón

[Ultimate Assassin Ninjew]

You need age and gender. Also, I stated in the plot none of the original hollow existed anymore. So you can still use Pantera as the zanpakuto, but you need a different character name. Also if your going to use Grimmjow's personality, just change the name to your character. Next you need a full history of at least a paragraph.

[Hollow Ichigo!]

okay i will edit

 

 

Edited

[Ultimate Assassin Ninjew]

You still need at least a paragraph for history.

[Hollow Ichigo!]

edited again

[Ultimate Assassin Ninjew]

I'll accept, if you can add what happened after they allowed him to join them to your bio.

[Hollow Ichigo!]

okay forget this i am your only person of intrest and you are making this ridiculas

[ANBU]

Reserve Espada 4 please..

[Ultimate Assassin Ninjew]

okay forget this i am your only person of intrest and you are making this ridiculas

 

I'm asking simple things because it's incomplete. If you can't do a simple bio then I feel you can't Rp. Its very simple.

 

Reserve Espada 4 please..

 

Reserved.

[Dranzer]

Name: Ren Kirimaru

Gender: M

Age: 14

Appearance:

 

Personality: He is a very silent person and a very few number of people know him deeply,mostly because they don't care and awlays underestimate him.He always wants to prove them wrong,but never goes off temper.He's awlays loyal and noble.Aldo he doesn't have many friends everybody in the third devision worships him and want to become like him.Ren believes that those close to him come more important than everything.

History: He comes from a not so well known clan.His family has been a part of Shinigami Academy and everyone believes that is the reason for him to pass so early.Aldo others thoughts Ren is quite skillfull with his Zanpakuto and uses Kido only when his enemy is at his full strenght.

Division #: 3rd

Powers and Abilities(Optional):

Hado#31;Shakkahou

Hado#54;Haien

Hado#63;Raikoho

Bakudo#61;Rikujokoro

Bakudo#81;Danku

 

Zanpakuto-

 

Name: Ketsuraisuki

Release call: Strike between heaven and earth,Ketsuraisuki

Shikai Appearance:

 

Shikai Ability: Transforms ino doble blade and shoot small red lightning from his blade

Bankai Appearance(Captain Only):

 

Bankai Ability(Captain Only): His sword transforms into a red cloud in the sky and connects the end of his sword with the sky true red thunder.That way he can strike all enemies in 2 km radious from the cloud.

[Ultimate Assassin Ninjew]

You have to be a part of the club to reserve dranzer.

[Dranzer]

I awredy did join.

[Ultimate Assassin Ninjew]

Well now you have. Lol. Reservation Accepted.

[Dranzer]

Updated.

[Magnet Soldier]

I just posted an app for your club. And yes, his Zanpaktou is a Twin one.

 

Name: Sukai Tero

Gender: Male

Age: 459

Appearance: [spoiler=] Exchange the Clothes for a regular Captains Haori.

 

Personality: Sukai is a very serious and uptight person, with an aura of authority around him. His demeanor scares most, except for the captains, of which most know him well. His subordinates, the shinigami of his squad, hold him in the highest of respect.

History: His life as a human is unknown, as he suffered from Amnesia as a Human. He died very young, only fourteen at the time. In the soul society he displayed very high recordings Reiatsu, being able to do Kido up to ten when he was found. He left the Academy after one year, and was the youngest graduate ever. He excelled at everything, and when he left the academy, he had enough skill and reiatsu to instantly unseat the fourth seat of the Sixth squad. He progressed through the ranks quickly, learning Bankai as a Vice captain. When the Captain of Squad Nine was assigned to the Royal squad, he inherited the Rank. He was only 60. Almost as Young as Toshiro was. But he had much more talent. His reiatsu outweighed most of the other captains at the Time, and he soon became respected and popular. However, he always kept his authority, and never reveals his Shikai unless absolutely necessery. He was challenged by his formor Vice captain once. The Vice captain released a Bankai, but Sukai did nothing. The Vice captain was killed instantly. Unknown to everyone else, who thought it was immense speed, it was his strange ability to control all weather related to wind, such as storms and fog.

Division: 9 Captain.

Powers and Abilities(Optional): Kido up to 97 without a phrase.

Misuto(Mist). When he is injured this Ability allows Sukai to transform into a ball of Mist. This allows him to avoid Detection, walk through walls and be invulnerable. However, in this state, he cannot attack.

Sunaarashi(Sandstorm). This ability allows Sukai to summon a Sandstorm around him, blinding and slightly injuring the opponent.

Bofuu(Rainstorm). This ability calls down ten thunderclouds, each holding about three hundred litres worth of rain(About ten minutes). This gives the Ability one hundred Minutes worth of rain. After each raincloud there is a five second period before the next cloud appears. This rain slows the opponent down and blurs their vision. It also dulls their hearing and wipes away all scents, making the user almost undetectable.

 

Zanpakuto-

 

Name: Tsubasa(Wings)

Release call: Take to the skys,

Shikai Appearance: His twin blades transform into to Chakrams, each with a Chain at the end, attached to a belt at Sukai's wasit. Sukai's Clothes are changed to that in the appearence.

Shikai Ability: Sukai's Shikai enhances his abilities to control the weather, aswell as being able to master wind.

[spoiler=Shikai Attacks]Cloud of eternal peril. This attacks Creates a dome of darkness, the only light being the odd flash of lightning. Nothig is seeable, even if there was light. This is because of an extremely dense fog, which blinds you, so that you couldn't see your hand if you held it infront of your face. Then starts the rain. It is an acid rain that cuts through anything except Zanpaktou's. It burns the skin, however, it causes no lasting damage. It just causes immense pain. It is unescapable, but costs the user(Which is not in the dome) a mass of Reiatsu.

 

Eien no sukai tero (Eternal Sky terror). This Ability Summons a mass of clouds, blocking the sun and plunging the zone in which it was summoned into Twilight. In these clouds resides a giant beast in the Shape of a bird mixed with a Snake/Lizard. It is usually refered to as a dragon. This is a lie, as it is not a Dragon. It is a being made of the pure Spirit energy(Aka Reiryoku) of the summoner. It feeds of the reiatsu in the area, making Shikai, Bankai ETC Useless, along with Kido and Ceros. It also attacks people who get too high up.

 

More abilities will be posted as the Story progresses.

 

Bankai Name: Gōruden Tsubasa(Golden Tsubasa)

Bankai Appearance: Sukai Gains more Chakrams, each floating around him, held onto his body by A chain on each one. Sukai's clothes are the same as his Shikai. He also grows a Pair of Golden Wings(As the Name suggests.)

Bankai Ability: The wings, obviously, give him the ability of flight. He also has a greater control over wind and can summon more chakrams, each having a chain attached to him. Each chain takes away a fraction of his Reiatsu, at a maximum he can summon twelve. He can also summon chains himself, without chakrams attached to him. These cost no Reiatsu and paralyze anyone touching them, besides himself. The original Chakrams from his Shikai are released from their chains and are his main weapons. These can transform into three other weapons: A whip, on which each is attached to a handle and a chain attaches them to that handle.

An Axe, on which a pole is created and a Chakram lies on one side of one end of the pole, while the other lies on the same end, on a different side.

And finally, a staff, where a Chakram is on each end of the pole. On this weapon, the Chakrams are attached to the poles by chains, allowing the pole to be used as a giant Nuchuck.

[spoiler=Bankai attacks]None at the moment, will create during RP

 

[Ultimate Assassin Ninjew]

Dranzer accepted.

 

Magnet, the Mist ability that you have is a bit too strong. Invulnerability is godlike. Make it vulnerable if found because that is probably the case. Next, why ten thunderstorms? A single large one could hold that amount and ten is out of a users control. Making it Godlike, so please change. Also your time frame says 10 minutes for one and 100 minutes for the other. Fix it. Your two shikai attacks are too strong for Shikai. Making them Bankai would be more likely. For eternal sky of terror, blocking out the sun doesn't cause twilight. Slowing time causes that and that is not what your zanpakuto is based for. Just because it feeds off of the Reiatsu in the area doesn't nullify a zanpakuto or attacks. It could weaken them, making them almost near useless, but doesn't make them useless. Again, these would need to go into bankai because of their power. For Bankai, 8 more chakrams is a bit much. Maybe 4 more is likely. This is especially to the fact that you state you can summon even more. I'd say the max you could summon is 4 more because it would cost lost of reiatsu. Also everything would cost reiatsu to summon even if just a little. The Bankai's ability was stated outside of the spoiler so i don't see why you have two sections for it. Also its ability for a bankai is kinda weak, it should be for shikai. So if you switch their abilities it would be good. Making these edits will most likely get you accepted. And just for thought, if he went to the Royal Guard, he wouldn't come back for captain.

[ANBU]

Name: Kiri

Age: 500

Gender: Male

[spoiler=Appearance:] [spoiler=

 

 

Personality: Kiri is usually very kind, most other shinigami feeling quite safe nearby, his kindness shown almost always. However when Kiri is Engaged in a battle with a hollow his Pure hatred of them is shown.

History: Kiri had left the living at the Age of 12, death instantaneous from an Explosion right next to him. He had wandered around until found by a Shinigami, the hollow hole not having grown much he had a Soul Burial. later he was chosen to become a Soul Reaper due to his higher amount of reiatsu power compared to others within that district. He had only trained for 3 years in the Shinigami Academy before passing and Becoming a Soul Reaper. he then progressed in the 5th Division rising the the 5th seat within a short time. A hollow Attack to which they responded had killed the 4th Seat, causing a great hatred of hollows to rise up within Kiri as he jumped and used his shikai, slicing the hollow in two on him way back down. He continued eliminating hollows that arrived eventually becoming lieutenant. Kiri had challenged the Commander of the 5th Division a few years afterwards. 300 Shinigami watched as they fought and Kiri used his Bankai, turning to smoke and avoiding most of the Captains attacks. Kiri had won the match within a shorter time as the constant avoiding of the attacks put the captain on edge at which he made a mistake. which allowed Kiri to Defeat the captain therefore gaining the title of Captain, leading the fifth division Kindly, yet whenever in battle against a hollow his hate of them showed easily. Kiri is currently within the Seireitei around the 5th Division Headquarters & Barracks, only just having got back from a hollow disturbance in which many had tried to attack at once and thought they would easily win before being sliced in two.

Division #: 5

Powers and Abilities:

Sumōku(Smoke): Kiri transforms into a large group of dark smoke clearly visible and able to be hit with a vareity opf attacks yet most physical attacks pass through. He cannot harm others int his form or be harmed but physical objects like walls impede his movement as usual.

Buraindo(Blind): Kiri's lower arms from his elbows down turn to smoke which he can independantly control however when they take a solid foir they will just fall making this quite un-advisable to do. This is usually used to cover the opponent's eyes while he attempts to kick them.

Bakudō # 4. Hainawa

Bakudo # 61. Rikujōkōrō

Bakudo # 62. Hyapporankan

 

Zanpakutou-

 

Name: Reaper

Release call: to smoke, reaper!

[spoiler=Shikai Appearance:] [spoiler=

 

 

Shikai Ability:

Shin no kemuri(True Smoke): Kiri becomes unable to be hit through Blunt Physical Force, transforming into smoke and dispersing being able to reform anywhere aslong as all the smoke can recombine. (used sparingly)

Kemuri saisu(Smoke Scythe): Kiri raises his scythes swinging them he turns his arms to smoke launching the Scythes towards his opponent with force.

Inpei kemuri(Hiding Smoke): Kiri turns mutiple parts of him to smoke which he uses to cover him while he moves out of sight or to a more strategic position.

[spoiler=Bankai Appearance:] [spoiler=

 

 

Bankai Ability:

Faiābōrusumōku(Fireball Smoke): launches a very small ball similar to fire covered in shadows.

Kemuri sutikku(Smoke Stick): launches out a thin wire which is sticky and quite strong turning one arm to shadow and hiding it while waiting for the opponent to step on it.

Kemuri terepōto(Smoke Teleport): uses Sonido to move at a high speed while turning to smoke before arriving at target location able to hide himself if he disperses the smoke to different areas quick enough.

[Magnet Soldier]

Magnet' date=' the Mist ability that you have is a bit too strong. Invulnerability is godlike. Make it vulnerable if found because that is probably the case. [b']Did you not read the ability. He cannot hit them back, so it just gives him the ability to escape without dying. But I will edit it so that he can only hold it for ten minutes.[/b]

Next, why ten thunderstorms? A single large one could hold that amount and ten is out of a users control. Making it Godlike, so please change. Ok, that one was a mistake.

Also your time frame says 10 minutes for one and 100 minutes for the other. Fix it. A) No it doesn't say 10 Minutes for one and 100 for another. It says ten each, and 100 all together.

Your two shikai attacks are too strong for Shikai. Making them Bankai would be more likely. Ok, that I'll change

For eternal sky of terror, blocking out the sun doesn't cause twilight. Slowing time causes that and that is not what your zanpakuto is based for. Fine, I'll take that out an put it so it just makes it dark.

Just because it feeds off of the Reiatsu in the area doesn't nullify a zanpakuto or attacks. It could weaken them, making them almost near useless, but doesn't make them useless. Again, these would need to go into bankai because of their power. Ok.

For Bankai, 8 more chakrams is a bit much. Maybe 4 more is likely. This is especially to the fact that you state you can summon even more. I'd say the max you could summon is 4 more because it would cost lost of reiatsu. Also everything would cost reiatsu to summon even if just a little. Ok, But I should be able to summon more. I'd say 6. Deal?

The Bankai's ability was stated outside of the spoiler so i don't see why you have two sections for it. For special attacks.

Also its ability for a bankai is kinda weak, it should be for shikai. So if you switch their abilities it would be good. I will post the special attacks in that spoiler, like I did for the Shikai.

Making these edits will most likely get you accepted. And just for thought, if he went to the Royal Guard, he wouldn't come back for captain. I said the Formor captain went to the Royal Guard, making Him captain.

 

I wish you would read my app Properly. Everyone just skims.

[Ultimate Assassin Ninjew]

Magnet' date=' the Mist ability that you have is a bit too strong. Invulnerability is godlike. Make it vulnerable if found because that is probably the case. [b']Did you not read the ability. He cannot hit them back, so it just gives him the ability to escape without dying. But I will edit it so that he can only hold it for ten minutes.[/b]

Next, why ten thunderstorms? A single large one could hold that amount and ten is out of a users control. Making it Godlike, so please change. Ok, that one was a mistake.

Also your time frame says 10 minutes for one and 100 minutes for the other. Fix it. A) No it doesn't say 10 Minutes for one and 100 for another. It says ten each, and 100 all together.

Your two shikai attacks are too strong for Shikai. Making them Bankai would be more likely. Ok, that I'll change

For eternal sky of terror, blocking out the sun doesn't cause twilight. Slowing time causes that and that is not what your zanpakuto is based for. Fine, I'll take that out an put it so it just makes it dark.

Just because it feeds off of the Reiatsu in the area doesn't nullify a zanpakuto or attacks. It could weaken them, making them almost near useless, but doesn't make them useless. Again, these would need to go into bankai because of their power. Ok.

For Bankai, 8 more chakrams is a bit much. Maybe 4 more is likely. This is especially to the fact that you state you can summon even more. I'd say the max you could summon is 4 more because it would cost lost of reiatsu. Also everything would cost reiatsu to summon even if just a little. Ok, But I should be able to summon more. I'd say 6. Deal?

The Bankai's ability was stated outside of the spoiler so i don't see why you have two sections for it. For special attacks.

Also its ability for a bankai is kinda weak, it should be for shikai. So if you switch their abilities it would be good. I will post the special attacks in that spoiler, like I did for the Shikai.

Making these edits will most likely get you accepted. And just for thought, if he went to the Royal Guard, he wouldn't come back for captain. I said the Formor captain went to the Royal Guard, making Him captain.

 

I wish you would read my app Properly. Everyone just skims.

 

Just so you know, bolding things sounds like yelling to me, so please refrain from doing so. Secondly, 6 you can summon. Also the time frame would be fixed when it became one cloud, so by me missing the 'each' part makes no difference now. Now, just because he cannot hit back in the mist doesn't make him invulnerable. Nothing is invulnerable, that is god like. A time frame is still good, but invulnerability is still impossible. Stating if found can be hurt is not god-like. if he isn't found then everything is fine. I'm also allowing the pass through walls and avoid detection so having vulnerability isn't a bad thing.

 

Name: Kiri

Age: 2' date=' 250

Gender: Male

[spoiler=Appearance:'] [spoiler=

 

 

Personality: Kiri is usually trying to speed who the meetings when held as he holds his hunger and want for battle high, usually trying to drag a battle out if his opponent is of similar or lower power.

History: Kiri had left the living at the Age of 12, death instantaneous from an Explosion right next to him. He had walked around the hollow hole slightly growing before he returned to his tree house, a chain holding him there as he de-formed into a Demi-Hollow Scaring any who entered the treehouse. He eventually finshed become a hollow after one had appeared in the nearby area, a Vasto-Lorde. Kiri had gone through to Hueco Mundo through the open Garganta which the Vasto-Lorde came through. Kiri had quickly attacked another hollow though weak he had somehow been able to overpower them, eating them immediately. Kiri had continue this process eating 100s more by killing them with a quick barrage of attacks taking them when they least suspected, most when they were feeding, then finishing off their prey. Within the usual amount of Years he had become a Gillian-Class Menos. His hollow mask had a pattern on it similar to black waves, this was recognised by most aas he continued to eat, his want to kill even more always taking him on to his next prey. he had than spent 35 more years eating hollows, before eventually becoming an Adjuchas' class hollow. He had a technique which (similar to Aaroniero) allowed him to absorb hollows, he did this however by pulling them inside the cloak where shadows covered them and they were absorbed. he had done this to most enemies when not hungry, absorbing not only their power but all their skills and appearance, all except for the ability to take their form. This had worked fine for him since he then used this as a way to gain power levelling that of a Vasto-Lorde actually then challenging the one that appeared that day when his hollowification completed. He used a mixture of attack styles, attacking with his own spped, other hollows strength and the claws od a Adjuchas-Class Pantera. it over came the Vasto Lorde who was absorbed. Kiri had since stayed within the nearby area. He had later been approached by the leader of the Espada becoming an Arrancar and joining him. his human-like form had gloves of it's Zanpakuto unlike most other Arrancar his Zanpakutou was not a tool of fighting. He had since been with the Espada having worked his way up to three, quite impatient for his next battle.

Espada #: 4

Powers and Abilities:

Sumōku(Smoke): Kiri transforms into a large group of dark smoke clearly visible and ble to be hit with a vareity opf attacks yet most physical attacks pass through. He cannot harm others int his form or be harmed but physical objects like walls impede his movement as usual.

Buraindo(Blind): Kiri's lower arms from his elbows down turn to smoke which he can independantly control however when they take a solid foir they will just fall making this quite un-advisable to do. This is usually used to cover the opponent's eyes while he attempts to kick them.

Kemuri kikku(Smoke Kick): Kiri turns his leg to smoke then when it returns to solid form halfway through his kick he implements it with either very slight fire of a small amount of water.

 

Resurrection-

 

Name: Reaper

Release call: to smoke, reaper!

[spoiler=Primera Resurrection Appearance:] [spoiler=

 

 

Primera Resurrection Ability:

Shin no kemuri(True Smoke): Kiri becomes unable to be hit through Blunt Physical Force, transforming into smoke and dispersing being able to reform anywhere aslong as all the smoke can recombine. (used sparingly)

Kemuri saisu(Smoke Scythe): Kiri raises his scythes swinging them he turns his arms to smoke launching the Scythes towards his opponent with force.

Inpei kemuri(Hiding Smoke): Kiri turns mutiple parts of him to smoke which he uses to cover him while he moves out of sight or to a more strategic position.

[spoiler=Segunda Resurrection Appearance:] [spoiler=

 

 

Segunda Resurrection Ability:

Faiābōrusumōku(Fireball Smoke): launches a very small ball similar to fire covered in shadows.

Kemuri sero(Smoke Cero): launches his cero turning to smoke quickly and covering the front of it hiding it from view so the opponent may not see it.

Kemuri sutikku(Smoke Stick): launches out a thin wire which is sticky and quite strong turning one arm to shadow and hiding it while waiting for the opponent to step on it.

Kemuri terepōto(Smoke Teleport): uses Sonido to move at a high speed while turning to smoke before arriving at target location able to hide himself and avoid sight.

 

(you don't mind if i use tekteks for my appearance do you? last time i checked on deviantart all the good pics were of real characters..)[i dont know bout the smoke bit is the invulnerable to physical force okay?]

 

How is smoke something a hollow would have control over? That's elemental or shinigami powers. Hollows are physcially changing creatures, thus why they evolve. You'll need to have physical changes rather then elemental changes or just become a shinigami and change the app format a bit.

[Magnet Soldier]

Fine then, you are the host. But what about if he can only use it when his Reiatsu is less than an eighth of his full reiatsu? The rest though, we now agree on, yes?

 

Oh and the bold is just to highlight what I said and to show something is of importance. If I bold an Exclamation mark, that is shouting.