Dizzy~ Posted April 2, 2010 Report Share Posted April 2, 2010 I currently need a title, so based on the first few chapters, PM me what your opinions are on the title. Please do not give me a title based on the Prologue, that basically just introduces the main characters. [spoiler=Prologue]"How about a battle?", Serina asked. "Or are you too chicken?" She was talking to her life-long friend, Dax. They were always found doing something together. "Bring it on!", Dax retorted. "I can take you, easy!" "Ok, but you asked for it. Empoleon, come on out!" "Go, Blaze!", Dax yelled. Blaze was Dax's Flareon he had evolved from when Bill gave him an Eevee in Goldenrod City. "Ha! A Fire-Type against a Water-Type? You're sure to lose!" "Don't underestimate him! C'mon let's get this battle going," He yelled. "Or are you too chicken?", He mocked. "Ok, Empoleon, use Metal Claw!" "Blaze, use Quick Attack and dodge it!" Blaze ran circles around Serina's Empoleon, making it dizzy. Then, Flareon attacked. Empoleon fell back, fainted. "No way! You beat my Empoleon! How can this be?", Serina said. "I told you not to underestimate him!", he shouted back. Serina pulled a pokeball from her belt. "Empoleon, return." With a flash of red light, she was back in her pokeball. "You deserve a good rest, we'll get more training in later.", She said disappointed. Dax pulled a pokeball from his belt, as well. "Blaze, return," He said. "You're getting stronger and stronger each day." If you have any ideas for a new character, or a new character catching a new pokemon, PM me and I'll consider it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yankee Posted April 2, 2010 Report Share Posted April 2, 2010 Description is a good tool. You should use it. Nothing about how the characters look, their age, pokemon stuff, all the works.I am dissapoint. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dizzy~ Posted April 2, 2010 Author Report Share Posted April 2, 2010 I only have the prologue done -_-". The pokemon you will eventually know, I'll include how they look, personal stuff and all that. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yankee Posted April 2, 2010 Report Share Posted April 2, 2010 Yea, but the prologue should have description too. Look at other threads here. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spartan919 Posted April 3, 2010 Report Share Posted April 3, 2010 They're right, the prologue needs more. Otherwise, it's pretty nice. You say you introduce the main characters, yet you barely do that. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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