Destiny's Intervention, Bittersweet Memories Act 1 Part 2 UP

[Kailyn Leona Kyosuke]

Well, its not so much a fan-fiction per se of anything in particular, but rather, a story. I'll be trying to update this as often as possible, but I'm limited by how long my math class actually lasts. xP

 

[spoiler= Destiny's Intervention]

 

[align=center]Act 1

Time is measured in moments, not minutes.

When the two paths Cross, a new bond is formed.

How long, I wonder; the paths will stay connected.

Each do know that eventually their intersection will...split...

 

Act 2

Infinite in memory, both shall live on:

Distance is no Harbinger of Separation,

for though no romance bound the companions together,

they hope in their hearts that they will meet again.

 

Act 3

One goes on a journey,

The other lives in the closed chapters.

For both, new pages are written to their tale,

each following where their lives have placed them

and pressing forward with naked desires in their hearts.

 

Act 4

As life's latest passage reaches its closure,

Time continues onward relentlessly.

One who chose to live anew, their flame of passion ablaze with

feelings of turmoil, despair, hope and love fill the somber morrow.

Their prelude is nearing it's end, building up for the silent chorus.

 

Act 5

The other shall shed tears from the yesterday,

and discover new challenges and new paths.

Both roads have forked, and only fate knows

weather those odysseys shall cross once more, or fade into nothingness.

 

Act 6

Even if the morrow is barren of promises,

the warm exchange remains engraved in their hearts.

The future is only open to those who prepared their door.

To change leaves uncertainty, to renew; to mature.[/align]

 

 

[spoiler= Bittersweet Memories - Act 1 - Part 1]

"Time is measured in moments, not minutes."

 

Two best friends were standing next to each other. One was crying, while the other stood, her head held high.

 

"I'm going to miss you Kailyn..." the teary one said.

 

"I'll miss you too Kiwo..." Kailyn replied.

 

It was a dark and rainy day, Kailyn was naturally equipped for the storm, with her usual rain coat made to look like an Akatsuki cloak straight out of Naruto. Water continued to drop relentlessly, soaking Kiwo's dark and stringy clothes. Their dark hair fell down as the damp atmosphere hung heavy with the depressing mood that lingered in the air.

 

"you will come back, right?" Kailyn asked.

 

"I'll try, but I can't guarantee anything." Kiwo answered.

 

A voice called out.

 

"Kiwo! Time for us to go! NOW!" Kiwo's mother came by, looking rather rushed.

 

"But mom-" Kiwo was cut off.

 

"No whining, I told you we had to go!" her mom yelled.

 

Kiwo pouted as she left Kailyn's side. Kailyn wanted to say something...but words escaped her.

 

"are you mad with me?" Kiwo's mother asked Kailyn.

 

"no, sometimes that's just how life is, no sense in getting upset."

 

"well, all I can say is I'm sorry." her mom said.

 

Kiwo shouted from the car, "I love you Kailyn! you're my best friend!" as her mom got in.

 

Kailyn bit back a stream of tears. "Don't miss us all too much..." She replied. The car drove off, and Kailyn was left standing in the rain. "At least nobody can see my tears..." she told herself. Memory after memory raced in her mind of the time she spent with Kiwo.

 

[spoiler= Act 1 - Part 2]

"When the two paths cross, a new bond is formed

- 5 Years Ago -

 

Kailyn was running across the track, struggling to complete the lap she was running. She started to slow down, and eventually came to a stop as she was passed by runner after runner. A girl wearing a red leader uniform passed by and stopped, extending her hand to Kailyn.

 

"Don't stop now, you can do it." she smiled.

 

Kailyn took the girl's hand and stood up.

 

"Thanks." She said.

 

"Well, I'd better keep running. Bye!" the girl said as she ran off. Kailyn tried to get her pace back, yet she couldn't help but wonder who that girl was. When class was dismissed, the girl walked right past Kailyn and smiled. Kailyn wanted to say something, but words escaped her. She made her retreat to her next class, where she might catch some shut eye.

 

- 7th Grade World History -

 

Kailyn's heart was beating faster than normal, and her face was red and flushed. "What is it I'm feeling?" she thought to herself. Her best friend Tana asked her "you OK hon?" in a concerned tone, contrasting her rather dark and heavy metal appearance. "we just ran the mile..." Kailyn panted.

 

"Is that really all though?" her friend Raye asked. His tone of voice made it sound like he'd been watching the whole time. There wasn't much to look at with him, but yet he had all the more to hide beneath his plain Joe look.

 

"ummm...." Kailyn couldn't get the words out. Her faced blushed furiously.

 

"Raye!" Tana scolded. "she's probably all worn out."

 

Kailyn nodded before setting her head down, and took a nap.

 

- After School -

 

The bell rang, and Kailyn lazily shuffled herself out of the classroom.

 

"mmmm....is it time for bed yet?" she mumbled to herself. She mindlessly walked forward without looking. Next thing she knew, she felt a bump.

 

"Oops! I'm sorry!" Kailyn apologized, now alert. The girl she bumped into turned and replied "It's OK," and then looked like she'd remembered something.

 

"Oh it's you! From the track!" she said.

 

Kailyn replied "Ah! I remember you! ...what was your name?"

 

"Kiwo. You?"

 

"Kailyn."

 

[DL]

...

 

Aside from some grammatical (mostly capitalization) errors, this is really...

 

not a story, per se, but...

 

it seems like it's shaping to be one.

 

A bit short, true...

 

But still, quite good.

 

Although I really don't feel anything for the characters thus far, as I haven't gotten to know them very well. (speaking in story terms, since I know you VERY well XD)

[Kailyn Leona Kyosuke]

BUMP

 

Update.

[DL]

Fair critique:

 

A little lack of imagery, but the dialogue is quite natural. Grammar is fine, for the most part.

 

My thoughts:

 

W-write more!

 

I'm interested to find out more.

[Kailyn Leona Kyosuke]

Thanks. I'll definitely work on making it longer...imagery I'm also going to work on...