Dr. Cakey Posted April 12, 2010 Report Share Posted April 12, 2010 By virtue of the fact that I am posting, this has passed my spelling/grammar check and my piece-of-crap check. That aside, the story has only just started rolling, so I can't comment much on how things are going, but I like it so far. I feel like there was something else I was going to say...but I don't know what...eerie... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DL Posted April 12, 2010 Author Report Share Posted April 12, 2010 Heh, I'm pretty good at grammar/spelling. ^.^ Thanks for reading. And yes, it is quite eerie, I know the feeling. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Make Posted April 12, 2010 Report Share Posted April 12, 2010 Well, it's better than attacking the Sand. Cuz my Sand would have pwned you...... -_- Anyways, good chap I suppose. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DL Posted April 12, 2010 Author Report Share Posted April 12, 2010 Well, if they had attacked the sand, then it would have turned out differently, as Takako would have had to fight Daisuke. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Make Posted April 12, 2010 Report Share Posted April 12, 2010 And he would have pwned, because he's from the Sand..... -_- Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DL Posted April 12, 2010 Author Report Share Posted April 12, 2010 It would be a good fight. Not to say they won't fight, not to say they will. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Make Posted April 12, 2010 Report Share Posted April 12, 2010 That would be funny, they're walking down a road and all of a sudden "I have to attack the Sand" *Awkward silence* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ultimate Assassin Ninjew Posted April 12, 2010 Report Share Posted April 12, 2010 Then i appear from underground grabbing his ankles and trapping his body in the ground and i leave him there. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DL Posted April 14, 2010 Author Report Share Posted April 14, 2010 Well, new chapter added. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ultimate Assassin Ninjew Posted April 14, 2010 Report Share Posted April 14, 2010 Another good chapter. Can't wait till the next. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DL Posted April 14, 2010 Author Report Share Posted April 14, 2010 The next will be, to quote Deidara, "A blast." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dr. Cakey Posted April 14, 2010 Report Share Posted April 14, 2010 I caught a typo! I am a genius. Right at the end you typed 'Daisuke' when I presume you meant Takako. Unless you're setting up some sort of quantum flux where the two occasionally switch places for seconds at a time and no one seems to notice. Because I would be totally cool with that. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DL Posted April 14, 2010 Author Report Share Posted April 14, 2010 heheh... Oops... :P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spirit of DMG Posted April 15, 2010 Report Share Posted April 15, 2010 Either way, I'm wondering when I come in. Unless I already have and just missed it because you mess with the names. Also, why do I think the shards will be a myth, or one will be found near Konohagakure? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DL Posted April 15, 2010 Author Report Share Posted April 15, 2010 No, you haven't come in yet. As for the shards.. you'll find out >.> Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Make Posted April 15, 2010 Report Share Posted April 15, 2010 Are you making me into some kind of peace-loving-killer like Nagato? Anyways, good chap I guess. But why would Kaori turn to Daisuke if it was Takako that was talking? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DL Posted April 15, 2010 Author Report Share Posted April 15, 2010 Well, you're seeing more and more of your character come out. Also... DARN >.< Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Neo Fusion Posted April 15, 2010 Report Share Posted April 15, 2010 howd i miss chapter 7?? anyway, interesting development, tho i dont know why mist wud send 2 ninja to attack konoha, theyr not Pain <.< (or ARE they?!)i kid, good stuff, but the title of chapter seven doesnt make sense to meEDIT: nvm, I read Trailing as "Training" my b Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DL Posted April 15, 2010 Author Report Share Posted April 15, 2010 Well, they're not pain, but... Well, you did hear Daisuke, right? Him and Sayuki are apparently the "invincible pair' Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Make Posted April 15, 2010 Report Share Posted April 15, 2010 And of course you're Daisuke, because you think you're a pimp.... -____- And DL, I hope hope that girl's ability doesn't have to do with her leaving her body or something. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DL Posted April 15, 2010 Author Report Share Posted April 15, 2010 No, I'm Daisuke because I can control water with my Kirigan. Anyway, does anyone here think the 'love' Sayuki has for Daisuke is, like, bad? Kinda like makes you think "Gosh, not this again..." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DL Posted April 17, 2010 Author Report Share Posted April 17, 2010 New chapter added, with the power of CHIBI! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Neo Fusion Posted April 17, 2010 Report Share Posted April 17, 2010 lotta action in this one, eh?Daisuke seems good in combat, Sayuki...well I'll reserve judgment until i see wat she can do Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DL Posted April 17, 2010 Author Report Share Posted April 17, 2010 Yep, lotsa action. It was fun to write. Anyway, I restate the question. Does anyone find Sayuki's clingyness to Daisuke annoying? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dranzer Posted April 17, 2010 Report Share Posted April 17, 2010 "Ok,who's next." that's what they all say untill a stronger apears. And leaf vilage meaning jk will be around soon. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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