El Make Posted July 13, 2010 Report Share Posted July 13, 2010 DL just wants to play with little girls, nuff' said. And Dra-man, Zeru wasn't acting... >:I Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dranzer Posted July 13, 2010 Report Share Posted July 13, 2010 He was obviously pretending he didn't know who the girl was. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DL Posted July 13, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 13, 2010 Waitwut? What are you talking about, Dranzer? >,> Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Make Posted July 14, 2010 Report Share Posted July 14, 2010 Psst, DL! Dra-man doesn't know he;s actually a Class-B moron. XD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NeoDemonX Posted July 14, 2010 Report Share Posted July 14, 2010 Man oh man I like this Naruto fanfic, also you are doing a great job man keep it up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spirit of DMG Posted July 14, 2010 Report Share Posted July 14, 2010 Of course, what would Sayuki do if she knew that daisuke was sticking his hands all over this girl and tearing her clothes off? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DL Posted July 14, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 14, 2010 DMG...go die >,> @LordDemonX - Thanks, I've worked hard on it. New chapter being added :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Make Posted July 14, 2010 Report Share Posted July 14, 2010 DL, for once DMG is sick in a way that I can agree with. >_______> And is it me or was your post consumed by teh NPG?______________________________________Onto the chapter: Of course, after disabling her breast growth you take away her mobility.... you're real nice. And I have a question, where the hell did Sayuki get those papers? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DL Posted July 14, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 14, 2010 Unimportant. Also, shut it, I told you, her breast growth may be is normal. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted July 14, 2010 Report Share Posted July 14, 2010 I thought you damaged her stomach >.>Unless Water Palm does that much extensive damageDL you're evil..DMG don't help visualize such scenarios.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DL Posted July 14, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 14, 2010 It does a LOT of internal damage. And Daisuke did it because he was like, afraid of the power he was sensing from Ami and the shard o,o Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Daybreak Posted July 14, 2010 Report Share Posted July 14, 2010 Just started to read this a couple things.1. Absolutely love the first two chapters an excellent start to a story.2. Main character has an excellent attitude and the girl is pretty cool.3. Love how he belives in the shard although none else does. This a great story so far YH :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Make Posted July 14, 2010 Report Share Posted July 14, 2010 DL, it is important how Sayuki got papers out of no where... >.> Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NeoDemonX Posted July 14, 2010 Report Share Posted July 14, 2010 Hmm Chapter 23 was good and can you explain why the girl can't walk anymore. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dranzer Posted July 14, 2010 Report Share Posted July 14, 2010 "Make me yours"...uh hu told you so... BTW care to explain how did uchiku suddenly get so overcrouded with useless people.I mean the girl from Kiri the one that didn't heal that was with Takako.Does she do nothing all day or something. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Make Posted July 14, 2010 Report Share Posted July 14, 2010 Are you talking about Kaori? However the eff you spell it... She's probably off.... doing something. Besides, the story focused on us, now it will probably shift to Fusion and peoples not us. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dranzer Posted July 14, 2010 Report Share Posted July 14, 2010 Is it me or is the story begging to realy fall apart. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DL Posted July 14, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 14, 2010 It'll shift to Takako and Kaori. @Daybreak - Thank you for you comments. Yes, I worked hard on character personalities, and stuff like that. And yes, very few people believe in the shards. @LordDemonX - It messed with her limbs and stuff. Real sciency/metaphysics stuff @El - She got the papers from her desk. @Dranzer - Ami got confused in her wording >,> Also, Kaori is awesome. Also, fall apart? It's jjust building up :/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dranzer Posted July 14, 2010 Report Share Posted July 14, 2010 Nope Daisuke just got them wrong.And realy you don't need to put minor characters in every chapter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Make Posted July 14, 2010 Report Share Posted July 14, 2010 Well, where'd the papers on her desk come from? >_______> Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DL Posted July 14, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 14, 2010 @El - pencil and mind. She wrote it for Daisuke.She didn't want to say it out loud. @Dranzer - Minor? :/ I'll decide who's minor and not, thank you. Ami is NOT a minor character Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dranzer Posted July 14, 2010 Report Share Posted July 14, 2010 I just noticed something.Why is the chapter STILL saying 22? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Make Posted July 14, 2010 Report Share Posted July 14, 2010 Dra-man, he has trouble with the title... >.> And DL, how is Ami not a minor character? The sooner that little breast growth limited girl is gone, the better. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DL Posted July 14, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 14, 2010 You don't know what I plan to do with them, huh? Ah, you'll see... Anyway, *goes to change title* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted July 15, 2010 Report Share Posted July 15, 2010 We haven't really seen what Kaori can do aside from throwing senbon, so I wouldn't think poorly of her combat-wise yet I'm looking forward to more Fuuta and Takako IMO Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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