Naruto Short Stories (I want breaking news on this)

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Well i posted this in another site but that site is broken so...I'll just post it here.All short stories from naruto.I know this sounds wierd but I request that twig does breaking news on this to see how I can approve.

 

[spoiler=Choji's Big Bite]"Now the time you have all been wating for,the ultimate eating contest will start in 10 minutes." The host said excitedly.

Choji stared at the giant men out there jumping on the tables and screamming out to the people like they were mad men.

 

Choji gulped and started to look sad. Ino came up to him and said "Choji don't be afraid I know you can win this,everybody is out in the croud supporting you." "Really" Choji said surprisingly as he walked straight and peaked threw the curtains.He saw Naruto,Shikamaru,Kiba,Hinta,Sakura,Lee,and all of his other friends were there chanting "Choji,Choji,Choji."

 

Choji walked back looking happier than ever.He kept saying to himself "I can do this,my friend are there all supporting me there.He got his luck napkin and had a confident smug on his face.Then the biggest guy he had ever seen in his life was standing infront of him.He looked at me and giggled "You think a little squirt like you can beat the world champion like me."Before I could answer he walked away while full of excitement.

 

If he thought that would keep me down then he was more stupid then I thought.I know that I will win because of my friends cheering me on down there so I don't have to worry about him.I walked down to the rule board and read it over.It said "The point of this contest is to eat the most amount of pork without a wash room break,vomitting,and other stuff like that."

 

Then the host started to talk again "Hello everybody again,its time for the contest to begin.All the contestents including me took a seat to the table.Then the wistle blow and we all rushed and ate threw.

 

_______________________1 hour later____________________________

 

Most contestent were on the floor,crying and whining about how much their stomaches hurt.But I was leaning on the table struggling to keep me going.I saw it was only me left and that big guy who made fun of me.I looked at the score it looked like:

Choji:82

Rizto:90

I saw there was only 2 minutes left and the champion was losing.I knew I could not win,I was stuffed.

 

But I heard in the crouds my friends voices saying "Choji almost there you can't give up now." I knew they were right so I picked up my chopsticks and tucked in my lucky napkin in my shirt and started to eat.The crowd was amaized on how fast I was eating.My score was rapeatedly going up but I saw Rizto's score was slowly going up too.

 

Choji:99

Rizto:99

We saw the score and both tryed our hardest to pick up the peice of meat.They both threw it up in the air and let it drop in their mouths.We both chewed rapidly but then I saw my friends and started to chew faster.

 

"This just in the time is up and the winner is...CHOJI."Said the host with a very high voice.Everybody in the crowed cheered and my friends were cheering rapidly in the stands.The host went up to me and handed me the first place trophee.I grabbed it from him and yelled "Thankyou,thankyou every on,...but I could not have done it with out my friends." With that choji gave a big smile to the crowd.

 

[Twig]

I'm flattered you asked for my review.

 

Twig breaking news!

 

[spoiler=Choji's Big Bite]

Bob: Hi everyone' date=' this is your favorite news channel, Twig Breaking News! I'm your anchor, Bob.

 

Steve: And I'm your co-anchor, Steve.[/color']

 

"Now the time you have all been wating for,the ultimate eating contest will start in 10 minutes." The host said excitedly.

Choji stared at the giant men out there jumping on the tables and screamming out to the people like they were mad men.

 

Bob: New reports are coming in saying that an "i" has been stolen from "waiting"! Meanwhile, the word "screaming" got caught holding an extra "m". Let's go to Sarah for People Talk.

 

Choji gulped and started to look sad. Ino came up to him and said "Choji don't be afraid I know you can win this,everybody is out in the croud supporting you." "Really" Choji said surprisingly as he walked straight and peaked threw the curtains.He saw Naruto,Shikamaru,Kiba,Hinta,Sakura,Lee,and all of his other friends were there chanting "Choji,Choji,Choji."

Sarah: I'm here at the Eating Contest. I interviewed a person, and he said Choji looked sad.

 

Bob: How sad was he? Can you describe his feelings more? What did he look like?

 

Sarah: Umm...well, that's all I can tell you. The person I interviewed didn't really say much...

 

Bob: Well okay then. The eating contest seems to be really crowded. There are a lot of people talking there, but there is just not enough space. People now have to talk in the same paragraphs, and there is no longer room for commas so everyone has to stick together.

 

Steve: That sounds terrible. Shocking news, the word "crowd" had just crashed his car with "ou". Now the word has become ugly. Here's a picture of him.

 

CROUD

 

As you can see, "ou" became part of "crowd" as "crowd" lost its "w".

 

 

Choji walked back looking happier than ever.He kept saying to himself "I can do this,my friend are there all supporting me there.He got his luck napkin and had a confident smug on his face.Then the biggest guy he had ever seen in his life was standing infront of him.He looked at me and giggled "You think a little squirt like you can beat the world champion like me."Before I could answer he walked away while full of excitement.

 

Bob: Well more news are coming in that the letter "s" from the word "friends" became lost in the crowd. The crowd is so big, that some periods and sentences have to stand shoulder to shoulder. Even the word "in" and the word "front" has to stick together. People still have to talk in the same paragraphs.

Sarah: Thank you Bob. News is developing that a new contestant appeared. His name is "I". He looks exactly like Choji. In fact, he even sounds like Choji! I'm getting the feeling that he's the same person.

 

If he thought that would keep me down then he was more stupid then I thought.I know that I will win because of my friends cheering me on down there so I don't have to worry about him.I walked down to the rule board and read it over.It said "The point of this contest is to eat the most amount of pork without a wash room break,vomitting,and other stuff like that."

 

Sarah: This mysterios "I', or new Choji as I like to call him, is still here. Meanwhile, Choji seems to have disappeared.

 

Bob: This is becoming a not so good eating contest. Sentences are running everywhere looking for commas. Without the commas, they are just run-ons. Also, the rules don't seem to be good either. The third rule confused many contestants and made them quit. It said, "and other stuff like that." People still don't know what that meant.

 

Then the host started to talk again "Hello everybody again,its time for the contest to begin.All the contestents including me took a seat to the table.Then the wistle blow and we all rushed and ate threw.

 

Steve: Bob, the contest is in choas. An "a" in contestants has been replace with "e" and an "h" disappeared in the word "whistle." The word blow seems to be doing what he's doing, but everyone is suppose to be past tense already. Also, the word "threw" was brought to jail for trying to impersonate the word "through."

 

_______________________1 hour later____________________________

 

Most contestent were on the floor,crying and whining about how much their stomaches hurt.But I was leaning on the table struggling to keep me going.I saw it was only me left and that big guy who made fun of me.I looked at the score it looked like:

Choji:82

Rizto:90

I saw there was only 2 minutes left and the champion was losing.I knew I could not win,I was stuffed.

Bob: The chaos is continuing here at the contest. The word "two" was killed by the number "2", an "e" sneaked in with the word "stomach", and the "a" in "contestants" is still missing.

 

But I heard in the crouds my friends voices saying "Choji almost there you can't give up now." I knew they were right so I picked up my chopsticks and tucked in my lucky napkin in my shirt and started to eat.The crowd was amaized on how fast I was eating.My score was rapeatedly going up but I saw Rizto's score was slowly going up too.

Steve: The word "crowds" is still in the hospital. He still looks like "crouds". Another letter sneaked into the contest without permission. This time, it's the letter "i" that sneaked in with "amazed".

 

Choji:99

Rizto:99

We saw the score and both tryed our hardest to pick up the peice of meat.They both threw it up in the air and let it drop in their mouths.We both chewed rapidly but then I saw my friends and started to chew faster.

 

"This just in the time is up and the winner is...CHOJI."Said the host with a very high voice.Everybody in the crowed cheered and my friends were cheering rapidly in the stands.The host went up to me and handed me the first place trophee.I grabbed it from him and yelled "Thankyou,thankyou every on,...but I could not have done it with out my friends." With that choji gave a big smile to the crowd.

 

Bob: Well that was certainly the worst contest ever. A few words have been injured and are now misspelled. These include the words "tried" and "piece". This is the end of Twig breaking News for tonight.

 

 

There's a few things I have to say.

I usually do Twig Breaking News in absolutely terrible fanfics since it's fun and easy. This one was a little harder since it wasn't terrible. Most of that Twig Breaking News was on grammar and punctuation, but I'd like to comment about the writing itself first.

 

It plot was basic, and it has been done several times. What I'm trying to say is that it was kinda boring. That's what I didn't like about it. You could have added something to make it more exciting. Also, you could have described the eating, the contest, the characters, and the setting more. One of the biggest errors was that somewhere in the beginning, you changed from third person to first person. You from saying Choji did this, Choji did that to I did this, I did that. Then there's the problem that it wasn't really a Naruto fanfic. I can change the character names and nobody would notice the difference.

 

If you didn't understand the Twig Breaking News very well, here's the basic grammar and punctuation review. Whenever a new person speaks, there should be a new paragraph. There were spacing errors and some misspelled words. That's about it.

[Kaisu]

What happened to the love for Weather Reports?

 

Twig, you've taken over.

 

WEATHER, BRING THE SEXY OLD TIMES BACK!

[Twig]

What happened to the love for Weather Reports?

 

Twig' date=' you've taken over.

 

WEATHER, BRING THE [s']SEXY[/s] OLD TIMES BACK!

 

I don't know...D=

Daily News used to do it. I used to do it, but I changed my style.

At least we have Supreme doing MySts.

[Kaisu]

No, Weather Report was the first and ultimate. Then eventually, Daily News started to do it, and I always did the odd Weather Report, and now, there's you!

 

(That exclamation mark isn't shouting, it's like a rise in pitch, happily, okay? Just to clear that up.)