Pichu Posted February 27, 2010 Author Report Share Posted February 27, 2010 not really if you put the 2 parts together. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Magnet Soldier Posted February 27, 2010 Report Share Posted February 27, 2010 It's alright but I agree with Kainine, too short. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pichu Posted February 27, 2010 Author Report Share Posted February 27, 2010 i know its short but CH2 P2 fousces around Piplup finding out bout everything Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Magnet Soldier Posted February 27, 2010 Report Share Posted February 27, 2010 Yeah, but you put up that picture of dawn crying. It dont explain that. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pichu Posted February 27, 2010 Author Report Share Posted February 27, 2010 ya i took that out Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kaisu Posted February 28, 2010 Report Share Posted February 28, 2010 Still, you could make it longer, add some suspense, etc. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Compass Posted February 28, 2010 Report Share Posted February 28, 2010 Okay, I'm going to start by pointing out the main things about this storyline and your writing style:1) Don't tell everybody what you're going to do! That spoils the fun of reading and finding out about Paul's affections!2)Chapter 2 is very short, causeing alot of chapter differenciation. Unless you're doing this for hype, I would ask you write more!3) This is excellent. The way you presented Piplup's overhearing Ashand Pikachu was a bit obvious, but the first chapter was exellent! I'm usually not a big fan of flashbacks, but you made it really good! Â Really, this is the best interpretation of Pokemon romance I've seen in a good long time...haven't seen one better! I will be revisting!9/10 stars for chapter shortness! (Seriously, that's all. I'm so mean.) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pichu Posted February 28, 2010 Author Report Share Posted February 28, 2010 THANKS! your going on this buddy list thingBTW: some chapters might be short. but a lot will be long Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Compass Posted February 28, 2010 Report Share Posted February 28, 2010 Okay, I can accept that, or at least I should!When will the next installation get here? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pichu Posted February 28, 2010 Author Report Share Posted February 28, 2010 Well Chapter 3 will have 3 parts.Misty is also in chapter 3!CH3P1 almost done! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Compass Posted February 28, 2010 Report Share Posted February 28, 2010 Huzzah! I'm interested to see what you come up with...By the by, like your avatar! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pichu Posted February 28, 2010 Author Report Share Posted February 28, 2010 thanks its Pichu who likes to FLY! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Compass Posted March 1, 2010 Report Share Posted March 1, 2010 Oh, wow...(Just realized they where googles, not really wierd ears.) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dream Posted March 1, 2010 Report Share Posted March 1, 2010 The last two parts of it were very...short. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Magnet Soldier Posted March 1, 2010 Report Share Posted March 1, 2010 Chapter three? If you have the time for small talk then. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bran2939 Posted March 2, 2010 Report Share Posted March 2, 2010 what has she got to tell misty!!!!!??? i ned to know! please post chap 3!!!i very,very,very,very,very,very like this soo far! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pichu Posted March 2, 2010 Author Report Share Posted March 2, 2010 glad you dobig stuff in ch 3like a new character Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bran2939 Posted March 4, 2010 Report Share Posted March 4, 2010 a new character?whowhowho? >. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Compass Posted March 4, 2010 Report Share Posted March 4, 2010 Where's the new chapter? Where? Where? Where? NOW! (Stamping foot like a child!) (Sarcasim^.^) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pichu Posted March 5, 2010 Author Report Share Posted March 5, 2010 almost done Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Compass Posted March 5, 2010 Report Share Posted March 5, 2010 Hurry! I'm excited...and working on a fanfic of my own...well, acually night walker's...heheheheh! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pichu Posted March 5, 2010 Author Report Share Posted March 5, 2010 ha hai will post CH3 P1 tomorrow Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Compass Posted March 6, 2010 Report Share Posted March 6, 2010 I'll hold you to that ^.^Waiting eagarly. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kaisu Posted March 6, 2010 Report Share Posted March 6, 2010 And it's 'tomorrow'.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bran2939 Posted March 7, 2010 Report Share Posted March 7, 2010 its 2 days after not tomorrow now....pleese make more! :'| Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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