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[Blake]

All I could help with is how to describe actions/do dialogue/etc.

[Twig]

All I could help with is how to describe actions/do dialogue/etc.

 

You can write something about that.

 

Club FF update: I'll finish chapter 3 soon, but after that, I'm doing some revising.

[Blake]

Then let me start with this-

 

Action tip #1: Use descriptive, and sometimes unorthodox, words to convey the action.

 

Dialogue tip #1: Capitalize at the beggining of every quote, regardless of if it's the start of a sentence.

[DL]

Example of the first one, please.

 

As I wonder what you mean by unorthodox...

[Blake]

As Zack meandered back to his home, he witnessed a cat grooming itself.

 

Stuff like that.

[DL]

I think it'd be better to say:

 

Zack walked back to his home. On the way, he turned. A cat groomed itself on the sidewalk as he passed by.

[Blake]

I'm saying don't always use plain terms. Using the same terms repeatedly gets boring.

 

I think it'd be better to say:

 

Zack walked back to his home. On the way' date=' he turned and saw a cat grooming itself on the sidewalk as he passed by.

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That's better

[DL]

Don't filter thought through an observing concience.

 

It lessens the impact.

Such as

 

"Lily turned, and saw two snakes rolling around each other."

 

It's better to say

 

"Lily turned. Two snakes rolled around each other."

[Blake]

But making it two sentences makes it too long. You are not supposed to make short sentenes like that, EXCEPT for Dramatic impact.

[DL]

Still, you can stretch it.

 

Lina heard a noise and turned. Two snakes rolled around each other, each with bared fangs and intent to kill.

[Blake]

I was giving a short example, not an elaborate one. I'm just saying that words like Meander are more fun to read/write than Walk.

[DL]

Ooh, ooh, Darklink's writing tip #22 "Try avoiding using advanced diction, unless a character is saying it, and only to reveal something about the character, such as that he/she's a scholar."

 

 

At least, that's what my writing teacher said.

 

NOTE:

 

It doesn't mean to use the simples language in the world, but nothing like

 

"The feline meandered through the pasture."

 

When

 

"The cat crawled through the grass."

 

Works just as well.

[Blake]

But that's not interesting. I don't mean always say unorthodox words, just use regular word not AS often.

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Hey guys! Sorry I havent been on, but for some reason, I couldn't get on YCM earlier today...

 

Anyways, I'm on my phone, so I can't post it, but I'm pretty much done with the Lit. Device Guide. I'll post it when I can.

[DL]

It should be between advanced and simple diction.

 

Because no one wants to read

 

"The cat walked through the grass."

 

Crawled is a better verb, simply.

 

Choosing more exciting verbs is better than choosing more advanced diction.

[Deustodo]

Well, in my opinion, I think the writer should do what he think it is better, if he think thats describing every damn thing that the cat did while he is on the grass, it is up to him.

[DL]

Again, I loled.

 

But the WAY he describes it DOES matter.

[Deustodo]

If his grammar is correct, and the sentence make sense.

[DL]

Yes, it's fine.

 

 

But fine isn't enough to get published.

 

You have to be better than the average mass.

[Deustodo]

Then how could Twilight be published?

[DL]

Because it was a fluke.

 

And people thought it would sell.

 

And it did.

 

But GOSH, it was... well, not really well-received.

[Deustodo]

I think we got a topic:

Discuss about Twilight:

This picture reveal my opinion:

[spoiler=]

[DL]

HAHAHHAHA XD

 

Wow, that... makes sense O.o

[Deustodo]

Now, about the topic.

I didn't read Twilight, but just the movie made half of my brain die. Thankfully, It revived.

[Blake]

I died from even knowing it existed D=