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[Twig]

Name: Leonard

Age&Gender: 14' date=' M

Power: Blade Handling - The ability to create melee weapons at will. This can include axes, swords, daggers, spears, etc. etc. Using this ability too much in a fight can backfire, however, and make the user weak as a newborn chick's neck. No magical weapons can be made in this process, only normal ones. One of the ones that Leonard uses the most is the knife, which can be thrown at high-speeds, to damage from afar, or to cut thing from afar.

Personality: Leonard has a calm personality. However, if one thing comes up about his mom or dad, everybody around him can be considered dead...

Appearance: Leonard has blond hair(dumb blond lol), with brown eyes, and a pale skin tone. His blue shirt and red pants are strange, as if color-swapped. His white shoes, and white socks match his personality.

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I don't know... This power is kinda weird. Making weapons appear out of nowhere is not best power.

 

 

By the way, I have half of chapter 1 done. Woohoo?

[Sploda]

Woohoo....

 

I wanna read.

[Twig]

I want to finish the whole chapter first though...

[Blake]

Woohoo....

 

I wanna read.

 

HEy bub, Darkness Incarnate is my job. Not yours.

 

Anyways, be patient.

[Sploda]

I was Darkness Incarnate long before you were my boy.

 

Try like since the beginning of everything.

[Blake]

Riiiiiight, that' makes since. I'm Black, baby! Evil since before the dawn of time, and then some! Your a creator, not evil.

[Sploda]

Before you can destroy you must Create.

 

I create things for the purpose of destrying them.

 

I create things to achieve perfection, no matter the cost.

 

Also I never said anything about evil, I just said Darkness. You can be evil all you want.

[Blake]

DArkness and Evil are nigh one and the same.

[Sploda]

Not quite.

 

Darkness is just Darkness, shadows on the wall. Darkness is the weapon of choice for Ninjas and assassins. Evil is a ideal, Darkness is a reality.

 

While they may go hand in hand they are not one in the same.

[Scatty]

My character isn't pure evil' date=' his power just claims something in return. No one said he liked murdering people to keep living, he just values his own life enough to do it ;)

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He still creeps me to death. Will I seriously have to work with you in the end?

My guy can switch sides at any time.

 

Just to suit himself.

 

So I can't call him good OR evil' date=' TBH.

 

He's morally grey.

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Same here. I work for who pays more.

Not quite.

 

Darkness is just Darkness' date=' shadows on the wall. Darkness is the weapon of choice for Ninjas and assassins. Evil is a ideal, Darkness is a reality.

 

While they may go hand in hand they are not one in the same.

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Because Angels of Darkness look awesome.

[iCherry]

DArkness and Evil are nigh one and the same.

 

No. They're not.

 

@Vers:

"I work for who pays more."

Great. Yet another one of these characters. Not criticizing or anything, I've just seen this too much.

[Master Red]

My character isn't pure evil' date=' his power just claims something in return. No one said he liked murdering people to keep living, he just values his own life enough to do it ;)

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He still creeps me to death. Will I seriously have to work with you in the end?

Well, *brushes imaginary dust of shoulders* I guess my work is done then :)

IDK if you'll have to work with him *shrugs* I just wanted to make a character with an interesting power (and also have a power that needs something in return from him)

[Scatty]

DArkness and Evil are nigh one and the same.

 

No. They're not.

 

@Vers:

"I work for who pays more."

Great. Yet another one of these characters. Not criticizing or anything' date=' I've just seen this too much.

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As cliche as it may sound, that kind of attitude simply MAKES SENSE. Sorry if I'm too traditional for you, but I'm simply too nihilistic to give my character a greater purpose.

My character isn't pure evil' date=' his power just claims something in return. No one said he liked murdering people to keep living, he just values his own life enough to do it ;)

[/quote']

 

He still creeps me to death. Will I seriously have to work with you in the end?

Well, *brushes imaginary dust of shoulders* I guess my work is done then :)

IDK if you'll have to work with him *shrugs* I just wanted to make a character with an interesting power (and also have a power that needs something in return from him)

But why people? Why not sheep?

[DL]

Simplicity isn't bad. Just look at MY character.

 

His simple moral, basically is "Be on the side most likely to win"

[Scatty]

Simplicity isn't bad. Just look at MY character.

 

His simple moral' date=' basically is "Be on the side most likely to win"

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Thanks for the support. But that's actually another stereotype.

 

Even if a side is losing, I will still aid them if they pay me more than the supposed winners. (and then, if the situation looks really bad, simply take the money and run. Coming to think about it, I am not exactly neutral for that matter).

 

My simple moral basically is "Do any damn thing you want as long as you got nothing to lose other than a finger/100 people that help you, because nihilism is cool."

[DL]

Exactly why I said simplicity.

 

My character has no high morals.

 

He just does things to his advantage.

 

But, just because a character does cliche things, the skill is to do it and make it look non-cliche.

[Twig]

[spoiler=I give you, Chapter 1!]

A brown haired boy about the age of fourteen was running for his life. As he ran, he used his powers to make the branches behind him form a wall. He also used the rose bushes to spread thorns everywhere.

 

A shining light shaped like an arrow flew past just one inch above his head! He was sure some of his hair was burnt. The boy tried to make better walls to avoid more close calls.

 

Suddenly, he was yanked back. He thought the hunters had caught him, but fortunately, it was just a branch. It caught a part of his brown shirt. As the boy struggled to free himself, more light arrows flew past him. Soon, he heard the hunters’ voices. There was no way to run.

 

“I can’t run, but I can hide,” the boy said.

 

He quickly made the branches surrounding him cover him up. Just as he was finished covering himself up, the hunters moved in. The boy made tiny holes for his eyes to see.

 

All the hunters wore black clothes. They had simple T-Shirts and simple pants. Around their waists were belts carrying all sort of devices designed to kill. In their hands were Automatic Light Blasters. The gun used solar energy from the sun to shoot arrow-shaped light beams. He knew the leader of the group was the one with the big white N in his shirt, but he didn’t know what the N stood for. The leader was in his twenties and had spiky white hair.

 

“Find the boy!” the leader screamed, “I wan him dead now!”

 

It was hilarious to see the leader covered in splinters and thorns. He almost laughed.

 

Once he was sure the hunters were gone, he let himself out of the tree. Anothersuccessful escape. The boy was tired and hungry. He was usually chased three times a day, but today, he was chased five times.

 

He earing his stomach rumble, he started to walk to his favorite apple tree. He decided to take a different route since the hunters went to the usual road he always went to.

 

 

 

Yuki would’ve shrieked when the mysterious boy fell in, but luckily he was in his male form. Apparently, changing your gender also means changing your personality, or at least part of it.

 

He was all alone in the secret hideout. Leonard was out looking for dinner, and Nicholas was…somewhere. Yuki didn’t know where he went, but Nicholas always went out on his own without saying a word.

 

When a boy fell through the hidden entrance of their hideout, he thought it was Leonard. He wondered how Leonard found food so fast. As the dust made by the fall cleared, he realized it wasn’t Leonard.

 

Yuki quickly prepared for combat.

 

 

 

The boy was sure there wasn’t a hole in the ground, but he fell into something. Whatever it is, it had to be a trap. Did the hunters finally catch him?

 

The fall had broken his thin legs. It was hard to get back up, but he forced himself anyways.He looked around. It was some sort of tunnel. It didn’t look like a trap…

 

Out of no where, a person jumped on him and put him on a headlock. This is a trap!

 

He knew there were trees around, so there had to be roots. While the person choked him, he tried the best he could to get the roots here as fast as possible.

 

 

 

Changing gender wasn’t a strong power, but at least Yuki knew how to fight. He was choking the mysterious boy to death. In a few minutes, this boy will be dead.

 

The boy’s face was already purple when moving roots constricted him like a snake. The roots were thin and small, but there were so many of them. They kept multiplying until his whole body, except for his head, was covered and wrapped with roots.

 

“What is this?! Get me out of here! How’d you do that?!” Yuki screamed.

 

“You don’t look like a hunter to me…” the boy said.

 

“What are you talking about?”

 

 

 

Comment, criticize, and or edit away!

[Blake]

I like it so far. I also like how you shifted views. Still, I think you need something to signify a change in POV, like a book has.

[DL]

I must say, it could have ben written better.

 

There was a lot of tell that could have been chopped off.

 

There was a "!" when there could easily have been a "."

 

Although, overrall, I like it.

[Twig]

I like it so far. I also like how you shifted views. Still' date=' I think you need something to signify a change in POV, like a book has.

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Like a line or something?

 

I must say' date=' it could have ben written better.

 

There was a lot of tell that could have been chopped off.

 

There was a "!" when there could easily have been a "."

 

Although, overrall, I like it.

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No edits? I might do rewrites later.

[Blake]

Not a whole line, but a little insignia, or a small line (Like what seperates the Sig and the Post)

[Twig]

Not a whole line' date=' but a little insignia, or a small line (Like what seperates the Sig and the Post)

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I know the perfect thing. ☾ It's kinda small though...

[Blake]

Then post a couple with spaces between,

[DL]

[spoiler=I give you' date= Chapter 1!]

A brown haired boy about the age of fourteen ran, and kept on running. As he ran, the branches behind him began to form a wall. The rose bushes also spread thorns everywhere.

 

A shining light shaped like an arrow flew past just one inch above his head. He was sure some of his hair was burnt. The boy made the branches form thicker walls.

 

Suddenly, he was yanked back. He thought the hunters had caught him, but fortunately, it was just a branch. It caught a part of his brown shirt. As the boy struggled to free himself, more light arrows flew past him. Soon, he heard voices.

 

“I can’t run, but I can hide,” the boy muttered.

 

He quickly made the branches surrounding him into a covering. Just as he finished, the hunters moved in. The boy created tiny holes to peek out of.

 

All the hunters wore black clothes. They had T-Shirts and pants. Around their waists were belts carrying assorted devices. In their hands were Automatic Light Blasters. The gun used solar energy from the sun to shoot arrow-shaped light beams. He knew the leader of the group was the one with the big white N in his shirt, but he didn’t know what the N stood for. The leader looked to be in his twenties and had spiky white hair.

 

“Find the boy!” the leader screamed, “I wan him dead now!”

 

The boy almost laughed at the sight of the leader covered in splinters and thorns, but managed to stifle it before a fit of chuckles revealed where he hid.

 

Once he was sure the hunters were gone, he let himself out of the tree. Another successful escape. The boy groaned, tired and hungry. He was usually chased three times a day, but today, the hunters made it five.

 

Hearing his stomach rumble, he started to walk to an apple tree. He decided to take a different route since the hunters had his usual road under surveillance.

 

 

 

Yuki would’ve shrieked when the mysterious boy fell in, but luckily he was in his male form.

 

He was all alone in the secret hideout. Leonard was out looking for dinner, and Nicholas was…somewhere. Yuki didn’t know where he went, but Nicholas always went out on his own without saying a word.

 

When a boy fell through the hidden entrance of their hideout, he thought it was Leonard. He wondered how Leonard found food so fast. As the dust made by the fall cleared, he realized it wasn’t Leonard.

 

Yuki stiffened and positioned his body, ready to fight.

 

 

 

The boy was sure there wasn’t a hole in the ground, but he fell into something. Whatever it is, it had to be a trap. Did the hunters finally catch him?

 

The fall had hurt his legs. It was hard to get back up, but he managed to stand on his two feet. He looked around. It was some sort of tunnel. It didn’t look like a trap.

 

Out of no where, a person jumped on him and put him on a headlock.

 

He knew there were trees around, so there had to be roots. While the person choked him, he tried the best he could to get the roots to where he was.

 

 

 

Changing gender wasn’t a 'combat' type of power, but at least Yuki knew how to fight. As he choked the mysterious boy to death, he knew it would be over in a few minutes.

 

The boy’s face was already purple when moving roots constricted Yuki like a snake. The roots were thin and small, but there were so many of them. They sorrounded him until his whole body, except for his head, was covered and wrapped with roots.

 

“What is this? Get me out of here! How’d you do that?” Yuki asked, surprised.

 

“You don’t look like a hunter to me…” the boy said.

 

“What are you talking about?”

 

 

 

Comment, criticize, and or edit away!

 

There you have it, a Darklink edit.

[Twig]

[spoiler=I give you' date= Chapter 1!]

A brown haired boy about the age of fourteen ran, and kept on running. As he ran, the branches behind him began to form a wall. The rose bushes also spread thorns everywhere.

 

A shining light shaped like an arrow flew past just one inch above his head. He was sure some of his hair was burnt. The boy made the branches form thicker walls.

 

Suddenly, he was yanked back. He thought the hunters had caught him, but fortunately, it was just a branch. It caught a part of his brown shirt. As the boy struggled to free himself, more light arrows flew past him. Soon, he heard voices.

 

“I can’t run, but I can hide,” the boy muttered.

 

He quickly made the branches surrounding him into a covering. Just as he finished, the hunters moved in. The boy created tiny holes to peek out of.

 

All the hunters wore black clothes. They had T-Shirts and pants. Around their waists were belts carrying assorted devices. In their hands were Automatic Light Blasters. The gun used solar energy from the sun to shoot arrow-shaped light beams. He knew the leader of the group was the one with the big white N in his shirt, but he didn’t know what the N stood for. The leader looked to be in his twenties and had spiky white hair.

 

“Find the boy!” the leader screamed, “I want him dead now!”

 

The boy almost laughed at the sight of the leader covered in splinters and thorns, but managed to stifle it before a fit of chuckles revealed where he hid.

 

Once he was sure the hunters were gone, he let himself out of the tree. Another successful escape. The boy groaned, tired and hungry. He was usually chased three times a day, but today, the hunters made it five.

 

Hearing his stomach rumble, he started to walk to an apple tree. He decided to take a different route since the hunters had his usual road under surveillance.

 

 

 

Yuki would’ve shrieked when the mysterious boy fell in, but luckily he was in his male form.

 

He was all alone in the secret hideout. Leonard was out looking for dinner, and Nicholas was…somewhere. Yuki didn’t know where he went, but Nicholas always went out on his own without saying a word.

 

When a boy fell through the hidden entrance of their hideout, he thought it was Leonard. He wondered how Leonard found food so fast. As the dust made by the fall cleared, he realized it wasn’t Leonard.

 

Yuki stiffened and positioned his body, ready to fight.

 

 

 

The boy was sure there wasn’t a hole in the ground, but he fell into something. Whatever it is, it had to be a trap. Did the hunters finally catch him?

 

The fall had hurt his legs. It was hard to get back up, but he managed to stand on his two feet. He looked around. It was some sort of tunnel. It didn’t look like a trap.

 

Out of no where, a person jumped on him and put him on a headlock.

 

He knew there were trees around, so there had to be roots. While the person choked him, he tried the best he could to get the roots to where he was.

 

 

 

Changing gender wasn’t a 'combat' type of power, but at least Yuki knew how to fight. As he choked the mysterious boy to death, he knew it would be over in a few minutes.

 

The boy’s face was already purple when moving roots constricted Yuki like a snake. The roots were thin and small, but there were so many of them. They sorrounded him until his whole body, except for his head, was covered and wrapped with roots.

 

“What is this? Get me out of here! How’d you do that?” Yuki asked, surprised.

 

“You don’t look like a hunter to me…” the boy said.

 

“What are you talking about?”

 

 

 

Comment, criticize, and or edit away!

 

There you have it, a Darklink edit.

 

The super writer has done it again. Thank you.