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@DL

Actually I'm not going to read anymore of your fan-fic DL as it is to much like Bleach and the old DBZ, as it has to much filler and not enough story. So to occupy my time I'm going to write a better version of the Fake Type Knights.

 

EDIT: Look here is the first chapter.

 

[spoiler=Fake Type War - Chapter 1]For Fifteen years I’ve watched the Masses follow the corrupt Government. For Fifteen years I’ve been an outcast. But no longer! No longer will I hide in the shadows! No longer will I tremble in fear of the Government’s forces! I! I will change the future! These are the thoughts that coursed through the eighteen year old looking vampire that stood before a large, looming castle. It had been ten years since he had been to this castle, it was here that everything had started and ended. It was here that everything would begin again.

 

The young vampire was actually over a thousand years old, but due to his longevity he appeared to be eighteen. His blond hair was just long enough to cover the upper part of his eyes, and his eyes were a demonic green. He had a slim but muscular build which belied his true strength. The only other noticeable thing was the gleaming Adamintium blade that hung by his waist.

 

The vampire then pushed the large doors open with a resounding creak. As he entered he looked upon a throne made of pure gold with trimmings of shining silver. It was marvelous.

 

“Yes, here, here I shall destroy this corrupt world and then create it anew!” The vampire said, with his voice echoing throughout the castle.

 

“Shi, Shi, it would seem that I have stumbled across something big. What is someone so young doing out here so late in the day I wonder, hmm?” came a calm, yet slightly maddening voice from somewhere in the shadows.

 

The young vampire whirled around his hand flying straight to his blade, ready to unseath it and do battle. “Who are you?” The vampire yelled into the nothingness in front of him.

 

Then a young man with a mad look in his eye, standing six foot three, and surrounded by a dark aura appeared behind him. “Shi, Shi, your blade will have no affect on me young one. Besides you have no need to be alarmed, I overheard you.”

 

As the vampire watched him, still in a combat ready stance, the being circled around him still talking. “We share a common goal, you and I. We both wish to see the corrupt tossed aside. We both wish to bring about a new world. I can help you, together we can create an army the likes which hasn’t been seen for a millennium!”

 

The vampire smiled. “You can call me, DMG.”

 

“The mysterious figure grinned a devilish grin. “I am known as Deustodo.”

 

 

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Goody Creator, so when do you get to the part where you, Deus, and DL decide to betray everyone for a club that lasted a month or so?

 

That was my favorite part.

 

 

Either way the ff is good but seems to much like DL's, plus Deus doesn't seem to care about anything than looking cool, certainly not overthorwing corruption.

 

That is simply kettle meet pot.

 

@Aqua: I've read allot better, no story in it at all, a romance anything is more than slap on erotica.

 

So even in the romance genre that is really, really bad.

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Then why does he say he wants to take down a corrupt government?

 

And even with the same topic, you both have the castle and everything.

 

Was there a prolouge rp or something with this?

 

And maybe you should start somewhere different then, when the Fake Type Knights are alreaddy formed, so the first chapters aren't so typical.

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Well it was either a castle or in the basement of a tavern. I went with the less common one.

 

And no there wasn't an RP, but that does sound like an almost good idea.

 

Just trust me on this Nexev, I'll post a link to the thread as soon as I make it. I'll have at least three if not four chapters for you to read by then.

 

And I'll dedicate an entire chapter to backstories if you would like Nexev. Oh and by the way you will be showing up in chapter seven and not be totally forgotten.

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http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/thread-173611-page-2.html

please read the last coment thats the new page one I'm taking it over.

Ina' date=' eyes burst open, she whiped her eyes,her shadow went back to normal at her feet,

she walked back to Anthony, even though she stoped her eyes looked tired and red eyes

"I..I won't get in your way, I'm just going to Ignore her, so please treat her well...."

Ina said, she began to walk away.

((Que, happy moment))

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Anthony rolled his eyes and grabbed Ina's wrist. "Will you just hold up a minute." He said much more harshly than he ment. "Look....I'm sorry alright. It's just...It's always been me and Sam....And I don't like the idea of sharing." He began fidigiting' date=' feeling very uncomfortable. "Besides, Sam wouldn't like it if you weren't here....She always talked about having a sibling here. She's the only one who didn't.....I guess I'll just have to get used to the fact that she wont have to lean on me all the time, and maybe...." He cleared his throat, "Maybe....We could be...Uh...You know friends....."

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I has a Writers block I'm sorta stuck what should I respond with?

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I wrote this, you might wanna look at it.

 

[spoiler=The Computer]

I sat in my chair, leaning back to prop my feet on the bookshelf. I grab the mouse with my right hand; my left poised over the keyboard, ready to pounce on it’s lettered prey. I opened Firefox, typed in an address and with a single click I entered my domain.

 

That was at least my hope, but hopes are like fresh apples from a tall tree, sometimes you simply can’t reach them.

 

My Kingdom was sick; a suffering city that refused to back down, to acknowledge it had been harmed. Many times it stood strong, the streets bustling with activity.

 

However… often a dark cloud descends, in fear the streets are emptied within seconds as its citizens, its members fled to hide in there homes, fleeing to that world, that boring stuck up world were expectations rule everything, like boring black robed illuminati’s.

 

And that cloud must have descended now, I was forbidden to enter the land I belonged, banished to the realm that can only claim the same thing.

 

I sighed, I was forced to play along with realities whims. reality was really a bit of a a jerk. But since there was no way to leave I might as well play along.

 

It was many long hours until I dared to try again, time I spent in realms of other’s design. The cloud was stubborn, a trait I knew too well, it would remain as long as it could. However it wasn’t all-powerful, it had fled by the time I reattempted my voyage. As such I was at long last united with my people, my land.

 

I eagerly traveled to the many social clubs I was in. I amused myself by participating in their conversations. I made a few jokes and went to the drama club to see how my play was progressing. My fellow actors were happily discussing their plans for the play. Reassured I quietly exited the stage as I made m way to the question box. See this wasn’t my kingdom in that I ruled it, this land is ruled only by the gods themselves. This kingdom is my kingdom much like America is your country; it’s where we live, where we thrive. As a citizen I must therefore have a job. My job is to provide answers and present ideas for others to use. I could be called mad scientist of sorts, making ludicrous thoughts into comprehensible and useful alternatives. AS I did my job the sky grew dark, and the cloud descended once more.

 

I swore as I was once again forcibly removed from my nation, however this cloud cannot stop me for long.

 

I will be back and one day, I’ll find a way to make that malevolent mass of condensation fear my name.

 

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@Creator - You made DMG a guy, so what? it's basically mine all over again. -_- Also, I haven't had a filler since ch 100. I DID say I was going to go straight into story after that.

 

You're gonna miss out on all the epicnes I have planned D:

 

At least keep reading mine, if I'll read yours D:

 

 

@Aqua - No idea but yes, not posting mature stuff when a super mod tells you to is probably a good idea. Although I like reading it :D

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Why is the goverment corrupt anyway?

 

Sure FD did lock us but Icy supports fake types.

 

And they never really bothered me anyway.

 

Isn't it the public opinion that's bad here?

 

I don't know' date=' not really any other large force to combat. Honestly I think FD is a great guy, just going with what I have to work with Nexev.

 

@Creator - You made DMG a guy, so what? it's basically mine all over again. -_- Also, I haven't had a filler since ch 100. I DID say I was going to go straight into story after that.

 

You're gonna miss out on all the epicnes I have planned D:

 

At least keep reading mine, if I'll read yours D:

 

 

@Aqua - No idea but yes, not posting mature stuff when a super mod tells you to is probably a good idea. Although I like reading it :D

 

Fine I'll read if you read mine, but mine won't be like yours, mine will be a lot more face paced and shrorter as I won't take long to get into the war. Also mine will contain elements required to lead up to my YCM club War Fan-fic.

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Username: JechtTM (Um' date=' better off just actually looking at my username)

 

Favorite Books/Books Currently Reading: None. I'm a writer, not a reader.

 

Writing Example: War Is Life (Check signature)

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Accepted. Welcome. ^^

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Username: JechtTM (Um' date=' better off just actually looking at my username)

 

Favorite Books/Books Currently Reading: None. I'm a writer, not a reader.

 

Writing Example: War Is Life (Check signature)

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Accepted. Welcome. ^^

 

Yay ^^

 

Jecht' date=' you could just copy/paste it, you know. lol

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Yeah but the story is kinda long .....

 

Speaking of which, can I get a review for it?

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Not the story' date=' teh name xD. I'll review it in due time. In the meantime, care to check mine out? No need to join the site, when I tried to get the link, the site had me signed out, and I could still read it:

 

http://storywrite.com/story/456582

 

 

 

 

BTW, this is Kira ;D

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Kira? =(

 

Oh wait ..... umm ........ the pedobear guy? =D

 

I read some of your story. You, seem, to, be, using, too, many, apostrophes.

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Not the story' date=' teh name xD. I'll review it in due time. In the meantime, care to check mine out? No need to join the site, when I tried to get the link, the site had me signed out, and I could still read it:

 

http://storywrite.com/story/456582

 

 

 

 

BTW, this is Kira ;D

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Kira? =(

 

Oh wait ..... umm ........ the pedobear guy? =D

 

I read some of your story. You, seem, to, be, using, too, many, apostrophes.

 

Those are commas and you use them to tell for a pause in a long sentence. And I was never pedobear. In SCGC

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