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[Kaisu]

So. As some of you may know, this computer doesn't have MS word, so this is a test of my spelling, punctuation, etc.

 

You might have played a game from a Pokemon's perspective.

You might have played a game from a Human's perspective.

 

Here, we will see the life of a pokemon, a human, and the bond they share. Pokemon, in two POVs. Pokemon, in two perspectives. Pokemon, in screw this, let's just start now.

 

[spoiler=Prolouge]For a Pokemon, there are several unwritten rules.

 

1.Don't reveal the location of our towns and hideouts.

2.Don't be defeated.

3.Don't get caught.

4.Stay away from humans.

5.Don't eat Oren Berries.

 

This is my tale. I'm a small Squirtle, one year old. I'm not a great attacker, but I have a good aim and I can take hits well. My mother always tells me not to get into fights, but sometimes, it's unavoidable. And, sometimes, even I end up eating a Oren Berry by mistake. I mean, they look exactly the same as a Oran Berry. You can't really blame me.

 

I still knew that I should run away from humans. I still don't get how they're so tall... My mother's bigger than them though. And then, Mr. Charizard's even bigger than mother, and then... I don't actually know a pokemon that's much bigger than Mr. Charizard, actually. Hmm.. Maybe I'm thinking too much. I need to go to sleep. I pulled a seed out of my bag, and bit into it. Soon, nothing happened. Then I realised what happened. I pulled another one out and ate it. I soon became drowsy and fell asleep.

 

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Everyone has some unwritten rules. especially trainers.

 

1.Don't reveal where your secert base is.

2.Don't get defeated, by another trainer or a pokemon.

3.Don't try and steal pokemon.

4.Get your Gym Badges.

5.Treat your pokemon well.

6.If you don't have any pokemon, don't go into the tall grass. Or go swimming in deep water.

 

This is my tale. I'm a young boy, ten years old. I'm going to become a trainer, but as of the moment, I don't have any pokemon. Or any pokeballs. I've always been the timid kind, and I'm scared about what would happen if a pokemon jumped out at me. Well, the Bidoof family aren't that bad, but the Starly... They can be pretty vicous.

 

I always wondered why pokemon were so small, or so huge. It's one or the other. My father's pokemon really scare me. They're so big and vicous. Rhyperior always stomping about, and his Blastroise is so big... And his Blaziken's always... Glaring. It's a bit unnerving, to be honest. And the Gyms.. I bet they're gonna be full of that kind of pokemon. I really need to get to sleep. I pulled up my covers over my head, and soon I fell asleep.

 

Pokemon. Humans. However different, both have kind hearts inside. They have lived alongside each other for some time, but there are many secrets and mysteries between each other. Pokemon, they have cities, towns, all over the world that the humans don't know about. They have worlds, full of things that humans wouldn't dream of. The humans occupy half the planet, and there is a natural boundary between the two worlds. No one has gotten through, wether it was a pokemon or a human. No one knows exactly what it is like. Sattelites, boats, cameras, binoculars... Only the eye can see what is truly out there.

 

[spoiler=Chapter 1]

Squirtle

 

I awoke early the next morning, my leaf and stick bed damp as always. My mother and I lived in the wettest part of this cave, where there was a large lake. There, we lived on rafts with a gap in the center. It was marked with a front room that was shaped like a Squirtle head with Wartortle ears, and a Blastroise shell. All the houses in the area were marked in a similar way.

 

I lived with my mother and my sister. My sister was four years old, and she had evolved into a Wartortle, so she was much stronger than me. I knew this because we had fought once, and I lost in a couple turns. I was aching all over then. I climbed out and jumped into the crisp water. It was ice cold, and woke me up at once. Our rooms were just parts of the raft, and you got around by swimming, which was a problem for my best friend, Charmander. You see, the flame on the end of their tails are extremly importent, and the hotter the flame, the healthier they were. If the fire goes out, it could kill them. That's why we made small boats that could travel through the 'hallways'.

 

Charmander was visiting today, along with Piplup. Piplup and Charmander waved as I stood on the outside area of my raft. I swam towards them, and Piplup breathed out several bubbles. I swam behind the raft and started to push it towards my raft hosue. The raft bumped into my house and my friends jumped onto the raft. I joined them, sitting down in the main room. We had a bowl of Gummis in betweem us, and I chewed on a Blue Gummi. Charmander and I gasped as Piplup pulled out a Wonder Map.

 

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Piplup

 

"Heheh. This is my dad's map. It's really cool." I explained as I showed the Wonder Map to Squirtle and Charmander. They're two of my best friends, and we were playing at Squirtle's house. We had a bowl of Gummis between us, and we were all chewing on them. Every pokemon likes Gummis. I've never met a pokemon that doesn't. Squirtle and Charmander were shocked, their jaws dropped.

 

"You... You didn't steal that did you?" Charmander asked, slightly scared.

 

"Of course not! Heheh. Why would I do something like that?" I laughed. I had a pink scarf around my neck, which was the main thing that set me apart from the others. "My dad said that I could show it to you guys, as long as I'm careful. But, as long as I can get it back, it's all fine, heheh. Watch." I said, and I waddled over to the edge of the raft that was Squirtle's house, the Wonder Map in my hand. They watched anxiously. I dropped the map into the water.

 

"W-w-w-w-WHAT?" Charmander exclaimed, shocked at what I had done.

 

"It's fine, heheh." I giggled, and I flipped into the water. The water was clear as always. I had to hand it to the many other pokemon for that. I quickly swam down and picked up the Wonder Map. I started rocketing up, and I exited the water with a big splash. I landed onto the raft. "See? It's fine, not a blotch, heheh."

 

I was right. The Wonder Map was a strange thing. It could only be damaged if the owner wanted it to. My Papa had told me that. Another thing about a Wonder Map was that if a new area was discovered or explored, the clouds that were over it would part. It was pretty cool. "So what should we do today? I want to go outside and train." I told them, and their eyes widened.

 

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Charmander

 

Piplup was insane. First he threw a Wonder Map into the lake, then he tells us we should go outside and train. Outside of the cave. As the oldest here, I decided to take charge.

 

"You're being silly. You know we can't go outside. Not out there." I told him. He really was insane.

 

I was a Charmander, and the flame on my tale was pretty hot and it was getting bigger, meaning I was going to evolve sometime soon. I was excited about that. Every Pokemon is excited about evolving. It's thrilling. You get stronger, bigger, and it's so cool. Also, you can always start to fight those bullies, and teach them a lesson. They are always picking on us kids.

 

Piplup was prone to argue about going.

 

"Why not?" He asked, standing up to face me. "We can go whenever we want, we just need to be careful!" He argued.

 

"It's crazy. If you want to go out so much, just go out by yourself!" Squirtle half-shouted at him.

 

"Fine. Maybe I will." Piplup replied, and he turned his back and stormed out of the raft, and he dived into the water.

 

"You think he'll go?" Squirtle asked me, worried.

 

"I hoped not.." I replied, also worried.

 

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Ryan

 

I woke up early the next morning. I clambered out of my bed, hitting my alarm clock's button, even though it had already rung. I walked down the stairs into the living room. My mother was awake as always, cooking. I jumped onto the couch and turned on the TV with the remote.

 

"Dad's on TV again." I said. My dad was pretty famous. That's why we live in a Villa in the residential area of the Elite Zone. The pokemon in this area are really scary. And, they're extremly strong. My dad can fight them off easily, but I cant. THat's my porblem. I can't. He was doing the legue challenge again. The champion had gotten to him last time. Before he left, he told me that when I was ready, I would meet him in the Champion Room, and that I was going to win. I don't think I will ever do that though. I'm scared of Pokemon.

 

THen I saw the ad.

 

"The Pokemon Breeders Association - We now have many different Pokemon eggs, but we have so much that we can't take care of them all. We are sending lots to official Pokemon Day Cares, Trainer and POkemon Fan Clubs, and the many POkemon Labs around the place. Also, at the Pokemon Breeders Association Buildings, we will be handing out eggs, as will the many other places we sent eggs to. The eggs of the rarest pokemon, will be giving to the winner of a contest. This contest will include Poffin Making, Bicycle Racing, Pokemon Battles, and many more. However, only three eggs will be given to one person at the max. So, help us, and help yourself! Get your Pokemon Eggs today!"

 

The ad ended. I supposed that egg's weren't that scary. And once it hatched, I wouldn't be so scared of thwe pokemon.

I decided to go.

 

"Mum!" i calle,d hoping she would give me a ride.

 

"Meet me at the aivary at 9:30." She replied. I flinched. THe aivary... There were many scary pokemon there... I guess I'll have to face my fears.

 

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Next POV - Coming Soon...

 

[spoiler=Chapter 2]Ryan

 

I ate a microwave dinner for breakfast, which was ironic in my opinion. After wiping my face of gravy, and put on my jacket and headed out. The weather was getting steadily getting hotter, but it was still cold in the mornings.

 

My mother was waiting for me outside the entrance to the aviery, a large glass dome with a forest and lake enviroment. It was a great place to catch, train and play with bird Pokemon. My mother, her hair like a Starapter's top hair, was wearing her usual costume of a black jacket and white shirt with jeans. Her skin was quite pale, and she was stroking her Starapter's chin. I stopped and slowly approached, my eyes locked on the pokemon. My mother turned and smiled.

 

"Hop on kid." She said, smiling. I gulped as she lifted me onto his back.

 

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Piplup

 

I stormed out of the room. They were wimps. All I wanted to do was play explorers. I'll show them.

I dived into the water and swam back to the land. I ran to the center tree, were we could exit our underground world. I snuck in and ran on the steps carved in the trunk of the large tree. They spiraled up to several exits of varying sizes. I jumped out a hole, into the sunlight outside. It was so bright... After spending so much time in the dark underground, it was going to be difficult to get used to. I shielded my eyes as as stumbled around the forest undergrowth.

 

The light kept me going. It was reminder that I was on an adventure. I would return with something from the outside, and that'll show those wimps.

 

"Awwww... Aren't you cute?" A loud voice behind me asked. I turned to find a medium-sized human leaning over me. Startled, I ran, crying. "Hey! Get back here!" The human shouted and started to chase after me. I had no idea where to go. Just... Away.

 

"Jack!" The human shouted and soon a larger human blocked my path, a net in it's hands. The net closed around me. I sat down, defeated. I was captured.

 

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Jane

 

"Thanks." I said to Jack, who was wondering why the pokemon didn't try to break free. It was just... Sitting there... I crouched down and looked down at him. "Aww.. Aren't you the cutest little Piplup?" I cooed but the Piplup start to run, and tripped up on the wooden part of the net, landing in the actual net-y part. I put a open Pokeball down next to Piplup, and Jack slowing lifted the net. We blocked Piplup's path, so he would have no option but to go into the pokeball. It didn't move at all. I picked Piplup up and dropped him into the pokeball. The ball closed... There was no shaking, and the pokeball confirmed a caputure. Jack and I exchanged glances and we were mystified.

 

"That's one strange pokemon." Jack laughed.

 

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Squirtle

 

I was fretting. Big time. Piplup had been gone for much longer than he should have. He was either hiding or he was still outside. Either way, he would be in big trouble. We couldn't tell anyone he was outside either, as then we'd just get in trouble. I was lying on my bed, spinning around on my shell. Piplup was my best friend, and I really didn't want him to get in trouble, but I didn't want him to be captured by a human either. I decided to hold a meeting.

 

"Chikorita, Charmander, Flaafy. You guys know what's happened right? Piplup's stormed off to the outside, and for all we know, he's been captured. So, we are going to go on a quick mission. We go out, find Piplup and bring him back here." I said, pacing around the small room. This was in one of the small caves around the town area, and it was one that we used as a clubhouse. Chikorita and Charmander were worried, but Flaafy, as always, was ready for anything. When Flaafy stood beside me, ready to go, I had to to something to get the others to tag along. "So you're not coming? Alright then, if we get captured, I thought that you guys could help free us. We're much stronger together you know. And Sandslash said that he'd tag along after he finished his work. Well, bye then." I said, my hoping it would work. I marched out of the cave, Flaafy close behind, and soon Sandslash joined us after he finished a tunnel. By then Chikorita and Charmander were chasing after us.

 

"Alright, we'll come." They said, breathless.

 

"Good." I said happily and we made our way to the Main Tree and began to take the stairs. We poked our heads out a hole, peering. It was really bright, blindingly bright. Chikorita had bailed as we were climbing the tree. "Aaaaaaalright then!" I shouted enthusiasticly. "Let's go squad!" I shouted and I jumped out the tree, Charmander, Flaafy and Sandslash following soon after. We steered towards a bush, landing in it. Our mission had begun...

 

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[spoiler=Chapter 3]Ryan

 

I felt the wind rushing past me as I hugged my mother, my eyes scrunched up as we moved over the sea. I yelped at the cry of a Wingull, nearly falling off Staraptor. It was.. Horrible. It took about half an hour, and when we finnaly landed I toppled over, and I had to rebalance myself as I stumbled towards the Pokemon Breeder's Association Center, marked with a large pokeball with the decal of an egg, with 'PBAC' writting on it in large red letters. Glad to finnaly be off Staraptor, I ran into the building, pushing the glass doors open as I looked around. There were breeders at stations all over, with eggs on the many stations. Many people were taking eggs and happily walking out. I went over to look at an egg, brightly covered in odd triangles, and I gazed at it until the top cracked and flew off, with a small face under the shell, feet appearing under the egg as it stumbled.

 

"To. Ge. Pi. Togeeepii!" It squeled happily as it walked across a desk. I had fallen to the ground in fright, and I was catching my breath as I went to a station. An egg was pushed into my arms as I wandered off, dazed, to another station where I got another egg, then I was given another egg as I collasped on a sofa, dropping the eggs onto my lap.

 

They were suprisingly light and warm with a strange tingle about them, especially a blue egg I got with a black top and small white dots. It was basicly buzzing.

 

"Hello."

 

I jumped, startled, much to the amusement of many others in the room. I gave a sheepish laugh as I collected my eggs and exited. My mother had brought a bag to carry my eggs, and I put my eggs down to retreive the bag.

 

I turned and placed two eggs in, one tan with a red pattern on the top, the other a strange purple colour, and I was about to put the blue egg in when I heard the voice again.

 

"Hello, ma-"

 

The voice was cut off as I jumped back startled. I picked the egg up and was about to place it carefully in the bag when I heard that voice again.

 

"There's no need to be startled."

 

I put the egg down and waited for the voice. No voice. I placed my hands on the egg and I began to hear the voice again.

 

"As I said, no need to be startled.."

 

"I.. I can hear it when I'm touching the egg.." I muttered.

 

"Of course, I'm in the egg."

 

"Wait, what? How? But? You.." I spluttered, hardly beleiving anything.

 

"I don't know. I normally can't do this." The egg replied.

 

"What do you mean, normally?" I asked it.

 

"Well, I can relay emotions, but with you.. I can freely speak.. It's strange." The egg answered.

 

"Hey, what pokemon are you?"

 

"I'm not sure.. Rula... It's foggy, even for me.. This egg... This egg is binding me!" The egg shouted.

 

Suprised at it's sudden anger, I removed my hand, and closed the bag. My mother came out of the center.

 

"All set kiddo?" She asked cheerfully and I nodded, waiting for her to get onto Staraptor as I put the bag on my bag. I made sure the special egg was near my hand though, so I could talk. I hugged the pokemon with my legs, and I placed one hand on the egg.

 

"I.. This is going to be hard.." I said sadly.

 

"Don't worry. It's pretty comfy in here though.." The egg replied. I laughed. This wasn't going to be so hard..

 

I nested my head on the pokemon's soft tail. I didn't care, it was so warm and fluffy.. Only if the pokemon got angry and I fell off, I would.. I didn't get time to finish my train of thought as Staraptor soared into the air, the wing lashing my face.

 

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Sandslash

 

We were marching through the light-flooded bush. Everything was so.. small. Apart from the trees. The trees were larger than ever. Squirtle was leading us through, a confident expression on his face. We heard voices, and we jumped into a bush, peering out.

 

We found two giant figures, tall and skinny walking along, laughing, a net and a small red and whtie ball in one of their hands. They were saying something loudly, though I couldn't understand what they were saying. I heard the name 'Piplup' and we looked around at each other before leaping out of the bush.

 

It was a whirlwind of attacks as I torpedoed into the ground by one of the giant's legs, with Charmander spinning around in a vortex of fire, Squirtle firing large bubbles that were popped by Flaafy's thunderbolts. I jumped out of the ground and leapt for the ball, crashing into the ground and the ball splitting in half as I did so. Behind me, the giants were astonished as they batted away the others, until one of them pulled out several of these red and white balls before throwing them, unleashing a Mightyena, Pidgeot and Sableye. They lashed out at the others untill Flaafy struck the Pidgeot with a supercharged thunderbolt as Squirtle was washing it down with a jet of water bursting from his mouth. Sableye was swiping at Charmander, who was dodging. I was safe until Mightyene found me. Snarling, it dashed forward and sunk it's teeth into my body.

 

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Next POV - Piplup

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

[spoiler=Special Episodes]This is a new addition to this story. Basicly, it's like a special story that has nothing to do with the plot. Isn't that great?

 

Squirtle-------------------------------------------------------------------Special Episode 1 - Where do Eggs come from?

 

I was playing with Piplup, Charmander, Chikorita and Happiny again.

 

"You know... I always wondered where eggs came from." Happiny said as she thoughtfully bite a Gummi. We had a bag of food that my dad had brought for us from the outside between us.

 

"Hey, don't eat all the gummies!" Chikorita whined. She quickly pulled a Green Gummi out of the bag and gulp it down.

"Well, I dunno. Heh, why do you wonder anyway?" Pilup said with his mouth full of Oran Berries, Apples and a Gummi.

"Eww.. That's disgusting." Chikorita said in disgust.

"Well, I always wanted an egg in my pouch." Happiny admitted dreamily.

 

"Apparently I was hatched from one." Charmander said.

"Duh, we all were. Heh, even I know that." Piplup said. Charmander withdrew himself slightly.

"We should ask around. I'm sure someone knows." I told them. Happiny nodded approvingly.

"They'll think we're wierdo's though." Chikorita whined again.

"Stop whining." Charmander told Chikorita. She 'humph-ed' and glared at him.

 

"We should ask Alakazam first. He's the smartest person in this place!" I told everyone. Soon we were on our way. When we finnaly got there, we asked him our question.

 

"Mr. Alakazam sir." Charmander started.

"Well, we were wondering... Heheh..." Piplup continued.

"If you might just know..." I added.

"How I can evolve!" Chikorita suddenly shouted, and we all glared at her.

"What we came here to ask was..." Charmander started again.

"Where do eggs come from?" Happiny asked airily.

 

We all waited as Alakazam pondered on our question. He opened his mouth to speak...

 

'Where do Eggs come From?' Part One(2) - Finished

 

Happiny-------------------------------------------------------------------Special Episode 1 - Where do Eggs come From?

 

I held my breath as I waited for Alakazam to answer.

 

"I see you are interested in Eggs. Of course, you are expected to be at your age." He spoke. I know that Alakazam's all smart and wise and stuff, but sometimes he can speak a load of gobble-gook.

 

"Waddaya mean?" I asked him.

 

"Evolution." He said simply.

 

Evolution... It was any pokemon's dream. A new form, new powers, new strength... I was a breathtaking thing. I still didn't exactly get what Alakazam meant, but he read my mind or something like that.

 

"I mean that Happiny, when they get to your age, they begin to become fascinated by eggs." He explained.

 

"What does fasin-" I began to asked before Alakazam cut me off.

 

"It is natural you are interest, as an Egg is something Happiny needs to evolve. Only a few things can provide a Happiny with such happiness. An Egg is one of them." He continued.

 

"Aah..." I breathed.

 

"Your mother always carries an Egg with her for a reason. It is the most special thing in the world to her. Without it, she would.. Anyway, back to the original question. I have dozed off, and I will say one thing. Your family know mroe about eggs than I do." He concluded. We all stood up, thanked him and we walked off.

 

"What should we do now?" I asked the others.

 

"I'm hungry." Chikorita whined.

"Let's play battle!" Squirtle said enthusiasticly.

"Let's play adventure!" Charmander suggested.

 

After this, Charmander and Squirtle went off to play adventure, and Chikorita went back home to eat. I began to walk back home.

 

"-It is the most special thing in the world for her. Without-" Did that mean that mother cared more about that Egg than me? But then again, Eggs are a wonderful thing. I'm sure I'd feel the same way if I had an Egg. I thought about this on the way home, and my train of thought lead to one conclusion. I would ask my mother, and then collect more information.

 

The questions didn't go really well. At the end, she pushed me out of the house. I ended up playing with Chikorita, and when I went to bed, I decided on one thing.

 

I would head out and find an Egg. I was much stronger than Charmander, and I was much older than them. Soon I would have to go out to begin the dangerous jobs anyway. Why not head out early?

 

Later the next day, I had my bag packed, with everyone waving me off.

 

"Bye Happiny! Bring us back your Egg!" Charmander, Squirtle, Chikorita, Alakazam, my mother, and all the rest chorused as I began to walk up the steps. My eyes watering, I jumped out the hole. I would return as a Chansy, just like my mother. I would have an Egg, and I would make everyone proud.

 

This was a new start.

 

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Ugh. I hate POV stories, but I'm enjoying myself with this. So, do you want more? Rate, Hate, or maybe not do that last option...

[.:Abarai Renji:.]

Nice story here, KaiNine ^-^

 

Really like the POV idea.

[Kaisu]

Woah. That was fast. Anyways, thanks. I'm usally really bad with POVs, but with this, it might turn out alright.

 

Also, the prolouge's a bit short, sorry about that peoples.. :|

[.:Abarai Renji:.]

IT's ok, Prologues ca be short sometimes. ;D

 

Can't wait for the next chapter.

[Kaisu]

I'm thinking it up as I go along so...

Right now, I'm collecting images for a banner :D

[Twig]

It's official. January is National PokeFanfic Month.

 

 

I like it. Love seeing the Pokemons' perspective. Can't wait to see more.

[Kaisu]

Thanks. I'm going for a 'young child' veiw for the Pokemon. Thanks for post. As for the PokeFanFic Month thing, on YCM, I've only seen about 3 FFs...

[Twig]

I counted. There are six and they were all made this month.

[Kaisu]

Woah. Heh, guess it is. Anyways, I've finished the first chapter.

[Weather Report - Stand]

I like it so far, though I think it would be cooler if they weren't all named "Charmander the Charmander" or "Magikarp the Magikarp". I don't have much tiem to discuss what I think, but I'll get on it tomorrow, as I have to turn off my computer now.

[Kaisu]

Well, on the Mystery Dungeon games and the anime it's all Charmander the Charmander, etc.

 

But eventually, they'll get nicknames, so... It's only temporary.

[Kaisu]

Bumpz?

 

Anyways, I'm getting a bit slow on updating, but yeah. I'll get to it sometime later today..

[Mr.WHAM]

I actually like it...Its an ineteresting read though Ryan should do a little more...

[Kaisu]

[spoiler=As you may have guessed, he's the main char., but he has a fear of Pokemon, and it doesn't help that]his dad's in the Elite Four, with some of the most vicous-looking pokemon.

 

 

I will say that there will be another human main character, and Piplup and Squirtle will also be mains.

[Mr.WHAM]

Cough givie him squitle & charmander.

[Kaisu]

I've got something planned for Squirtle and Ryan. You can guess if you read carefully..

[Kaisu]

GOOD NEWS EVERYONE!

 

Chapter 2 - Part 2 IS UP!

 

ALSO, NEW FEATURE - SPECIAL EPISODES!!!

 

Special Episodes are more stories, from the perspective of several characters, but those stories have nothing to do with the plot! Isn't that great?

 

WE ARE ON Special Episode 1 - Part 1(2)

 

GOOD NEWS! I'LL BE UPDATING MORE FREQUENTLY NOW!!

 

And that's enough Caps.

 

 

Read, rate, hate, but maybe not do that last option.

[Kaisu]

Bumpz...?

 

I should be updating 'Where do Eggs come From?' later today.

[Mr.WHAM]

More suspnse who the heck is Jack...and this human!! ARRR. I like it lol

[Kaisu]

Heh, thanks. Jack is a minor character, so he'll be gone by Chapter 15..

 

Also, I've got a Sequel planned ALREADY.

It will take place after Chapter 30-45?

 

If you want a sneak peak, PM me.

[Mr.WHAM]

lol the fact that you have a sequel planned and 15 chapter just goes to shpow your enjoying this

[Kaisu]

If I start a story, within a day, I have a lot of major stuff in my head. Only problem, how the heck am I going to get to that state?

 

Anyways, the next POV should be up later today..

 

Edit - Finished already!

[Weather Report - Stand]

Yo, I promised to do this an ETERNITY AGO, but there's no time better than the present, and I apologize. HEEEEEERE'S A WEATHER REPORT!!!

[spoiler=Chapter 1]

Squirtle

 

I awoke early the next morning' date=' my leaf and stick bed damp as always. My mother and I lived in the wettest part of this cave, where there was a large lake. There, we lived on rafts with a gap in the center. It was marked with a front room that was shaped like a Squirtle head with Wartortle ears, and a Blastroise shell. All the houses in the area were marked in a similar way.

 

Well, I certainly get the vibe that this is a young kid telling a story, and his basic description. Good so far, but the Mystery Dungeon-esque houses are still dumb. This had better be a joke... because if it's not... I'll be okay with it.

 

I lived with my mother and my sister. My sister was four years old, and she had evolved into a Wartortle, so she was much stronger than me. I knew this because we had fought once, and I lost in a couple turns. I was aching all over then. I climbed out and jumped into the crisp water. It was ice cold, and woke me up at once. Our rooms were just parts of the raft, and you got around by swimming, which was a problem for my best friend, Charmander. You see, the flame on the end of their tails are extremly importent, and the hotter the flame, the healthier they were. If the fire goes out, it could kill them. That's why we made small boats that could travel through the 'hallways'.

 

Hmm, so it takes basically nothing to evolve? She needs backstory, that sister, because it (apparently) takes an immense amount of effort to evolve. She could have a cool backstory! Just imagine it... or not. But I think it's funny that even pokes fight in turns. It's chivalrous, but still kinda dumb, since one guy attacks, and the other likely dodges... well, I'll wait and see what you can do with that. Also you misspelled "extremely" and "important", which is acceptable due to your handicap.

 

Charmander was visiting today, along with Piplup. Piplup and Charmander waved as I stood on the outside area of my raft. I swam towards them, and Piplup breathed out several bubbles. I swam behind the raft and started to push it towards my raft hosue. The raft bumped into my house and my friends jumped onto the raft. I joined them, sitting down in the main room. We had a bowl of Gummis in betweem us, and I chewed on a Blue Gummi. Charmander and I gasped as Piplup pulled out a Wonder Map.

His intensely wimpy description really gives m the impact of a three year-old! You got it spot-on. It also reminds me of several authors here, but that's another story. So yeah, he eats a gummi, which is a funny name for a snack, and everything's good. What could POSSIBLY go wrong?

 

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Piplup

 

"Heheh. This is my dad's map. It's really cool." I explained as I showed the Wonder Map to Squirtle and Charmander. They're two of my best friends, and we were playing at Squirtle's house. We had a bowl of Gummis between us, and we were all chewing on them. Every pokemon likes Gummis. I've never met a pokemon that doesn't. Squirtle and Charmander were shocked, their jaws dropped.

 

Well, the redundancy of 'we had a bowl of gummis between us' being repeated dulled the experience slightly, but we get to see a story upgrade! Also, what age is THIS dude?

 

"You... You didn't steal that did you?" Charmander asked, slightly scared.

 

"Of course not! Heheh. Why would I do something like that?" I laughed. I had a pink scarf around my neck, which was the main thing that set me apart from the others. "My dad said that I could show it to you guys, as long as I'm careful. But, as long as I can get it back, it's all fine, heheh. Watch." I said, and I waddled over to the edge of the raft that was Squirtle's house, the Wonder Map in my hand. They watched anxiously. I dropped the map into the water.

 

This dude's a real man, with that pink scarf. It's cool, like having a real name! Like Kokie! And then he dropped the map into the water? What could POSSIBLE go wrong?

 

"W-w-w-w-WHAT?" Charmander exclaimed, shocked at what I had done.

 

This guy's funny. By the way, why would his parents let him walk around in a watery cave-grave? Did he... SNEAK OUT?!?! Nah, pokemoms are really confident in their children.

 

"It's fine, heheh." I giggled, and I flipped into the water. The water was clear as always. I had to hand it to the many other pokemon for that. I quickly swam down and picked up the Wonder Map. I started rocketing up, and I exited the water with a big splash. I landed onto the raft. "See? It's fine, not a blotch, heheh."

 

The Piplup POV is just good enough to guess he's 8-10 or so, am I right? He has that certain snarkiness and sarcasm, but also full of child-like whimsy! Just like a stereotypical shone hero. Luckily, he's not even the main character! YAY!!

 

I was right. The Wonder Map was a strange thing. It could only be damaged if the owner wanted it to. My Papa had told me that. Another thing about a Wonder Map was that if a new area was discovered or explored, the clouds that were over it would part. It was pretty cool. "So what should we do today? I want to go outside and train." I told them, and their eyes widened.

 

So the map's... connected to... your SOUL?! Or heart? Or mind? Cool, but impractical. I'd accept "it's laminated', though.

 

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Charmander

 

Piplup was insane. First he threw a Wonder Map into the lake, then he tells us we should go outside and train. Outside of the cave. As the oldest here, I decided to take charge.

 

Heh, the cautious elder (or so I think).

 

"You're being silly. You know we can't go outside. Not out there." I told him. He really was insane.

 

He's... he's INSANE X2!!

 

I was a Charmander, and the flame on my tale was pretty hot and it was getting bigger, meaning I was going to evolve sometime soon. I was excited about that. Every Pokemon is excited about evolving. It's thrilling. You get stronger, bigger, and it's so cool. Also, you can always start to fight those bullies, and teach them a lesson. They are always picking on us kids.

 

But what happens when the BULLIES evolve? Are you just screwed, then? Did the Wartortle evolve due to bully-hatred? Is SHE a bully? Is she just crazy awesome enough to evolve so fast? WHY AM I ASKING SO MANY QUESTIONS?!?!

 

Piplup was prone to argue about going.

 

"Why not?" He asked, standing up to face me. "We can go whenever we want, we just need to be careful!" He argued.

 

"It's crazy. If you want to go out so much, just go out by yourself!" Squirtle half-shouted at him.

 

"Fine. Maybe I will." Piplup replied, and he turned his back and stormed out of the raft, and he dived into the water.

 

"You think he'll go?" Squirtle asked me, worried.

 

"I hoped not.." I replied, also worried.

 

TO BE CONTINUED... I hope the Piplup dies! Just kidding...? Well, it's a good thing that the story isn't bad, I just don't feel scared for this Pippy yet.

 

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Ryan

 

I woke up early the next morning. I clambered out of my bed, hitting my alarm clock's button, even though it had already rung. I walked down the stairs into the living room. My mother was awake as always, cooking. I jumped onto the couch and turned on the TV with the remote.

 

I bet he has a normal house! And his parent doesn't have any outstanding bodily traits!

 

"Dad's on TV again." I said. My dad was pretty famous. That's why we live in a Villa in the residential area of the Elite Zone. The pokemon in this area are really scary. And, they're extremly strong. My dad can fight them off easily, but I cant. THat's my porblem. I can't. He was doing the legue challenge again. The champion had gotten to him last time. Before he left, he told me that when I was ready, I would meet him in the Champion Room, and that I was going to win. I don't think I will ever do that though. I'm scared of Pokemon.

 

Uh-oh, uh-oh! Four mistakes! See if you 'kin spot'm! And so he's going to try to follow his dad's legend? That's a good reason for this kid. In most stories, your main character could ONLY be the main character only after something big influences them.

 

THen I saw the ad.

 

"The Pokemon Breeders Association - We now have many different Pokemon eggs, but we have so much that we can't take care of them all. We are sending lots to official Pokemon Day Cares, Trainer and POkemon Fan Clubs, and the many POkemon Labs around the place. Also, at the Pokemon Breeders Association Buildings, we will be handing out eggs, as will the many other places we sent eggs to. The eggs of the rarest pokemon, will be giving to the winner of a contest. This contest will include Poffin Making, Bicycle Racing, Pokemon Battles, and many more. However, only three eggs will be given to one person at the max. So, help us, and help yourself! Get your Pokemon Eggs today!"

 

Heh, PO. And eggs are exciting! I LOVE eggs! And I bet this kid will LOVE his three eggs, too...?

 

The ad ended. I supposed that egg's weren't that scary. And once it hatched, I wouldn't be so scared of thwe pokemon.

I decided to go.

 

This paragraph and the next one need some proofreading. And I agree, eggs aren't scary.

 

"Mum!" i calle,d hoping she would give me a ride.

 

"Meet me at the aivary at 9:30." She replied. I flinched. THe aivary... There were many scary pokemon there... I guess I'll have to face my fears.

 

Well, we didn't get very far with this kid, but oh well. There's always more chapters.

 

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Next POV - Coming Soon...

 

 

Well, it was better than most stories I've seen here. That's a plus. Also none of your characters are big, irredeemable jerks or incredible idiots! That's another plus! I'll read more soon, and give this a 54/61. Don't ask me about my grading system.

[Kaisu]

Heh. Thanks.

 

POkemon I left there on purpose. I wondered if anyone would care, seeing the previous posts :|

 

Anyways, starting next week, I'm going to work on a schedule. Weekdays I'll do my writing/homework, and weekends my GFX work. Starting next week.

[Mr.WHAM]

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