Sapph Gemara Posted January 17, 2010 Report Share Posted January 17, 2010 Chapter 1: My name is Sapph Yuki. It is my first day at Duel Academy, and My dad promised my that if i got into Ra Yellow he would give me his old cards! I walked in and talked to the Entrance exam dude. He gave me a test on dueling which i passed with a hundred. By the time i had double, triple, and quadruple checked my test everyone was sorted into their new dorms. So i was sent to duel the Obelisk Blue Teacher, Dr. Crowler. I was suprised he still is a teacher. its been 20 years since the Yubel Insident. Then I found out it was the original Dr. Crowler's nephew. Dr. Crowler: What is your name, Kid?Sapph: Sapph YukiDr. Crowler: I know all about your father. He was a slacker and he ... Sapph: He what?Dr. Crowler: ...He...um...he...most of the time won his duels.Sapph: Really! Cool, my dad always said that he was is Slifer Red for most of his life so I thought he sucked or somthing...Dr. Crowler: No he didn't, kid he just liked it is the Slifer Dorm. Are we going to duel or not?Sapph: (Activates Duel Disk) Of Course. Duel:Lifepoints(Both):4000 Sapph- Turn 1: My move. I summon Spirit Ryu in attack mode, equip it with First Strike! and discard my 3 dragon cards in my hand. One of them was Extention Dragon and its effect cuts your lifepoints in HALF. Then I attack with Spirit Ryu. Dr. Crowlers Life Points Before: 2000 Spirit Ryu ATK: 4000 Dr.Crowler Life Points After: 0End of Duel Sapph: Awsome I won.Dr. Crowler: Which Dorm do you want. You qualify for the Following Dorms:...To Be continued? Comment on this. Should Sapph Get the Elemental Heroes of His Father Along with some others this Chapter or should he get them next Chapter Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Twig Posted January 17, 2010 Report Share Posted January 17, 2010 Why would you post it if it's not complete? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Weather Report - Stand Posted January 17, 2010 Report Share Posted January 17, 2010 Well, THAT was dumb. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Des ＨＥＲＯ Posted January 19, 2010 Report Share Posted January 19, 2010 Yep it is stupid only having only 1 line for a chapter.If their was a main thing for me to ask is an better name than duel academy what is the most common name ever for an duel academy.Oh another problem I want to know the deck even though nothing is mentioned,well also the fact none of the characters were said. That's my list of complain now the compliment's. Well the one sentence was quite a good sentence therefore when you've completed chapter 1 I will have a high chance of liking it.Since im excited for all yugioh fan fic's. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Weather Report - Stand Posted January 20, 2010 Report Share Posted January 20, 2010 I hope that was a joke, because that sentence.. was still a stinker. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sapph Gemara Posted January 28, 2010 Author Report Share Posted January 28, 2010 To answer the question of the incomplete, i had to get off the computer and later my ideas ran dry... I also was debating on using Jaden or Jesse for my main characters father. his deck right now focuses on using spirit ryu's effect and a dragon monster i made called Extention Dragon. the name Duel Academy is the SAME place as in yugioh GX. today i will probably add the duel today or this friday or tommorow Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Twig Posted January 28, 2010 Report Share Posted January 28, 2010 You know there is a button called "Save as draft". Why didn't you use it? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sapph Gemara Posted January 29, 2010 Author Report Share Posted January 29, 2010 Like i said i was being RUSHED. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Weather Report - Stand Posted January 29, 2010 Report Share Posted January 29, 2010 NO EXCUSE FOR NOT BEING ABLE TO PRESS A BUTTON, NOR FOR ADDING MORE BUT WITH TERRIBLE QUALITY!! When you WRITE A STORY, you TELL US HOW STUFF HAPPENS, NOT JUST WHAT HAPPENS. Your story so far is JUST A SUMMARY OF WHAT'S HAPPENED TO THIS GUY, WE DON'T SEE WHAT'S GOING ON. SO IT SUCKS FOR NOW. WRITE IT WITH ACTUAL CONTENT, PLEASE. Sorry for harshness, but this is barely a story so far. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Parion555 Posted February 3, 2010 Report Share Posted February 3, 2010 Seriously dude,you don't even tell us how the duel goes through.Ut can't be just extension dragon's effect,atack with spirit ryu and game over.It's just not fun at all. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Weather Report - Stand Posted February 3, 2010 Report Share Posted February 3, 2010 Plus you typed it in script format. That's banned on this site, according to the rules. Sorry, but you need to put real effort into this thing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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