Sailor Stars 5D's Chapter 1

[thanonyx]

For those of you who read my Secret Origins of Stardust Dragon fan fic thread,my sis and I did what we said we'd do. We started our Sailor Stars and Yu-Gi-Oh! 5D's crossover story. Sailor Stars wise it starts near the end of episode 172 and 5D's wise it takes place not too long after the fortune cup ends. If you want to gt the full story either watch or find a summary on the first few episodes of Sailor Stars and watch the Fortune Cup Arc. All monster's stats will be shown next to their names. Also, as a disclaimer, I don't own either francise and there is no time travel. In this setting all the characters co-exist.

 

[spoiler=Characters introduced in this chapter]

Usagi Tsukino A.K.A. Sailor Moon

Mamoru Chiba A.K.A. Tuxedo Mask

Chibiusa A.K.A Sailor Chibi Moon

Queen Nehellania

Yusei Fudo

Ami Mizuno A.K.A. Sailor Mercury

Rei Hino A.K.A. Sailor Mars

Makoto Kino A.K.A. Sailor Jupiter

Minako Aino A.K.A Sailor Venus

Haruka Ten'ou A.K.A Sailor Uranus (I know she looks like a guy, but seriously, she's a girl.)

Michiru Kaiou A.K.A. Sailor Neptune

Setsuna Meiou A.K.A. Sailor Pluto

Hotaru Tomoe A.K.A. Sailor Saturn

 

 

 

[spoiler=Featured Cards]

Speed Warrior

Junk Synchron

Junk Warrior

Scrap-Iron Scarecrow

Moon Envoy

Star Blast

Natural Tune

Stardust Dragon (Chapter Strongest Card)

 

 

(I do not own any of the pictures above)

 

But now, let the story begin.

 

Usagi had just gotten to Queen Nehellenia's castle only to find Mamoru still under her spell and Chibiusa fading away. "Chibiusa, stay with me!" she screamed, but to no avail, she faded away into nothingness. Looking upon her sadness, Queen Nehellenia said, "Do you hate me? Do you want to destroy me with your anger? Well it gets worse. Look behind you!" Usagi turned around to see that all her fellow Sailor Senshi had been imprisoned in mirrors. "No one can help you now.", said the wicked queen, "This is how you made me feel when you sealed me away in the lonely darkness!" She walked slowly towards Usagi and choked her neck tightly, "Hate me. Despise me! Feel the sorrow I felt in the darkness!" Usagi opened her eyes and looked upon her with pity. Nehellenia screamed, "Don't look at me with those eyes!" She proceeded to attack her with dark energy blasts from her palms, one after the other.

 

But suddenly a large portal opened up behind them revealing a large utopian city. "What is that thing!" exclaimed the wicked queen. The portal glowed brightly and out of it came the Legendary Riding Duel King Yusei Fudo on his red D-Wheel. Yusei stopped his runner and looked around.

 

"Where the heck am I and how did I get here?", he said in confusion. Nehellenia asked, "Who are you? Answer me!" Yusei replied, "Yusei. Yusei Fudo." Usagi flashing back to yesterday remembered watching the duel Between him and Jack in which he won exclaimed, "I remember. You beat former king Jack Atlas. But please, I need your help!"

 

Nehellenia blasted her again, "Silence, you insect!" Yusei looked in horror as Usagi crashed into the wall. He donned his duel disk and said, "Hey you!" Nehellania turned around to face him, "I may not know what's going on, but the last time I checked blasting someone into a wall was a bad thing!" he said with anger in his voice.

 

After Yusei finished his sentence, Queen Nehellania threw her head back and laughed, "HA-ha-ha-ha-ha! A bad thing. If anything she's the bad one here because it's not me, I'm the victim! I'm just giving her what she deserves!"

 

Yusei thought to himself, "What can I do? I can't just stand here, I need to help this girl, but how?" Suddenly, a deep, growling voice boomed in Yusei's mind, "Your cards are real here. They can protect you and her." Yusei looked confused, but then his birthmark began to glow brightly. Nehellania turned to Usagi, "Well if he's just going to stand there it's time to get what you deserve!"

 

Yusei's eyes glowed with anger as he said, "Well now I'm going to give you what you deserve, I summon Speed Warrior (ATK 900)! Attack her with Sonic Edge (ATK 1800)!" Nehellenia effortlessly stopped Speed Warrior and subsequently destroyed it with another blast from her palm (Yusei LP2200). "Is that it? That's your best shot?" she said with a smirk.

 

"Not even close!" Yusei exclaimed, "I summon Junk Synchron (ATK 1300)! Now I can special summon Speed Warrior (DEF 400) from my grave in defense mode!" Queen Nehellania laughed again, "Ha-ha-ha! that monster couldn't save you attacking, what makes you think it can save you defending?"

 

Yusei's suddenly began to smirk, "I don't. Because I'm tuning my level 3 Junk Synchron with my level 2 Speed Warrior!" Nehellania's body was suddenly began to quake with fear as she thought, "Why am I scared? What is this power? It seems to be coming from those creatures he summoned!"

 

Yusei chanted, "Clustering stars will call upon a new force! Become the path its light shines upon! Synchro Summon! Show yourself, Junk Warrior (ATK 2300)!" Junk Warrior appeared above their heads in striking position. Yusei ordered it to attack, "Junk Warrior, attack her with Scrap Fist!" Nehellenia tried to stop it but Junk Warrior's attack pulled through and sent her flying. Yusei rushed to Usagi, "Hey, are you okay?" Usagi replied, "Yeah, thanks to you."

 

Suddenly Queen Nehellania arose and screamed, "You with both suffer!" She prepared to attack them both but Yusei planned ahead and set a trap card, "I activate Scrap-Iron Scarecrow! Your attack has been intercepted!" The trap knocked her back but not for long, so Yusei called to his Junk Warrior, "Junk Warrior hold her off!" Nehellania struggled against Yusei's monster as he tried to help Usagi get on her feet.

 

"Take me over to him." she said. Yusei quickly helped Usagi over to Mamoru. She whispered to him, "I love you Mamoru." Just then the mirror shard in Mamoru's eye that was causing Nehellania's spell removed itself and disintegrated. Mamoru looked around confused, "Usagi where are we, and who is he?" Yusei replied, "I'm Yusei Fudo." Mamoru looked at him in astonishment, "The same Yusei that beat Jack Atlas? But what are you doing here?"

 

"Good question." Yusei said. Nehellania knocked Junk Warrior away and asked, "Why are you helping her? You barely know her? Why? Why is it that you're doing this?" Yusei replied "Because she needed help and I was the only one who could! I don't just stand there while innocent people get hurt or pushed around!" Then, from out of nowhere, Chibiusa reappeared. "I'm back!" she exclaimed. Yusei asked "Who's she?" Usagi look at Mamoru, smiled, and then at Yusei and replied, "It's a long story. But what's with that glowing mark?"

 

Yusei replied, "That's a long story as well." Nehellania grew more frustrated because she knew that since Chibiusa returned that meant she was losing this battle, "No! NO! NOOOOOOOO! I WON'T LET IT END THIS WAY! WHY MUST YOU ALWAYS RELY ON FRIENDS!?", the wicked queen screamed. Usagi looked at her and said, "Because friends are what make us strong!" Yusei continued by saying, "And they give us something to fight for in the first place!" Nehellania gritted her teeth with anger, "Friends? Who need friends? My only friend is the mirror! It saved my from loneliness. I am my own friend! I don't need anyone else!"

 

Usagi looked to Yusei and gave him one of her cards that was in her pocket. "Here, use this." Yusei looked at the card, "A Moon Envoy card? I can use this!" Yusei reactivated his duel disk. He slammed Usagi's card onto the disk, "I summon Moon Envoy (ATK 1100)! Next, I activate Star Blast and Natural Tune! Star Blast can Reduce my Moon Envoy's level by 1 for every 500 Life Pints I pay (Yusei LP1700), and Natural Tune makes one normal monster on the field into a tuner monster. In this case my level 3 Moon Envoy and I'm tuning it to my level 5 Junk Warrior!" Yusei began to chant again along with Usagi, "Clustering hopes will become a new shining star! Become the path its light shines upon! Synchro Summon! Take flight, Stardust Dragon (ATK 2500)!"

 

Nehellania began to tremble again, "This power. It's even greater than the last time! What is it? Tell me what is this power called?" Yusei looked upon her and said, "It's called......Synchro Summon." "Synchro Summon?" she replied. Usagi and Yusei both ordered the dragon to attack, "Stardust Dragon, attack that mirror! Shooting Sonic!!"

 

With the mirror destroyed, all those held captive in Tokyo by Nehellania's spell were set free as were the other Sailor Senshi from their mirror prisons. Usagi told Yusei, "We can take it from here." Yusei deactivated his disk and Stardust Dragon disappeared.

 

Usagi then became Eternal Sailor Moon. She and the other Sailor Senshi gathered around Nehellania. Usagi told her "You don't have to worry anymore. We're sending you back, but not to the darkness." Sailor Moon Took out a staff with a heart shaped gem at the top which set a beam of light to the moon and she sent Nehellania back to her kingdom where she was reborn as a child and reclaimed her kingdom. Yusei watched in astonishment.

 

"That was amazing!" he said. "But that begs the question, how did I get here and how do we get back. Sailor Mercury began to explain, "Well this dimension and ours are parallel to each other. But there was an interdimentional flux between the two that happened when we arrived here. You were caught in that flux and we just have to wait for it to repeat." Another portal opened up, but not to Neo Domino City but to Tokyo. "That was fast!", Yusei said, "But it's not to my home."

 

Sailor Moon told Yusei, "Why don't you stay with us until we can get you home." Yusei replied, "Sure, why not? Who knows, maybe you'll need my help again. Oh, by the way, what's you're name?" Sailor Moon replied, "Usagi Tsukino, but you can also call me Sailor Moon." the other Sailor Senshi introduced themselves one by one.

 

"Ami Mizuno, A.K.A. Sailor Mercury."

 

"Rei Hino, A.K.A. Sailor Mars."

 

"Makoto Kino, A.K.A. Sailor Jupiter."

 

"Minako Aino, A.K.A. Sailor Venus."

 

"Haruka Ten'ou, A.K.A. Sailor Uranus."

 

"Michiru Kaiou, A.K.A. Sailor Neptune."

 

"Setsuna Meiou, A.K.A. Sailor Pluto."

 

"Hotaru Tomoe, A.K.A. Sailor Saturn."

 

"I'm Chibiusa, A.K.A. Sailor Chibi Moon"

 

"I'm Mamoru Chiba, but you can also call me Tuxedo Mask."

 

Yusei said, "Well ladies, and gentleman, let me take you home." They all piled on Yusei's D-Wheel (albeit there was barely enough room) and rode into the portal home.

 

to be continued...

 

 

 

 

 

 

Mind you this is out first try writing a crossover like this. Tell us what you think and if you would like to see more.

[thanonyx]

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Also, make sure to answer the poll. We really would like to see how we did on this, and if people want more.

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[Weather Report - Stand]

Well, because I looked at your other stories, I feel like I should look at this one, too.

For those of you who read my Secret Origins of Stardust Dragon fan fic thread' date='my sis and I did what we said we'd do. We started our Sailor Stars and Yu-Gi-Oh! 5D's crossover story. Sailor Stars wise it starts near the end of episode 172 and 5D's wise it takes place not too long after the fortune cup ends. If you want to gt the full story either watch or find a summary on the first few episodes of Sailor Stars and watch the Fortune Cup Arc. All monster's stats will be shown next to their names. But now, let the story begin.

 

Usagi had just gotten to Queen Nehellenia's castle only to find Mamoru still under her spell and Chibiusa fading away. "Chibiusa, stay with me!" she screamed, but to no avail, she faded away into nothingness. Queen Nehellenia said, "Do you hate me? Do you want to destroy me with your anger? Well it gets worse. Look behind you!" Usagi turned around to see that all her fellow Sailor Senshi had been imprisoned in mirrors. "No one can help you now." said the wicked queen, "This is how you made me feel when you sealed me away in the lonely darkness!" She walked slowly towards Usagi and choked her neck tightly, "Hate me. Despise me! Feel the sorrow I felt in the darkness!" Usagi opened her eyes and look upon her with pity. Nehellenia screamed, "Don't look at me with those eyes!" She proceeded to attack her with dark energy blasts, one after the other.

 

Well, sine I have no idea of what happens in Sailor Moon, I'll just go along with this. I have no idea what's going on in here. All the random names in the first sentence I see make me feel like an 'un-hip adult'! And I'm just entering High School! It would be nice if you could clear up some confusing stuff, but it would be hard to, as well, so you don't have to do it. But try to describe some things better. Also, add a comma after 'Looking upon her sadness' for gramatical awesome. And just to help me a TEENSY bit, is Usagi the MOON one, or one of the planets? I have no idea who's who or what they're doing. Also, change the period you have in "No one can help you now." to a comma, since as a grammar rule after quotes, where you put 'said' or something of the like, you end it with a comma, exclamation mark, or question mark ONLY. It's weird and took me a lot of getting used to, as well. Also, check your grammar here, since Usagi look upon her with pity. That doesn't look right, right? And I'd like it more if you made these people more in-dpeth, with some mental conversing, to see how despair-filled Usagi is right now... or what she's plotting to fix things! One more thing, how did this lady fire the dark energy blasts? Did she have a staff? Did she use her fingers? What does she look like in your descriptions, anyway?

 

But suddenly a large portal opened up behind them revealing a large utopian city, "What is that thing!" exclaimed the wicked queen. The portal glowed brightly and out of it came the legendary riding duel king Yusei Fudo on his red D-Wheel. Yusei stopped his runner and looked around. "Where the heck am I and how did I get here?" he said in confusion. Nehellenia asked, "Who are you? Answer me!" Yusei replied "Yusei. Yusei Fudo." Usagi flashing back to yesterday remembered watching the duel Between him and Jack in which he won exclaimed, "I remember. You beat former king Jack Atlas. But please, I need your help!" Nehellenia blasted her again, screaming, "Silence you insect!" Yusei looked in horror as Usagi crashed into the wall. He donned his duel disk and said, "Hey you! Miss gloom and doom!" Nehellania turned around to face him, "I may not know what's going on, but I know how to distinguish the good guy from the bad guy." he said with confidence in his voice.

 

Okay, now I'm confused. So... a portal appears, Yusei flies out and made a few one-liners as he helped our Sailor Star. I don't get it! In grammar, you need to change the comma after referencing your 'utopian city', space out a new line whenever a new speaker says stuff, and capitalize titles, like "Legendary Riding Duel King" and even... sigh, that lame thing, "Miss Doom-and-Gloom". Add a comma after "Silence from the evil lady's line, and that's about it.

 

STORYLINE-WISE: I see that you've just put Sailor Moon into the Yu-Gi-Oh! 5D's era, which works, as long as you can edit everybody's histories to help aide in our suspended disbelief. And I can also get how come there's that portal, probably made by the Crimson Dragon, as the Dragon and the Sailor-gals' powers stem from the same stuff here. BUT WHY DOES HE SOUND BARELY RATTLED BY ALL THIS?! And even worse, YOU MADE HIM SAY SOMETHING LAME AND 4KIDS-ISH. You watch the 4Kids version, right? Well, to explain how terrible it is compared to the original, I'll detail my first excursion in watching an episode.

 

So one day I was bored and realized, 'hey, if 4Kids does such an average job dubbing Yugioh, why don't I just watch it in Japanese to see why everybody hates it?' And so I watched the show from where it left off the last week. AND IT BLEW MY MIND BY HOW MUCH BETTER IT WAS. From then on, I could only laugh when I watched the dub, since I couldn't take it seriously any longer.

 

Your Yusei SCREAMS lameness to me. I think you should try making him more serious, and watch a few subtitled episodes too. It may help you laugh at the show, too...

 

After Yusei finished his sentence Queen Nehellania threw her head back and laughed, "HA ha ha ha ha! Good guy and bad guy. If anything she's the bad one here be cause it's not me, I'm the victim! I'm just giving her what she deserves!" Yusei's eyes glowed with anger, "Well now I'm going to give you what you deserve, I summon Speed Warrior (ATK 900)! Attack her with Sonic Edge (ATK 1800)!" Nehellenia effortlessly stopped Speed Warrior and subsequently destroyed it. "Is that it? That's your best shot?" she said with a smirk. "Not even close!" Yusei exclaimed, "I summon Junk Synchron (ATK 1300)! Now I can special summon Speed Warrior (DEF 400) from my grave in defense mode!" Queen Nehellania laughed again, "Ha ha ha! that monster couldn't save you attacking! What makes you think it can save you defending?" Yusei's suddenly began to smirk as well, "I don't. Because I'm tuning my level 3 Junk synchron with my level 2 Speed Warrior!" Nehellania's body was suddenly overcome with fear, "Why am I shaking? What is this power?"

 

Well, put a comma after Yusei finished his sentence, since you change the subject after that. And you COULD chain the 'ha's together, but it's okay as-is. Make 'be cause' just 'because', however, and you seem to like making quotes right after short descriptions. Yusie's eyes glowed with anger as he... said? Growled? Roared? Fix it. UT THE MOST MIND-BENDING THING OF ALL, WHICH I'VE EXPLORED IN MY OWN FAN FICTION: HOW COULD THAT HOLOGRAM ACTUALLY KICK HER IN REAL-LIFE?! Now I just feel mind-raped. I can't even begin to comprehend it. Maybe his birthmark could glow, providing HALF of a description at best, but at least it's a description! Since when did this become a duel?! I mean, that Queen lady doesn't have a deck, but she's acting like it's her turn next, so I'd better just wait and see what he does next! Now, I'm not going to say anything else about stuff such as, Yusei began to smirk as well, "Whatever is said here,", so just keep it in mind. Plus, it could be better for her to be quaking due to power... if you SAID somesort of force, or energy, was coming out of the monsters, gripping at her heart in sudden, gripping terror! And so on.

 

Yusei chanted, ""Clustering stars will call upon a new force! Become the path its light shines upon! Synchro Summon! Show yourself, Junk Warrior (ATK 2300)!" Junk Warrior appeared above thier heads in striking position. Yusei ordered it to attack, "Junk Warrior attack her with Scrap Fist!" Nehellenia tried to stop it but Junk Warrior's attack pulled through and she slammed right into the wall. Yusei rushed to Usagi, "Hey, are you okay?" Usagi replied, "Yeah, thanks to you." Suddenly Queen Nehellania arose, "You with both suffer!" She prepared to attack them both but Yusei planned ahead, "I activate Scrap-Iron Scarecrow! Your attack has been intercepted!" The trap knocked her back but not for long. Yusei called to his Junk Warrior, "Junk Warrior hold her off!" Nehellania struggled against Yusei's monster as he tried to help Usagi get on her feet.

 

Well, now that you've said the quote, I'm confused as to whether they said it in the show too, or you're just bad at writing for Yusei and I went into a whole paranoid rant of sorts that was a bit amusing. But you put two " thingies at the start of his sentence. What's up with that? Spell 'their' correctly, and add in more commas, as I see their speech is too rushed without them. I've gone too far into those, too, so I'll leave them be as I go, too. Plus, you have a lot of guys slamming into walls. Can something more original take place? And when did he set his Scrap-Iron Scarecrow, too? Should they be confused about him using cards in real-life? You should really go back and re-write this, since you're really not describing enough stuff. It would be awesome if they could summon stuff to life and enemies would take advantage of this, but you need to say something about HOW, first.

 

"Take me over to him." she said. Yusei quickly helped her over to Mamoru, "She whispered to him, "I love you Mamoru." Just then the mirror shard in Mamoru's eye removed itself and disintegrated. Mamoru looked around confused, "Usagi where are we, and who is he?" Yusei replied, "I'm Yusei Fudo." Mamoru looked at him in astonishment, "The same Yusei that beat Jack Atlas? But what are you doing here?" "Good question." Yusei said. Nehellania knocked Junk Warrior away and asked, "Why are you helping her? You barley know her? Why? Why is it that you're doing this?" Yusei replied "Because she's a friend who I just haven't met until now!" Then, from out of nowhere, Chibiusa reappeared. "I'm back!" she exclaimed. Yusei asked "Who's she?" Usagi look at Mamoru, smiled, and then at Yusei and replied, "It's a long story." Nehellania grew more frustrated because she knew that since Chibiusa returned that meant she was losing this battle.

 

There are some odd grammatical errors at the beginning of this, too, but I'll let you handle them. But still, AAARGH! The collided quotations are oddly irritating me! Use the 'Enter' key more often, please! Also, an amusing spelling error, You barley know her? Heh, barley is a plant, I think. Also the last sentence is a run-on, so add more commas or cut it in half.

 

"No! NO! NOOOOOOOO! I WON'T LET IT END THIS WAY! WHY MUST YOU ALWAYS RELY ON FRIENDS!?" the wicked queen screamed. Usagi looked at her with pity again, "Because friends are what make us strong!" Yusei continued by saying, "And they give us something to fight for in the first place!" Nehellania growled with anger, "Friends? Who need friends? My only friend is the mirror! It saved my from loneliness. I am my own friend! I don't need anyone else!" Usagi looked to Yusei and gave him one of her cards that was in her pocket. "Here, use this." Yusei looked at the card, "A Moon Envoy card? I can use this!" Yusei reactivated his duel disk. He slammed Usagi's card onto the disk, "I summon Moon Envoy (ATK 1100)! Next, I activate Natural Tune! Natural Tune makes one normal monster on the field into a tuner monster. In this case my level 3 Moon Envoy and I'm tuning it to my level 5 Junk Warrior!" Yusei began to chant again along with Usagi, "Clustering hopes will become a new shining star! Become the path its light shines upon! Synchro Summon! Take flight, Stardust Dragon (ATK 2500)!"

 

Well, the first thing I noticed again, was, again, lookin' at guys with PITY. You've so far re-used two things so far. Either make it something different or get rid of it. And try to describe your monsters, as I just thought to say after seeing Moon Envoy. It took me a second to remember him, but even in my story, for every monster's first appearance, I describe them, no matter how iconic. Characters, too. Who needs to describe Jaden Yuki? I do! And so do YOU! Otherwise, compared to the other stuff so far, this paragraph was surprisingly okay.

 

Nehellania began to tremble again, "This power. It's even greater than the last time! What is it? Tell me what is this power called?" Yusei looked upon her and said, "It's called......Synchro Summon." "Synchro Summon?" she replied. Usagi and Yusei both ordered the dragon to attack, "Stardust Dragon, attack that mirror! Shooting Sonic!!" With the mirror destroyed, all those held captive on Earth by Nehellania's spell were set free as were the other Sailor Senshi. Usagi told Yusei, "We can take it from here." Yusei deactivated his disk and Stardust Dragon disappeared. Usagi then became Eternal Sailor Moon. She and the other Sailor Senshi gathered around Nehellania. Usagi told her "You don't have to worry anymore. We're sending you back, but not to the darkness." Sailor Moon Took out a staff with a heart shaped gem at the top which set a beam of light to the moon and she sent Nehellania back to her kingdom where she was reborn as a child. Yusei watched in astonishment.

 

What made this Synchro Summon different from before? Sure, it's a bigger monster. But she asked 'what power' and they answered, saying it was the same thing they did earlier. That confuses me. Anyways, this part was kinda cool. Although you could make some exposition in the beginning about how some guys in NEO DOMINO WERE MYSTERIOUSLY DISSAPEARING LATELY or however stuff went with that mirror in Sailor Moon originally. I would expect at least one guy worried about this in real-life, so why not say so? And how does Sailor Moon do the finishing blow... well, I don't mean it like that. But it feels odd. Kinda like this;

 

Billy was punched in the face, so he went to the hospital where he learned his nose was broken, so it was bandaged up and he went home, then to school the next day.

 

It would be cool if she awoke after being born a few seconds later, somewhere else, as her memories were sucked away. The way you said it made it sound really cluttered, ad as if you wanted to get this thing over with already.

 

"That was amazing!" he said. "But that begs the question, how did I get here and how do we get back. Sailor Mercury began to explain, "Well this dimension and ours are parallel to each other. But there was an interdimentional flux between the two that happened when we arrived here. You were caught in that flux and we just have to wait for it to repeat.....now." Another portal opened up, but not to Neo Domino City but to Tokyo. Sailor Moon told Yusei, "Why don't you stay with us until we can get you home." Yusei replied, "Sure, why not? Who knows, maybe you'll need my help again. Oh, by the way, what's you're name?" Sailor Moon replied, "Usagi Tsukino." One by one they introduced themselves. Yusei said, "Well ladies, and gentleman, let me take you home." They all piled on Yusei's D-Wheel (albeit there was barely enough room) and rode into the portal home.

 

Well, he makes a good point here. But I didn't know that EVERY guy who just got unleashed was fully functional and not sleepy in any way. Why did nobody say anything earlier? Weer they just having fun watching? Or is she the only one who talks? Well, anyways, then when you start talking about interdimensional transport, it contradicts everything you just said about 'Oh hey I saw you on tv and you won!'. Which is it? Time-travel (which I dislike...) or co-existing?! MAKE UP YO' MIND!! And how did she so easily time the next portal, anyways? And it would be a nice touch for other girls to put in their own two cents about what crap just went down. But anyways, at the end, I just felt so confused with this whole thing.

 

to be continued...

 

 

 

 

 

 

Mind you this is out first try writing a crossover like this. Tell us what you think and if you would like to see more.

 

Well, I would like to see more, since when you got to the exciting part, it WAS exciting. Otherwise, work on grammar. Work on speech. Make it more realistic-feeling, too, in some areas. PUT IN MORE SPACES. If you want to make this an excellent non-gag story, you'll have to put a lot more energy into every chapter, including this pretty short one, and follow the things I said, and things I didn't THINK to say, too, as even I don't know enough about literary technique. Bu still, I want to see more.

[Des ＨＥＲＯ]

Ive gust got one question are you going to put the chapter in an [spoiler=spoiler]

or are you going to put 1 thread per chapter or is it post chapter.Just curious.

 

Edit:another question is this after the torney and before the dark signers.

[thanonyx]

Well' date=' because I looked at your other stories, I feel like I should look at this one, too.

For those of you who read my Secret Origins of Stardust Dragon fan fic thread,my sis and I did what we said we'd do. We started our Sailor Stars and Yu-Gi-Oh! 5D's crossover story. Sailor Stars wise it starts near the end of episode 172 and 5D's wise it takes place not too long after the fortune cup ends. If you want to gt the full story either watch or find a summary on the first few episodes of Sailor Stars and watch the Fortune Cup Arc. All monster's stats will be shown next to their names. But now, let the story begin.

 

Usagi had just gotten to Queen Nehellenia's castle only to find Mamoru still under her spell and Chibiusa fading away. "Chibiusa, stay with me!" she screamed, but to no avail, she faded away into nothingness. Queen Nehellenia said, "Do you hate me? Do you want to destroy me with your anger? Well it gets worse. Look behind you!" Usagi turned around to see that all her fellow Sailor Senshi had been imprisoned in mirrors. "No one can help you now." said the wicked queen, "This is how you made me feel when you sealed me away in the lonely darkness!" She walked slowly towards Usagi and choked her neck tightly, "Hate me. Despise me! Feel the sorrow I felt in the darkness!" Usagi opened her eyes and look upon her with pity. Nehellenia screamed, "Don't look at me with those eyes!" She proceeded to attack her with dark energy blasts, one after the other.

 

Well, sine I have no idea of what happens in Sailor Moon, I'll just go along with this. I have no idea what's going on in here. All the random names in the first sentence I see make me feel like an 'un-hip adult'! And I'm just entering High School! It would be nice if you could clear up some confusing stuff, but it would be hard to, as well, so you don't have to do it. But try to describe some things better. Also, add a comma after 'Looking upon her sadness' for gramatical awesome. And just to help me a TEENSY bit, is Usagi the MOON one, or one of the planets? I have no idea who's who or what they're doing. Also, change the period you have in "No one can help you now." to a comma, since as a grammar rule after quotes, where you put 'said' or something of the like, you end it with a comma, exclamation mark, or question mark ONLY. It's weird and took me a lot of getting used to, as well. Also, check your grammar here, since Usagi look upon her with pity. That doesn't look right, right? And I'd like it more if you made these people more in-dpeth, with some mental conversing, to see how despair-filled Usagi is right now... or what she's plotting to fix things! One more thing, how did this lady fire the dark energy blasts? Did she have a staff? Did she use her fingers? What does she look like in your descriptions, anyway?

 

But suddenly a large portal opened up behind them revealing a large utopian city, "What is that thing!" exclaimed the wicked queen. The portal glowed brightly and out of it came the legendary riding duel king Yusei Fudo on his red D-Wheel. Yusei stopped his runner and looked around. "Where the heck am I and how did I get here?" he said in confusion. Nehellenia asked, "Who are you? Answer me!" Yusei replied "Yusei. Yusei Fudo." Usagi flashing back to yesterday remembered watching the duel Between him and Jack in which he won exclaimed, "I remember. You beat former king Jack Atlas. But please, I need your help!" Nehellenia blasted her again, screaming, "Silence you insect!" Yusei looked in horror as Usagi crashed into the wall. He donned his duel disk and said, "Hey you! Miss gloom and doom!" Nehellania turned around to face him, "I may not know what's going on, but I know how to distinguish the good guy from the bad guy." he said with confidence in his voice.

 

Okay, now I'm confused. So... a portal appears, Yusei flies out and made a few one-liners as he helped our Sailor Star. I don't get it! In grammar, you need to change the comma after referencing your 'utopian city', space out a new line whenever a new speaker says stuff, and capitalize titles, like "Legendary Riding Duel King" and even... sigh, that lame thing, "Miss Doom-and-Gloom". Add a comma after "Silence from the evil lady's line, and that's about it.

 

STORYLINE-WISE: I see that you've just put Sailor Moon into the Yu-Gi-Oh! 5D's era, which works, as long as you can edit everybody's histories to help aide in our suspended disbelief. And I can also get how come there's that portal, probably made by the Crimson Dragon, as the Dragon and the Sailor-gals' powers stem from the same stuff here. BUT WHY DOES HE SOUND BARELY RATTLED BY ALL THIS?! And even worse, YOU MADE HIM SAY SOMETHING LAME AND 4KIDS-ISH. You watch the 4Kids version, right? Well, to explain how terrible it is compared to the original, I'll detail my first excursion in watching an episode.

 

So one day I was bored and realized, 'hey, if 4Kids does such an average job dubbing Yugioh, why don't I just watch it in Japanese to see why everybody hates it?' And so I watched the show from where it left off the last week. AND IT BLEW MY MIND BY HOW MUCH BETTER IT WAS. From then on, I could only laugh when I watched the dub, since I couldn't take it seriously any longer.

 

Your Yusei SCREAMS lameness to me. I think you should try making him more serious, and watch a few subtitled episodes too. It may help you laugh at the show, too...

 

After Yusei finished his sentence Queen Nehellania threw her head back and laughed, "HA ha ha ha ha! Good guy and bad guy. If anything she's the bad one here be cause it's not me, I'm the victim! I'm just giving her what she deserves!" Yusei's eyes glowed with anger, "Well now I'm going to give you what you deserve, I summon Speed Warrior (ATK 900)! Attack her with Sonic Edge (ATK 1800)!" Nehellenia effortlessly stopped Speed Warrior and subsequently destroyed it. "Is that it? That's your best shot?" she said with a smirk. "Not even close!" Yusei exclaimed, "I summon Junk Synchron (ATK 1300)! Now I can special summon Speed Warrior (DEF 400) from my grave in defense mode!" Queen Nehellania laughed again, "Ha ha ha! that monster couldn't save you attacking! What makes you think it can save you defending?" Yusei's suddenly began to smirk as well, "I don't. Because I'm tuning my level 3 Junk synchron with my level 2 Speed Warrior!" Nehellania's body was suddenly overcome with fear, "Why am I shaking? What is this power?"

 

Well, put a comma after Yusei finished his sentence, since you change the subject after that. And you COULD chain the 'ha's together, but it's okay as-is. Make 'be cause' just 'because', however, and you seem to like making quotes right after short descriptions. Yusie's eyes glowed with anger as he... said? Growled? Roared? Fix it. UT THE MOST MIND-BENDING THING OF ALL, WHICH I'VE EXPLORED IN MY OWN FAN FICTION: HOW COULD THAT HOLOGRAM ACTUALLY KICK HER IN REAL-LIFE?! Now I just feel mind-raped. I can't even begin to comprehend it. Maybe his birthmark could glow, providing HALF of a description at best, but at least it's a description! Since when did this become a duel?! I mean, that Queen lady doesn't have a deck, but she's acting like it's her turn next, so I'd better just wait and see what he does next! Now, I'm not going to say anything else about stuff such as, Yusei began to smirk as well, "Whatever is said here,", so just keep it in mind. Plus, it could be better for her to be quaking due to power... if you SAID somesort of force, or energy, was coming out of the monsters, gripping at her heart in sudden, gripping terror! And so on.

 

Yusei chanted, ""Clustering stars will call upon a new force! Become the path its light shines upon! Synchro Summon! Show yourself, Junk Warrior (ATK 2300)!" Junk Warrior appeared above thier heads in striking position. Yusei ordered it to attack, "Junk Warrior attack her with Scrap Fist!" Nehellenia tried to stop it but Junk Warrior's attack pulled through and she slammed right into the wall. Yusei rushed to Usagi, "Hey, are you okay?" Usagi replied, "Yeah, thanks to you." Suddenly Queen Nehellania arose, "You with both suffer!" She prepared to attack them both but Yusei planned ahead, "I activate Scrap-Iron Scarecrow! Your attack has been intercepted!" The trap knocked her back but not for long. Yusei called to his Junk Warrior, "Junk Warrior hold her off!" Nehellania struggled against Yusei's monster as he tried to help Usagi get on her feet.

 

Well, now that you've said the quote, I'm confused as to whether they said it in the show too, or you're just bad at writing for Yusei and I went into a whole paranoid rant of sorts that was a bit amusing. But you put two " thingies at the start of his sentence. What's up with that? Spell 'their' correctly, and add in more commas, as I see their speech is too rushed without them. I've gone too far into those, too, so I'll leave them be as I go, too. Plus, you have a lot of guys slamming into walls. Can something more original take place? And when did he set his Scrap-Iron Scarecrow, too? Should they be confused about him using cards in real-life? You should really go back and re-write this, since you're really not describing enough stuff. It would be awesome if they could summon stuff to life and enemies would take advantage of this, but you need to say something about HOW, first.

 

"Take me over to him." she said. Yusei quickly helped her over to Mamoru, "She whispered to him, "I love you Mamoru." Just then the mirror shard in Mamoru's eye removed itself and disintegrated. Mamoru looked around confused, "Usagi where are we, and who is he?" Yusei replied, "I'm Yusei Fudo." Mamoru looked at him in astonishment, "The same Yusei that beat Jack Atlas? But what are you doing here?" "Good question." Yusei said. Nehellania knocked Junk Warrior away and asked, "Why are you helping her? You barley know her? Why? Why is it that you're doing this?" Yusei replied "Because she's a friend who I just haven't met until now!" Then, from out of nowhere, Chibiusa reappeared. "I'm back!" she exclaimed. Yusei asked "Who's she?" Usagi look at Mamoru, smiled, and then at Yusei and replied, "It's a long story." Nehellania grew more frustrated because she knew that since Chibiusa returned that meant she was losing this battle.

 

There are some odd grammatical errors at the beginning of this, too, but I'll let you handle them. But still, AAARGH! The collided quotations are oddly irritating me! Use the 'Enter' key more often, please! Also, an amusing spelling error, You barley know her? Heh, barley is a plant, I think. Also the last sentence is a run-on, so add more commas or cut it in half.

 

"No! NO! NOOOOOOOO! I WON'T LET IT END THIS WAY! WHY MUST YOU ALWAYS RELY ON FRIENDS!?" the wicked queen screamed. Usagi looked at her with pity again, "Because friends are what make us strong!" Yusei continued by saying, "And they give us something to fight for in the first place!" Nehellania growled with anger, "Friends? Who need friends? My only friend is the mirror! It saved my from loneliness. I am my own friend! I don't need anyone else!" Usagi looked to Yusei and gave him one of her cards that was in her pocket. "Here, use this." Yusei looked at the card, "A Moon Envoy card? I can use this!" Yusei reactivated his duel disk. He slammed Usagi's card onto the disk, "I summon Moon Envoy (ATK 1100)! Next, I activate Natural Tune! Natural Tune makes one normal monster on the field into a tuner monster. In this case my level 3 Moon Envoy and I'm tuning it to my level 5 Junk Warrior!" Yusei began to chant again along with Usagi, "Clustering hopes will become a new shining star! Become the path its light shines upon! Synchro Summon! Take flight, Stardust Dragon (ATK 2500)!"

 

Well, the first thing I noticed again, was, again, lookin' at guys with PITY. You've so far re-used two things so far. Either make it something different or get rid of it. And try to describe your monsters, as I just thought to say after seeing Moon Envoy. It took me a second to remember him, but even in my story, for every monster's first appearance, I describe them, no matter how iconic. Characters, too. Who needs to describe Jaden Yuki? I do! And so do YOU! Otherwise, compared to the other stuff so far, this paragraph was surprisingly okay.

 

Nehellania began to tremble again, "This power. It's even greater than the last time! What is it? Tell me what is this power called?" Yusei looked upon her and said, "It's called......Synchro Summon." "Synchro Summon?" she replied. Usagi and Yusei both ordered the dragon to attack, "Stardust Dragon, attack that mirror! Shooting Sonic!!" With the mirror destroyed, all those held captive on Earth by Nehellania's spell were set free as were the other Sailor Senshi. Usagi told Yusei, "We can take it from here." Yusei deactivated his disk and Stardust Dragon disappeared. Usagi then became Eternal Sailor Moon. She and the other Sailor Senshi gathered around Nehellania. Usagi told her "You don't have to worry anymore. We're sending you back, but not to the darkness." Sailor Moon Took out a staff with a heart shaped gem at the top which set a beam of light to the moon and she sent Nehellania back to her kingdom where she was reborn as a child. Yusei watched in astonishment.

 

What made this Synchro Summon different from before? Sure, it's a bigger monster. But she asked 'what power' and they answered, saying it was the same thing they did earlier. That confuses me. Anyways, this part was kinda cool. Although you could make some exposition in the beginning about how some guys in NEO DOMINO WERE MYSTERIOUSLY DISSAPEARING LATELY or however stuff went with that mirror in Sailor Moon originally. I would expect at least one guy worried about this in real-life, so why not say so? And how does Sailor Moon do the finishing blow... well, I don't mean it like that. But it feels odd. Kinda like this;

 

Billy was punched in the face, so he went to the hospital where he learned his nose was broken, so it was bandaged up and he went home, then to school the next day.

 

It would be cool if she awoke after being born a few seconds later, somewhere else, as her memories were sucked away. The way you said it made it sound really cluttered, ad as if you wanted to get this thing over with already.

 

"That was amazing!" he said. "But that begs the question, how did I get here and how do we get back. Sailor Mercury began to explain, "Well this dimension and ours are parallel to each other. But there was an interdimentional flux between the two that happened when we arrived here. You were caught in that flux and we just have to wait for it to repeat.....now." Another portal opened up, but not to Neo Domino City but to Tokyo. Sailor Moon told Yusei, "Why don't you stay with us until we can get you home." Yusei replied, "Sure, why not? Who knows, maybe you'll need my help again. Oh, by the way, what's you're name?" Sailor Moon replied, "Usagi Tsukino." One by one they introduced themselves. Yusei said, "Well ladies, and gentleman, let me take you home." They all piled on Yusei's D-Wheel (albeit there was barely enough room) and rode into the portal home.

 

Well, he makes a good point here. But I didn't know that EVERY guy who just got unleashed was fully functional and not sleepy in any way. Why did nobody say anything earlier? Weer they just having fun watching? Or is she the only one who talks? Well, anyways, then when you start talking about interdimensional transport, it contradicts everything you just said about 'Oh hey I saw you on tv and you won!'. Which is it? Time-travel (which I dislike...) or co-existing?! MAKE UP YO' MIND!! And how did she so easily time the next portal, anyways? And it would be a nice touch for other girls to put in their own two cents about what crap just went down. But anyways, at the end, I just felt so confused with this whole thing.

 

to be continued...

 

 

 

 

 

 

Mind you this is out first try writing a crossover like this. Tell us what you think and if you would like to see more.

 

 

Well, I would like to see more, since when you got to the exciting part, it WAS exciting. Otherwise, work on grammar. Work on speech. Make it more realistic-feeling, too, in some areas. PUT IN MORE SPACES. If you want to make this an excellent non-gag story, you'll have to put a lot more energy into every chapter, including this pretty short one, and follow the things I said, and things I didn't THINK to say, too, as even I don't know enough about literary technique. Bu still, I want to see more.

 

There, we made some changes to the staory and format. Also, I do watch the subbed version, the VA's are better. If you want to get the full story try to watch some of sailor moon season 5, or read some scripts or summaries of the episodes.

 

If you want to watch some of the episodes here's a link to a site that has some. http://www.animekuro.com/anime-series/sailor-moon/

[thanonyx]

Ive gust got one question are you going to put the chapter in an [spoiler=spoiler]

or are you going to put 1 thread per chapter or is it post chapter.Just curious.

 

Edit:another question is this after the torney and before the dark signers.

 

It's going to be 1 chapter per thread.

 

Also, 5D's wise it's like the very beginning of the dark signer arc.

 

By the way, what is that spoiler tab supposed to be?

[Weather Report - Stand]

For those of you who read my Secret Origins of Stardust Dragon fan fic thread' date='my sis and I did what we said we'd do. We started our Sailor Stars and Yu-Gi-Oh! 5D's crossover story. Sailor Stars wise it starts near the end of episode 172 and 5D's wise it takes place not too long after the fortune cup ends. If you want to gt the full story either watch or find a summary on the first few episodes of Sailor Stars and watch the Fortune Cup Arc. All monster's stats will be shown next to their names. Also, as a disclaimer, I don't own either francise and there is no time travel. In this setting all the characters co-exist.

 

Characters introduced in this chapter:

 

[img']http://photos-p.friendster.com/photos/29/11/72711192/1_643308246m.jpg[/img]Usagi Tsukino A.K.A. Sailor Moon

Mamoru Chiba A.K.A. Tuxedo Mask

Chibiusa A.K.A Sailor Chibi Moon

Queen Nehellania

Yusei Fudo

Ami Mizuno A.K.A. Sailor Mercury

Rei Hino A.K.A. Sailor Mars

Makoto Kino A.K.A. Sailor Jupiter

Minako Aino A.K.A Sailor Venus

Haruka Ten'ou A.K.A Sailor Uranus (I know she looks like a guy, but seriously, she's a girl.)

Michiru Kaiou A.K.A. Sailor Neptune

Setsuna Meiou A.K.A. Sailor Pluto

Hotaru Tomoe A.K.A. Sailor Saturn

 

Featured Cards:

Speed Warrior

Junk Synchron

Junk Warrior

Scrap-Iron Scarecrow

Moon Envoy

Star Blast

Natural Tune

Stardust Dragon (Chapter Strongest Card)

 

(I do not own any of the pictures above)

 

But now, let the story begin.

 

Usagi had just gotten to Queen Nehellenia's castle only to find Mamoru still under her spell and Chibiusa fading away. "Chibiusa, stay with me!" she screamed, but to no avail, she faded away into nothingness. Looking upon her sadness, Queen Nehellenia said, "Do you hate me? Do you want to destroy me with your anger? Well it gets worse. Look behind you!" Usagi turned around to see that all her fellow Sailor Senshi had been imprisoned in mirrors. "No one can help you now.", said the wicked queen, "This is how you made me feel when you sealed me away in the lonely darkness!" She walked slowly towards Usagi and choked her neck tightly, "Hate me. Despise me! Feel the sorrow I felt in the darkness!" Usagi opened her eyes and looked upon her with pity. Nehellenia screamed, "Don't look at me with those eyes!" She proceeded to attack her with dark energy blasts from her palms, one after the other.

 

But suddenly a large portal opened up behind them revealing a large utopian city. "What is that thing!" exclaimed the wicked queen. The portal glowed brightly and out of it came the Legendary Riding Duel King Yusei Fudo on his red D-Wheel. Yusei stopped his runner and looked around.

 

"Where the heck am I and how did I get here?", he said in confusion. Nehellenia asked, "Who are you? Answer me!" Yusei replied, "Yusei. Yusei Fudo." Usagi flashing back to yesterday remembered watching the duel Between him and Jack in which he won exclaimed, "I remember. You beat former king Jack Atlas. But please, I need your help!"

 

Nehellenia blasted her again, "Silence, you insect!" Yusei looked in horror as Usagi crashed into the wall. He donned his duel disk and said, "Hey you!" Nehellania turned around to face him, "I may not know what's going on, but the last time I checked blasting someone into a wall was a bad thing!" he said with anger in his voice.

 

After Yusei finished his sentence, Queen Nehellania threw her head back and laughed, "HA-ha-ha-ha-ha! A bad thing. If anything she's the bad one here because it's not me, I'm the victim! I'm just giving her what she deserves!"

 

Yusei thought to himself, "What can I do? I can't just stand here, I need to help this girl, but how?" Suddenly, a deep, growling voice boomed in Yusei's mind, "Your cards are real here. They can protect you and her." Yusei looked confused, but then his birthmark began to glow brightly. Nehellania turned to Usagi, "Well if he's just going to stand there it's time to get what you deserve!"

 

Yusei's eyes glowed with anger as he said, "Well now I'm going to give you what you deserve, I summon Speed Warrior (ATK 900)! Attack her with Sonic Edge (ATK 1800)!" Nehellenia effortlessly stopped Speed Warrior and subsequently destroyed it with another blast from her palm (Yusei LP2200). "Is that it? That's your best shot?" she said with a smirk.

 

"Not even close!" Yusei exclaimed, "I summon Junk Synchron (ATK 1300)! Now I can special summon Speed Warrior (DEF 400) from my grave in defense mode!" Queen Nehellania laughed again, "Ha-ha-ha! that monster couldn't save you attacking, what makes you think it can save you defending?"

 

Yusei's suddenly began to smirk, "I don't. Because I'm tuning my level 3 Junk Synchron with my level 2 Speed Warrior!" Nehellania's body was suddenly began to quake with fear as she thought, "Why am I scared? What is this power? It seems to be coming from those creatures he summoned!"

 

Yusei chanted, "Clustering stars will call upon a new force! Become the path its light shines upon! Synchro Summon! Show yourself, Junk Warrior (ATK 2300)!" Junk Warrior appeared above their heads in striking position. Yusei ordered it to attack, "Junk Warrior, attack her with Scrap Fist!" Nehellenia tried to stop it but Junk Warrior's attack pulled through and sent her flying. Yusei rushed to Usagi, "Hey, are you okay?" Usagi replied, "Yeah, thanks to you."

 

Suddenly Queen Nehellania arose and screamed, "You with both suffer!" She prepared to attack them both but Yusei planned ahead and set a trap card, "I activate Scrap-Iron Scarecrow! Your attack has been intercepted!" The trap knocked her back but not for long, so Yusei called to his Junk Warrior, "Junk Warrior hold her off!" Nehellania struggled against Yusei's monster as he tried to help Usagi get on her feet.

 

"Take me over to him." she said. Yusei quickly helped Usagi over to Mamoru. She whispered to him, "I love you Mamoru." Just then the mirror shard in Mamoru's eye that was causing Nehellania's spell removed itself and disintegrated. Mamoru looked around confused, "Usagi where are we, and who is he?" Yusei replied, "I'm Yusei Fudo." Mamoru looked at him in astonishment, "The same Yusei that beat Jack Atlas? But what are you doing here?"

 

"Good question." Yusei said. Nehellania knocked Junk Warrior away and asked, "Why are you helping her? You barely know her? Why? Why is it that you're doing this?" Yusei replied "Because she needed help and I was the only one who could! I don't just stand there while innocent people get hurt or pushed around!" Then, from out of nowhere, Chibiusa reappeared. "I'm back!" she exclaimed. Yusei asked "Who's she?" Usagi look at Mamoru, smiled, and then at Yusei and replied, "It's a long story. But what's with that glowing mark?"

 

Yusei replied, "That's a long story as well." Nehellania grew more frustrated because she knew that since Chibiusa returned that meant she was losing this battle, "No! NO! NOOOOOOOO! I WON'T LET IT END THIS WAY! WHY MUST YOU ALWAYS RELY ON FRIENDS!?", the wicked queen screamed. Usagi looked at her and said, "Because friends are what make us strong!" Yusei continued by saying, "And they give us something to fight for in the first place!" Nehellania gritted her teeth with anger, "Friends? Who need friends? My only friend is the mirror! It saved my from loneliness. I am my own friend! I don't need anyone else!"

 

Usagi looked to Yusei and gave him one of her cards that was in her pocket. "Here, use this." Yusei looked at the card, "A Moon Envoy card? I can use this!" Yusei reactivated his duel disk. He slammed Usagi's card onto the disk, "I summon Moon Envoy (ATK 1100)! Next, I activate Star Blast and Natural Tune! Star Blast can Reduce my Moon Envoy's level by 1 for every 500 Life Pints I pay (Yusei LP1700), and Natural Tune makes one normal monster on the field into a tuner monster. In this case my level 3 Moon Envoy and I'm tuning it to my level 5 Junk Warrior!" Yusei began to chant again along with Usagi, "Clustering hopes will become a new shining star! Become the path its light shines upon! Synchro Summon! Take flight, Stardust Dragon (ATK 2500)!"

 

Nehellania began to tremble again, "This power. It's even greater than the last time! What is it? Tell me what is this power called?" Yusei looked upon her and said, "It's called......Synchro Summon." "Synchro Summon?" she replied. Usagi and Yusei both ordered the dragon to attack, "Stardust Dragon, attack that mirror! Shooting Sonic!!"

 

With the mirror destroyed, all those held captive in Tokyo by Nehellania's spell were set free as were the other Sailor Senshi from their mirror prisons. Usagi told Yusei, "We can take it from here." Yusei deactivated his disk and Stardust Dragon disappeared.

 

Usagi then became Eternal Sailor Moon. She and the other Sailor Senshi gathered around Nehellania. Usagi told her "You don't have to worry anymore. We're sending you back, but not to the darkness." Sailor Moon Took out a staff with a heart shaped gem at the top which set a beam of light to the moon and she sent Nehellania back to her kingdom where she was reborn as a child and reclaimed her kingdom. Yusei watched in astonishment.

 

"That was amazing!" he said. "But that begs the question, how did I get here and how do we get back. Sailor Mercury began to explain, "Well this dimension and ours are parallel to each other. But there was an interdimentional flux between the two that happened when we arrived here. You were caught in that flux and we just have to wait for it to repeat." Another portal opened up, but not to Neo Domino City but to Tokyo. "That was fast!", Yusei said, "But it's not to my home."

 

Sailor Moon told Yusei, "Why don't you stay with us until we can get you home." Yusei replied, "Sure, why not? Who knows, maybe you'll need my help again. Oh, by the way, what's you're name?" Sailor Moon replied, "Usagi Tsukino, but you can also call me Sailor Moon." the other Sailor Senshi introduced themselves one by one.

 

"Ami Mizuno, A.K.A. Sailor Mercury."

 

"Rei Hino, A.K.A. Sailor Mars."

 

"Makoto Kino, A.K.A. Sailor Jupiter."

 

"Minako Aino, A.K.A. Sailor Venus."

 

"Haruka Ten'ou, A.K.A. Sailor Uranus."

 

"Michiru Kaiou, A.K.A. Sailor Neptune."

 

"Setsuna Meiou, A.K.A. Sailor Pluto."

 

"Hotaru Tomoe, A.K.A. Sailor Saturn."

 

"I'm Chibiusa, A.K.A. Sailor Chibi Moon"

 

"I'm Mamoru Chiba, but you can also call me tuxedo Mask."

 

Yusei said, "Well ladies, and gentleman, let me take you home." They all piled on Yusei's D-Wheel (albeit there was barely enough room) and rode into the portal home.

 

to be continued...

 

 

 

 

 

 

Mind you this is out first try writing a crossover like this. Tell us what you think and if you would like to see more.

 

Well, after the re-write, my first thought was that it would be more helpful to provide the images in a spoiler. They take up so much space! Anyways, the plot seems just as confusing as before, sadly, and your character's dialogue still feels one-dimensional. Anyways, if this goes on for a while and you improve your skills as you go, you can fix some of this stuff, because it looks like this is, actually, the best you could do. FOR NOW. I'm not trying to sound negative, I'm saying that you'll improve really quickly from what I can tell. Well, anyways, good luck...

[Jord200]

well heres something you don't see everyday. not bad. heck you support you, if you can make crossover of Yugioh and Sailor Moon, then I can and will make Yugioh, Pokemon, and Rosario Vampire crossover! 9.8/10 so far.

[thanonyx]

How do you make a spoiler tab?

[Weather Report - Stand]

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I made the symbols brackets, but they're really the other choice thingies on 'da keyboadr.

These ->[ ]. Just substitute them and you're good to go.

[thanonyx]

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I made the symbols brackets' date=' but they're really the other choice thingies on 'da keyboadr.

These ->[ ']. Just substitute them and you're good to go.

 

I did what you said but it didn't work right.

[LuffyLaxer]

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[thanonyx]

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thanks man!

[LuffyLaxer]

no problem. what are fellow fanfic's writers for?

[thanonyx]

Also, one more thing. the characters seem one-dimensional because this is only chapter one. This will change as the chapters go on.

[Weather Report - Stand]

Yippee kai-yay!