Nine tailed f ox Posted December 29, 2009 Report Share Posted December 29, 2009 [spoiler=plot] Three years after, spiderman got married to black cat and saved new york from the symbiote. As symbiote Wolverine is still hunting form spider, the leader of S.H.I.E.L.D Black Widow also try to hunt for spider man as the Symbiotes come back, spider must make a choice, to full embrace the black suit, which will destory the red suit or let the red suit re take control. [spoiler=season 1] [spoiler=episode one- The most wanted] Mary jane house: Inside the Mary jane, luke cage and Mary jane look back at what ahppen three years ago. Mary jane was crying that spiderman choose the black cat over her but, then as they turn the Tv on, the new ame on News person " Hello and welcome to the news today, Police as looking for Spider-man & cat women after a string of bank robbers began. we will hand over to are news reporter ZUlu. Zuli " Yes as you see here, the police are asking questions off our they got in and out. After the Symbiote invaing three years ago, spider-man did he unthinkable and now they are the two most wanted villans, they is a reward of $300,000 for they caughter. Then Mary jane try off the Tv. Luke cage " What have you do that forMary Jane " I will try to save spiderman againLuke cage " look they is no point, he turnedMary Jane " I won't belive it, i am going to find spider man and kill the black cat."Luke cage " Alright I come with. Meanwhile at a hidden location Spider-man and the black cat hide form a squard of S.H.I.E.L.D Agents as they tryed to get back to their den. Spider-man " So lover what should we do nowblack cat " darling, lets run acorss the roof tops and take them outSpider-man " your good, lets move out.So spider-man and the black cat jumped onto the roof top but as they did, behind them five hovercrafes appered, so the spider-man and the black try to escape from it. Black cat " we can't lose them"spider-man " we can, ready jumped down now."Black cat " alright." They Both jumped down, hiding on each side of the wall, as the hovercaft stops and S.H.I.E.L.D Angents repel down to were spider-man and the black cat was. Black cat took out the furst two Angents as Spider-man glad hold of black cat and fired is black web to onbe of the hovercaft were they quickly jumped to the net one after destorying one. Black cat " quickly lets hiding in this place until the heat dies down."spider-man " your right black cat.choose a Path they Both jumped down and landed on top of each other, meanwhile at the new build S.H.I.E.L.D HQ, the Black Widow enters the base, as th newly upgarde force feild was around it with a massive wave of soliders guarding and was also preparing to be sent out. S.H.I.E.L.D HQ- the main room Inside the room, the Black widow got a room of leader to get around a table and as the black widow told them to shut, up the talking began Black widow " I have gathered you all here as, symbiotes have already took over a city.leader " I thoght you took out of the Symbiotes."Black widow " we did but it seens a small group is still out they but we are senting Angets. The other problem is spider-manLeader two " Have you cought the black cat and spider-man yetBlack widow " No, we have not but we are still looking as well as sent out are own hunter to find him.Leader three " What about this city new york."Black widow " we are trying to take it back from a villans that helped spider man out three years ago. dismissed. Outside of new york- outside of new york Mary Jane arrives with luke cage as they go to one of the S.H.I.E.L.D checkpoints. S.H.I.E.L.D guard 1 " Please ste[ out the car as we serach itLuke cage " What for."S.H.I.E.L.D guard 1 " I sorry but orders we must check each car as they go passed, as someone may be holding spider-man and also due to the city being contorl by spider-man.Mary jane " Just hurry."Then, two hovercafts came crashing down and nearly the checkpoint, a massive expation come be heard. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nine tailed f ox Posted December 29, 2009 Author Report Share Posted December 29, 2009 ok, at first I understand that it may not be good but soon after epiosde 5 you will se the plot coming into place and they is a twisted as, the symbiote come back and Sheild asks for spiderman help, will he Help sheild, or using the black suit control the Symbiotes. It will improving and soon, this will be a very good spider-man stroy. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Twig Posted December 30, 2009 Report Share Posted December 30, 2009 This looks familiar...*looks at fanfic section again*Omg, are you Kyubi200whatever? Just a thought. Sorry, but this is so bad I can't stand reading the whole thing.A LOT of errors.Script format is illegal. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SmallieBigs Posted December 30, 2009 Report Share Posted December 30, 2009 Well the Daily News is here! [spoiler=plot] Three years after' date=' spiderman got married to black cat and saved new york from the symbiote. As symbiote Wolverine is still hunting form spider, the leader of S.H.I.E.L.D Black Widow also try to hunt for spider man as the Symbiotes come back, spider must make a choice, to full embrace the black suit, which will destory the red suit or let the red suit re take control. OMG hugest run on sentence evar! Anyway original but who would do a Spider-Man story? [spoiler=season 1] [spoiler=episode one- The most wanted] Mary janes house:already I smell script format, but why here? Inside the Mary jane, luke cage and Mary jane look back at what ahppen three years ago. Mary jane was crying that spiderman choose the black cat over her but, then as they turn the Tv on, the new ame onWhat is this, I don't understand? News person " Hello and welcome to the news today, Police as looking for Spider-man & cat women after a string of bank robbers began. we will hand over to are news reporter ZUlu.How did I know? Zuli " Yes as you see here, the police are asking questions off our they got in and out. After the Symbiote invaing three years ago, spider-man did he unthinkable and now they are the two most wanted villans, they is a reward of $300,000 for they caughter.Hugest assortment of paragraphs ever bad grammar and please try to spell right! Then Mary jane try off the Tv. What did she do? What why isn't Jane capitalized?Luke cage " What have you do that for Luke doesn't sound like he does. Awful grammar. Mary Jane " I will try to save spiderman again Actually good grammar but spider-man isn't hyphenated and there is no interaction. Luke cage " look they is no point, he turned Movement! still bad grammar. Mary Jane " I won't belive it, i am going to find spider man and kill the black cat." When did Mary Jane kill people, and what is this? Luke cage " Alright I come with. That doesn't sound like a black person, sorry if this offended anyone. Meanwhile at a hidden location Spider-man and the black cat hide form a squard of S.H.I.E.L.D Agents as they tryed to get back to their den. What does it look like? finally you're writing right please use a spell-checker also. Spider-man " So lover what should we do now Hmmm this is getting really annoying trying to tell you what to do. black cat " darling, lets run acorss the roof tops and take them out Darling let's capitalize the start of a sentence. A bad spelling mistake. Where are the periods my friend? Spider-man " your good, lets move out. what? So spider-man and the black cat jumped onto the roof top but as they did, behind them five hovercrafes appered, so the spider-man and the black try to escape from it. What is it? Replace that e with a "t" and the is there more then one spider-man? And Black hey a Harry Potter Spider-Man crossover! Black cat " we can't lose them" Bad, script format. spider-man " we can, ready jumped down now." You didn't seperate the action with the words. Black cat " alright." CAPITALIZE THE BEGINNING OF A SENTENCE! They Both jumped down, hiding on each side of the wall, as the hovercaft stops and S.H.I.E.L.D Angents repel down to were spider-man and the black cat was. Black cat took out the furst two Angents as Spider-man glad hold of black cat and fired is black web to onbe of the hovercaft were they quickly jumped to the net one after destorying one. Why did you capitalize both? Weird when did one side of a wall have two sides? And what is onbe and when were webs black, they're called tendrils. What was destroyed? Black cat " quickly lets hiding in this place until the heat dies down." More bad grammar! When was this NFS? spider-man " your right black cat. No capitalization I love you! choose a Path A video game script wow! they Both jumped down and landed on top of each other, meanwhile at the new build S.H.I.E.L.D HQ, the Black Widow enters the base, as th newly upgarde force feild was around it with a massive wave of soliders guarding and was also preparing to be sent out. Use the right capitalization. Which one was first to land? At the new build, Qal'at says: Look at my new build! Spell field right, what is it again? S.H.I.E.L.D HQ- the main room Inside the room, the Black widow got a room of leader to get around a table and as the black widow told them to shut, up the talking began Period please! Capitalization says hai! Black widow " I have gathered you all here as, symbiotes have already took over a city.leader " I thoght you took out of the Symbiotes." Spell the right way. I would appreciate grammar too! Black widow " we did but it seens a small group is still out they but we are senting Angets. The other problem is spider-man Periods, capitalization and grammar! Leader two " Have you cought the black cat and spider-man yet What when was the leader in charge when Black Widow is second in command to S.H.I.E.L.D.? Black widow " No, we have not but we are still looking as well as sent out are own hunter to find him. What is this hunter you are talking about? Leader three " What about this city new york." Huh? Is a leader a foreigner? Black widow " we are trying to take it back from a villans that helped spider man out three years ago. dismissed. You really don't know grammmar do you? Outside of new york- outside of new york Mary Jane arrives with luke cage as they go to one of the S.H.I.E.L.D checkpoints. Capitalization? I saw a double space also! S.H.I.E.L.D guard 1 " Please ste[ out the car as we serach it A bracket! and what is ste mean some military abbreviation? Luke cage " What for." No comment. S.H.I.E.L.D guard 1 " I sorry but orders we must check each car as they go passed, as someone may be holding spider-man and also due to the city being contorl by spider-man.Mary jane " Just hurry." Bad grammar and with the next line it's alright. Then, two hovercafts came crashing down and nearly the checkpoint, a massive expation come be heard. The Daily News has been spread! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nine tailed f ox Posted December 30, 2009 Author Report Share Posted December 30, 2009 i will try to connert them and, this sia what if spidermAN Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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