Kyubi20017 Posted December 27, 2009 Report Share Posted December 27, 2009 [spoiler=Season 1:] [spoiler=episode one- a unkown light 1/3] The silver sufer arrives due o the light and, helps spiderman to follow th elight but when it happens again they as confonrt with the flame women. then they wait as misslie were fired at them. [spoiler=episode two- a unkown light 2/3] After, killing the flame women, the sliver sufer and spider carries on heading towards the light, but as it appered more villans & hero appaer. with an rreturn of an old friend the battle rages on. [spoiler=episode three- a unkown light 3/3] Finally after defending the newly come villans the spiderman and the sliver surfer confont the light Angel but as the fight goes on the Angel expisons and, the light swep though new york and as peter parker once again try to stop the black suit taking over, the sliver sufer begin to have douts about spiderman as the allies made they HQ. [spoiler=episode four- a prison break] as peter parker gives into the black suit, the sliver sufer trys to stop him planning a prison break to break out cat women. After the sliver sufer fades away, the allies begin trying to stop crime and stopping spiderman breaking cat women out of peison as well as tryignt o re caughter them. as the X-men soon apper fighting the kingpin new Heavy soliders. [spoiler=episode fiver- wedding of evil] As the allies HQ is under attack by the King pin forces and as the hero's fight, the newly wed wife and huband bring gathing a small group of villans to join they gang and as they go alone into a room, other villans fight wonder women as she stops them robbing a bankk hoping to get into the Clan. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kaisu Posted December 28, 2009 Report Share Posted December 28, 2009 Okay.... This makes no sense. AND TYPE PROPERLY!!! No description, no plot that I see. It's horrible. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kendo Fish Posted December 28, 2009 Report Share Posted December 28, 2009 On the one hand...this is still pretty bad. On the other hand, well...you spell-checked. Wait, chapter FIVER!? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kaisu Posted December 28, 2009 Report Share Posted December 28, 2009 Hmm... I want my tenner then. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kōsuke Ueki Posted December 28, 2009 Report Share Posted December 28, 2009 Don't you think he might have problems typing it right? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kaisu Posted December 28, 2009 Report Share Posted December 28, 2009 If he did, he should edit it. If his keys are defective, ever heard of copy-paste? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kōsuke Ueki Posted December 28, 2009 Report Share Posted December 28, 2009 He probably has Parkinson's Disease in his fingers and short-term memory loss. He would always have problems and wouldn't remember how to fix it. You ever think of that? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kaisu Posted December 28, 2009 Report Share Posted December 28, 2009 I don't even know what Parkinson's Disease is. :| Anyways, I'm reveiwing his fic. So if you have a problem with me being practical, deal with it yourself. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kyubi20017 Posted December 29, 2009 Author Report Share Posted December 29, 2009 sorry'sabotu the typing error was, a bit ill but the polt of it is, that the ailles are trying to stop spiderman as he trys to find out what ahppen. this is a like what i, if spider truned evil. you see the polt later but, it all about fighting a dark hidden secert though out the new newyork and due tot he light all the hero's dincation fuison together Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kaisu Posted December 29, 2009 Report Share Posted December 29, 2009 I still say you should correct your typos. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Weather Report - Stand Posted December 30, 2009 Report Share Posted December 30, 2009 I'm sorry, but I CAN'T just not Weather Report on this. This is gonna be funny. episode one- a unkown light 1/3 The silver sufer arrives due o the light and' date=' helps spiderman to follow th elight but when it happens again they as confonrt with the flame women. then they wait as misslie were fired at them. Really? I mean, REALLY?!?! Okay. let's take it from the top. CAPITALIZE NAMES. SPELL SURFER CORRECTLY. WHAT IS DUE O LIGHT?! PUT A PERIOD IN THERE. WHY DOES SPIDERMAN NEED TO FOLLOW THE LIGHT? WHY DO THEY NEED TO FIGHT THE FLAME WOMEN? WHY ARE THEY EVEN HERE? WHY IS SPIDERMAN HERE? WHERE DID THE MISSILE COME FROM? CAN YOU SPELL MISSILE CORRECTLY?! CAPITALIZE THEN AND SPIDERMAN. episode two- a unkown light 2/3 After, killing the flame women, the sliver sufer and spider carries on heading towards the light, but as it appered more villans & hero appaer. with an rreturn of an old friend the battle rages on. WHY'S THERE A COMMA AFTER AFTER? WHY DID THEY HAVE TO KILL THEM? SINCE WHEN DID HEROES KILL GUYS?! WHY ARE THEY FOLLOWING THE LIGHT?! WHY DIDN'T YOU CAPITALIZE THEIR NAMES? SPELL APPEARED CORRECTLY. WHICH VILLAINS?! WHICH HERO? WHY ONLY ONE?! WHAT'S A RRETURN? WHO'S THE OLD FRIEND?! episode three- a unkown light 3/3 Finally after defending the newly come villans the spiderman and the sliver surfer confont the light Angel but as the fight goes on the Angel expisons and, the light swep though new york and as peter parker once again try to stop the black suit taking over, the sliver sufer begin to have douts about spiderman as the allies made they HQ.WHAT HAPPENED? WE SAW NO FIGHT! CAPITALIZE NAMES. SPELL CONFRONT CORRECTLY. WHO IS THE LIGHT ANGEL? WHY IS ONLY ANGEL CAPITALIZED? WHAT IS EXPISIONS?! WHY COULDN'T YOU SPELL SWEEP? CAPITALIZE NEW YORK. WHERE DID THE BLACK SUIT COME OUT FROM?! WASN'T IT DEAD? WHY IS HE PETER NOW INSTEAD OF SPIDER MAN? WHY IS HE HAVING DOUBTS?! episode four- a prison break as peter parker gives into the black suit, the sliver sufer trys to stop him planning a prison break to break out cat women. After the sliver sufer fades away, the allies begin trying to stop crime and stopping spiderman breaking cat women out of peison as well as tryignt o re caughter them. as the X-men soon apper fighting the kingpin new Heavy soliders.WHY IS NOBODY HELPING HIM WITH THE SUIT? CAN'T YOU SPELL TRIES? WHY IS HE BREAKING CAT WOMAN OUT OF PRISON? SPELL IT AS SURFER, NOT SUFER. WHY IS HE FADING AWAY, WHY ARE THESE GUYS TRYING TO STOP SPIDERMAN FROM BREAKING CAT WOMAN OUT WHEN YOU JUST SAID IT WAS ONLY SILVER SURFER WHO WAS DOING THAT, AND WHAT'S PEISON, TRYIGNT, AND CAUGHTER?! WHY ARE THE X-MEN HERE? SPELL APPEAR CORRECTLY. WHY ISN'T TE KINGPIN'S NAME CAPITALIZED?! WHO ARE THE HEAVY SOLDIERS?! OR SOLIDERS?! episode fiver- wedding of evil As the allies HQ is under attack by the King pin forces and as the hero's fight, the newly wed wife and huband bring gathing a small group of villans to join they gang and as they go alone into a room, other villans fight wonder women as she stops them robbing a bankk hoping to get into the Clan.WHAT THE HELL IS CHAPTER FIVER?! WHERE'S THE HQ?! WHY IS KINGPIN TWO WORDS NOW?! WHY ARE THERE A HUSBAND AND WIFE HERE NOW?! SPELL HUSBAND CORRECTLY. WHAT'S A GATHING? SPELL VILLAINS CORRECTLY. WHY ARE THEY GOING INTO A RANDOM ROOM?! WHERE DID WONDER WOMAN COME FROM?! WHY DID THEY NEED TO ROB A BANK?! WHAT'S A BANKK? WHY ARE THEY TRYING TO GET INTO THE CLAN?! DID ANYBODY EVEN PROOFREAD THAT?! THAT IS NOT FAN FICTION, IT'S LIKE AN EPISODE DESCRIPTION FOR A REALLY CRAPPY TELEVISION SHOW. YOU FORGOT ALL ABOUT MANY CHARACTERS, AND YOU GAVE NO REASONING FOR ANYTHING, NOT TO MENTION TAKE AWAY ALL STORY ELEMENTS, SUCH AS EXPOSITION, DIALOGUE, DESCRIPTION, AND MOST OF ALL, ENTERTAINMENT, OTHER THAN LAUGHING AT THE STUPID STUFF YOU JUST TYPED HERE. MAKE A REAL STORY, FOR PETE'S SAKE!! Okay, yelling voice off. Still, it sucks hardcore. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SmallieBigs Posted December 30, 2009 Report Share Posted December 30, 2009 Don't worry Weather Report about the Web of Shadows one I did a mini Weather Report! Called the Daily News! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Weather Report - Stand Posted December 30, 2009 Report Share Posted December 30, 2009 Eh, VHAAAAAAAT?!?! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SmallieBigs Posted December 30, 2009 Report Share Posted December 30, 2009 I stole your job, go find another job. In easier words. I am critic in training. So Weather Report the other Fan-Fics. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Weather Report - Stand Posted December 30, 2009 Report Share Posted December 30, 2009 Dah, okay, I guess you've got my approval to WR fics. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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