Story: Rock Creek's Light [PG-16] New Chapter Is Up (5)

[LuffyLaxer]

So yeah This is my story. Let's start with the prologue.

How is this for a prologue?

 

[spoiler=Plot]

Tiberius was Your average Poor kid in high school. No one cares about him or what happened to him except for Celena Valentine and Andrew Rhodes. Tiberius was always getting beat up and tossed around at school and everywhere else, until one day where at a party Tiberius drink punch that has been spiked with not only liquor, but an experimental drug. Now Tiberius has gotten incredible powers. Will he use them for good? Or will he turn on the cruel world that has destroyed him and his family and kill everyone.

 

 

 

[spoiler=Prologue]

Tiberius is running throughout the city. He's never run this far, this fast, in his life. Tiberius looks around as if he has lost something. Tiberius Keeps checking everywhere until he comes to cross street at 55th and Main. Tiberius stops to catch his breath, but while he is panting he hears a noise. He looks up to see a 5 year old version of himself. His five year old self was smiling and had a box of candy in his hand.

 

The 5 year old was walking with a 5'9" 138 pound women who's face wasn't there. She looked at the 5 year old version of his self and from out of the blank face a smile appeared. Tiberius looked at the woman with no face an cried.

 

Then, from down the street, a Black SUV rode down the street. Tiberius, knowing what was going on, yelled, "Mom move!!!" But the Lady with no face didn't hear him as she stopped at the corner with 5 year old version of himself, who had stopped to tie his shoe. The black SUV window went down as it went pass the two and a Uzi popped out from within. Then the shots rang out.

 

The faceless lady went down. Blood spewed her body as she laid on the cold ground motionless. The 5 year old, who had just finished tying his shoe at the time the gun had fired, laid in the street, crying because he had gotten shot in the shoulder. Tiberius ran over towards the two and looked at the scene, crying the entire time. Then the SUV stopped and the door opened. A man in a black mask stepped out and said,"Do you want to join her?" in a cruel way. The he holds up the gun to Tiberius and pulls the trigger.

 

Tiberius wakes up from the nightmare with sweat drenching the bed in the abandoned apartment complex. 'Damn,' Tiberius thinks to himself. 'Not that dream again.'

 

 

 

[spoiler=Chapter 1: Tiberius In Trouble]

Tiberius looks at his watch. The time was 7:00. "Well i guess I should get ready for for school," Tiberius said groggily as he stood up. Tiberius then walks over to the bathroom and takes a quick shower. (If in case you didn't notice, the abandoned apartment complex water still works. It will be explained in a later chapter) Afterwards, Tiberius brushes his teeth with some toothpaste he bought.

 

Tiberius then sits on his bed. Still thinking on the dream, He puts his clothes on. 'Why can't I stop having that dream?' Tiberius thinks. 'And more importantly, why does my life have to be so crappy?'

 

You see, Tiberius father died at the age of one. After Tiberius' Mother died when he was five, he was sent into the foster care system. But, he did not find a happy home. Every foster family Tiberius ended up staying with was abusive and cruel. One family beat him to the point of death and then left him on the side of the road. Of course, No one ever did arrest these families or press charges. Then, 5 years ago, Tiberius thought it was enough and ran away from his last foster family. Then he stumbled on these apartments. It was here he made a home.

 

'Then again,' Tiberius thought while putting his shirt on.'I must have done something in a past-life in order for me to be suffering so. Why me?'

 

Tiberius huffs a sigh as he ties his raggedy Addidas goodyear shoes on. Then, picking up his school bag that he left by the door, He opens the door to the apartment and leaves the building.

 

Tiberius lives near the high school in which he goes to, Rock Creek High, which is a public school. So for Tiberius, it isn't so hard to get to school. Tiberius arrives at school at 8:00, 30 minutes early. Tiberius then sits on one of the school's green and blue benches and pulls out his history textbook, The Way Of The World! Tiberius goes back to chapter 2 to re-read his homework.

 

Then, shadowed version of three people form over Tiberius as he reads. Tiberius then looks up and sees his rival. 'Oh crap,' Tiberius thinks in his head. 'I'm done for.'

 

Talvance Raine was a Football Player and a huge Jock at the school. He was also named Best-looking in the school by mostly all of the women. This, however, did not change the way he acts towards Tiberius. In fact, this only made it worse. Talvance has always picked on Tiberius ever since they were in 5th grade together. Even though they are seniors now, that doesn't stop Talvance from beating the crap out of Tiberius any chance he got.

 

"Hey look at this fool,"Talvance said with a grin on his face. "Hey guys he didn't say his greeting towards us. Nathan? What do you think we should do to him?"

 

Nathan just smiles and says," Well I think we should give him a beat-down the likes of which he has never scene."

 

Talvance smirks at his comrade. "Yes, that's just what I was thinking. Get him guys." Talvance said lounging for him.

 

And for the next 2 minutes, Tiberius was punched stomped on and beaten on by the group of boys. Tiberius tried to fight back, but it was of no use. 'Great,' Tiberius thinks to himself as he is being pummeled. 'School hasn't even started yet, and I'm already getting beat up.'

 

Talvance smile as he raises his fist high in the air. But before it even comes down to hit, it gets caught by another hand. Talvance turns and sees...

 

Haha cliffhanger for Chapter 2

Please Rate and review.

 

 

[spoiler=Chapter 2:Thank You God!]

Talvance turns and sees Tiberius best friend, Andrew Rhodes.

 

Andrew smirks. "I know your not picking on my best friend. It's a bad decision for all of you." Andrew says. Talvance looked at this newcomer with hate in his eyes. Although Talvance was very well built himself, He knew that Andrew would beat the ever-living stuffing out of him. Slowly, he backs-off of Tiberius. Following his lead, Nathan and the other crony, who name was Jack, backed-off as well. Andrew then let go of Talvance's hand and walked over to see if Tiberius was okay.

 

Talvance shrugged. "You lucky Tiberius. Without Andrew, you would be a bloody pulp right now. Come on guys, Let's head in." The other bullies shrugged and followed their leader into the school building.

 

Meanwhile, Andrew sat his buddy up on the school's benches near the front entrance. 'Tiberius was lucky,' Andrew thought to himself. 'They could have did much worse.' "Tiberius are you ok?" Andrew says. "Does anything feel broken?"

 

"Just my pride," Tiberius says in a joking way, but then winces when he tries to laugh. "Ow. My face feels like someone mashed it together like mashed potatoes."

 

"Isn't that what happened to it in the first place?" says a new voice. "Erus, That enough," says the other feminine voice. Andrew and Tiberius looked up and saw their friend Celena Valentine with her friend and her cousin Erus Ghiaccio. "You can't say that about Tiberius. You barely know him." Celena says." You know you should try and be less rude to him."

 

"Yeah I'll do that," Erus says. "When Tiberius gets a better face to match my new adititude, sparkling personality, and my S*** starts sparkling like diamonds. I'm going inside the school. Better in there than looking at Tiberius ugly mug." And with that last comment, Erus walked right in the school.

 

"Gee tell me how you really feel," Tiberius says sarcastically. "What an insensitive prick! Here I am, all beat up, Then, he gonna say all that! I should beat the living crud outta him."

 

"Don't mind him Tiberius," Celena says as she sits next to Tiberius. Tiberius starts bushing, but only Andrew can see it, which makes him smile. "He's always been cold to others. That's how he lives." Celena opened her mouth to continue but the bell rang. "The warning bell. We have to get to class. Come on." Celena says. "Are you gonna be okay?"

 

"Yeah, I'm okay," Tiberius says not wanting her to worry. "Go ahead, Me and Andrew will catch up." Celena looks at his black eye and sighs then turns toward the school.

 

Tiberius then looks at Andrew. Andrew's had that 'I know you like her look' on his face. "Before you say it Andrew," Tiberius said cutting of Andrew. "No I haven't told her yet. And no, I can't tell her that I like her in that way. It might mess up the friendship we already have."

 

Andrew shook his head. "You know it might make your friendship stronger. Give a try. You'll never know." Andrew then looks at his watch. They had 5 minutes to get to class. "Come on Tiberius, we gotta make it to class. Can you walk?"

 

Tiberius looks at Andrew like he's stupid. "Of course I can walk. I just can feel my left eye. I'll be fine. Let's Go."

And with that, Both students rush off to class.

 

Chapter 3 should be up in about 3 to 4 days. Thanks for reading!!!

 

 

[spoiler=Chapter 3: Party!!]

 

At last, The final bell rang, and Tiberius, Celena, and Andrew walked out of their history class to their lockers. They finally reach the lockers after about a minute of walking. Tiberius, who doesn't ever place anything in his locker, stood by the lockers waiting for the two to finish.

 

"Well that class was fun," Tiberius said.

 

"Yeah, it was as fun as watching Nascar." Andrew says sarcastically. "Seriously, that man is soooo boring. I feel like cutting my eyes out every time I hear the man speak."

 

Celena looks at Andrew like he grew two heads. "I don't know about you Andrew, But I happen to like the class. It's invigorating, it's fact filled, it's..."

 

"Boring." Andrew finishes laughing. "Please, That man could make my grandpa sound exciting."

 

"Okay guys," Tiberius intervened. "I guess everyone has a difference of a opinion. I personally like the class itself. Mister Rupert teaching it however is a bit on the dull side. But I manage to ace the test, so I should be fine."

 

"I still don't know how you do it man," Andrew looks at his friend with a confused look on his face. "How do you ace Mr. Rupert's tests? Those things are super hard. Even if I studied every night for them, I'd still get a C. How in the world do you get an A?"

 

"I study," Tiberius begins. "And it also helps not to fall sleep in class." Tiberius finishes looking over at Andrew.

 

"I do no-" Andrew begins, But then he remembers just the last class he finished he fell asleep. "Okay. Never mind. I do. but you gotta admit his class is boring." Andrew finishes while shutting his locker.

 

"Yes, The man can be boring," Tiberius says. "But I find that focusing on the work helps me out." Celena then shuts her locker and the three walk towards the front door of the school. But, as they exited someone shouted, "Hey wait up!" The three turned to the sound.

 

"Oh look," Celena says pointing to the boy running up. "It's James Finkle."

 

James Finkle was a science whiz and a all around A student. But like Tiberius, had a bully problem. Not just with Talvance mind. Most of the school has beaten him up for some odd reason. James was a rich kid, but he barely had any friends except for Tiberius, who treated him well. He has been stressed out from the bullying, But after a while, he mellowed out.

 

"I'm *huffs* Glad I caught you guys," James said. "Here you guys go." Tiberius, Celena and Andrew picked up the pieces of paper, which turned out to be an invitation. "It's for a party that I'm hosting," James said. "I got a DJ and everything. Oh guess what's the best news of all?"

 

Andrew looked up thoughtfully and said," You got Hookers?" Tiberius and Celena looked at each other before slapping Andrew upside the head. "Ow geez, what was that for?"

 

Celena said, "For being a dunce. Hmmm. It's a disco party?"

 

"Nope that's wrong too." James said.

 

"Oh I got it," Tiberius says. "You got a live band to play."

 

'And that's strike three," James says in gleefulness. "Talvance isn't coming to the party. I'm safe for another day!!"

 

"Well wait," Tiberius says thinking of something that James might have overlooked. "Wouldn't Talvance just crash the party anyway? He is known to be a party crasher."

 

"No," James says. "I know he is not coming because Talvance and his frineds are going to Scottsdale for the weekend with Talvance's father and mine. They had a Business meeting to go to and Talvance wanted to go to Scottsdale for the fun of it."

 

"Wow," Tiberius says suddenly enthusiastic about the party. "That's makes me want to go."

 

"Well, I'm sold," Andrew says. "I have nothing to do this weekend and a party this Saturday would liven things up a bit."

 

"I'll go," Celena said. At this Tiberius smiled brightly but hid it from everyone else. "What type of music will play?"

 

"Hip-Hop, R&B, Alternative, and Electronic music," James said with glee. Then he looked at his watch. "Oh my look at the time. I must see my father off. Uhh, remember, that the party starts at eight. See you guys."

 

"Bye," the three chorus back. Celena then turns to Tiberius.

 

"Tiberius," Celena said, making Tiberius look at her. "Do you want a ride? To the party I mean."

 

"Like I let a thing like him get in my car," Erus says from behind the three. "Please. I wouldn't let him within an inch of my car."

 

"Gee," Tiberius says sarcastically. "An I thought you loved me."

 

"Erus," Celena said to her cousin warningly. "Not right now."

 

"No it's okay," Tiberius says. "I don't want to cause trouble with between you and your cousin. I'll just walk there. It's only a 3 mile walk from my apartment. Look I'll see you guys later." And with that, Tiberius turns and runs away from the small group, hopping over a school fence and disappearing behind a building.

 

"Tiberius!!" Celena calls after him but it is too late. "Gee Erus, thanks a lot. Oh I hope he will be okay."

 

Andrew looks at Celena. "He'll be fine. Tiberius is made of stronger stuff than anybody can throw at him."

 

"Yeah right," Erus says smugly. Andrew turns around only to see Celena stand in between the two.

 

"No," Celena says. "This will not happen. Andrew, Not everything needs to be solved by throwing fists. And Erus, I'm ashamed of you. Grandma doesn't want you to diss my friends like that." After hearing that Erus walks over to his car.

 

"I'll see you at the party Andrew," Celena says. "Bye."

 

"Bye Celena," Andrew says as Celena turns towards her cousin's car. After saying bye, Andrew then turns to the opposite parking lot of the school and walks towards his car.

 

 

[spoiler=Chapter 4:Well...Damn]

Saturday Afternoon. 5:00 pm

 

In a Big 4 story House a figure moves silently in the house. He gets ready for the event, putting out chairs, food, and other necessities. When it comes out with the punch, However, he adds a unknown substance to the Punch.

 

"Now," The figure says hopping out of the shadows to reveal James. "Everyone will know what it is like to be hurt every single day of their lives. My own formula of Poison is strong enough to kill a elephant. Luckily, this poison has a 2-3 day delay in activation. Once this activates, everyone will die. Justice will have been served."

 

Then James hears the door bell ring. "Oh must be the DJ here to set-up." James lets the man enter and helps him set up.

 

Time: 7:58

Tiberius walks up towards James's drive-way. Tiberius was in his most fashionable attire. By fashionabe attire, I mean the clothes of his that were the less rattiest of them all. Tiberius had gotten an early start and it took him an hour to get here on foot, but he got here.

 

Tiberius walked up the long drive way and went onto the Front porch. Tiberius was about to knock on the door when a car drove up. *Hey it's Andrew's Car.* Tiberius thinks as he waves at his friend. Andrew turns off his car, gets out and walks over to Tiberius.

 

Grabbing Tiberius's hand, he gives a firm shake and says, "What up man?"

 

Tiberius says," Nothing much. Time to go inside." Tiberius rang the bell and in 3 seconds, James opened the door.

 

"Hey Tiberius," James says as he let them come in. "Hey Andrew. Welcome to my house."

 

Tiberius looked around and was amazed at how big James' house is. The party room was next to the front door, so Tiberius saw the DJ spinning the songs. The Current song was Whatever You Like.

 

"Yo James," Andrew said to James. "This is ballin man. Cool."

 

"Umm," James said. "Thanks."

 

Tiberius then hears another car and it turns out that the car was Celena's car. Tiberius looked through the window and saw that she brought Erus. Andrew moved next to Tiberius and said," Well you can't wish for everything right?"

 

"I guess not," Tiberius said as Celena and Erus walked into the door. In order to be polite, Tiberius said "Hi Celena, Erus."

 

"Hi Tiberius how are you doing," Celena says. "I was worried about you. You ran off before I could say bye." At the end of that sentence, Celena hugs Tiberius. In Tiberius ear, Celena whispers in his right ear, "I've told Erus to behave. I'm sorry for what he did. Oh, and there is something I wanted to talk to you about. Come find me when your ready." Celena then walked over to her cousin and they both walked to the chairs in the dance hall and sat down.

 

Tiberius had a feeling that tonight was going to be great. Andrew looked at his smiling friend like he was finally happy. "Come on Tiberius," Andrew said. "Let's break it out."

 

 

[spoiler=Chapter 5: Party Central]

The back of James house... (Time 9:50)

 

Three figures move as silently as they can and open the back door of James' House. When light shines from the hallway on them it turns out to be Talvance, Nathan and Jack.

 

Jack whispers to Talvance," Dude what are we doing here? Why didn't we go to the conferance with your dad? We could have been having fun."

 

Talvance looks at Jack like he was stupid. "The reason we came was to screw up this party, Numbnuts" Talvance whispers. "Especially since we got this." Talvance pulls out a bottle of Hennessey from his inner jacket pocket. "We make everyone at this party wasted.

 

"Good Idea," Nathan whispers. "I know for a fact that James hates alcohol. Tiberius does also as a matter of fact. We shall be killing to birds with one stone."

 

"This is why I am the boss," Talvance says as they enter the kitchen quietly. They see 4 bowls of punch in the Dance room that haven't been touched yet. Talvance hurries and puts in A equal quantity of Hennessey into each bowl. Then he rushes quietly back to his friends. "Now all We have to do is wait for the right moment and Surprise James. He will never know what hit him.

 

(10:20 PM)

 

Tiberius listens to the beat of the music and sits with Andrew. For some reason even unknown to him, Any type of music has always soothed his soul. From this Hip-Hop Music, to Classical, Any type of music made him feel at peace. Tiberius begins to smile a mysterious smile. Andrew noticed the look on Tiberius' face. Andrew rarely sees Tiberius smile so this was a once in a lifetime treat.

 

"Hey Yo!" Andrew says breaking Tiberius out of his trance. "Want something to drink? You've been dancing up a storm all night." Tiberius had been dancing since the party began, so he had been sweaty.

 

"Yeah but I'll get it," Tiberius said as he got up. "You want me to bring you yours?"

 

"Nah I'm fine," Andrew says but motions for Tiberius to come closer. "You haven't talked to Celena yet. You should. The party is half way over."

 

"I am going to talk with her," Tiberius says looking in the direction of Celena, who was dancing on the dance floor. "Just working up my nerve is all."

 

"Man, By the time you do that we'll have a Chinese president," Andrew quips at Tiberius. "How about after you drink something, you go out and talk to her? She isn't going to bite, much."

 

"Oh quit it," Tiberius says. "I was going to do that anyway." Tiberius then ends the conversation by walking over to get some punch. He was genuinely surprised when none of the punch was gone. *Well I guess no one was thirsty,* Tiberius thought to himself as he got some punch. After pouring it into a cup, Tiberius turned and watch Celena dance some more.

 

(10:30)

Celena had been dancing for about half in hour now. She was having lots of fun and didn't want to stop. But something then caught attention in the corner of her eye. It was Tiberius. It seemed that he was watching her dance. Celena surprised at first but remembered that she liked him to so Celena went over to him. By the outer expression on his face, Tiberius looked nervous about something.

 

"Hey Tiberius," Celena said as stood by him. "Let's dance to this song. It a Slow jam."

 

"Ummm... Sure," Tiberius says as R Kelly's song came on. Celena dragged Tiberius over to the dance floor they began to slowly dance while the music played.

 

I'm going to Step in the name of love

Step in the name of Love, and I'm going ta

Clap in the name of love

Clap in the name of love.

 

"This one of my favorite R. Kelly Songs," Celena says a she lays her head on Tiberius' shoulders. Tiberius was blushing as red as a fire hydrant, but kept on dancing with her. *I should tell her now,* Tiberius thought as the song kept playing.

 

"Celena," Tiberius began unsure of himself.

 

"Yes Tiberius?" Celena looks up at him with her sapphire eyes. Tiberius almost loses his nerve, but continues. There was something about this girl that made him feel so weak in the knees.

 

"I have something to tell you," Tiberius starts again, afraid of losing his nerve. "I... uhh... I like you a lot. no wait that's not it. I Like you a bunch? No that's not it either..."

 

Celena chuckles at Tiberius' attempts to thinks of the right thing to say. "Here how bout I try?" Celena pulls Tiberius' neck down and Kisses him with passion. Tiberius, surprised at first, Settles into the kiss and kisses back. *Hooray,*Tiberius says in his mind. *This was all I wanted.*

 

(10:45)

Erus sits down next to Andrew, who was watching Celena and Tiberius dance. Erus drank some punch and looked over at Andrew.

 

"Andrew," Erus said getting the attention of the teen in question. "What in the world are you staring at? Some girl that your interested in? Because I highly doubt anyone would date you."

 

Andrew turns towards Erus. "What is up with you man? Besides," Andrew pauses to point out what was happening on the dance floor. "I'm not looking at any specific girl. I'm looking at your cousin making out with my best friend Go Tiberius!!" The last part Andrew says over to Tiberius who blushes and breaks away the kiss.

 

Erus looks up infuriated. He begins to walk over, but Andrew pulls him back to his seat. "You crazy man? Either I'm going to beat you up or Celena will beat you up. Let them be at peace together. They deserve each other, Tiberius especially."

 

Erus looks over to the two and realizes what he was about to do. He sits down and goes into a posture of deep thought. Andrew looks at Erus and slowly nods his head. "While you think on that, I'm going to grab some punch. All this cheering has made me thirsty." Andrew walks over to the punch bowl and gets a glass full of punch.

 

I'm ending the Chapter here. Chapter six should be up within a week or two. Thanks for Reading.

 

 

[ImmortalDawn]

My opinion, not bad for a prologue.

[LuffyLaxer]

Cool thanks. I tried to set the tone for the story.

[bury the year]

Write in past tense, not present. It sounds off otherwise. And why give specific measurements? Just say "a tall woman." :/

[~Emo~]

No idea what the plot is.

 

You need to put some sense of a plot.

[LuffyLaxer]

It was suppose to be a dream sequence. Therefore i could write in the present tense. But i see your point, thanks for the advice.

 

And I try to give people a visual on certain things. Saying tall would be to general for me.

 

I should Have Chapter 1 up by christmas

 

@ Emo the plot is in a different thread. But I'll put it up here when I Add chapter one.

[LuffyLaxer]

The thread is edited with the plot for those who are to lazy to look. Chapter one will be up later today.

[RyanAtlus]

Seems decent, but I don't disaggree with your statement that present tenses can be used for dreams.

[LuffyLaxer]

Thanks.

 

Sorry but unfortunatley My chapter one has to wait for sunday. I didn't see I had to go to my father's this weekend.

[LuffyLaxer]

bump story has been updated.

chapter one is up. Chapter two will be up soon.

[ImmortalDawn]

Pretty good first chapter, keep it up and good luck your story.

[Aequitas]

Hm, this prolouge and first chapter is pretty good, but I think you will have to step it up for the next chapter. It's good, but I think it can be great. Good luck.

[LuffyLaxer]

Thanks for all the encouragement guys. It really helps when writing these things. It makes it alot easier to write.

[Aequitas]

No problem. When will the next chapter be up?

[LuffyLaxer]

Usually It takes me two day to write it out before I type it sooo... I think either friday or Saturday.

[Tempest Dahlia]

You shouldn't be speaking to us in the chapters. lnstead, you should just reveal the story accordingly. (I'm referring to the parentheses.)

 

l take it this is third-person limited? Or are you just talking from the narrator's point of view for this chapter?

 

lt's a good start and a good idea. However, l think you need to find the correct balance of details. Many parts of the story was either under or over detailed.

 

Otherwise, good job, and i'll give this a 7/10 for the time being.

[LuffyLaxer]

Okay thanks for criticisms. I need those to to become a better writer.

 

I'm half way through writing Chapter 2. it maybe could be up tomorrow.

[LuffyLaxer]

Bump

 

Here is chapter 2. Filled with Cakes and Pies!!!

[Lord JZ of the Enigma]

Ha ha ha ha! Talvance being the jerk I raised him to be FTW! I like this....I'll be checking up on this often....

[LuffyLaxer]

Thanks for the review. I like it when character act like their suppose to be. Wait till chapters 5-9. He'll be so nasty.

[Tempest Dahlia]

Slight grammar errors.

l dunno about this chapter... Seems a little... Bland? Rushed? =/

I dunno, but something is missing. The fight scene was a little to cliché for my tastes (Dunno how everyone else feels, it's probably just me), and it was the first thing l had to read, so it kinda ruined it for me.

I hope the next chapter is better...

[LuffyLaxer]

Well yes It was rushed a bit. But i was trying to set up the story and i went with it. this next one should be better.

[Aequitas]

The new chapter was decent. I little too much dialouge, though.

 

I'll be reading chapter 3 once it comes out.

[LuffyLaxer]

Cool and thanks for liking it. This was to set the stage for all future events. chapter three will kinda be like that to.

[LuffyLaxer]

chapter 3 is up.

this chapter will set the stage for all the further events.

chapter for should be up by saturday.