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In 2012, a secret underground Military facility conducted experiments to create a “Super Soldier”. Being unable to use human test subjects, they used canines (dogs) for the experiments. But one thing lead to another and a virus was made. It was a unique form of Rabies, that only infects dogs, but the haze the virus created, blacked the sky so it was always night.

 

Within 28 hours, every dog in the world was infected with the virus. The virus made them extremely violent. As well as the ability to grow 1 foot taller. They are hungry for flesh. But the strange thing is, they seem to work together as a pack, highly unlikely……..

 

 

[spoiler=Character Profiles]

Use this to refer to characters and their weapons.

[spoiler=Nate]

Age: 19

Height: 5'9

Race: Caucasian

Bio: Woke up a the starts of the end. Wants to find truth.

Weapons: RE5_SIG_P226.jpg

 

[spoiler=Marlena]

Age: 23

Height: 5'7

Race: Caucasian

Bio: She works at a video store. Not much else has been reviled

Weapons: RE5_HK_P8.jpg.

 

[spoiler=Jake]

Age: 16

Height: 5'6

Race: Caucasian

Bio: Works at a video store with Marlena. He suffers from a gunshot wound to the side.

Weapons: RE5_Stun_Rod.jpgRE5_M29.jpg

 

 

[spoiler=chapters]

[spoiler=chapter one: The beginning of the End]

The sky is pitch black and there are screams coming from outside.

 

I had just awakened from a bad nights sleep when I heard that someone had broken into my house.

 

I walked slowly through the hall to see who it was.

 

As I slowly rounded the corner, my aunt’s body flung out from the living room onto the table. And tumbled down.

 

Me: Oh , crap!

 

I heard a loud barking noise coming from the living room.

 

I walked in and saw a Labrador Retriever. But this dog did not seem right. Its eyes were red and green foam was coming out of its mouth, and to top it all off, it was a lot bigger than any dog I have ever seen.

 

I made a mad dash for the door, the dog didn’t follow though, it went after my aunt. I think it was hungry, no wait, I KNOW it was hungry.

 

As I went outside, I saw the whole neighbor hood was trashed, there were fires, tipped over trash cans, beat up cars, just destruction every where.

 

I saw a woman run to her backyard, with three dogs chasing her.

 

I ran into the middle of the street, puzzled at what was going on.

 

I called my friend, James to see what was going on, but I got nothing.

 

I turned and saw my neighbor, Mr. Slezac, point a gun at me.

 

Mr. Slezac: Nate, get back boy, I don’t need you attracting anymore of those things!

 

Me: What things?

But before he could answer, he was attacked by the Dog that was originally in my house.

 

I picked up his gun and ran away. I was not sure if I could kill it or not, so I kept running.

 

I stopped as soon as I noticed that a school bus had crashed into a house.

 

 

I looked inside the bus to see what happened.

 

But I just saw two dogs eating a woman.

 

Me: Holy, crap!

 

I continued to run when I hit the street that led to a couple stores, so I followed it, until I reached a Video store.

 

I knocked to be let in, but one of the workers was reluctant to let me in.

 

Me: Lets me in! Come on!

 

Worker: I don’t think so, man. Its not safe out there.

 

Me: Come on you prick, let me in!

 

Worker: Insults? Well fine then, you can just stay out there forever with those “things”!

 

Things.

 

 

That word sent chills down my spine.

 

Me: Listen, please, just open the door,

 

Worker: Piss off!

 

It was then I remembered I had the gun I took from the late Mr. Slezac.

 

I pulled it out and pointed it at him.

 

Me: Listen, open this door or I will blow your brains out!

 

Worker: Marlena!

 

Suddenly a woman walked out from behind a row of videos.

 

Marlena: What’s going on, Jake?

 

Worker: Let this guy in.

 

Marlena: Are you crazy? Those things are out there!

 

Worker: (whispers) But he has a gun…

 

Marlena: ( looks at me) Screw you!

 

It hit me like a ton of bricks, before I could react, I had squeezed the trigger and shot Jake in the arm.

 

Worker: ( bleeding) Damn it!

 

Marlena opened to door and ran to attend Jake.

 

Me: I am really sorry…

 

But she ignored me.

 

Jake: I AM DYING! (cries)

 

Me: I didn’t mean too…

 

Marlena: What do you want anyway?

 

Me: I wanna know what going on. So tell me.

 

Marlena: No one knows. We all woke up, and these things just appeared and started killing people.

 

That word again.

 

It sent chills down my spine.

 

Me: The dogs you mean?

 

Marlena: Not anymore. God, dude, help me put pressure on this wound, while I get something to put on it.

 

Me: Okay.

 

Jake: Sorry for not letting you in.

 

Me: Sorry for shooting you.

 

Just as he was gonna say something else, Marlena screamed and I heard them.

 

 

The things.

 

 

[spoiler=chapter 2: Mad Dash]

I ran after Marlena.

 

Not caring what condition Jake was in.

 

As I approached her, a Pit Bull, three of them to be exact, ran toward me.

 

I opened fire.

 

I killed the first one by a shot to the head but the second one knocked me down.

 

I kicked it in the face but it was too strong and pushed me back.

 

It tried to bite me, but it failed.

 

Me: EAT THIS!

 

As it tried to bite me for a second time, I put the gun in its mouth and pulled the trigger.

 

It died and my focus shifted to the third one who was headed for Jake.

 

Jake: No, no, no ,no , no ,no!

 

I shot it in the back but it kept running.

 

I shot it two more times in the back to put it down for good.

 

Marlena: Eww, their blood, it smells.

 

Me: I know what you mean.

 

When we got back to Jake, Marlena dressed his wound and he stood up.

 

Jake: I think I will be a cat person after this.

 

I laughed, briefly.

 

Me: We can’t stay here, we got to go.

 

Marlena: Well, were do you think we should go?

 

Jake: And why should we listen to you? We barley KNOW you.

 

Me: Fine, you can stay here and die while I try to live.

 

Marlena: Lets not get drastic…

 

Jake: Go, see if we care!

 

Me: What will you do for food?

 

 

Jake’s face turned pale.

 

Jake: Fine, we will go with you.

 

Me: We need a car.

 

Marlena: We can use my car.

 

Me: Good idea. You guys dash for your car, and I’ll head for the police car over next to that Chinese restaurant, pick me up there.

 

Marlena: Why?

 

Me: there might be supplies we can use in there.

 

Jake: Lets do this!

 

We opened the door and made a dash for our destinations.

 

I noticed some dogs starting to chase them.

 

Me: No No No! Over here! Over here, you dumb dogs!

 

The dogs turned and chased me doggedly.

 

I turned and shot two in the head.

 

I quickly reloaded my gun and killed the remaining three with carefully placed headshots.

 

As I got to the car, I busted the window open and opened the door.

 

I found another pistol and a stun stick.

 

Marlena came back and got me.

 

I jumped in the back and we started off to the nearest gas station.

 

Me: Hey, Marlena.

 

Marlena: Yeah?

 

Me: Can you use a gun?

 

Marlena: I think, why?

 

Me: Here.

 

 

I handed her the other pistol I found.

 

Me: Jake, you can have this.

 

I game Jake the stun stick.

 

Jake: Gee thanks.

 

Jake rolled his eyes.

The nearest gas station was two miles away, but the only problem was when one dog found us, ten more found us.

 

 

[spoiler=Chapter three: Blood and Treats]

We got to the gas station without much trouble.

 

Me: Marlena, you fill the car up and I’ll get some food.

 

Jake: I think we should stay the night.

 

Marlena: Me too.

 

Me: To risky, they might find us.

 

Marlena: Not if we barricade ourselves inside.

 

I looked for an excuse not to, but I could not find one.

 

Me: Okay, I guess we can stay, one night.

 

We got Jake out of the car and took him inside and we barricaded the doors.

 

 

Jake: I think it will last the night.

 

Me: Well I don’t.

 

Marlena: Don’t act so morbid, umm… you never told us your name.

 

Me: My name is Nate.

 

Marlena: I see, well, Nate, we better get something to eat.

 

Jake: I agree.

 

As I walked through the aisles, I saw a dog.

 

A German Sheppard.

 

Eating two girls, one in which was alive.

 

I took out my gun but the dog saw me and darted to were Jake was.

 

Me: Jake, look out!

 

The dog pounced at him but he hit it with his stun stick.

 

The dog fell back and it tried to attack him again but I shot it twice and killed it.

 

I went back to the girls it was eating and shot the live one.

 

Marlena walked to us.

 

Marlena: What the hell happened?

 

Me: Stupid dog.

 

Marlena: Are you two all right?

 

Jake: Never better.

 

Me: I am gonna look and see if there is a blanket or something behind the counter.

 

I looked at the cash register and decided against stealing the money.

 

While looking back there, I found a Revolver.

 

Me: Guys, look what I found.

 

Jake got up rather quickly.

 

Jake: Gimme that, Nate!

 

Jake took the gun.

 

Jake: I need something other than this damn stick.

 

Me: Whatever.

 

Marlena: There is a back room over here. Lets check it out.

 

We went into the back and heard a chewing noise.

 

I turned the lights on and saw ten, ten dead bodies being eaten by seven dogs.

 

Marlena: sheet!

 

 

The dogs turned and started growling at us.

 

Me: Run!

 

Jake hobbled behind us.

 

Jake: Guys wait up!

 

Me: Marlena, go and find some place safe to hide, I am going to get Jake.

 

Jake: GET AWAY FROM ME!

 

Jake started shooting the dogs, killing 5 of them, but two still continued to chase him.

 

I jumped to the side and shot one dog in the head.

 

The last one charged Jake as he was reloading.

 

Jake: Screw you!

 

Jake smacked it with his stun stick then shot it.

 

Marlena ran over to use.

 

Marlena: Come on, I think I found a place were we can make are beds for the night.

 

I looked at her and smiled.

 

Me: Thanks for the idea.

 

We started making our beds but we only made to beds.

 

Me: Damn.

 

Marlena: Me and Jake can share one and you can have the other.

 

Me: But…I…uh

 

Jake: Good night, Nate.

 

I turned and got into my bed an fell asleep.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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It's just stupid, I can accept the fact they want to make a "Super Soldier" of sorts. First flaw - you chose dogs. =/ Then a biological virus creates a haze, emitted from dogs that covers what I assume to be the entire earth. (Flaws 2 & 3). Fourth flaw, within 28 hours every dog in the world is infected. Flaw 5, you say it's unlikely for dogs to work in packs. Flaw 6; you write a bit mongy and most importantly of all, flaw 7; you didn't capitalise the 'P' in 'Prologue'. That is all, I think.

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It's just stupid' date=' I can accept the fact they want to make a "Super Soldier" of sorts [b']War is still going on, so thats a perfectly reasonable thing that they can do[/b]. First flaw - you chose dogs. Its called animal testing, there not just gonna make something and give it to soldiers without testing it first. =/ Then a biological virus creates a haze, emitted from dogs that covers what I assume to be the entire earth. The dogs create a chemical caused by the virus that creates the haze. (Flaws 2 & 3). Fourth flaw, within 28 hours every dog in the world is infected.Its airborne >.> Flaw 5, you say it's unlikely for dogs to work in packs. The dogs have rabies, last time i checked, rabies did not make dogs work in packs. Flaw 6; you write a bit mongy and most importantly of all, flaw 7; you didn't capitalise the 'P' in 'Prologue'. That is all, I think.

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nice chapter 3

 

Personally I don't know if an RPG is smart. Yes it kills a lot quickly' date=' but the force of the explosion also can hurl objects away and towards you, that can include infected dogs

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Well, thats the same problem with the Grenade Launcher.

 

But its unlikely the hurled dogs would be alive.

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It's just stupid' date=' I can accept the fact they want to make a "Super Soldier" of sorts [b']War is still going on, so thats a perfectly reasonable thing that they can do[/b]. First flaw - you chose dogs. Its called animal testing, there not just gonna make something and give it to soldiers without testing it first. I know what animal testing is, explain why dogs though? =/ Then a biological virus creates a haze, emitted from dogs that covers what I assume to be the entire earth. The dogs create a chemical caused by the virus that creates the haze. There aren't enough dogs to create a sufficient amount of haze to surround the entire earth (Flaws 2 & 3). Fourth flaw, within 28 hours every dog in the world is infected.Its airborne >.> So is Swine Flu... Flaw 5, you say it's unlikely for dogs to work in packs. The dogs have rabies, last time i checked, rabies did not make dogs work in packs. This I accept defeat on.Flaw 6; you write a bit mongy and most importantly of all, flaw 7; you didn't capitalise the 'P' in 'Prologue'. That is all, I think.

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