Poke'mon XD Taken To The Max

[viserdragon]

Well this is my first time posting up my story so don't go all nuts on talken about it if is wrong just tell me what u think

 

[spoiler=Chapter 1 A New Journey Begins]

It's been nearly a month since Ash and Pikachu had come back from the Sinnoh Region after competeing in the Sinnoh Pokemon League and though they didn't come out on top,he and Pikachu still strive to become pokemon masters.On there way to Proffessor oaks lab(who had called them earlier)something had stopped them dead in there tracks. Pika? said Pikachu They saw someone in a long black leather jacket with long emarld green hair.I wonder who that is?said Ash Pika?said Pikachu hey are you lost?asked Ash as they walked closer to him,but just as they got close to him he turned around.He stared at them with red and green eye's and a grin that sent chill's up and down there spine's.Ash and Pikachu slowly started backing away.There's someting not right about this guy! said Ash Chuu! said Pikachu Just then there was a big gust of wind that came out of nowhere.Where did this wind come from! said Ash holding onto Pikachu.Ash looked up and saw the guy standing there and around his neck he saw a necklace.It had black beads,four black teeth and a dragon on it.Just then the wind stopped,and Ash got back up as the guy walked off an disappeared into the darkness of the woods.

 

That was intense.I wonder who was that guy though! said Ash Ka? said Pikachu Yeah your right,but we better hurry on to Proffessor Oaks.said Ash Pikachu jumped on his shoulder,they hurried own and a few minutes later they arrived at Proffessor Oaks lab.They went in and saw Proffessor Oak on his computer.Hey Proffessor Oak we're here.said Ash Ahhh! Ash,Pikachu i'm so glad you could make it! said Proffessor Oak hey Ash and Pikachu! said Tracy Pika!said Pikachu Now Ash i have a mission for you! said Proffessor Oak Sure! What is it? asked Ash I need you to go to the Jetix Region and help get back a experimental pokemon that was stolen.said Prffessor Oak I've never heard of the Jetix Rigion before.Where's that?asked Ash To the far north of the Sinnoh Region.I'm surpized you've never heard of it.It's known for being the largest region in the world and for the large number of pokemon that have been discovered there.said Proffessor Oak Wow! Sounds exciting! When do we leave?asked Ash Pikaaaa!said Pikachu You will leave immediently!said Proffessor Oak I hear the Jetix Region has a lot of fun stuff to do.I might visit later one day.said Tracy Me to! They have one of the best pokemon schools in the world.Oh yea speacking of that i know while your in the Jetix Region after you have finished your misson you just might won't to enter the Jetix Poke'mon League.said Proffessor Oak He passed Ash a small red and yellow box.He grabed it and looked at it and Pikachu looked at it.

 

What is this?asked Ash It's your new Dimensinal Poka'dex! To activate it just put it on your arm.said Proffessor Oak Ash set it own his arm and all of a sudden a band strapped around his arm.Pi!said Pikachu Alsome!said Ash That poka'dex hold data on every poke'mon discovered in the Kanto,Johto,Hoenn,and Sinnoh Regions,anlong with data of poke'mon from the Jetix Region.It also come's with a map of the Jetix Region.explained Proffessor Oak That's alsome!now we're ready to go!said Ash excitily Not quit!said Proffessor Oak What do you mean?asked Ash Your going to need more then one poke'mon to win battle's in the Jetix Region,so i won't you to take two poke'mon this time.said Proffessor Oak Why?asked Ash Just to be safe i won't you to carry at least two poke'mon with you,because the wild poke'mon are unbelively strong there.So you need to carry two pokemon with you if you plan on captureing some poke'mon from the Jetix Region.said Proffessor Oak Are the wild poke'mon really that strong? What about the trainers?said Ash You won't to find out?said a voice Ash turned around and saw a boy standing in the door. Who are you?asked Ash My name is Jamie and like i asked.Do you won't to find out how strong Jetix Region trainers are?asked Jamie Ok!said Ash Pikaa!said Pikachu They all went outside and Tracy was there battle anouncer.This battle be between trainier Ash and trainier Jamie.Each trainier will only be able to use one pokemon each.Now trainiers begin!shouted Tracy Your up Pikachu.said Ash Pika!said Pikachu and he jumped out infront of Ash ready to battle. Humm..said Jamie staring at Ash and Pikachu,then he took out a ultra balll and threw it.Let's og Letal.shouted Jamie Just then a poke'mon appeared that Ash had never seen before.It was completly white except for it's tail,back,and what looked like a mask that was black.

 

Pikaa!!said Pikachu Wow! What is that poke'mon?said Ash and he pointed the poka'dex at itThe poka'dex opened up and on the top part of th poka'dex it showed the poke'mon.Letal the armor poke'mon and the evoled form of leta.When leta evolve's,the area's on it's fur that ar rich with metal melt togather to form letal's armor.The mask on it's head,on the other hand form completly through the evolution process.Said the poka'dex then it closed back up Now let us begin!Letal use Quick Attack!shouted Jamie Letal started charging at Pikachu at high speed.Quick Pikachu use Thunderbolt!shouted Ash Pikachu shot a bolt of thunder a Letal,but before it hit Letal disappeared. Pika!said Pikachu Now that's fast!Pikachu be ready.said Ash Just then Letal reappeared,hit Pikachu and sent him rolling back. Are you ok Pikacu? asked Ash Pikachu stood up,shook off the attack and then knotted his head.Well he's got us beat in speed ,so let's try to match him in power.Pikachu use Volt Tackle!shouted Ash Wow! His Pikachu knows Volt Tackle!This Battle could've been interesting if i didn't have to go.So Letal use Giga Impact!said Jamie Letal started running torward Pikachu and was covered in a yellow energy.When Pikachu and Letal Finally collided,Pikachu was sent fling back into a tree knocking him out.Pikachu is unable to battle,Letal wins witch means Jamie wins the match.said Tracy

 

Ash ran to Pikachu an picked him up.Are you alright?asked Ash and Pikachu knotted his head That was a nice battle.said Jamie What,but we didn't even scrach Letal's armor.said Ash Maybe not,but for you two to master volt tackle like you did is increadible.Your only the fourth person i know of who knows it volt tackle.said Jamie Letaaaaal!said Letal knotting Thanks that means alot comeing from a trainier as strong as you.said Ash Well on a scale,i'm a averge strong trainier,but ther are a few trainiers in the Jetix Region who would make me look like i just started battling.said Jamie Well when you put it like that,that really makes me won't to go!said Ash exciditly Pikaa!said Pikachu That the spirit Ash and Pikachu let nothing scare you.Oh and by the way Jamie here is you Shinx back.said Proffessor Oak and he handed Jamie a poke'ball. Welcome back Shinx!said Jamie,then Shinx appeared out of the poke'ball. Shinx!!Shinx!!said the Shinx and it rand over to play with Letal Well i'm sorry to be leaving now,but i have to get back to my sister's.said Jamie Hey Jamie since your headed back could you take Ash to T-Town and take him to the poka'gym there.asked Proffessor Oak Sure.said Jamie Now Ash once your there look for a female trainier named Tanza and give her this letter.She knows what to do.said Proffessor Oak Ok!said Asd But still before do you won't to take another poke'mon with you?asked Proffessor Oak Humm...Well what do you think Jamie?asked Ash Well to be honest everybody that i know from a different region that traveled to the Jetix Region carried at least two poke'mon with them.So i guess carry Pikachu and one more of your pokemon.said Jamie \

 

Well that's that then.Now who to choose?Who do you think Pikachu?asked Ash Pika..Pi!!said Pikachu I'll take Monferno with us on this journey.said Ash Tracy went back into the lab and came back out with a poke'ball.He handed it to Proffessor Oak and Proffessor Oak handed it to Ash,then he gave Ash a ticket.Here's your ticket for the boat to take you to the Jetix Region.Now your Ready!said Proffessor Oak Jamie,Ash and Pikachu walked away waving good-bye to Proffessor Oak and Tracy.On the way to Vermillion Port they talked about some of there past battles,untill they finall made it.Where finaly here!said Ash Yeah,but hae you ever noticed that when your in a good conversation or something headed somewhere you seem to get there faster.said Jamie You know something you have a good point there.said Ash Pi!said Pikachu Just then it started to get dark and it started to thunder and lightning.The wind started to get stronger and then the groung started to shake.Pikaaa!shouted Pikachu What's going on?shouted Ash I don't know!said Jamie But just as quick as it stated it stopped and the sky turned blue again.Well that was scary!said Jamie I wounder what caused it?said Ash Pi..Pi..Ka!said Pikachu I don't know but it's over now so let's go.said Jamie When they finally it to the port,thay show the man there tickets,got on board and looked over the boat at the blue sea as the boat left port.Piii..Kaaa..said Pikachu sounding worried I know what you mean.said Ash What's wrong?asked Jamie I don't know.I just have a bad feeling that something bad is going to happen.said Ash What do you mean?asked Jamie I don't know i just have that feeling.said Ash Hummm.Well it's getting dark.We should get some sleep.said Jamie Sure.said Ash and they headed for there rooms.Well maybe i'm feeling like this cause i'm tired,but i was feelingthe same way when we saw the guy earlier today.said Ash Pi!said Pikachu Yea!Me too!While looking into his eye's i don't know how,but all i could fell was darkness and emptyness.said Ash Pika..Chu!said Pikachu Maybe your right so let's just consetrate on getting so slee,so we can findthat Tanza person tomorrow.said Ash They both laid down and went to sleep.

 

To Be Continued......

 

 

[Guest Supreme Gamesmaster]

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MINE EYES ARE DYING.

 

Every time someone new speaks, and every time the scene changes, use a new paragraph. Also, add quotation marks and a space after every punctuation mark.

 

After you make it (barely) readable, then we can get into why the plot sucks.

 

Out of curiosity, what does this have to do with Pokémon XD?

[Yankee]

*reads first two "sentances"*

No comma?

o.o

[duel tester]

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i could barely comrehend who was talking.

if you fix the erorrs i would rate the story

but you need to fix the story now!!!!!

 

this story sounds intersting but the errors just ruin the story comletly!!!!