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Fake Knights - the story (ch 116 added!!!! (page 92 now))


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Okay since Creator is apparently hopeless at this I would explain.

 

Fist I won! As a prize I should get my story chapter first!

 

Except you promised Deus....

 

Either way your perverted comedy idea, while slightly humorous, functions better in a manga like story such as Hayate or To-Love-Ryu. These allow you to adequately display their emotions behind the perversion and such.

 

Yours lack this so it was less funny than you hoped.

 

Plus you character never acted this openly perverted before so it adds to the disillusionment.

 

Plus people are upset that you swapped action for a nonsensical piece of comedy. If you changed the title from chapter 30 to popularity poll special it would have been more tolerated.

 

That's my 25 cents.

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