Parion555 Posted November 15, 2009 Report Share Posted November 15, 2009 Hello.This is my fan fic called dragon duels where some of the duelists use some cards that i made up so don't worry if you don't know them,I'll put a description for those cards after they are played.Hope you enjoy it.:) Prologue: Michael is a 16 year boy who has lost his father and mother when he was really young.He now lives in his parent's apartment with his grandfather.He often goes out and hangs out with his friends,Trevor,Jackie and Asoka.They are all duelists and they live in dragon city,named after the man who found the city.Because he didn't want his real name found out,he named the city after his legendary dragon deck.It was so legendary because he defeated everyone who tried to take his throne as king.Before he died,he hid the deck somewhere nobody would find it.And for 500 years nobody found it,though legend goes that who finds the deck and masters it will become the next king.And so nobody has found the king's legendary deck,until today... Chapter 1: Jackie:Hey Michael,Want to play a duel?Michael:You know i can't say no to that question.Let's duelMichael and Jackie:Draw!Michael:I'll go first.I summon Destruction Drago.When this card is summoned,you receive 600 points of damage.Also,if you select him as an atack target,i can send one card i control to negate the attack.I set two face-down cards and i end my turn.Jackie:Is that all?It's time to see how a real duelist does it.I draw!I activate double summon.Time for my first summon.I summon tribiute dragon.I can tribiute him to destroy one spell or trap card on the field.But not yet.First i aktivate call of the weak.Each time i tribiute a dragon type monster,i can summon 2 dragon tokens[WIND type,0 ATK,0 DEF].Now,tribiute dragon,do your thing!Destroy the left one!Michael:Grrrr,you got my bottomless trap hole.Jackie:Now i tribiute one token to summon my imobilizing dragon.Now i tribiute my token to remove that face-down card from play until your second standby phase.Now My imobilizing dragon,attack his monster! Imobilizing Dragon=2400 ATKDestruction Drago=1200 ATK Michael:2800Jackie:3400 Michael:My move!I draw!First i set two face-down cards and then i aktivate return of the dragons.Now i can return one dragon type monster from my graveyard to my hand by destroing spell or trap cards and he needs to have ATK equal to the destroyed spell or trap cardsx600.I take my destruction drago and the destroyed cards were both the same,birth of a dragon.Now two little dragons come to the field.And time for their effect to kick in.I tribiute them both to inflict 1200 damage to you.But i'm not done yet.I remove them both from the graveyard to summon master dragon,and he gains 400 ATK for every dragon that is removed from play.Now his second effect is i can remove from play one dragon type monster in my hand to halve the ATK of your monster.Now they both have 1200 ATK.Master dragon attack!And the third effect,when master dragon is destroyed,you take 1000 points of damage. Michael:2800Jackie:1200 Jackie:Draw!I summon High Attack Dragon.No effect,1800 ATK.Now attack him! Michael:1000Jackie:1200 Michael:Draw!I summon remove from play dragon.Because of his effect,I remove both our monsters!My trap card returns on the field and it's your turn.Jackie:Draw!I summon protection dragon.1500 ATK,dragons cannot be targeted by effects,including himself.Now my dragon,attack!Michael:Then i'll aktivate something that doesn't target.I aktivate mirror force!Jackie:It's your turn!Michael:It's over.You're wide open.I summon tyranno infinity.He has 4000 ATK!Finish him!Jackie NO! Michael:1000Jackie:0000 Suddenly,a light appears. Jackie:What's that?Michael:It's....the king... To be continued... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kendo Fish Posted November 15, 2009 Report Share Posted November 15, 2009 EDIT: SCRIPT FORMAT OHHHHHH. [it's banned] [READ RULES] [bLEHHHH] Gotta do a WEATHER REPORT.Hello.This is my fan fic called dragon duels where some of the duelists use some cards that i made up so don't worry if you don't know them' date='I'll put a description for those cards after they are played.Hope you enjoy it.:)Fix yer grammar up. WORRRRD.Prologue: Michael is a 16 year boy who has lost his father and mother when he was really young. And, yeah. No description of how. No description of how he felt, even. That's really bland, and not at all gripping. Also, put a space or two after a period and a comma. Also, spell out low numbers like sixteen. He now lives in his parent's apartment with his grandfather.He often goes out and hangs out with his friends,Trevor,Jackie and Asoka. SHOW DON'T TELL. They are all duelists dah, well, it's a YU-GI-OH STORY SO WE'D EXPECT AS MUCH and they live in dragon city (which is of course not capitalized, for some strange reason),named after the man who found the city. What, a guy named DRAGON named the city!? Or maybe Dracula, I dunno. Because he didn't want his real name found out,he named the city after his legendary dragon deck. Bu-ah-wha-YOU JUST SAID IT WAS NAMED AFTER HIM!! You're destroying your own logic in such a way that it destroys-never mind. It was so legendary because he defeated everyone who tried to take his throne as king. Huh. He's king because he wins at card games! He doesn't even win at ancient Egyptian tablet fights! you've just taken this TOO FAR.Before he died,he hid the deck somewhere nobody would find it.And for 500 years nobody found it (WHA-),though legend goes that who finds the deck and masters it will become the next king. Who still lives in a monarchy? And- And so nobody has found the king's legendary deck,until today... To be continued...That was not good. NOT COOL, YO. It's not interesting, just...nonsensical. I mean, say somebody made a deck with Legend of Blue Eyes cards. Using his double Garnecia Elefantis combo, he pummeled even the king of Some Country and thus claimed the throne (!?). Now, FIVE HUNDRED years later (no, between five-ten), somebody finds it and uses the double Garnecia Elefantis combo to win against...uhh...NOBODY. It's just unrealistic! I know how unrealistic ALL of Yu-Gi-Oh is, but this...this is just too far. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Des ＨＥＲＯ Posted November 16, 2009 Report Share Posted November 16, 2009 The fan fic has miss spelling error and I think Kendo Fish is correct about script format is not aloud but this month has more people breaking the rules than ive seen.Infact this fan fic is the second worst out of the 3 people breaking the rules that I saw.And the best ones not that bad infact maybe better than mine :o. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RyanAtlus Posted November 16, 2009 Report Share Posted November 16, 2009 This was worse than Yu-Gi-Oh DMX... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Des ＨＥＲＯ Posted November 18, 2009 Report Share Posted November 18, 2009 True since hes made up most possible all cards without showing picture and has misspelling errors plus has broken the rules also more as a result of this, his fan fic is rubish. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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