Yugioh: Next Dimension

[SmallieBigs]

This is my first Fan-Fic I'm posting hope you like it!

 

[spoiler=Chapter 1: Welcome to the Academy]"I think I activate Capture Rod to decrease your monsters attack in half then I trbiute both of my Spirit Salmon for Sun Trout now it's attack will increase by 1200 (Sun Trout ATK 3800 Gene Warped Warwolf 1000 Atk) so now I activate Tail Sweep to decrease the Attack of your wolf by 900 also since Sun Trout has an effect that consideres all battle damage as effect damage so DRoN makes you lose an extra 300 so you lose." "Wait I play Soul Removal now I can remove this card from play in order to play Mirrorman so you will lose Jake Lombardi" said the Duel Robot. " I activate the effect of Trap copy fish so I'm going to use it's effect to activate Solemn Judgement so I still win." "Nice duel Jake that was a good One-Turn Kill but I'm going to do better"

" NEXT DUELIST JASON YUDEN PLEASE REPORT TO DUEL SYSTEM 2"

" I guess it's my lucky day!"

" Jason commence duel you draw 5 I draw 6 cards, I play one monster in defense mode end phase"

" Huh I'm going with Kid Arlas now attack his monster" The card exploded revealing a man with a grey hat and a grey coat with grey pants holding a card then exploding

"You destroyed Card Seeker I now Special Summon Black Luster Soldier"

"Hey cool I want one of those so this card face down and I end my turn."

"I summon Chaos Knight in attack mode his effect lets me Special Summon one DARK monster from my deck as long as it is 4 stars or lower now Dark Elf show your self now Chaos Knight mutual-kill"

" I activate trap it is Unsafe Sacrifice so Black Luster Soldier busts my life points but he's destroyed and you must end your Battle Phase." After Black Luster Soldier attacked Jason it started glowing then exploding.

"I end my turn."

"Good so I use Kid Arlas' special ability in order to grow up to Arlas of Worqshac next I play All Out Attack that suits Arlas perfectly because his attack will incease by 300 for every card he sends to the graveyard and this lets him attack until there is no monsters so i'll start with your elf so you lose 800 now you lose 1500 next I activated Time Reverse so your monsters are brought back so I can attack again to win so batter up take down his elf now his knight"

" Error Error this can't be wait I activate the effect of King Kuriboh reducing damage to 0"

"I guess I'll end."

"Commence Draw Phase I summon Dark Avenger to summon Dark Elf then I activate Evil Unite to summon Elf of Evil with a 1000 point boost but I cannot enter Battle Phase commencing End Phase."

" Heh heh let's see how long that demented elf will last I draw I'm going to use the magic of Aura Shine to use one card from either players Graveyard i select Card Seeker in face-down defense mode now i flip summon him to play Mystic Thunder Katana and equip it to Arlas so now there is no pointless mutual kill so attacking won't destroy my monster."

"Error this is impossible how could he win my next card was Ruthless Assault as long as I had only him I could attack twice so I would have won. ERROR ERROR."

" Huh? I guess I overloaded him with skill. So I passed?"

"Yes you did Jason the test results have been calculated you scored a 55.3 out of 100 so overall the average is 77.7 so we will be farming in Hiona Black this year however since it was 20% lower then the average you will be placed in Abortorius Red." said Principal Keetley

" So Jake how'd you do on the test because I passed you should have got 99% you made a comeback you should have done the best."

"Well Jason I got the lowest so far 52.1% but theres two duelists that we should know Robert Wheeler and Aaron Wilson, Robert is Joey Wheelers son he plays a Dimensional Hero dek that relies on removal so he can power up his Dimensional Hero Van Clad, while Aaron uses Darknights that relies on powering one another up he uses Darknight Lilith to harness his true usage of the deck."

"I have to say that Aaron is going to get a higher mark because removal decks are as slow as exodia decks."

"Hey you don't know what your talking about I run both in the same deck and i got the highest score in the duel exam." exclaimed Dawson.

" So what!?"

"Hey guys if you would stop arguing maybe I could watch this duel."

"So it's my turn to duel hey robo-brain you better be ready because I am the son of Joey Wheeler and Mai Valentine and since I am better then you I go first. Let's go! Okay I draw hmmmmm I think Dimensional Hero Malacious Edge in defense mode but now I can neither add one fusion material monster from my deck to my hand or one Polymerization next I'll activate Dark Dimension now all cards are removed from play if they are sent to the grave I'm done."

"I play Mystic Tomato in attack mode now I attack Malacious Edge destroying it but it allows you to add one Dimensional Hero from your deck to your hand now I play one card face down and end my turn."

"I'll draw so let's begin with Polymerization fusing Charger with Magnum summoning Dimensional Hero Chargeblaster now attack his tomato and let's see the splat (Robert: 4000 Duel Simulator: 3400) and a face down should do."

"Excellent I play Ominous Striker since he was Special Summoned you lose life points until they are equal to mine (Robert&Duel Simulator: 3400) next I activate Future Fusion also say goodbye to my Striker and meet the Darkness Loraiu when he is summoned by tributing that monster he can absorb 800 life points (Robert: 2600 Duel Simulator: 4200) next is Evil Power-Stone now I play one Counter Blast now you lose 1500 life points and I'll end my turn (Robert: 1100 Duel Simulator: 4200)"

"So you like to burn huh well I play another Polymerization to fuse Van Clad with Neo-Inferno to summon Terra Fighter Elite (DHero Terra Fighter Elite ATK: 2700 DEF: 2550) now I'll use Chargeblasters effect to boost his attack by 1400 so with this attack you will be down to 100 life points but with Clad Armour Strike which will make you lose 100 life points for every Van Clad monster that iss removed so you lose exactly."

"So did I pass or did I passssss Principal Keetley?"

"Barely Robert your score was 50.2 out of 100"

"WHAT I kicked that hunk of junks tin can butt."

" But you only got one question right on the paper exam which was who was a famous duelist and you said JOeey WheeelAr which was acceptable because you poorly spelled your fathers name."

"Hmm so which dorm am I going to?"

"Abortorius Red the lowest."

"Hey Jason at least I didn't get the lowest right *snicker*"

"That isn't very funny Jake it's sort of sad."

 

 

 

 

That's my Fan-Fic. Rate it please!

[SmallieBigs]

Chapter 2 is up

 

[spoiler=Chapter 2: Meeting of the Minds]"Hey Jase you know what we should do? We should duel." said Robert

"That sounds like a plan just to warn you I am AWESOME!" They walked outside put on their duel disk and their game face.

"Let's go now I'll start uh huh this is good."

"Hey Rob I've got better things to do so just make a move."

"Fine then let's go Dimensional Hero Charger and three cards face down that's it."

"Good I thought you would never make your move my draw, let's go Samurai Soldier #4 equipped with Master Blade increasing his attack by 2000 let's go Masters Swift Slash."

"I have a trap which I like to call the switcharoo but seriously it's name is Dimensional Reverse (DH Charger: 2000 ATK SS#4: 1600 ATK) so instead you lose 400 life points but I add on with Dimensional Boost to increase it's attack by 500 until the end of the turn but let's super charge with Double Shot so you lose 1800 life points (Jason: 2200 LP Robert: 4000 LP)"

"Now I activate the effect of Master Blade to place a Master Counter on Charger okay now that is over I'll go with two face down cards now I end my turn."

"Let's go with Dimensional Hero Magicman now I'll end this duel Magishock and Overload."

"How about Malice Pass and Unsafe Sacrifice so Charger is destroyed but Malice Pass allows my life points to increase by 500 since it was destroyed."

"Man he sure does like his life points I guess one card face down, end."

"Hmmm let's go with Ninja Overlord Kitaru with my Master Blade increasing is attack to 2300 and Charitable Summon to bring back your Charger now attack Kitaru detsroy Charger (Jason: 3200 Robert: 3200) and I end my turn."

"Let's go with Card Destruction now I can add a fusion-material monster from my deck to my hand now I play poly to summon Revolver Clad now he can attack to destroy all spells and traps on your side of the field now he loses 1000 also negating effects now Machine Gun Hail and (Jason: 1000 LP Robert: 3200) now I'll end my turn."

"Oh man I can't do anything *Okay one draw that's it* okay let's gooooooo you're done for now I activate Damians Skull to tribute the monsters I had just brang back to summon Arlas equipped with thunder katana now All-Out Attack (Robert: 2200) what happened why didn't you lose."

"If you don't know I used King Kuriboh to negate the damage between Magicman and Arlas."

"Well there is a next turn."

"Okay let's go with Dimension of Greed to draw 3 cards okay I play one card face down and Monster Reborn King Kuriboh now I'm done."

"Heh I guess I win now attack Arlas."

"Wait I use D-Explosion so it's a draw."

"Huh I guess my 15 minutes ran out."

"Nice I guess we both get the packs."

"Heh typhical reds with your dueling and your bets and your weak cards my Gagagigo could destroy all of your creatures."

"Man Kento why would you come and watch because I'm pretty sure that you were here to envy us also I know that Rob here could beat you."

"Heh I don't think you could scratch my life points." Jason's eyes turned blazing orange and sparks flew from Jason's eyes at Kento's.

"Hello kids I see dueling and trash talk if you like there will be a advanced tourney here the prize is a dorm level up and a Ultra Rare starter deck."

"That sounds great it could help me out alot so I'm guessing if your telling us it starts tommorow. Hey Robert you know what we should do? we should duel again!"

"Not now I'm sort of tired I feel like taking a nap."

 

[Des ＨＥＲＯ]

no offence but makes no sence and are most the cards the cards you made.If yes then with the chapter could you show the card.

 

Overall for a first fan fic it was ok.

[SmallieBigs]

Thanks Destruction Hero I'm just working into it so it's gonna take a while.

 

EDIT: This so needs a weather report!

[ThatPhantomGuy]

Well, here you are...

 

1. NAMES! Jaden Yuden? Really? Where's Chazz Princington? Or Alexis Rhobes? Use more original names! That way it doesn't seem so flat.

 

2. COMMAS! Use one once in a while! It's just strait sentences! Try reading out loud one of your sentences without stopping. People will get tired of reading a big long sentence with no break...

 

3. DESCRIPTIONS! Where are they?! This is more of a script, all talking and barely any actions! What do the characters look like? AND WHERE ARE THEY DUELING?! At the bottom of the sea, in mid air, or in space?! Spice up the story with some decent descriptions and actions of the characters. ERROR ERROR.

 

I'm not that epic as WeatherReport-dono, but I try.

 

With all due respect,

ThePhantomDuelist

[SmallieBigs]

Again thanks yeah now I'm gonna throw in something better then that. As a matter of a fact I'm the opposite of Frunk I hate commas.

[ThatPhantomGuy]

I look forward to more. If you need some ideas, try reading other people's fan fics, it helps... But don't steal ideas! XD

[SmallieBigs]

I know not to steal ideas I've read through the rules a couple times I'm just working on editing and are you saying that I have stolen work or just telling me not to steal work.

[Guest Merciful Idiot]

It's so tewibul. Where's Kendo Pish or Weva Weport wite naw?

[SmallieBigs]

That's what I'm hoping I bet you there caught up on doing stuff like school which I have to but I have more free time. Where are you weather report I need your weather report.

EDIT: AND KENDO FISH LIKE THE GUY BELOW ME SAID.

[Kaisu]

Kendo is perfectly capable of doing one as well. What Phantom said, also. You might as well have called Jaden 'Gee-eex Rip-off'