The Nightmare Anatomy Posted October 4, 2009 Report Share Posted October 4, 2009 [align=center]Welcome YCM, this is my first ever story on the site. Indeed this is not intended for the faint at heart as this is YCM first real zombie fic. This fic may contain sequences of intense violence, depicted gore, suggestive language, but there is not sexual content what so ever in this story. Reader discretion is advised. [spoiler=plot]the height of the Vietnam War, a covert ops cargo plane carrying a top-secret consignment known only as 'Whiteknight' is lost over the deepest, uncharted jungles. Special Ops soldiers are immediately dispatched to the scene to retrieve the top secret shipment and one-by-one they disappear without a trace ... until one month later, one of them suddenly walks out of the jungle. Crazed and deranged, something in the jungle had ripped out his humanity, poisoning his soul. Something in the darkness had driven him mad ... and followed him out. [spoiler=chapters][spoiler=chapter: 1] “I don’t know how many times I’ve done this, and I still hate it.” We were right above a jungle 59 miles south of the “golden triangle” were my brothers helicopter went down. Call was his name Call Walker. My name, however is Nate Walker. Anyway, I’m not a good soldier. I suck. I am fresh outta boot and I am sitting in this helicopter with these men who have been through hell. God, I am such a jabroni. I am even afraid of my own M-16 in my hands. I have never been sent it battle before, but they need me because they think I can help them find my brother. I don’t think I am of any use though. Because I am just a 19 year old slacker who failed high school and went right into the army. This jungle is endless. So lush and green. Full of wonders and life. Almost takes the thoughts away from the Vietcong. My five other comrades in this chopper and a lot more skilled than me. Will, a strong handsome boy who comes from a poor family and joined up so the military will pay his way. Marvin, he seems paranoid a lot of the time but he says its being “ alert” personally I think its bull, he has a girlfriend back in the states but she rarely writes him. Jimmy, he is quite and does not talk a lot. Rumors say he murdered 20 Vietcong with his knife alone. Last but not least, Hayes, the most skilled of us. He is a master with any weapon. He is smart, strong, and brave. A perfect soldier. “Here we go boys!” Hayes had yelled at us. The chopper was landing. “Goddamn it.” I muttered. I wanted to enjoy the ride a little and I was starting to get the thought of the Vietcong out of my head. “You okay?” Will said looking at me. “What? Oh yeah I am feeling fine.” The landing was long and dreadful. Like falling down a pit of fire down hell’s hole. “Aright boys fall out!” Hayes ordered. I took the safety off my M-16 and held it tight. “Ease up” Marvin said. “Your one to talk!” I shot back. We started moving through the thick jungle to the location were my brother’s plane had crashed. It was hot and buggy and I was sweating like a dog. A chuckled a little when I saw Marvin walking backward. “The hell you staring at?” Marvin said to me. “Certainly not your ugly ass face!” I snapped. He looked a little pissed off. “Come say that to my face you little shithead!” he snarled. “Knock It off you two or I’ll lash both of your asses.” Hayes ordered. “Sir, yes, sir!” I said. Marvin through a little rock at my head the he picked up off the ground about 10 seconds ago. “What the hell did you do that for?” I said. “Do what?” Marvin laughed. Something in me snapped and I tackled Marvin and started punching him in the face. “What the hell did I just say?!” Hayes shouted. And a moment later I heard a loud pop and Hayes was on the flour with a bullet hole in his head and we were under fire. [spoiler=chapter 2] I Jumped out of the way of the array of bullets and started firing in all directions. The others did the same. Then a bullet grazed Will’s arm. I saw the direction it came from and fired in the direction and yelled. “DIE MOTHER…” Marvin was cut off when three Vietcong jumped out with AK-47’s. Will did not hesitate to shoot two of them in the chest. Blood sprayed in our face. I killed the last one and then I reloaded my gun. We ran through the jungle. We did not know were we were headed. We just ran for our lives. Eventually we ran into a village. It was deserted. We searched around a little. “Were the hell are we?” Will said. “I don’t freakin’ know.” Marvin said. “You’re bleeding, bad.” I said to will. “I’ll be fine.” Will said. “You sure?” I replied. “Yes.” I said. We continued through the village when suddenly we see another U.S soldier. “Hey, you over there. Hey!” I said. “Who are you?” He said. “My name is Nate. And this is Will, Marvin, and Jimmy.” I replied. “Well, my name is Robert.” he said. “Were is the rest of your team?” I said. “Over in the next village.” he said. “Then what are you doing over here?” I said. “Scouting for that rescue team that was sent.” he said. “That’s us.” I said. “Good. Come with me.” he said. Right as we started off Jimmy made a comment. “What the hell is going on here?” he said. “I dunno. But you better stay close. Some people around here are “not right” like we are.” said Robert. “What do you mean?” Jimmy said. “You’ll see.” Robert said. As we continued through the lush and lively jungle we came upon the village. “Were here.” Robert said. “Were is everybody?” I said. Robert pointed to a small hut. “Over there, come on.” Robert said. As we walked inside the hut there were two Soldiers at the door. They let us through. “Nate, you should have a look at this.” Robert said. “At what?” I replied. As we continued down the hall we turned into a room with screaming and thrashing noises. I went inside the room and to my surprise, there were four soldiers inside. And as I turned to the right I saw my brother call tied to the bed , thrashing. Feel free to send me character forms but no characters under 19 and not girls. [/align] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Nightmare Anatomy Posted October 4, 2009 Author Report Share Posted October 4, 2009 bump Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
King-Shadow Posted October 4, 2009 Report Share Posted October 4, 2009 ummmm not bad, I would like to get some more to read of it but I like the plot seems interesting. So ye seems pretty cool. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Nightmare Anatomy Posted October 4, 2009 Author Report Share Posted October 4, 2009 ty. I intend to add the first chapter today. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
King-Shadow Posted October 4, 2009 Report Share Posted October 4, 2009 Awesome I will be waiting =) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Nightmare Anatomy Posted October 5, 2009 Author Report Share Posted October 5, 2009 finishing up c1, should be up sometime this afternoon. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Nightmare Anatomy Posted October 5, 2009 Author Report Share Posted October 5, 2009 Chapter 1 is up Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
King-Shadow Posted October 6, 2009 Report Share Posted October 6, 2009 Ohhh I like Chapter One, Its interesting... I really enjoyed reading it. Cant wait for Chapter 2... One thing how do you get it so that you can "show" or "Hide" your chapters? Idk how to do that I have a fan fic but... I would like to know how to do that in mine. Thankz Once again Great job. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Nightmare Anatomy Posted October 6, 2009 Author Report Share Posted October 6, 2009 Ohhh I like Chapter One' date=' Its interesting... I really enjoyed reading it. Cant wait for Chapter 2... One thing how do you get it so that you can "show" or "Hide" your chapters? Idk how to do that I have a fan fic but... I would like to know how to do that in mine. Thankz Once again Great job.[/quote'] Ty. I plan to put up c2 tomorrow and i might not introduce the zombies until 3. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
King-Shadow Posted October 6, 2009 Report Share Posted October 6, 2009 Lol np man, but how do u do that "Hide" and "Show" your chapters thing? I would like to use it on my fan fic... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Nightmare Anatomy Posted October 6, 2009 Author Report Share Posted October 6, 2009 Lol np man' date=' but how do u do that "Hide" and "Show" your chapters thing? I would like to use it on my fan fic...[/quote'] [spoiler=insert name here] *put a / before the word spoiler in the second set of brackets* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
King-Shadow Posted October 6, 2009 Report Share Posted October 6, 2009 Ok thanks man =) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Nightmare Anatomy Posted October 6, 2009 Author Report Share Posted October 6, 2009 np. Glade i could help. I need moar comments people =O Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
King-Shadow Posted October 6, 2009 Report Share Posted October 6, 2009 haha ill tell ppl about this fan fic =) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Nightmare Anatomy Posted October 6, 2009 Author Report Share Posted October 6, 2009 ty. I just noticed that Vietcong is already plural D: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
King-Shadow Posted October 6, 2009 Report Share Posted October 6, 2009 Lol dont worry about it its a small mistake everyone makes them. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Nightmare Anatomy Posted October 6, 2009 Author Report Share Posted October 6, 2009 I usually don't. I must fix it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
King-Shadow Posted October 6, 2009 Report Share Posted October 6, 2009 haha ok XD have fun cant wait for chapter 2 to come up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Nightmare Anatomy Posted October 6, 2009 Author Report Share Posted October 6, 2009 It will be prolly tomorrow night. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
King-Shadow Posted October 6, 2009 Report Share Posted October 6, 2009 Ok Kool have u read my Fan Fic?? Its called To Save The World Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Nightmare Anatomy Posted October 6, 2009 Author Report Share Posted October 6, 2009 I read it but i did not get it that much :P You need to add a plot like mine. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
King-Shadow Posted October 6, 2009 Report Share Posted October 6, 2009 Loll the plot will be coming its one of those stories that you gotta wait a lil bit for the plot Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Nightmare Anatomy Posted October 6, 2009 Author Report Share Posted October 6, 2009 But i mean post the basic plot line like mine has, Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cthonian Posted October 6, 2009 Report Share Posted October 6, 2009 Awesome beginning Nightmare. Chapter One is a big hit in my book. You should read my fanfic as well. It's called Pacific Academy. I hope for nothing but the best for this fanfic and I'll be waiting for Chapter 2!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
King-Shadow Posted October 6, 2009 Report Share Posted October 6, 2009 ah your right Loll but I like to have the plot plan out how it is the main plot is the all time favorite good vs. evil take over for the world. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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