starwebs1 Posted October 2, 2009 Report Share Posted October 2, 2009 [align=Center] Hello and welcome to my YCM-based story, YCM Meets the Dark. See my profile for the link to the Official YCM Meets the Dark Forum. [spoiler=Part 1: YCMaker's Invitation]"What?! You're seriously telling me that YCMaker has decided to pick up EACH AND EVERY YCMer and take them on a trip to the Caribbean?!?!?!?!?!?!??! Get out!" I said to my friend on the phone, who also said that he's in the bus outside of my house RIGHT NOW! *Runs out the door and jumps into a GIANT bus with 5,000 rows of 25 seats* "Wow! This thing is HUGE!" I exclaimed.I'll just skip ahead a bit. The bus was driving down the road to the Caribbean when we all at once spotted a GIGANTIC building on the side of the road. So YCMaker yelled, "Who's up to going there?" Everyone cheered. And that's when this adventure began.When we parked the bus outside of the building, everyone piled out of it and gathered around the entrance to the place.YCMaker lead, opened the door and.....we all fell down an endless pit!Or, almost endless, anyway. We landed safely at the bottom in about ten seconds. And then we looked around us and saw. Saw what we had just gotten into. And boy, did I wish that I had stayed home today.We had landed in a room filled with every single DARK attribute Yu-Gi-Oh monster ever, and they were alive! We all quickly noticed two things: 1. The sign on the wall that read, "There are forty monsters in this room. They look like a lot more than that, but look again, NOW!" So we did. And there they were. Only forty monsters in the room. But the sign continued, "After you defeat all of the monsters proceed through the door. >>>>" And the second thing we noticed was that door."Well," I said, "what are we waiting for? Let's do this!"[/align] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kendo Fish Posted October 3, 2009 Report Share Posted October 3, 2009 I'll post a WEATHER REPORT tomorrow. IMPROVE! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RyanAtlus Posted October 3, 2009 Report Share Posted October 3, 2009 I Summon Tribe-Indecting Virus, discard one and declare DARK.End of fanfic. Kendo'll kill ya. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kendo Fish Posted October 3, 2009 Report Share Posted October 3, 2009 Also, why is it for ages 6+? I don't get the humor. [align=Center] Hello and welcome to my YCM-based story' date=' YCM Meets the Dark. Dark is always evil! OOH! The website CRASHED! So SCARY! OOOOOHHHHHHHH. See my profile for the link to the Official YCM Meets the Dark Forum. It has a forum already? You're thinking too far ahead, I think. [spoiler=Part 1: YCMaker's Invitation]"What?! You're seriously telling me that YCMaker has decided to pick up EACH AND EVERY YCMer and take them on a trip to the Caribbean?!?!?!?!?!?!??! Get out!" I said to my friend on the phone, who also said that he's in the bus outside of my house RIGHT NOW! Little description, little sense, new world order...? And it sounds pretty stupid, especially with the CRAPLOAD OF "AWESOME" PUNCTUATION!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Also, who is this "friend" of which you speak? Who are you? Who am I? What does anything look like? You just failed at description. It BETTER NOT BE A LAND VEHICLE... *Runs out the door and jumps into a GIANT bus with 5,000 rows of 25 seats* Oh, wait. IT IS. *facepalm* That was sudden, too. You also don't use asterisks in description, normally, at least. I understand it's probably supposed to be humorous, but really, I don't see the humor of a huge bus. And wait, how does a HUGE bus drive to the Caribbean Islands? I don't think it would be very funny if it sprouted wings, or even if it drove right over the ocean. If only it were the Cat Bus! That would have been AWESOME. AND it would have had "Wow! This thing is HUGE!" I exclaimed. Is anyone else on said bus? Because if not, it's PRETTY dumb. Especially since THERE AREN'T 5,000 x 25 members of this forum yet. Or at least not active members who would actually come.I'll just skip ahead a bit. You could have crammed funny stuff in there! Even a cameo would be better than just skipping it, I think! The bus was driving down the road to the Caribbean (WHA!? And that's not funny to me. It's just stupid, especially since it's not lampshaded. Somebody could have asked, "WHY is there a road to the Caribbean and how'd it get here without ME knowing?" But NO, you pass it off as if it were nothing. Ew.) when we all at once spotted a GIGANTIC building on the side of the road. It's shaped like a chicken. RIGHT!?!? So YCMaker yelled, "Who's up to going there?" Everyone cheered. "Who's up to breaking into that house and not going straight to our five-star hotel? We'll PROBABLY get arrested!" *grin* "YYYEEEAAAAHHHHH!" And that's when this adventure began. It didn't begin when you got on a huge bus? It didn't begin when you went on the ROAD TO THE CARIBBEAN!? You must be hard to excite.When we parked the bus outside of the building, everyone piled out of it and gathered around the entrance to the place. The HUGE bus can park? And, wow, what a small paragraph.YCMaker lead, opened the door and.....we all fell down an endless pit! And that's where you are today. A pit which can ONLY be described as endless. And once YCMaker fell in, EVERYBODY followed. You must all be Lemmings, from the video game.Or, almost endless, anyway. *sigh of relief* Phew. Thanks for actually noting that. But why would you even follow him in!? Unless you're scaling the wall to try and rescue him, that's stupid, isn't it!? We landed safely at the bottom in about ten seconds. Our fall was cushioned by mounds of giraffe bazookas. And then we looked around us and saw. You...saw. You saw what? Saw what we had just gotten into. That didn't sound cool, it just sounded awkward. And boy, did I wish that I had stayed home today. It's still that very same day?We had landed in a room filled with every single DARK attribute Yu-Gi-Oh monster ever, and they were alive! Holy crap! Meda Bat!And why is it stereotypically DARK, which is always the only evil one? What about FIRE, which is slightly less stereotypical? Or just every monster? Or a couple of strong ones? We all quickly noticed two things (besides how stupid the situation is, and all of these Yu-Gi-Oh monsters suddenly appearing and...standing around): 1. The (lowercase it, please) sign on the wall that read, "There are forty monsters in this room. They look like a lot more than that, but look again, NOW!" That’s kind of dumb, methinks. So we did. And there they were. Only forty monsters in the room. You don’t say WHICH monsters they are, or even a general statement, so...they’re all Meda Bats. And since when was the bottom of a pit a room? But the sign continued, "After you defeat all of the monsters proceed through the door. >>>>" And the second thing we noticed was that door. "Well," I said, "what are we waiting for? Let's do this!" You’re so confident in yourself. What, if you fight the Nemean Lion are you gonna say “it’ll be a piece o’ cake”? And why aren’t the monsters doing anything?[/align] That plot made no sense. And not in a humorous way, but in what I personally thought was a dumb way. If it’s not a comedy it just makes no sense, and if it is where’s the humor? If it’s just weirdness, you could try harder, really. And LarryCotter, tribe-Infecting Virus does not work that way. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
White Hollow Posted October 4, 2009 Report Share Posted October 4, 2009 I din't get what youre doing Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RyanAtlus Posted October 4, 2009 Report Share Posted October 4, 2009 Also' date=' why is it for ages 6+? I don't get the humor. [align=Center] Hello and welcome to my YCM-based story, YCM Meets the Dark. Dark is always evil! OOH! The website CRASHED! So SCARY! OOOOOHHHHHHHH. See my profile for the link to the Official YCM Meets the Dark Forum. It has a forum already? You're thinking too far ahead, I think. [spoiler=Part 1: YCMaker's Invitation]"What?! You're seriously telling me that YCMaker has decided to pick up EACH AND EVERY YCMer and take them on a trip to the Caribbean?!?!?!?!?!?!??! Get out!" I said to my friend on the phone, who also said that he's in the bus outside of my house RIGHT NOW! Little description, little sense, new world order...? And it sounds pretty stupid, especially with the CRAPLOAD OF "AWESOME" PUNCTUATION!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Also, who is this "friend" of which you speak? Who are you? Who am I? What does anything look like? You just failed at description. It BETTER NOT BE A LAND VEHICLE... *Runs out the door and jumps into a GIANT bus with 5,000 rows of 25 seats* Oh, wait. IT IS. *facepalm* That was sudden, too. You also don't use asterisks in description, normally, at least. I understand it's probably supposed to be humorous, but really, I don't see the humor of a huge bus. And wait, how does a HUGE bus drive to the Caribbean Islands? I don't think it would be very funny if it sprouted wings, or even if it drove right over the ocean. If only it were the Cat Bus! That would have been AWESOME. AND it would have had "Wow! This thing is HUGE!" I exclaimed. Is anyone else on said bus? Because if not, it's PRETTY dumb. Especially since THERE AREN'T 5,000 x 25 members of this forum yet. Or at least not active members who would actually come.I'll just skip ahead a bit. You could have crammed funny stuff in there! Even a cameo would be better than just skipping it, I think! The bus was driving down the road to the Caribbean (WHA!? And that's not funny to me. It's just stupid, especially since it's not lampshaded. Somebody could have asked, "WHY is there a road to the Caribbean and how'd it get here without ME knowing?" But NO, you pass it off as if it were nothing. Ew.) when we all at once spotted a GIGANTIC building on the side of the road. It's shaped like a chicken. RIGHT!?!? So YCMaker yelled, "Who's up to going there?" Everyone cheered. "Who's up to breaking into that house and not going straight to our five-star hotel? We'll PROBABLY get arrested!" *grin* "YYYEEEAAAAHHHHH!" And that's when this adventure began. It didn't begin when you got on a huge bus? It didn't begin when you went on the ROAD TO THE CARIBBEAN!? You must be hard to excite.When we parked the bus outside of the building, everyone piled out of it and gathered around the entrance to the place. The HUGE bus can park? And, wow, what a small paragraph.YCMaker lead, opened the door and.....we all fell down an endless pit! And that's where you are today. A pit which can ONLY be described as endless. And once YCMaker fell in, EVERYBODY followed. You must all be Lemmings, from the video game.Or, almost endless, anyway. *sigh of relief* Phew. Thanks for actually noting that. But why would you even follow him in!? Unless you're scaling the wall to try and rescue him, that's stupid, isn't it!? We landed safely at the bottom in about ten seconds. Our fall was cushioned by mounds of giraffe bazookas. And then we looked around us and saw. You...saw. You saw what? Saw what we had just gotten into. That didn't sound cool, it just sounded awkward. And boy, did I wish that I had stayed home today. It's still that very same day?We had landed in a room filled with every single DARK attribute Yu-Gi-Oh monster ever, and they were alive! Holy crap! Meda Bat!And why is it stereotypically DARK, which is always the only evil one? What about FIRE, which is slightly less stereotypical? Or just every monster? Or a couple of strong ones? We all quickly noticed two things (besides how stupid the situation is, and all of these Yu-Gi-Oh monsters suddenly appearing and...standing around): 1. The (lowercase it, please) sign on the wall that read, "There are forty monsters in this room. They look like a lot more than that, but look again, NOW!" That’s kind of dumb, methinks. So we did. And there they were. Only forty monsters in the room. You don’t say WHICH monsters they are, or even a general statement, so...they’re all Meda Bats. And since when was the bottom of a pit a room? But the sign continued, "After you defeat all of the monsters proceed through the door. >>>>" And the second thing we noticed was that door. "Well," I said, "what are we waiting for? Let's do this!" You’re so confident in yourself. What, if you fight the Nemean Lion are you gonna say “it’ll be a piece o’ cake”? And why aren’t the monsters doing anything?[/align] That plot made no sense. And not in a humorous way, but in what I personally thought was a dumb way. If it’s not a comedy it just makes no sense, and if it is where’s the humor? If it’s just weirdness, you could try harder, really. And LarryCotter, tribe-Infecting Virus does not work that way. Sorry, I forgot it was type, not attribute.Swords 'n Vortex 'll do. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
legolover09 Posted October 4, 2009 Report Share Posted October 4, 2009 Your Weather Roport was so funny. 40 Meda Bats!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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