Fan-Fic Story

[Amy Kaiba]

This is a Yu-Gi-Oh! Fan-fic. If you don't like and decide to leave B.S comments too bad I don't give a pitchfork. Its Seto Kaiba x Amy Durbin my character thats based on me kind of, And Chazz Princeton x Jun Tao. The shippings are called YinYangShipping [Chazz x Jun] and SapphireEyesShipping [Amy Durbin x Seto Kaiba]

 

 

 

Sitting on the blue Oblesk half sphere were Amy and Seto a couple of people who didn't really mind rule breaking cept when they got caught, they also didn't mind the cold. Amy was cuddling up to Seto all the while Seto was starring off into the distance almost like he was in some sort of a trance, Seto's glance was off in a dirrection of the docks and sea. They climbed up ontop of the half spere at about 8:45 to watch the falling sun. Amy cuddled up to Seto even more while watching the sun set, and said "What a beautiful sunset." Seto still seemed to not be paying any attention to her, for he was gazing off in a completly different dirrection not even watching the sunset. Seto woke up from what seemed to be a almost hypnotic sight, then Seto replied back "O huh? What did you say?" Dumbfounded and a tad bit irritated for being ignored she replied "O it was nothing must've been the wind." Confussed Seto replied "The wind ain't blowing." "O it's blowing alright, just very quietly!" Shot back Amy who was now getting annoyed with Seto. Seto looked surprised like when he heard Joey made it second place in his tournament while he got third. Amy looked in the dirrection Seto had hypnoticaly been gazing off into when she noticed that it wasn't any hypnotic trance, there was another couple on the exact same Oblesk blue half sphere. At first all she saw was a boy with abnormaly spikey black hair sitting next to a girl with just as spikey grass green hair; after her eyes got a chance to focus she noticed that it was Chazz Princeton her x/Best Buddy and Jun Tao her international friend. Just then Chazz turned so that Amy and Chazz were eyeing each other, upon seeing Chazz's smile she at first was a bit shocked then she smiled back; remembering Chazz's bros and all the homicidle attempts on Chazz so she was delighted to see him smiling. It was refreshing to her and Seto seemed to be smiling too. [Plus 1015 Dead Puppies] :lol:

 

 

The sunset the four of them had been watching was a beautiful array of colors, truely a beautiful sight. It looked almost as though Michealangelo himself had painted it with varius oranges, yellows, reds, and a hint of more peachy colors. All four of them were so entertained by the falling sun that not a single person knew the time because the falling sun was so mesmerizing. After several hours had passed by and sun had completly faded away and out of the sky, it was so dark you could quite litterly see stars. Eventually the time and exhaustion had caught up with everyone as they all started yawning, after Chazz finished a long and cat like yawn he broke the silence first "Come on you three, if we don't get going back to our dorms we'll be stuck here and be risking expulsion for not being at our dormitories when Crowler or Campus-Security catch us wandering around at night." The other three yawned, rubbed there eyes, and all replied with "Good idea, Don't wanna ruin our first year or second." Chazz impatiently cut them off with "Hurry up, lets go!" They all noded in unisun, and made there way to edge of the half sphere and quitely but quickly climbed down and sneaked by threedifferent groups of Campus-Security all the way to the Slifer-Red dormitories. Chazz's room was their destination, Chazz's room was very spacey inside with four triple bunk-beds, A Giant T.V, Couches, Tables, desks, boxes, and laptops sitting all over on all the tables and desks.

 

 

 

The four made it to Chazz's room finaly, after a wrong turn that lead them right to Ra-Yellow dormitories. Just out side at the entrance to Chazz's room the four huddled together to avoid the cold and detection. Chazz as silently and as quickly as possible opened the door, he waited about a minute for his eyes to adjust to the different level of darkness. Chazz looked around inside for anyone that could catch them for breaking campus rules and get the four in trouble, but Chazz did not see or hear a single person. After confirming that it was safe like a coushined and padded room for crazies, he signaled for the others to follow. Inside Chazz's room was dark but the light from the open windows brightened up the place enough for them to not trip over anything, Pharaoh the old professer and head of the Slifer dorms cat was sleeping on Chazz's couch in in the big main room. In the room that goes off from the big main room were the four entered from there was four triple bunks, and all twelve bunks were empty because everyone else was away or actually at their assigned dorm room. The four went to bed Chazz and Jun shared a bunk and Seto and Amy shared a bunk. Seto and Amy headed towards the bunk closest to the back window

Seto and Amy climbed up to a empty middle bunk, while Chazz and Jun went to the bunk farthest from the window and on an oposit side of the room than the bunk Seto and Amy had picked. Chazz and Jun picked a empty bottom bunk. The bunks themselves were nicely positioned two on each side or the room with desks and laptops set up at the only free wall right across from the entrance to the room. On Seto's bunk Amy and Seto layed side by side, Amy whispered "I love you." to him and he inturn whispered back "I love you too." Then Seto kissed her cheek, and the two rolled around a bit [not enough to fall of the bunk though] they giggled while rolling around. After rolling around for about 5 minutes and exchanging kisses the two just layed still. Seto reached over to Loki's bunk beside their's and got his Yami-Yugi plush doll and staited "How'd this Star-Fish headed dork ever beat me and take my champinion title?" Amy simply replied with "I don't know...." then poked the doll in the eye with her left pointing finger. They both giggle then started to really make out. On Chazz's bottom bunk Jun blatently said "I love you Chazz." and Chazz replied with a striat face "I love me too Jun, I love me too."

Jun with the most cofussed look said while whacking Chazz with that bunks pillow "No! No! No! Chazz the sentence is I love you too!" Then the two gazed right into each others eyes while giggle for about two minutes, then Jun leaned over to kiss Chazz on the cheek, but Chazz was too quick. He moved over just enough to make her kiss on his cheek into a kiss on his lips. Then they started to really make out.

 

 

 

 

 

THE END :cry:

[Weather Report - Stand]

This is where I come in: TIME FOR A WEATHER REPORT.

This is a Yu-Gi-Oh! Fan-fic. If you don't like and decide to leave B.S comments too bad I don't give a pitchfork. You know' date=' this means that you cannot take any sort of criticism, and this shows major weakness. If you say 'Stop pickin' on meh!!', I will gladly direct you to several other Weather Reports I've done on this site.[/color'] Its Seto Kaiba x Amy Durbin my character thats based on me kind of, And Chazz Princeton x Jun Tao. EW. A shipper. We don't take kindly to those types of people here, and plus having yourself as a character having sex or whatever with Kaiba is really sad. Also, by Jun Tao, do you mean THE PERSON FROM SHAMAN KING?!?! That's pretty weird, having Chazz paired with an older woman from another story universe, if I'm correct, The shippings are called YinYangShipping [Chazz x Jun] and SapphireEyesShipping [Amy Durbin x Seto Kaiba]

NOT COOL. LAME. You're not allowed to make a shipping about yourself, it's still just sad and stupid!! We DON'T GIVE A CRAP ABOUT SHIPPING ON THIS FORUM (You: "I'm on the fan fics section... hm? No gay shipping? Well then, I guess that I'd better go back to a Twilight forum!!") Sorry if I'm being offensive or too "blah" over this all, but your "pro-Yuri" signature disturbs me in a way.

 

 

Sitting on the blue Oblesk half sphere were Amy and Seto a couple of people who didn't really mind rule breaking cept when they got caught, they also didn't mind the cold. Hm. Kaiba is a student at his own school. I don't get it. Was he held back for a long time and that's' why he's so tall? That was a joke. Either way, no description is lazy and also frowned upon. Hm... the guys are in a huge half-sphere in a white void, and the people look like two shapeless blobs. That's my mental image so far-- no, wait, it's also Winter in the void. Also your spelling is bad. Go over this again, sad shipper person. Amy was cuddling up to Seto all the while Seto was starring off into the distance almost like he was in some sort of a trance, Seto's glance was off in a dirrection of the docks and sea. I LOVE KAIBA! HE DOESN'T CARE ABOUT ANYTHING AND HE SHUNS ME!! What's the attraction about here? If people are in love, you give them a reason. So far the girl likes some 30-year old lolicon since he's rich and she wants to marry him for his money. They climbed up ontop of the half spere at about 8:45 to watch the falling sun. ISN'T THAT FREAKING DANGEROUS?! Plus, spell-check will soon be your best friend, I hope. Amy cuddled up to Seto even more while watching the sun set, and said "What a beautiful sunset." Nothing un-generic here. Seto still seemed to not be paying any attention to her, for he was gazing off in a completly different dirrection not even watching the sunset. Boring. At LEAST pay attention to your spelling!! Seto woke up from what seemed to be a almost hypnotic sight, then Seto replied back "O huh? What did you say?" Text blocks are ugly. Whenever a new speaker talks, you make a new paragraph. This COULD be paragraph three, if you were SUPER-AMBITIOUS. Plus, kudos for ruining his calm, cool demeanor and personality which was painstakingly built up over a period of years by the original author. I LOVE how shippers ALWAYS DO THAT. Dumbfounded and a tad bit irritated for being ignored she replied "O it was nothing must've been the wind." STOP SAYIN' 'O'! You can spell 'oh', right? THEN DO IT!! It's almost as irritating as when people say 'I NOW, gosh, I'm not stupid!' See how dumb THAT was? Confussed Seto replied "The wind ain't blowing." Seto was cun-fussed? He said 'ain't'?! This is NOT GOING WELL. "O it's blowing alright, just very quietly!" Shot back Amy who was now getting annoyed with Seto. That wasn't cute, nor was it a good comeback. And why do they HAVE to say 'O' in EVERY QUOTE?! Seto looked surprised like when he heard Joey made it second place in his tournament while he got third. HA HA. YEAH, THAT DIDN'T SOUND AWKWARD. Sarcasm is fun!! Amy looked in the dirrection Seto had hypnoticaly been gazing off into when she noticed that it wasn't any hypnotic trance, there was another couple on the exact same Oblesk blue half sphere. Why can't you spell?! It's a real problem when somebody has a problem with every sentence you write. At first all she saw was a boy with abnormaly spikey black hair sitting next to a girl with just as spikey grass green hair; after her eyes got a chance to focus she noticed that it was Chazz Princeton her x/Best Buddy and Jun Tao her international friend.Ha, you can't spell 'ex' either!! But still, there's no excuse for having a 19-year old Shaman King person here in an alternate universe. She's too old for High School!! Like Seto. Just then Chazz turned so that Amy and Chazz were eyeing each other, upon seeing Chazz's smile she at first was a bit shocked then she smiled back; remembering Chazz's bros and all the homicidle attempts on Chazz so she was delighted to see him smiling. THIS IS SUCH A LONG SENTENCE!! Plus it's pretty useless too; why are you apparently trying to make a love triangle with lolicons and such on a forum mostly occupied by 12 year-old boys? Nobody will care. It was refreshing to her and Seto seemed to be smiling too. [Plus 1015 Dead Puppies] :lol: NOT FREAKING FUNNY!! Man, you're REALLY lame when you start purposely stealing jokes from a better author than you!!

 

 

The sunset the four of them had been watching was a beautiful array of colors, truely a beautiful sight. Lrn 2 spll. TRULY!! i even just checked it to make sure! It took two seconds. Why can't you do such simple things? It looked almost as though Michealangelo himself had painted it with varius oranges, yellows, reds, and a hint of more peachy colors. Michelangelo is angry at you for misspelling his name. All four of them were so entertained by the falling sun that not a single person knew the time because the falling sun was so mesmerizing. You just said that "The falling sun was so awesome that the falling sun made them forget the time". Using the term twice ruined the sentence. After several hours had passed by and sun had completly faded away and out of the sky, it was so dark you could quite litterly see stars. YOU CAN USUALLY SEE THE STARS FROM A NEARLY UNPOPULATED ISLAND. And you just screwed up TWO more words! WHY CAN'T YOU USE SPELL-CHECK (once again, you are not the first person I've done this to, and I'm respected here as a harsh but honest reviewer. Get used to it if you aren't already!) Eventually the time and exhaustion had caught up with everyone as they all started yawning, after Chazz finished a long and cat like yawn he broke the silence first "Come on you three, if we don't get going back to our dorms we'll be stuck here and be risking expulsion for not being at our dormitories when Crowler or Campus-Security catch us wandering around at night." Why do you keep using ugly run-on sentences? And what was the real point of this scene? People in a WORLD OF ACTION-PACKED CARD GAMING sit on a building for hours, doing nothing except breathing in the romantic atmosphere! *Sigh...* ONCE AGAIN, PEOPLE DON'T CARE ABOUT THAT TYPE OF STORY HERE. DIDN'T YOU LOOK AT ANYTHING ELSE POSTED ON THIS SITE TO SEE WHAT PEOPLE LIKE? The other three yawned, rubbed there eyes, and all replied with "Good idea, Don't wanna ruin our first year or second." All at the same time? Wow, how situational! And once again I must ask: Why is a 30 year-old you have a weird, demented crush on at his own school and risking expulsion for breaking the rules he sets? Chazz impatiently cut them off with "Hurry up, lets go!" Where was the use in that? They all noded in unisun, and made there way to edge of the half sphere and quitely but quickly climbed down and sneaked by threedifferent groups of Campus-Security all the way to the Slifer-Red dormitories. This sentence made me laugh! No, I'm serious! You said 'noded', 'unisun', 'quitely' and 'threedifferent' ALL IN THE SAME RUN-ON SENTENCE!! Plus you used the wrong 'their', and made one other grammatical error right after! I couldn't contain myself. Chazz's room was their destination, Chazz's room was very spacey inside with four triple bunk-beds, A Giant T.V, Couches, Tables, desks, boxes, and laptops sitting all over on all the tables and desks. You used a comma after saying 'was their destination' instead of one of these babies; thus you made another error. And why are 'A Giant T.V', 'Couches' and 'Tables' capitalized? You could have AT LEAST capitalized everything, making a bit more sense. Now the other words feel bad and inferior.

 

 

 

The four made it to Chazz's room finaly, after a wrong turn that lead them right to Ra-Yellow dormitories. Heh, 'finaly'. Plus, we didn't need to know the 'wrong turn' stuff. And just now I realized that Jun has said nothing so far. Are you sure that Chazz isn't just a fan boy of her and carries around an inflatable Jun Tao doll? What a perv, in that case. Just out side at the entrance to Chazz's room the four huddled together to avoid the cold and detection. USELESS. JUTS GET INSIDE ALREADY. And if it was so cold outside, then how harsh is a nice, warm building with heating and ventilation? Chazz as silently and as quickly as possible opened the door, he waited about a minute for his eyes to adjust to the different level of darkness. Stop saying 'as silently and quickly as possible'! The more you use it, the worse it sounds. Unless you use it too much for comedic effect, which there is none of in this show. Chazz looked around inside for anyone that could catch them for breaking campus rules and get the four in trouble, but Chazz did not see or hear a single person. Since you called it 'Chazz's room', why would anybody else be in there? Why do you have no common sense? After confirming that it was safe like a coushined and padded room for crazies, he signaled for the others to follow. That simile wasn't funny, and you misspelled 'cushioned' very badly. Inside Chazz's room was dark but the light from the open windows brightened up the place enough for them to not trip over anything, Pharaoh the old professer and head of the Slifer dorms cat was sleeping on Chazz's couch in in the big main room. WHY THE HELL IS HE OF ALL PEOPLE IN HERE?! And spell it as 'professor'. In the room that goes off from the big main room were the four entered from there was four triple bunks, and all twelve bunks were empty because everyone else was away or actually at their assigned dorm room. If nobody else lives there, why does he need so many beds for himself? Ask yourself this while re-writing this horribly rushed story with no real plot. The four went to bed Chazz and Jun shared a bunk and Seto and Amy shared a bunk. Seto and Amy headed towards the bunk closest to the back window Whoops, no period and no sense of time passing.

Seto and Amy climbed up to a empty middle bunk, while Chazz and Jun went to the bunk farthest from the window and on an oposit side of the room than the bunk Seto and Amy had picked.You know, why do we need to know where they sleep? It adds more realism, but it's boring. And you misspelled 'opposite'! I can't help myself from giggling at all of these mistakes. Chazz and Jun picked a empty bottom bunk. The bunks themselves were nicely positioned two on each side or the room with desks and laptops set up at the only free wall right across from the entrance to the room. Whatever happened to that nutty professor in the room for no reason? Is he dead or something? Why does he do nothing? On Seto's bunk Amy and Seto layed side by side, Amy whispered "I love you." to him and he inturn whispered back "I love you too." No, Kaiba loves nobody except for himself and his munneh!! But you use too many crappy run-on sentences. Then Seto kissed her cheek, and the two rolled around a bit [not enough to fall of the bunk though] they giggled while rolling around. Kaiba DOES NOT giggle. It has been proven. This sentence is disturbing because it's so loli. I don't like lolicons. After rolling around for about 5 minutes and exchanging kisses the two just layed still. 'Laid' still, not 'layed' still. Duh. Seto reached over to Loki's bunk beside their's and got his Yami-Yugi plush doll and staited "How'd this Star-Fish headed dork ever beat me and take my champinion title?" WHO IS LOKI?!But really, this Kaiba has proven how old he is by recounting past events. You are one sad little girl, apparently. Give your 'blatant Mary Sue character' a REAL love interest that would work in the real world next time. Amy simply replied with "I don't know...." then poked the doll in the eye with her left pointing finger. We HAVE to know which finger in this stupid glorified fantasy you're pushing into our faces? What's next, they have sex on the right side of the bed with green sheets? They both giggle then started to really make out. On Chazz's bottom bunk Jun blatently said "I love you Chazz." and Chazz replied with a striat face "I love me too Jun, I love me too." 'Striat' face? HA HA!! Plus, we get that un-funny quote here. teenagers SURE are WHACKY in love, right? HA HA!!

Jun with the most cofussed look said while whacking Chazz with that bunks pillow "No! No! No! Chazz the sentence is I love you too!" Then the two gazed right into each others eyes while giggle for about two minutes, then Jun leaned over to kiss Chazz on the cheek, but Chazz was too quick. He moved over just enough to make her kiss on his cheek into a kiss on his lips. Then they started to really make out. WHAT A USELESS STORY. This wasn't passionate, it wasn't funny, it didn't give any back story you've invented that anybody would want.

 

 

 

 

 

THE END :cry:

The only way I can describe this story is your own little self-masturbatory glorified ego-trip of yourself in your own stupid, simple little world or stupid people doing nothing except schoolgirl love. This story is useless. At least, to ALL OF US ON THIS WEBSITE!! Why don't you find your own forum filled with people who swoon over "love" stories about stalker vampires who sparkle in the sunlight for no good reason and fight stupid racist Native American people in a creepy story filled with vampires rubbing up against each other and inspiring several retarded kinky love adventures all over the internet?

 

YES. I JUST BURNED TWILIGHT. TAKE THAT!!

 

Anyways, this story is stupid and an insult to all of the real authors on this site. TAKE THAT TOO, YUGI AND MARIK SHIPPER! Oh, and you mentioned 'Yami Yugi' in this story as a doll? You've been 4KIDS'D.

 

I really don't care how much of a pitchfork you give over this.

[Kendo Fish]

I HATE self-insert fics. They're stupid. And looking at your signature (I realize that has little to do with this story), why the hell would Jaden and Chazz make a couple? Why would Yugi want to marry his alter ego? Why would Seto marry his hated rival?

 

Please don't be a stupid self-inserter unless you make the insert somehow GOOD.

[Goldeneagle]

I'm not even going to describe this, as if I tried I'd end up using words which would almost certainly get me banned from YCM. Instead, I'm going to close my eyes and count to ten slowly. This is the worst fanfic I have ever read, and if you even dare post this sort of s*** on YCM again, you will be negged.

[Weather Report - Stand]

Thank you for agreeing with me. WE'RE AGAINST THIS STORY!!

[Lk123]

W T F Worst Fanfic ever and that's from someone who's read so many terrible fan fics Edit: You know what i will neg you if you post something like this on YCM you are a cruel sick person

[RyanAtlus]

Amerika had Michael Jackson.

Belgium had Marc Dutroux.

Duel Monster World now has Seto Kaiba.

 

Why does everyone starts having sex in the room of a 16-year old boy?

And why are the Pharaoh, the old professor, the dorm's head and the cat all watching them?

[Goldeneagle]

I think that the line in question, if anyone bothered to insert a bit of puctuation, would imply that only the cat was in there. However, this piece of s### is still utterly irredeemable.

[Weather Report - Stand]

Wow, should I ask somebody to lock this topic, or should we keep making fun of it for now?

[Nexev]

Technically I've heard of two worst ones, but that was on TV Tropes which means the fic was their simply for how notoriously bad they are.

 

Here are the pages at TV Tropes:

http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/FanFic/TheGirlWhoLived

http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/FanFic/MyImmortal?from=Main.MyImmortal

 

But, yeah one girl is you, which just screams Mary Sue. Seto Kaiba (who founded the school) is apparently not only a student their but is in the lowest dorm. And no one ever heard of the second girl in Yugioh.

 

I don't see the point.

 

@Kendo: Kenny Bonner wrote a pretty good self insert fan fic. So they are not all bad.

[legolover09]

Weather Report's Weather Report was so funny i almost died. it was funny at hw bad the story is.

[Weather Report - Stand]

I wonder when I really WILL kill somebody with great fiction?

[RyanAtlus]

I wonder when I really WILL kill somebody with great fiction?

 

Only if your writing style is very sharp.

[Amy Kaiba]

EVERYBODY SHUT THE funk UP! IF YOU DON'T LIKE GET LOST! AND DON'T LEAVE BULLSHIT COMMENTS!

[Reaper of Shadows]

I was randomly browsing around YCM looking for a fanfic to read and I chanced upon this one. Worst mistake ever. I not going to bother commenting on this disgrace of a story, because everything's already been said. Let me just say that you need fanfic writing help. IMMEDIATELY.

 

And what the f*** is up with your signature. SetoxMokuba. Not cool.

[Goldeneagle]

Right, that's it. She apparently does give a pitchfork, she enjoys using excessive caps and swearwords, in addition to the childish and absolutely crap fanfic that she dared to post. -1 rep.

[Kendo Fish]

For the record, I thought Amy Kaiba was just a member who would come once and never come back. Just in case she came and forgot about the story, I sent her a message in advance. Here's the conversation we've had up to this point.

 

Look at your fanfiction.

 

NOW.

 

Or we'll be out for blood.

 

Crazy shipper blood.

 

I don't care what you think so ohwell if others have a problem with my imagination Should I really care? NO!

You DO realize that posting your fan fiction on a forum is like posting a notice on the street' date=' right? People are free to look at it and comment on it. If you don't care about your fan fiction in any way, that's some of your life you'll never get back. One who is not willing to improve and not willing to accept the comments of others probably won't last long in the real world.

 

We didn't comment on your imagination. We commented on your fan fiction.

 

And yeah, you should care about what you've said. That's almost like saying if Pablo Picasso painted something he didn't like and sold it, he shouldn't care about the customer's feedback. [b']And that's dreadful.[/b]

 

I'm gonna have to give you a negative reputation point.

[KasuSato]

What the funk, guys?

You think that's HELPFUL CRITIQUE? Honestly, it's more like trolling and flaming. She has all the right to dislike what you say. She's LEARNING, like most writers do. It doesn't give you the right to get your chance and flame. Seriously guys, if you don't have helpful stuff, don't comment. There's a back button for a REASON. This is just plain rude.

[Captain Lawless]

What the f***' date=' guys?

You think that's HELPFUL CRITIQUE? Honestly, it's more like trolling and flaming. She has all the right to dislike what you say. She's LEARNING, like most writers do. It doesn't give you the right to get your chance and flame. Seriously guys, if you don't have helpful stuff, don't comment. There's a back button for a REASON. This is just plain rude.

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[legendhiro]

this is a childrens' site, and even your signiture is a stone's throw from needing a pg-13 rating (at the very least). i'm sorry, but there is a place for stories like this, and YCM isn't one of them. this story doesn't belong here, and from what i've seen, i'm not sure that you belong here. you need to understand that your fanfic could very easily be read by children, who do not need to read about there favorite characters having sex with people. it is also pretty much known to every fanfic writer that self inserts are a mistake. you can give aspects of your personality to your characters as many writers do, but making them just like you is equivalent to making us watch your fantasies. it's not fun for anyone except you. if you want to write for yourself, type something in word, print it, frame it, and hang it on your wall.

 

this story was inappropriate, poorly writen, and a little sad (as in pathetic). i don't mean to be a jerk, but i call things like i see 'em. the best part of this fic was the end, followed very closely by WR's "weather report". i'm trying very hard to write what KasuSato might call a "helpful critique", but i don't think i can provide the kind of help that you need. shipping and self insertion are cool some places, but not here. in fact, its taking all of my self control not to report this thread right now; something that i might still do, as i believe that this thread should be locked and removed immediately.

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I wonder when I really WILL kill somebody with great fiction?

 

you already did. i'm a ghost.

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also, does anyone else think that this KasuSato person might be Amy Kaiba again? because i do.

[RyanAtlus]

this is a childrens' site' date=' and even your signiture is a stone's throw from needing a pg-13 rating (at the very least). i'm sorry, but there is a place for stories like this, and YCM isn't one of them. this story doesn't belong here, and from what i've seen, i'm not sure that you belong here. you need to understand that your fanfic could very easily be read by children, who do not need to read about there favorite characters having sex with people. it is also pretty much known to every fanfic writer that self inserts are a mistake. you can give aspects of your personality to your characters as many writers do, but making them just like you is equivalent to making us watch your fantasies. it's not fun for anyone except you. if you want to write for yourself, type something in word, print it, frame it, and hang it on your wall.

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C'mon? THIS PG-13?

Even mine hasn't got a PG rating. And that one had violence in it.