[Pokemon] The GemCraft Chronicles >x> RighteousRuby <x<

[Snitch]

[ALIGN=CENTER]Mhmm, so, these are The GemCraft Chronicles. If you didn't really guess, these take place in Hoenn. I am considering making a hack re-make of the R/S/E trio, and if I do, this story is in no way related with the hack and both will have different plotlines. Just saying, so I don't get people asking. ._.

 

Anyway, I felt as though I had to write a Pokémon story at one point, and while starting up and editing a Pokemon Ruby ROM, I had some inspiration for this. I will try to update as much as possible, and if this dies, I get a lot of people asking why. >_<

 

Regardless, I hope you all enjoy. I like dedicated readers and harsh reviewers, along with mediocre commenters, so anything is accepted as long as I get feedback. So, yeah. :3

 

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Chapter One

Of Prologues and Backstories[/ALIGN]

It’s an interesting Pokémon, Lotad is. For most it’s just a casual starting trainer’s find – living on the pond near the outskirts of the ever-expanding town of Oldale, some being found in further visits throughout the region of Hoenn. For most, it’s nothing. For me, it destroyed most of my life.

 

I have a friend – had a friend? – by the name of Lily. Lily’s an interesting girl; she had already developed a tomboyish personality at a young age, which may have been one of the reasons (or the reason) why they used to pick on her. I always found her quite pretty myself, with her coconut brown hair, speckled with blonde because of the time she tried to die her hair blonde to look like some singer. She always wore the same dark yellow blazer, for no particular reason other than it was the only piece of clothing she could find with that colour, along with her knee-length black skirt, earning her the nickname of ‘bumblebee’ by those that used to tease her. It didn’t help that she sub-consciously, without noticing it would only attract more jeers, wore yellow socks and dusty black shoes. Her eyes were a fair blue, her mouth and nose both small with the latter being curved at the tip. Her ears were almost elven, with similar curving as the nose at the tops of each.

 

Sadly, and when I recall the moments I know I should have reacted sooner, I used to be a part of the group that you could say bullied Lily. I never joined in – needless to say, she would never have been my friend if I had! – and whenever they did it I felt like I wanted to throw up; I could always feel the blind eyes of the ‘Sage’ of Petalburg somehow watching me through some sort of magic. I’ll explain about the Sages later, but either way, the Sage who was and still is at Petalburg at the time was known as Rufus. He was completely blind, his eyes glossed with white – it was creepy yet intriguing, and we would dare each other to do stuff like steal his candles and things like that. I did it once. I could tell he was watching me, but I stole a Poké Ball – it was empty – and stupidly glanced back as I was leaving, only to see his normally emotionless face break into a smile, it pointing right at me. With a wave of his hands he dismissed me even though I had never been invited to enter, and I’ve had the Poké Ball ever since.

 

Regardless, when my friends began to bully Lily, I was never comfortable. I would just watch and slowly move away, till one day I stood up for her. I told them to stop; to leave her alone. It’s pretty obvious why they stopped ‘hanging around’ with me and I ended up making better friends with Lily, probably just because of that incident. I always found Lily special – she would exaggerate a lot, but she knew how to do a lot of things I couldn’t. She taught me how to cook and bake Poffins – her mother worked in the Contests and taught her daughter some skills – and in return I read my books on Pokémon with her. We would sit in her room, at the end of her bed in the moonlight glow, turning page after page while I read aloud (she was illiterate), teaching her about all the wonderful creatures of our world. Lotad was her favourite, and she vowed to catch one when she grew up. I couldn’t really imagine her being a Pokémon Trainer – she seemed more of a co-ordinator type person – but she was consistent, asking me to read with her every night. Soon she began to ask if she could borrow my books, and I was amazed when I went to hers for a sleepover one night and found her reading to me.

 

There’s a law about Pokémon trainers attacking humans – it’s forbidden for a reason I probably don’t have to say. The ex-friends I had slowly began to retreat from their leave-Lily-alone state and began to pick on the both of us, saying we were boyfriend and girlfriend – as much as I liked Lily, and she liked me back, we were no closer than friends – and teasing us. One time I lashed out at one of them, the oldest one, who was thirteen – two years older than me. I almost broke his nose, and his little brother, who was twelve, was having nothing of it. He grabbed the Poké Ball around his belt, threw it – a Torchic! – and commanded his Pokémon to use Ember on me. I was in the hospital for six weeks with severe burns, with nobody at my side but Lily – both my parents lived in Kanto, in a mental institute. I didn’t know why they were there, nor how it had happened; I had been one or two when they’d left and I’d been put in the care of the Petalburg residents.

 

Either way, I can safely say that the younger brother, his name being Scott Hands, won’t be getting his Torchic back for a long, long time.

 

Anyway, as I recovered, I grew – I was twelve now, having spent my birthday in the hospital, being showered with multiple gifts from Lily as she passed each one to me, a huge grin plastered on her face as I unwrapped the paper from each and every gift she gave me. Two Poké Balls, three books on Pokémon in each of the three other regions (excluding Kanto and replacing that with Orange Islands, as I already owned a book on Kanto) other than Hoenn. She also gave me two cards, which I laughed at both – she told me she couldn’t choose which one she preferred. There was one other card, which was obviously faked, from my Mum and Dad. I had an old picture of my parents that I kept in my hotel room where I slept, with her signature on it, and it was clear from the handwriting of the card that neither of my parents had even seen the gift. I ended up crying myself to sleep that night, with Lily beside me, sharing my tears for reasons I am unsure of.

 

When I left the hospital, I had my own problems to worry about – Lily’s birthday was the coming Friday! She had looked after me so well, it would seem wrong not to do so in return. I had the perfect idea of what to get her, and while it would take some work, I would refuse to back down. I was going to catch my friend a Lotad!

[Kendo Fish]

WARNING: This post is long.

 

I don't like it as much as the prologue of that other story (seriously, what happened to that!?), but it's good, yo. I don't really like Lily liking Lotad, of all things. Lily. Lily pad Pokemon. HAHAHAHAHAHAHAAAH. Well, maybe if the character pointed that out in the story it would be better in my opinion...

 

Also, for what reason are the main character's parents in a mental institute? When he was 11, why didn't he have the sense to ask someone about them!?!? I mean, if my brother were a murderer I'd sure like to know who he murdered.

 

And right now including Rufus seems...out of place. I think that Nameless Main Character's going to use the Poke Ball to try and catch Lotad, but if it has little impression on the reader's (or at least my) view of the main character, why include it?

 

The main character sounds suspiciously British. It's just the wording of it, kind of hard to describe. And unless you really are European, that's the current weird trend and OF COURSE it makes him sound smarter, older and kewler.

 

D:

 

Don't get me wrong. It's a good story and you should continue writing.

 

(Also, the name GemCraft sounds VERY typical, and RighteousRuby sounds something like "RIGHTEOUS, man! Dude, that was a SLICK MOVE!".)

[Snitch]

GemCraft is because the R/S/E series is referred to as the "Gem Series", whilst this is a re-incarnation of them, therefore GemCraft.

 

I didn't even notice the Lily Pad/Lotad link. Swear. >_<

 

On the whole why-didn't-he-ask-anyone thing, who does he ask? I'm not telling you why he's in Petalburg for fear of plotbreaking, but when he was one or two? That's ten years before he really notices anything and thinks for a moment, and ten years later? No. :/

 

Thanks anywho. Weather report? xD

 

Oh, and I am European. British, to be exact. ;3

[Kendo Fish]

Sorry, I didn't notice that the main character was one-two when he got beat up. And now I know that you're British. I couldn't quite tell because you're apparently in a world of dreams.

 

And if you REALLY want a weather report I'll have to do that later. Gotta type up a cowboy that's been long overdue.