mrbishop Posted September 15, 2009 Report Share Posted September 15, 2009 i made this a while back and posted it and now im trying ot make a return with it. i got good reb=views saying i captured the characters feelings and stuff well and thsi is relly how i think the original series should go on YugiohRevival of the Gods Episode 1 Prologue: 2 years after the parting with Atem, Yugi and Joey are left behind while Tristan, Mai, and Serentity go to college and Tea goes and completes her dream, Dancing in America. Yugi has laid down his Gods until now when Kaiba comes too his house unexspectantly... Start Opening Theme, Begin with Yugi talking. Yugi: My lifes been different ever since Atem went away. Joey: Yeah, You must miss your Millenium Puzzle. Yugi: Your right, I remember the day I completed it... Flash Back to the Millenium Puzzle completion Grandpa (enters): Yugi! Kaiba is here to see you. Yugi and Joey together: WHAT! Yugi (wonders to self): What does Kaiba want Yugi walks outside to see Kaiba, with Joey hiding to easdrop Kaiba: Yugi, its been a while. Yugi: Yeah, so why did you come over to my place. Kaiba: I am starting a tournement at my duel academy, a partner tournment! I want you to join. Yugi: Ok, so how do i pick my partner? Kaiba: Its a random pick from the students there, and Wheeler I know your there, theres plenty of minor leagers for you. Joey: URRRR, you watch it richboy, your goin down on our next duel. Kaiba: What ever, so Yugi tommorow be at the Duel Academy tommorow so you can get your partner. Yugi: Ok..... bye. Kaiba" And oh yeah, BRING YOUR GOD CARDS Yugi: Ok.. bye. Kaiba Leaves, Yugi sighs. Joey: So Kaiba invited us to another dueling tounement, even me , OK weird..! Yugi: Hes stil after my god cards! Joey: He wont get them, your the greatest duelist in the world, thanks to Atem. Yugi: Thanks Joey, really. Joey: No prob, anytime. Commercial come on Commercial role off, start off with Yugi waking up Yugi: yaaaawn. Joey enters Joey: Hey Yugi ready to go? Yugi: Yeah, just let me get my duel disk and my new deck, I stayed up all night making it even added the gods! Joey: Same here all my best efforts and strategys are in here! Yugi: We dont have to go yet, wanna practice duel. Joey: Yeah, sure! They both ready there duel disks. Slip deck in place. Together: Its time to duel! Joey: Ill go first, DRAW. I place two cards face down and activate Scapegoat. Scapegoat holograms emerge. Joey: ... and now I play Gearfried the Iron Knigh in attack mode. End Turn! Yugi: My move, I draw. Yugi looksat his hand and wonders: Hmm, my hand has Dark Magician, Big Shield Gardna, Archfiend of Gifer, Change of Heart, Collected Power, and Beta the Magnet Warrior, Ill summon Beta and place Change of heart fa- AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH (he screams outloud)! Joey: YUGI, Whats the matter? Yugi: All of a sudden I felt a peircing pain go through me like a dagger running down my back. Joey: Yugi, Your cards are glowing! Yugi: What the heck! Yugi takes his deck out of his duel disk and looks through them and thinks: Its all o- wait theres two new cards in here, The Creatod, God of Light, Horahty nd In the Pharoahs Name- ATEM! Joey looks at Yugi Joey: Yugi what happened, is something wrong. Yugi: He came back, in a card... Joey: WHAT who came back and is now in a card, thats crazy! Yugi: Atem, he's back but his souls in a card, two new cards magically appeared in my deck, The Creator, God of Light Horackhty and in the Pharoahs Name-Atem! Horakhty, the god who is the fusion of Slifer, Ra, amd Obelisk and defeated Zorc came back and so did Atem. I now have the best deck in the world! Yugi smiles and hears a voice. Atem: Yugi, hi, its been a while! Yugi: Atem, your back but how, your supposed to be in the afterlife! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Star Posted September 15, 2009 Report Share Posted September 15, 2009 Before I even consider reading this, I'd suggest that you try and make it more organized. Script format looks terrible and it's annoying to read. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DeREVOLUTION Posted September 15, 2009 Report Share Posted September 15, 2009 Before I even consider reading this' date=' I'd suggest that you try and make it more organized. Script format looks terrible and it's annoying to read.[/quote'] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Weather Report - Stand Posted September 15, 2009 Report Share Posted September 15, 2009 It looks dumb. And script format is banned. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mrbishop Posted September 16, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 16, 2009 ok fine lock see if i care but u guys SHOULD READ IT before telling me the rules, this site is so less civilized then PGTS there ppl do nice things for you Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Weather Report - Stand Posted September 16, 2009 Report Share Posted September 16, 2009 I just read it. It has pretty useless things used to make it "seem" like a television show unnecessarily, the plot is nonsensical (Atem comes back from Heaven and gives Yugi some cards so that he can duel Kaiba. Couldn't he have done this before?). Your dialogue needs work. And, once again, script format is bad. It describes nothing and leaves everything half-assed. The people on the last forum you were on obviously suck at writing. And we're nice, but you have to leave some sort of impression on us first, like regular people. And if you want to know what it SHOULD be like, look at something like The Pink Army, or Yu-Gi-Oh GX! written by Weather Report and KaiKae. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mrbishop Posted September 16, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 16, 2009 its not done though and well i planned yugi not to use the cards, but keep them with him at all times Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Weather Report - Stand Posted September 16, 2009 Report Share Posted September 16, 2009 Well, either way, if you want people to take you seriously here, you need to spell things correctly and use good grammar (ppl who talk lik this are called noobs. i just wanted to tell u that). Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mrbishop Posted September 16, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 16, 2009 i suck at typing lol i can try but i dont really care Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Weather Report - Stand Posted September 16, 2009 Report Share Posted September 16, 2009 i suck at typing lol i can try but i dont really care Like I said, nobody will take you or your story seriously if you don't, so if you want people to even LOOK at the story, you need to type better. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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