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... Does Mandatory not register with you?

 

Manditory= Necessary' date=' unavoidable, needed.

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No. I don't speak English to your level. I'm Mostly French and over my 5 years of english ahve not come across that word. Thank you for Telling me the meaning.

 

No' date=' you're not. -_-

*sigh...*

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KK

 

I have to say. That was the worst entry I've seen.

 

No way near. Have you seen other peoples. I actually filled most of the form' date=' some poeple just say: "Can I join?"

 

Haaaaiiii Tempest!

 

Anyways....

 

*explodes into several pieces of red armor*

 

.................... Bakura Kakashi....... MANDATORY!!!!!!

 

K, i'll fix. And calm down. =/

 

He can have another go' date=' but it'll be his last. Everyone only has 2 chances.

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K, thank you and MB for understanding. 2nd Atempt:

 

Username: (Mandatory, of course.) Bakura Kakashi

Your Characters: (List the characters that you use, or used, in RPs. This is not mandatory.) Tomas Kakashi

A GOOD RP Sample: (The sample must be at least 7 sentences long. This is mandatory.)

 

The dark figure approached Tomas as he backed into the dead end. The darkness was like tendrills sucking the life out of the two exhausted men. Tomas observed the exact location of the features of the allyway, calculating a way out of this.

 

"Why do you attempt fleeing?" said the man mechanicaly "It did not serve any use to your parents, neither will it for you!" He cackeled.

 

"Shut it!"

 

"Poor little Tomas, lost and trapped in a world of danger and fear. Are you affraid?" He jeered. A fist swung out of the Darkness and connected with the man's chin. The man flew backwards and crashed into a nearby lampost.

 

"No. Are YOU affraid?" His expression was livid with anger.

 

"You under estimate me, don't you?" The said as he got back up, brishing the dirt and rubble off his cloak.

 

"I don't know. We haven't finished the business yet!" He growled, angry for blood.

 

Feel free to point out my grammer mistakes.

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Actually Black, my my count, he already has over 7 sentances. A sentance ends either either a period, question mark, or exlimation mark. Meaning he has met that requirement.

 

And, as he wanted grammar pointed out, I will be more than happy. For starters chance up the "darkness" bit with different words. Try using some more detail, but not enough that the words are forgotten.

 

And finally just don't jump into the story. It would've been a better entrance if you had him running in the begining.

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