destron Posted November 30, 2009 Report Share Posted November 30, 2009 Interesting ending. I like it, except the third sentence. All those adjectives mean basically the same thing, and "walked" is not very descriptive. Possibly, make it a compound sentence with the second sentence? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kira Magister Magi Posted November 30, 2009 Report Share Posted November 30, 2009 Good.... VERY good.... but... what is it for? XD O......K.... I know you edit'd this as I quoted it xD. You had Caps Lock on. but it's for my Incarnations of Immortality RP' date=' now turned fan-fic lol Edit: Interesting ending. I like it, except the third sentence. All those adjectives mean basically the same thing, and "walked" is not very descriptive. Possibly, make it a compound sentence with the second sentence? Those three don't neccesarily mean the same thing. Unannounced. He didn't say he was hear. Unnoticed. No one noticed he was here. Unknown. Alaric never knew he was here. And the first 2 sentences refer to an "appointment", usually meaning that the other person knew he was coming, but not in this case. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jake the Sage Posted November 30, 2009 Report Share Posted November 30, 2009 He pretty much means its a fan-fic of a book he's reading (actually sounds interesting). For someone to become death they have to first KILL the current incarnation of death; thus the smashed in skull. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kira Magister Magi Posted November 30, 2009 Report Share Posted November 30, 2009 And the woman that is 20, is Fate. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blake Posted November 30, 2009 Report Share Posted November 30, 2009 XD I did.And kill to become death, eh? Neat. So Zane was death? Cool. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kira Magister Magi Posted November 30, 2009 Report Share Posted November 30, 2009 If you can find it online, or maybe buy it, you HAVE to read it. The whole series. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blake Posted November 30, 2009 Report Share Posted November 30, 2009 Maybe. They look interesting, and I go to the library often. Plus, my Ted Dekker books are running out @_@ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kira Magister Magi Posted November 30, 2009 Report Share Posted November 30, 2009 Okay. Author is Piers Anthony. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
destron Posted November 30, 2009 Report Share Posted November 30, 2009 I'm not trying to start another war, but have you guys heard this? http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6nMFLquJeCc If you hadn't realized by looking at the title, it's from Metroid Prime when Samus (main character) has to kill Rundas who is the coolest person in the series, but he gets infected with the virus that makes everyone evil. Hence the name, "Metroid Prime 3: Corruption". Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blake Posted November 30, 2009 Report Share Posted November 30, 2009 Piers Anthony.... Will keep in mind. Is the first book the one about Death? A "Pale Horse" is generally a symbol of death. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kira Magister Magi Posted November 30, 2009 Report Share Posted November 30, 2009 Yes.Pale Horse - DeathHourglass - TimeTangled Skein - FateRed Sword - WarGreen Mother - NatureLove of Evil - Devil/SatanEternity - GodVelvet Cloak - Night Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blake Posted November 30, 2009 Report Share Posted November 30, 2009 So, what KIND of books are they? Novels? And are they RELIGIOUS books? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kira Magister Magi Posted November 30, 2009 Report Share Posted November 30, 2009 They are novels. They are somewhat religious as there is God and Satan, but also not, as they take different aspects on legend. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blake Posted November 30, 2009 Report Share Posted November 30, 2009 Alright. Sounds interesting. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jake the Sage Posted November 30, 2009 Report Share Posted November 30, 2009 Ditto . . . will have to try and find them at B.A.M. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blake Posted November 30, 2009 Report Share Posted November 30, 2009 I demand a party! I made my 30th R.P.820 Member Card/Support XD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jake the Sage Posted November 30, 2009 Report Share Posted November 30, 2009 *streamers burst overhead as the music begins to blare* P-ARTY!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blake Posted November 30, 2009 Report Share Posted November 30, 2009 XD Well, only one NON-member card. http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/thread-170183.html Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kira Magister Magi Posted November 30, 2009 Report Share Posted November 30, 2009 Anyone mind helping me think of following things? I was also planning on building on that one I have now. All I have is the next sentence, and I'm unsure of that... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blake Posted November 30, 2009 Report Share Posted November 30, 2009 Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kira Magister Magi Posted November 30, 2009 Report Share Posted November 30, 2009 Oh, BTW, Zane was actually the protagonist from the first book. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jake the Sage Posted November 30, 2009 Report Share Posted November 30, 2009 Talkin' 'bout the fan-fic? Ned to first work out the plot and then add characters. Fill in detail as you go; or at least that is what I do . . . <_<>_>O_O <[Am I the ONLY one who does That?] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blake Posted November 30, 2009 Report Share Posted November 30, 2009 Most people go:Basic ideaCharactersPlot Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jake the Sage Posted November 30, 2009 Report Share Posted November 30, 2009 Hu? Somehow I don't enjoy doing it like that. I go, Basic IdeaPlotCharacters. I make the characters to fit the plot. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kira Magister Magi Posted November 30, 2009 Report Share Posted November 30, 2009 I plan out the plot while I plan out chars. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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