Meet the Khans <--- My first fan fic, please comment - Cartoon Comedy genre

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[align=center]This is a cartoon comedy sort of like Family guy, let me just inform you the idea is 100% mine and will be negged if you try to rip (; unless you like it and just start working on a similar idea.

[spoiler=Characters]

David - A big bellied American David works for a big Dentist company and loves Thursday night pizza night.

 

Ayla - When it comes to David she is vicious but she takes it easy on her children she is a house mom and loves her jewllery.

 

Emre - A 13 year old mischevious boy who loves to box he often finds himself getting in and out of trends and likes to hang around with his to best friends Harold and George.

 

Emily - Is a 15 year old girl who is very popular and loves to chat on her phone shop and loves to play the Piano.

 

Ted - The family dog who is very sensible and likes the finer things in life such as rolexes and expensive cars his pride and joy of his life is his baby no not an actual baby his Lamborghini that he loves and cherishes.

 

 

 

[spoiler=Episode 1 Part 1]

David: Ayla do I have to eat at your parents house tonight, why can’t we have Thursday night Pizza night like always?

Ayla: No we are going to my parents house and that’s final why do you always do this for the sake of Ala, KIDS GET YOUR STUFF WE ARE GOING NOW

Emre comes down the stairs

Emre: NO YOU, INBEFORZIPYOURLIP

David: Oh my god he is speaking in tongues, get the holy water Ayla QUICK!

Emre: I iz not speaking in tong dude I iz speaking in tha language of tha interweb it is tha newest thing on tha block

Ted: Emre where is Emily

Emre: she be at the Mcarthy’s house learning about the advantages of underage sex yo’

Ayla: WHAT!

David: alright I’m gonna go kick his ass

David walks out the door and comes back in...

David: w..wait he’s not black is he

Emre: no

David: alright I’m going to go kick some ass!

Ayla: NO! We will pick Emily up on the way there we are going to my parents house this second

David: alright, alright keep your panties on

Ayla: what if they are already off?

David’s eyes widen

David: Excuse me I have to go to the bathroom

Ayla: how many times do I have to tell you no!, Emre, Ted get in the car

Ayla drags David to the car

At Ayla’s parents house David sitting down with a hat over his penis

Mr Khan: So David I hear you like cars what is your favourite make

Ayla: oh god no

David stands up and answers in a robotic voice: OPTIMUS PRIME, OPTIMUS PRIME DESTROY, DESTROY

David gets out a bazooka and blows up the table

David sits back down: ahh ohh sorry about that was it expensive I.. I just get carried away sometimes y’know

Mr and Mrs Khan’s eyes still widened

Mr Khan: Um.. uh David what is that

David: What is what?

Mr Khan: that

David looks down at his penis

David: oh dear god

David runs out

Theme tune plays and it’s the following morning

Ted: So David how’dya sleep

David: Terrible I was up in the bathroom all nig... I mean in the computer room... working.. all night...

Ted: right, right

David: But man talking to Ayla is going to be even more difficult than the time I had phone sex with a blind girl

David: so what are you wearing?

Blind girl: I don’t know

Cuts back to Ted and David

David: and what’s even worse is that I am going to have to go to work and I’m as tired as hell

Cuts to scene with Emily

Emily in middle of having sex with a guy called Mark

Mark: ahh

Emily: I didn’t know I was that good

Mark: I think I’m having a heart atta...

Mark drops down lifeless

Emily: Mark, Maarrrk , oh my god he’s dead

Cuts to a scene in the kitchen with Emily and Ayla

Emily crying: He was my first one mom

Ayla: I know honey I know

The phone rings

Ayla answers it: hello, uh honey it’s for you

Emily: hello

Undertaker: um your boyfriend is well uh.. Still hard on

Emily: you mean

Undertaker: yup still as hard as a nut down there, so uh what should I do with it

Emily: CUT IT OFF AND STICK IT UP HIS ASS

Undertaker: um will do...

Emily hangs up

Ayla: don’t you think that’s a bit harsh on him honey it wasn’t his fault

Emily: he gets what he deserves

Ayla: huh

Cuts to scene with David in office with lots of people

Boss: Ok so it’s settled for the Happy go lucky teeth advertising in Alaska we have Tai the light hearted Korean and Tim the big hearted moustache inflated redneck

Tim: Sir why do you always refer to us by our personalities

Boss: I don’t know Tim the light hearted redneck I don’t know but anyhow we need one more volunteer David the fat Joe American how about you

David sits up fast from his sleep: DEAL

Work man next to David: David why did you just agree to go to Alaska it is the worst possible place you can go to work

David: wha...? Alaska I was just dreaming I was on deal or no deal

Boss: ok it’s settled you three are going!

Aeroplane seen landing in Alaska

Cuts to scene in hotel check in

Woman: sorry but there is only one room available

David: what

Tim: oh man

Tai: no way

David: I guess we are going to have to make do

In the room it’s morning in a double bed Tim, David and Tai all squashed together

Tim waking up stretching: ahh that’s funny I dreamt I had the best wank last night

Tai: *Yawn* that’s funny me too

David: I dreamt I was skiing

David looks at his hands

David: EW, NO WAY, GROSS

Tai: oh no way?

Tim’s eyes widen in realising what just happened

Tim: YHUCK GROSS!

Cuts to funeral back in New York

People lining up saying there words to Marks face as he lay in the coffin as Emily walks up to him she sees a tear rolling down his cheek

Emily: you see, I told you it bloody hurts!.

 

 

 

 

If you really liked it there is no point showing it to a network either because I already have sent it to every major and minor comedy net work and they said it wasnt their kind of material! but thanks for reading. [/align]

[Shonen Jump™]

Lol

it's good

some of the stuff is stolen from Family guy ;)

however some of it is very origional

nice work

keep it up =D

[Juuzou]

be a little more original with the characters. get a different animal besides a dog, it looks ripped off. but as fro the story its pretty awesome. i heard the joke before, but i wasn't expecting it, which made it even funnier. keep up the good work.

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Haha

thanks

I will try but that is more or less my family belive it or not xD

but I will make it more origional xP