Kousotu Posted November 22, 2007 Report Share Posted November 22, 2007 another I thought I'd try Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
VainZiler Posted November 22, 2007 Report Share Posted November 22, 2007 I'd just becareful how revieling you get man, this is a kids forum. Normal Summoned needs to be capitalized, Special Summoned needs to be capitalized, you say increase by not gain, Life Points needs to be capitalized, and Draw Phase needs to be capitalized. Plus, you might wanna rephrase your cards wording, the last two effects blend in together. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Serrenox Posted November 22, 2007 Report Share Posted November 22, 2007 Wow. Good job, VainZiler. You're helping me do my job. Also, try to keep as many cards as possible in the same thread. Rating: 7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kousotu Posted November 22, 2007 Author Report Share Posted November 22, 2007 I'd just becareful how revieling you get man' date=' this is a kids forum.[/quote'] that was in a "safe search" on Yahoo. I figured it'd be ok. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Saiba Aisu Posted November 22, 2007 Report Share Posted November 22, 2007 Once again, DON'T capitalize "monster" but capitalize the first letter in "Special Summoned" and "Normal Summoned. "Draw Phase" too I think. 8/10 I don't see her effect being very useful but nice job. This card is very similar to Guardian Enora-in fact, they are identical. Check it out:http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/showthread.php?tid=15578 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kousotu Posted November 22, 2007 Author Report Share Posted November 22, 2007 Normal Summoned needs to be capitalized' date=' Special Summoned needs to be capitalized, you say increase by not gain, Life Points needs to be capitalized, and Draw Phase needs to be capitalized. Plus, you might wanna rephrase your cards wording, the last two effects blend in together.[/quote'] this better?:If this card is Normal Summoned, remove this card from play. This card is Special Summoned after 5 turns. Increase your Life Points by 700 for every card that is drawn outside the Draw Phase. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kousotu Posted November 22, 2007 Author Report Share Posted November 22, 2007 Once again' date=' DON'T capitalize "monster" but capitalize the first letter in "Special Summoned" and "Normal Summoned. "Draw Phase" too I think. 8/10 I don't see her effect being very useful but nice job. This card is very similar to Guardian Enora-in fact, they are identical. Check it out:http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/showthread.php?tid=15578[/quote'] scary.. and I never used the word "monster" on the card at all. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
VainZiler Posted November 22, 2007 Report Share Posted November 22, 2007 Better, but now you just need to be more specific. Five turns after what? And if it's after you have drawn it, then how would your opponent know that you drew that card five turns ago, without revieling it to them? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kousotu Posted November 22, 2007 Author Report Share Posted November 22, 2007 Better' date=' but now you just need to be more specific. Five turns after what? And if it's after you have drawn it, then how would your opponent know that you drew that card five turns ago, without revieling it to them?[/quote'] "If this card is Normal Summoned, remove this card from play. If this card is removed by this effect it is Special Summoned after 5 turns. Increase your Life Points by 700 for every card that is drawn outside the Draw Phase." (It HAS to be summoned) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
VainZiler Posted November 22, 2007 Report Share Posted November 22, 2007 That makes more sense. Now, it's a really good card; I'd just lower the amount of Life Points you gain, or limit it to either cards you draw, or your opponent draws outside the battle phase. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kousotu Posted November 22, 2007 Author Report Share Posted November 22, 2007 That makes more sense. Now' date=' it's a really good card; I'd just lower the amount of Life Points you gain, or limit it to either cards you draw, or your opponent draws outside the battle phase.[/quote'] it's a draw deterant. plus it has to be gone for 5 turns. it leaves you open for one turn at least. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Saiba Aisu Posted November 22, 2007 Report Share Posted November 22, 2007 Ok. Sorry my "Monster" paranoia was out of control. Nice anyways, and yes, scary indeed. I like your card very much, (rather *revealing*) but good anyways. With the new effect 9/10. "Locked" just doesn't seem the right term for her. That's all. Please continue this on this thread so I don't have to hunt your good cards down! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
VainZiler Posted November 22, 2007 Report Share Posted November 22, 2007 True, but there's a lot of cards, that can force a card draw, reload, as an example. Once that card is on the field, you, yourself play reload, and say you had 4 cards, 700 x 4 = 2900 Life Points that you just got. And then say your opponent plays card destruction, you have 2 cards, and they have 5. (2 + 5)(700) = 4900 Life Points you just netted. See what I am getting at? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kousotu Posted November 22, 2007 Author Report Share Posted November 22, 2007 Ok. Sorry my "Monster" paranoia was out of control. Nice anyways' date=' and yes, scary indeed. I like your card very much, (rather *revealing*) but good anyways. With the new effect 9/10. "Locked" just doesn't seem the right term for her. That's all. Please continue this on this thread so I don't have to hunt your good cards down![/quote'] the pic had the name "slave elf" lol and with her hands that way I thought it worked. and I could point out OFFICIAL cards with more skin that one :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Saiba Aisu Posted November 22, 2007 Report Share Posted November 22, 2007 I know. I'm not criticizing your picture. I just wanted to tease VainZiler for his misspell. *Pokes with the jagged tease-stick.* And I know. Did you see Harpie Lady when she firts came out? OMG... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kousotu Posted November 22, 2007 Author Report Share Posted November 22, 2007 I know. I'm not criticizing your picture. I just wanted to tease VainZiler for his misspell. *Pokes with the jagged tease-stick.* And I know. Did you see Harpie Lady when she firts came out? OMG... no, look at Water omotics :) (the jap one) btw, a lnk to every card I have made so far:http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/showthread.php?tid=15836 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
cerberus the multiple Posted November 22, 2007 Report Share Posted November 22, 2007 It's pretty good 8/10 :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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Bloodrun Posted November 22, 2007 Report Share Posted November 22, 2007 Hey um, about the effect, that its summoned after 5 turns, summoned from where? your deck? your hand? from out of play? 9/10 =) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kousotu Posted November 22, 2007 Author Report Share Posted November 22, 2007 here's another (yes I edited a card that actually exists) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kousotu Posted November 22, 2007 Author Report Share Posted November 22, 2007 quick bump Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bloodrun Posted November 22, 2007 Report Share Posted November 22, 2007 lol im liking the card, 10/10, but gotta be careful man, dont wanna corrupt to many yungin minds lol, rate mine, there new!!! Aloys Unoin. =) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kousotu Posted November 22, 2007 Author Report Share Posted November 22, 2007 lol im liking the card' date=' 10/10, but gotta be careful man, dont wanna corrupt to many yungin minds lol, rate mine, there new!!! Aloys Unoin. =)[/quote'] there are 2 lol. which one you talking about? and trust me, "youn minds" are already corrupt. damn MTV.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bozataaaaa Posted November 22, 2007 Report Share Posted November 22, 2007 Sweet card Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kousotu Posted November 22, 2007 Author Report Share Posted November 22, 2007 again.. which one? lol I have 4 posted here. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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