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[Alexis Rhodes]

Hi Everyone ,

This is my first try at making a fan fic and i hope everyone likes it :)

 

Yu-Gi-Oh – The New Beginning

 

 

Introduction : Yuki Fuso is an 18 year old boy who lives in domino city with his friend’s Oscar , Jimmy and Athuna nothing is much is know about his parents except that they both died.

 

[spoiler=Get a charachter in my fan fic]If you want to a charachter in my fan fic please fill out this form , your charachter will be invloved with the story and sometimes duel :)

 

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Appearance: Please make a charachter on http://www.tektek.org/dream/

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[spoiler=Chapter 1]The Unknown Challenger

 

After a long hard day at school Yuki and his friends decided to go to their nearest duelling shop , packs for less.

 

As they entered they where shocked to find the owner of the shop laid on the floor unconscious ,

 

“Who did this ” Yuki shouted

 

“ It was me ” A deep voice said from the darkness

 

“Why ” Yuki Screamed still shocked

 

“He wouldn’t give me the pack of cards I wanted so I punched him , don’t worry looks like he will be ok , but more importantly I have the cards that I want and I can duel you ” The Voice replied

 

“Ok then looks like we will have to duel ” Said Yuki

 

GAME ON !!!

 

Yuki 4000

Stranger 4000

 

 

So what does everyone think chapter 2 coming up :)

[Alexis Rhodes]

anyone read it ?

[OMGAKITTY]

...I'm sorry, is this supposed to be a joke fic?

You don't build up anything, setting, characters, well...anything. You jump straight in without giving any plausible explanation for whats going on.

 

...Unless you were aiming to parody the actual show, in which case this all makes sense.

[Alexis Rhodes]

...I'm sorry' date=' is this supposed to be a joke fic?

You don't build up anything, setting, characters, well...anything. You jump straight in without giving any plausible explanation for whats going on.

 

...Unless you were aiming to parody the actual show, in which case this all makes sense.

[/quote']

 

i have done the setting what else is there to know :)

 

to be honest i only wanted to do the duel so if i could do something where i post duels or something this can be locked and i will do that :)

[Weather Report - Stand]

You need to know what stuff looks like, what the surroundings are, and not do a half-assed job of it. This story is fail. Also your grammar is bad.

[CrabHelmet]

Chapter 1 - Revised Edition

 

Yuki and his friends walk into a card shop, but his friends seem to vanish without a trace after doing so, presumably because they're not even important enough to be given names anyhow. Yuki discovers that the shop's owner was attacked by a mysterious figure who seems to be hiding in the vast regions of any good game store than are shrouded in complete darkness. He explains that the shop's owner wouldn't let him have the pack of cards he wanted, presumably because shop owners don't actually want to sell their merchandise to anyone. For no reason, a card game ensues.

[Alexis Rhodes]

ok to get more people involved in my fanfic i have decided to add a new feature where you can get your own charachter in my fanfic just fill out the form at the top of the page :)

 

here is my example of what the charahter should look like post the rest of the form here aswell as the pic of teh charachter :)

 

[Eury]

*Headdesk*

 

1. Not every line has to be spaced out.

2. The chapter needs to be A LOT longer. Check my or LarryCotter's fanfic to see how long it should be.

3. Proofreading...use it.