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Prologue- To the Academy

 

"ACE! GET UP!" Shouted Ace's mom. "ARE YOU SERIOUSLY GOING TO BE LATE FOR THE FIRST DAY OF SCHOOL?". "Ungghh...." Ace reluctantly got out of bed. Ace is a small 14 year old boy with sandy brown hair, and a silver locket that he found just a few years ago, lying on the street. He had tried alot of ways, but he could never open it. "I'm coming...calm down." Ace said, still groggy from sleep. He checked his clock. It was 9:30 AM. Wait, 9:30 AM? Why did his mom wake him up so early? Then he remembered. Today was August 21st! The first day of Duel Academy! He changed into his Yellow Duel Academy Uniform, sloppily packed his suitcase, and strapped his Deck Box onto his uniform. "Mom! I'm going now! See you in a few months! I'll be in touch!" Ace hastily said to his mother as he raced down the stairs. "Okay! Bye Ace! Have a good time!" Said his Mom.

 

 

Ace ran outside, and saw a Blue "Duel Academy" Bus. Leaving his house! "Wait! Stop! I-I'm Coming!" Shuoted Ace. He sprinted towards the bus. After about 2 minutes of non-stop running, he was finnaly side-to-side with the bus. It's worth a try. thought Ace. He leaped onto the back of the bus, looked inside the bus and mouthed "Open the window!" to a girl that happened to be looking this direction. She mouthed "Okay", ran over to the window, and opened it. "Help me in!" said Ace, who could hold his grip on the side of the bus no longer. the girl grabbed my hands and pulled me into the bus.

 

 

"Umm... Thanks." Ace said. He just noticed that the girl was very attractive. "No problem. And What the Hell were you doing, jumping onto a random bus? Oh, and my name is Annabeth." Annabeth said. "Well, long story short, I missed the bus."

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So... thats it so far. Please C/C. Oh, and i really hope to be Weather Reported, even though it is an insult. He's just so forking hilarious XD!

 

Chapter 1 coming soon.

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"ACE! GET UP!" Shouted Ace's mom. "ARE YOU SERIOUSLY GOING TO BE LATE FOR THE FIRST DAY OF SCHOOL?".

Place each new line of dialogue on a separate line. Makes things easier to read.

"Ungghh...." Ace reluctantly got out of bed. Ace is a small 14 year old boy with sandy brown hair, and a silver locket that he found just a few years ago, lying on the street. What? Ace is a small silver locket? Work on this description, because right now, that's what it sounds like. He had tried a lot of ways, but he could never open it.

"I'm coming...calm down." Ace said, still groggy from sleep. He checked his clock. It was 9:30 AM. Wait, 9:30 AM? Why did his mom wake him up so early? Then he remembered. Today was August 21st! The first day of Duel Academy! He changed into his Yellow Duel Academy Uniform, sloppily packed his suitcase, and strapped his Deck Box onto his uniform.

"Mom! I'm going now! See you in a few months! I'll be in touch!" Ace hastily said to his mother as he raced down the stairs.

"Okay! Bye Ace! Have a good time!" Said his Mom.

 

 

Ace ran outside, and saw a Blue "Duel Academy" Bus. Leaving his house! "Wait! Stop! I-I'm Coming!" Shuoted Ace. He sprinted towards the bus. After about 2 minutes of non-stop running, he was finnaly side-to-side with the bus. It's worth a try. thought Ace. He leaped onto the back of the bus, looked inside the bus and mouthed "Open the window!" to a girl that happened to be looking this direction. She mouthed "Okay", ran over to the window, and opened it. "Help me in!" said Ace, who could hold his grip on the side of the bus no longer. the girl grabbed my hands and pulled me into the bus. lolwat? So this girl totally accepts the fact that there is a kid hanging onto the side of the bus, and moves to open the window for him? I would think the bus driver would have noticed him. Also, from personal experience, catching up to a bus is extremely difficult. I'd say possibly impossible, considering he's carrying a suitcase with him at the same time. Unless he has super powers. Does he?

 

 

"Umm... Thanks." Ace said. He just noticed that the girl was very attractive.

"No problem. And What the Hell were you doing, jumping onto a random bus? Oh, and my name is Annabeth." Annabeth said. That was really awkward. "Oh, and my name is Annabeth"? That came out of nowhere, and makes it look...well, awkward.

"Well, long story short, I missed the bus."

Meh, I think this last line could have been written better. Wasn't a long story either, its exactly what he said it was- he missed the bus... :/

 

The name of your story should reflect what happens in your story, most likely an important item or event. Since that silver locket is rather blatantly obvious, I would suggest you create a title involving that in some way. I won't create a title for you, because I don't know what your story is about.

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The Prologue - Revised Edition

 

Ace is awakened by his mother and is enraged to discover that this occurred at the unreasonably early time of 9:30. Fortunately, however, he still has enough time to grab his plot trinket and run outside to see the bus, presumably because all the buses run three hours behind schedule in this universe. Actually, since he's actually able to run, catch up to the bus, and climb in a window, a more probable explanation is that the bus driver is a scatterbrained chap who doesn't feel comfortable driving at any half-decent speed.

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