Pokemon Battle Academy (accepting character bios) prologue up

[duel tester]

Note: i changed a few things on rico profile.

and the proluge is famliar yet new.

i hope to see more!!!

[Yankee]

i never got what spam was anyway.

 

Basicly what you just posted. ;)

[Monohawks]

oh, wow i feel stupid when spam was right in front in my face. Man im embarrased.

[Yankee]

^ Thats spam too XD Basicly, try to stay on topic, and it won't be spam.

 

Anyway, when can we expect the first chapter?

[Monohawks]

yeah, im waiting pateintly, but to long waiting for, Hawks get voilent. And when hawks gets voilent it is not pretty. It is not preety at all.

[vengeful lemonS]

im going to start it tommorrow but im going on vacation to my grand parents house ill save it to a thumb drive and take it with me to work on but it should be up by next sunday

[Monohawks]

i can wait that long.

[Yankee]

Uh, ok, guess we can wait another week

[Captain Murphy ☆]

so when will this finish or when will the chapter 1 start

[vengeful lemonS]

well ive done the draft i just have to type it up

[Captain Murphy ☆]

ok cool i'll be waiting for it is it good though lol?

[duel tester]

Quick quesiton?

are you posting the fan-fic on another topic or on here?

Also can i make a extra character Bio 4 a new Kid?

[Eury]

If your still taking characters...

name: Eclipse

pokemon: Vibrava

age:15

apperance: sorry it's so big...

dorm: kyorgreblue

bio: An underestimated trainer. His pokemon of choice are Dragon and Dark types. He came to Pokemon Battle Academy to destroy the best and to become the best.

[duel tester]

name: Simba lewis Nickname sim

pokemon: cacnea Houndor Carvana

cacnea Attacks sandstorm substitute focus punch seed bomb

Houndor Attacks thunder fang flamethrower dark pulse protect

Carvana Attacks aqua jet ice fang doubble team u-turn

age:16

apperance: Brown skined marron eyes weres a black Du-rag with red pokeball on it

Has a Yellow striped coller neck shirt With sort sleves Weres dark blue pants.

dorm: kyorgreblue

bio: a Kid from the streets of a poor Town. in the Ore Reigen

He Fought for everything Food for his sisters and brothers,his parents and the athourtitys for fighting with classmates and teachers in his former Schools . he is the most feared student in PBA and most likely to be expelled for skiping classes and Unautherised pokemon battling and Fights.The only thing keeping him in PBA is his Undefeated record and his will to never give up

Making pokemon look up to him. Rumors say that he has a primal Power within him but will it be used for the Benifit of humans and pokemon or for a sinester purpuse

[duel tester]

its been a week are you almost done?

[ZeroLuneth]

I would like to submit a character.

 

name:Refia Fevvre

pokemon: Chikorita

age: 16

appearance: Orange Hair, 5"8, Brown Eyes, wears a blue skirt with a orange t-shirt and a blue hooded sweatshirt zipped up halfway

dorm: Rayquaza Green

bio: Is a very caring person who loves all pokemon and gets along well with everyone and hates to see people and pokemon get hurt. Her favorite kind of pokemon is grass and water pokemon. She is a very skilled pokemon trainer and wants to become a pokemon breeder so she can make friends with all pokemon and meet new people. She is very sociable and loves to be around people when she's not with her pokemon. When she does something she won't give up until she accomplishes her goal. When she wants something she's very persistent about it and is a bit impatient.

[duel tester]

Ok um fannime!

are you gonna post this story soon??

cuse its been alomost two Weeks?

and you said it would be done in one week??

-_-...............

[Shogun Chicken]

Mind if I join?

Name: Kenny "Dusty" Bushbar

Pokemon: Quilava, Toxicroak, Salamance, Wobbuffet, Dusknoir,

Age: 16

Apperance: Kenny Has Chocolate brown hair and looks like the male trainer from Emerald except he has blue instead of green. He is 5'7" and 190lbs.

Dorm: Kyorgre blue

Bio: Kenny is a very lonely but jubilant and reliable boy. If anyone hurts his friends, he makes them back off. His Cyndaquil was his First pokemon he got at 10. It evolved as soon as the Sinnoh Battle Frontier opened when he was thirteen. He made it into the Kyogre blue dorm by defeating three of the Hoenn Elite Four and Kanto's former champion and by receiving relatively good grades at his junior school. He dreams of being able to beat former rivals he met before and from Pokemon Battle Academy due to his lack of battle skill after his best days.

Rumors say he has some sort of a massive power so he has trouble making friends on his first year at the academy.

[Codex1997]

Please can I join:

Name:Daniel Jackson

Age:19

Pokemon: Hippowdown, Chimchar, Starmie and Kangaskhan

apperance:long black hair, glasses, green jacket, white pants and black boots.

dorm:rayquazagreen

bio: His parents died when he was 8 and was left with a pokeball which contained a Kangaskhan. Since then every pokemon he's caught been trained to the limit. He made it into the rayquazagreen dorm when he beat the battle frontier with ease and now he wants to show his power in the battle academy and now he has a new addition to his team a Chimchar.

[Shogun Chicken]

BUMP

[Kendo Fish]

Now let's tare it apart with a WEATHER REPORT.

[spoiler=plot]far off in the Roxin reigon theres an island this island is home to the Pokemon Battle Academy a school designed for young trainers. this is where our story begins' date=' a young teenaged boy by the name of tomas and his partner Bagon have just taken the enrtance exam and have gotten into groundon brown dorm.Will he become the trainer he always wanted to be or will the secrets of altamos island ruin his chances forever.

 

I will not say anything about that...but this: DO NOT PUT YOUR PLOT BEFORE THE STORY ITSELF. I'm not reading it just for that. But you misspelled Groudon! How'd you do that?

[spoiler=chapters]

[spoiler=Prologue]

Prologue

 

“Tomas….Tomas ….TOMAS WAKE UP!!!!!” PRESS ENTER. It's EXTREMELY hard to read because THERE ARE VIRTUALLY NO PARAGRAPHS. That automatically makes this a TECHNICALLY bad fic. But is it ACTUALLY bad? Let's find out. “Huh? What’s wrong mom?” Tomas said sleepily. He was an inch-high Vulpix and he slept on top of a soccer ball-shaped bed. His room is a shark's mouth. A REAL shark. And his mom is a leopard. NO JOKE. Press Enter after EVERY new speaker. Haven't you read just about EVERY OTHER SUCCESSFUL FAN FICTION!?!? “You have to get up now or you’re going to miss the entrance exams there starting in ONE SPELL OUT YOUR NUMBERS hour!” “What?! Bagon I told you to wake me up!” Tomas said. He just said it? He didn't cry it or shout it or anything? Then why is there an exclamation mark, huh? TELL ME, BUB!! “Bagon where are you?” Tomas looks around his messy shark's-mouth-of-a room for the small dragon creature.

“Bagon COMMA” said the small dragon creature as it popped out from underneath some month old boxes of pizza. The mom doesn't notice these why? And who in real life leaves MONTH-OLD pizza boxes in a pile? My cousins leave trash here and there in their basement, but that's MUCH less extreme. Bagon looked like it had eaten through half the amount of boxes on the floor. And how many boxes were there? How would we, the viewers, know that he had eaten some just by looking at the current amount of boxes? That makes NO sense. Tomas quickly got dressed and headed out the door with Bagon closely at his side. Bagon was right on his hip. Also, Bagon is "a small dragon creature" so I'm thinking of a miniature green eastern dragon. That's what it looks like, right? RIGHT!?!? ”Huh… they grow up so fast don’t they honey?” said Miss Tamara which sounded disturbing since it had NO COMMAS, as did the next quote. ”Yes honey you do look good in that dress” said Mr. Tamara ignoring Tomas’s mom’s comment. WAITwaitwaitWAAAIIIITTTT. Who's Miss/Mr. Tamara? Are they Tomas' parents, and if so why don't we have HIS last name to prove it? Why are they together even if they're apparently not married judging by the name MISS Tamara? How'd they get there? They both appear to be giant slugs, don't they? And they're trying to build the house into a spacecraft so that they may destroy the world, aren't they? AREN'T THEY!?!?

Meanwhile ….

“Bagon what do you think will have to do first?” “Bagon, bag” Since BAG and BAGE would be pronounced differently, he's saying to get a Bagon bag. What the hell does that mean? “Bagon I have no I idea what you just said but LETS give it our best ok?” ”Bagon, gon, gon” Oddly enough, Bagon is the ONLY ONE WHO USES COMMAS WELL. and even then, his dialogue is annoying. What about just saying "Bay" which would fit the name-saying gimmick of the anime but also sound tolerable? Capitalize at the start of every sentence. BASIC WRITING 101. once Tomas and Bagon got to the entrance exams they found out that they missed the written portion AND ADD PERIODS.

 

Why can't you describe things? Okay, so the school is called Blibberblabber High. It is shaped like a seal. It's forty miles high. Inside it looks like mallard organs are dripping from the walls and ceiling while the floor is literally made of mallard bones. They crunched as they walked through the halls.

“Ah this sucks now we have to pass the battle portion with 90% or above or we can’t go to the school this year COMMA” said Tomas in a depressed voice. ~The intercom went on ~ ~Those things were a bit useless~wouldn't you agree?~That was kind of stupid.~Alex Sable and Tomas Tamara please report to waiting zone 2 again Alex Sable and Tomas Tamara please report to waiting zone 2 thank you~ Once again...BASIC WRITING 101. “Well WE HAD better be going Bagon .“ “Bagon bag.” There we go, blabbering about bags of Bagons again... Once Tomas and Bagon walked down to the waiting area smothered in something called gravy oilthey saw Alex who looks kind of like Agumon only he sounds a lot more like Patamon. “Hey im Tomas Tamara you must be Alex Sable “ What does "im" mean? I know I'm but not freakin' IM!!!!! “Bagon bit Tomas on the hand.” said a Palmon. Now you need another quotation mark. Oh ya (and he says ya instead of yeah because he's stereotypically Swiss and/or German, yah!) this is my partner Bagon.” “Bagon!” Bagon extent’s Extent is? It's extend. How'd you get that apostrophe and 's' in there? Baffling. its nub - like hand to Alex. Alex said nothing as if Tomas and Bagon weren’t even there and walked away towards the battle field. So Agu-lex walked into Tomas' belly, eventually ripping through. He's apparently shorter than one inch. ”Well that sure was rude of him wasn’t it“said Tomas. “Tomas Tamara! Your entrance exam will now commence!” said Bagon. ” Oh we better get to the field Bagon” BUT BAGON JUST SAID- “When they got to the field they saw a oddly-capitalized Tall middle aged man that was wearing a green lab coat and slacks colored a whimsical bright purple. He had a mustache, blond hair, and looked muscular. He's Armstrong from Fullmetal Alchemist!.”Tomas Tamara I will be your entrance examiner my name is Prof.Luis Nightgale (an obvious cover for Armstrong) head of the raquazagreen dorm.” RAYquazagreen isn't even one word! And this is a TOTAL ripoff of Yu-Gi-=Oh GX only with Pokemon! And I thought RAyquaza was BETTER than Groundon! Why is a red pokemon in the poop-like BROWN dorm, anyway? Oddly-capitalized Said Prof.Nightgale this will be a one on one Pokemon battle please select from one of the poke balls you see before you so we can get this over with and you can go home.” The Pokeballs were right in front of his face!? “No thanks” said Tomas “id rather sticks with my own Pokemon Bagon!” IDIOT! “That’s fine with me ok let the exam begin! Go Dusksnoir!” “Dusksnoir, dusk” said Bagon. And no, Dusknoir was not sent out. the author NEVER SAID SO. So the story from here on out is just a hallucination, thank goodness. “you may have the first move Tomas.” “Fine then lets start out with a dragon breath!” A small green flame came out of Bagon’s mouth headed for Dusksnoir. As it came out Bagon said, "Boom Bubble, poh!" as it rolled s l o w l y towards Dusknoir. Dusksnoir dodged the attack and went behind bagon. ”Dusksnoir use shadow punch!” Dusksnoir punched Bagon with a dark aura around his fist. The fist hit Bagon's eye, then curved right around to hit Tomas' tooth. "Ow!" he said nearly expressionlessly as usual. ”Dusksnoir keep it up don’t stop until I tell you” Dusksnoir repeatedly punched Bagon in the face and Bagon OF COURSE DIDN'T DO ANYTHING ABOUT IT, NOR DID TOMAS FOR FEAR OF GETTING HIS TEETH KNOCKED OUT (of course) over and over and over again. Bagon was about to faint of stupidity (he was really too dumb to live anyway) when Dusksnoir hit Bagon’s hard forehead. Dusksnoir started shaking his and trying to make the pain go away. How horribly stupid these Pokemon are. he's a freakin' ghost! He doesn't get PHASED by things like this! ”Bagon this is your chance use oddly-capitalized Dragon claw!” “Bagon!!!” Bagon rushed toward Dusksnoir and used oddly-capitalized Dragon claw AND WE REALLY DIDN'T KNOW THAT use a freaking PERIOD Dusksnoir began too USE THE RIGHT HOMONYMS yell in pain BEFORE THE ATTACK EVEN HTI HIM. The "claw" itself was just a not-glowing, not-special NUB. How DEADLY. Just looking at it made Dusknoir's brain hurt. IN LOWERCASE!! ”dusk, dusk,!” “Bagon you Dragon claw one more time!” said Tomas. Sure, I needed that. I THOUGHT IT WAS LUIS, DIDN'T I!?!? Nope. Sarcasm rules. Bagon rushed up to Dusksnoir one more time and scratched Him (he scratched God? That *******!) on the face. Dusksnoir fainted from all of the pain of the stupidity this whole story has caused him. Random quotation marks make everything better, RIGHT? No. But the author put in one, anyway! HA HA.” “As much as it pains me to say it Tomas Tamara you’ve passed the battle exam and will be able to go to the Pokemon Battle Academy. ”YAH WE MADE IT BAGON!!!” “Bagon!” said Bagon exceitedly and misspellingly but tired.

What well happen to our heros now Well, that's obviously not a question, seeing as there's no freakin' question mark. find out in the next chapter of Pokemon Battle Academy No.

 

I'm baffled by how that was good. TELL ME WHYYYYYYYYY!!!!!!

[duel tester]

two weeks.

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